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Copyright © 2008 by Nelson Education Ltd.Copyright © 2008 by Nelson Education Ltd. Ch. 4-1
Chapter 4Chapter 4
Revising and Proofreading Business Messages
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Revising and ProofreadingRevising and Proofreading
Revising: Improving content and sentence structure.
May include adding, cutting, changing.
Proofreading: Correcting grammar, spelling, punctuation, format, and mechanics.
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Concise WordingConcise Wording
Look for shorter ways to say what you mean.
Instead of this:We are of the opinion that
Please feel free to
In addition to the above
At this point in time
Due to the fact that
Try this:We think
Please
Also
Now
Because
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Long Lead-InsLong Lead-Ins
Instead of this:
This memo is to inform
you that all employees
meet today.
I am writing this letter to say thanks to everyone who voted.
Try this:All employees meet today.
Thanks to everyone who voted.
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Make the following sentence shorter and avoid a long lead-in. This e-mail message is to inform you that in all
probability we will finish in two weeks.
We will probably finish in two weeks.
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Make the following sentence shorter and avoid a long lead-in. There are many companies who are certain
that these products are absolutely safe.
Many companies are certain that these products are absolutely safe.
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Redundant WordsRedundant Words
Avoid repeating ideas when unnecessary. In these examples, the word in italics is not needed.
adequate enoughadvance warningbig in sizeeach and everyexactly identical
new beginningpast historyred in colourrepeat againtrue facts
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JargonJargon
Avoid technical terms and special terminology that readers may not understand.
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SlangSlang
Avoid slang (informal words with greatly changed meanings).
totally awesome
chill/chill out
excellent
relax
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ClichésClichés
Avoid clichés (overused expressions) by using clearer words.
Last but not least, you should work together.
The project was not a piece of cake.
Finally, you should work together.
The project was not easy.
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Revise the following sentence to avoid slang, clichés, and redundant words. Last but not least, the accountant repeated
again the true facts.
Finally, the accountant repeated the facts.
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Revise the following sentence to avoid slang, clichés, and redundant words. Because of the advance warning, we made a
killing in the stock market .
Because of the warning, we were successful in the stock market.
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Precise VerbsPrecise Verbs
Revise your writing to include precise verbs instead of general ones.
Market researchers said that profits would improve.
What more precise verbs could replace said?Market researchers forecasted improved profits.
Market researchers promised improved profits.
Market researchers predicted improved profits.
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Revise the following sentence using more precise verbs. The seller said she would contact you.
The seller promised to e-mail [telephone or fax] you.
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Concrete NounsConcrete Nouns
Use specific, concrete nouns and not general, abstract nouns.
The man asked for a raise.
Jeff Jones asked for a 10 percent salary increase.
An employee presented a proposal.
Kelly Keeler, production manager, presented a plan to change working hours.
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Vivid AdjectivesVivid Adjectives
Use descriptive, dynamic adjectives.
The report was good.
The report was persuasive (or detailed, original, complete, comprehensive).
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What to Watch for in Proofreading
What to Watch for in Proofreading
Spelling
Grammar
Punctuation
Names and numbers
Format
Consistency
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How to Proofread Routine Documents
How to Proofread Routine Documents
Print a copy, preferably double-spaced, and set it aside.
Allow adequate time. Be prepared to find errors. Read once for meaning and once for
grammar/mechanics. Reduce your reading speed. Use standard proofreading marks.
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