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Peer Review Questions and Tips for Responding to Others Writing

Essay 1 Draft #1

1. In your own words re!state the writers "ain idea or uestion a$out edu%ation. If you have a hard ti"e

doing this %an you te&& the writer whats getting in the way' Does the "ain idea see" $uried in the

paper' (ow %ou&d the "ain idea $e%o"e %&earer' )e as %on%rete as you %an.

*ann +atto and the writer a&& advo%ate for a s%hoo&ing syste" in whi%h %hi&dren %an $e "ore

produ%tive in s%hoo& a "ore individua&i,ed pro%ess to reinfor%e the students &earning so that they %an

-pi% /their %areer0 and u&ti"ate&y strive for that goa&.

2. (ow does the writer use *ann and +atto as sour%es for the idea' 3re the sour%es in %onversation withea%h other with these ind of rhetori%a& "oves 4fro" +raff56 -3&though 7 argues that8 y $e&ieves

that8. 9 however "y own $e&ief is8..9 3%%ording to $oth 7 and y88

The writer uses $oth *ann and +atto as sour%es in order to further his argu"ent that %hi&dren no &onger

have the individua&ity that they shou&d possess $e%ause of the way that the s%hoo&ing syste" is

stru%tured. (e uses stru%ture su%h as -One "ight refute8 and su%%essfu&&y %ounters that point in thene7t senten%e.

:. (ow did you respond to the essay' Did you find it engaging' If so what "ade it engaging' If not what%ou&d "ae it "ore engaging' Try to answer this uestion as thoughtfu&&y as you %an ; in a way that

"ight he&p the writer to advan%e his < her idea in the ne7t revision.

This essay is very we&& written and su%%essfu&&y gets "e to ponder the fa%t that the edu%atory syste" in

p&a%e now is not woring to $etter so%iety.

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1. =ay so"ething positive. It is Aust as i"portant to now what we are doing we&& in our

writing as what things need i"prove"ent.

2. Ta& a$out your responses whi&e reading the wor. -When I read this senten%e I

wondered if the paragraph was going to $e a$out this topi%.

:. Britiue the writing not the writer. Instead of te&&ing so"eone they have trou$&e

staying on topi% say so"ething &ie -This paragraph doesnt see" to support your

thesis. )e sure to as &ots of uestions of the writer.

C. )e spe%ifi%. If you "ae a state"ent a$out &a% of organi,ation in the paper $a% it up

with spe%ifi% e7a"p&es in the te7t.

. Prioriti,e your %o""ents. =tart with $igger %on%ernsthe ua&ity of the argu"ent and the stru%ture of the

paper.

F. +ive the writer so"ething to wa& away with. )ut dont try to write the paper for the

writer $y te&&ing hi"