Communicating Your Story: Ten Tips For Writing

Powerful College Application Essays

Orange country School of the Arts College Fair

Thursday, october 20Rebecca Josephhttp://tinyurl.com/ocsa2016getmetocollege@gmail.com@getmetocollege@allcollegeessay

To get us startedOn a piece of paper, list

your (or your child’s) Three activities or

accomplishments of which you are the most proud?

Three major ways you have shown leadership or initiative?

Three artistic experiences you are most proud of?

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How Important Are Essays?

1.Grades2.Rigor of Coursework, School3.Test Scores4.Essays*5.Recommendations-Teacher and/or Counselor6.Activities-Sustained consistency, development, leadership, and initiative7.Special skills, talents, awards, auditions, portfolios, community service and passions

Overview of Shifting 2016 American

Admissions Landscape

The Power and Danger of Essays

1. Give me two reasons why admissions officers value college application essays.

2. Give me two reasons why they often dread reading the majority of them.

Essays=Opportunity

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So….Tip 1

Tip 1. College essays are fourth in importance behind grades, test scores, and the rigor of completed coursework in many admissions office decisions. Don’t waste this powerful opportunity to share your voice and express what you really offer to a college campus. Great life stories make you jump off the page and into your match colleges.

A New Paradigm

Tip 2. Develop an overall

strategic essay writing plan.

College essays should work together to help you communicate key qualities and stories not available anywhere else in your application.

Essays = Opportunity

Take control over the highest ranked non-academic aspect of the application

Share their voice Express who they really are Show (not tell) stories that belong only to them and help them jump off the page Challenge stereotypes Reflect on their growth and development, including accomplishments and service Seek to understand what the admission officer is

looking for

What DO Admissions Officers Seek?

ContextValuesCommitment/Depth of InterestsInteraction with and/or perception by othersSpecial talents and qualities Realistic self-appraisal

Ultimately…admissions officers want to know your…

Impact Initiative

Understand the Different Types of Applications

Help students understand the landscape:

1)The Common Application2) Large Public Universities3) Private College Specific Applications4) Other Systems (Conservatories, Universal

Application, etc.)

Four Major Application Types: 1. The Common Application

Many private and some public American use the centralized Common Application with their own Writing supplements

More than 650 colleges use it. www.commonapp.org Don’t start writing any essays until you see all the essays

required for your top schools. My app-All College Application Essays has the requirements.

Common Application Writing Supplements

Some long– U Penn, U Chicago (300-650 words)

Some medium—Stanford Some small— Columbia, Brown

Current CA 2015-2017 Prompts250-650 Words (2015-2016 percentages)

1. Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story. (49%)

2. The lessons we take from failure can be fundamental to later success. Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what did you learn from the experience? (17%)

3. Reflect on a time when you challenged a belief or idea.  What prompted you to act? Would you make the same decision again. (4%)

4. Describe a problem you’ve solved or a problem you’d like to solve. It can be an intellectual challenge, a research query, an ethical dilemma-anything that is of personal importance, no matter the scale. Explain its significance to you and what steps you took or could be taken to identify a solution. (10%)

5. Discuss an accomplishment or event, formal or informal, that marked your transition from childhood to adulthood within your culture, community, or family. (22%)

Evan Common Application

I was speechless when I saw my name on the cast list. I thought that there must have been a typo. After looking again, I realized that it was true, especially since all of the girls vying for parts were glaring at me. Without success, I tried to explain that I had no power over this decision.

The fact that I, a 5’ 9” 160 pound man, was cast as the Queen of Hearts in Alice in Wonderland, one of the two leading female roles, began when my theatre class was reading through a student-written version of the play. I was almost through with a semi-long monologue when my teacher interrupted me to talk about his personal life. My class and I had formed a great relationship with him and we always talked back to him, even though we knew that talking back to a teacher usually meant bad news.  So, I told him to be quiet, and he told me that if I talked like that one more time, he would cast me as the Queen of Hearts. I didn’t put much thought into this, but I kept my mouth shut anyway.

When I got to the audition room, I read for the Mad Hatter and the Caterpillar, the two characters that all the guys were trying out for. I started to head out when the teacher, who was also directing the show, told me to read for the Queen. I hesitated for a moment because that was the part that all of the girls were trying for, that and Alice. He explained that he thought it would be funny for the Queen to have a deep voice and hairy legs. I eventually read for her, but joined in with the rest of the cast when they thought it was all a joke.

After getting cast as the Queen, I quickly began to see what my teacher meant when he told me that it would add humor to the show if a boy were the Queen. I surprised myself at how much of the character I made my own. In fact, when the teacher came up to me one day and told me that a lot of my part was going to be improvised, I didn’t feel nervous at all; if it was any other part I would have felt that I couldn’t do it, but I felt so comfortable with the character that it didn’t scare me.

Eventually, the first night of the performance came, and I felt completely ready. I put on my huge costume, luckily without heels, and went to my teacher. The makeup took about two hours to complete, and all I could think about was how happy I was that my teacher decided not to put me in roller-skates because of the amount of times I fell over my long dress.

When I stepped onto the stage, however, I was so engaged in my character that my acting and improvisation was spotless. Many people even believed that I was actually my music teacher because I looked and sounded just like her. They realized it was me when they saw my hairy legs underneath the gown I was wearing. Everybody was impressed and gave me the biggest round of applause I had ever received.

Playing the Queen of Hearts made me think about what type of actor I want to be. I have become a character actor; I love putting on different voices and accents and wowing the entire school. I even ended up playing Lumière in Beauty and the Beast because I was the only one who could do a French accent. I have really grown in my acting capabilities over the years, and recently when I was cast as Doc Gibbs in Our Town, at least there were no senior citizens in my school there to glare at me for taking a part away from them.

Four Major Application Types: 2. Large Public Universities

Many large and most prominent public universities have their own applications. Universities of Arizona, California, Indiana, Maryland,

Oregon, Texas, Washington, and Wisconsin—to name just some

They each have different essay requirements. They each have your report activities in a different way. But there are ways to use your other essays here as well. They have their own essays. You should gather their topics

and look for ways to use your common application essay as one of your essays for the public colleges, and visa-versa.

University of California

Fall 2017 is due November 30.

Introduced new format and prompts for both freshman and transfer essays

Applicants must write 4 short 350 word max essays.

Freshman can choose from 8 prompts.

UC Freshman Personal Insight Questions

Freshman Personal Insight Prompts: Answer any 4 of the following 8 questions: What do you want UC to know about you? Here’s your chance to tell us in your own words. Which questions you choose to answer is entirely up to you:  But you should select questions

that are most relevant to your experience and that best reflect your individual circumstances.1. Describe an example of your leadership experience in which you have positively influenced

others, helped resolve disputes, or contributed to group efforts over time.2. Every person has a creative side, and it can be expressed in many ways: problem

solving, original and innovative thinking, and artistically, to name a few. Describe how you express your creative side.

3. What would you say is your greatest talent or skill? How have you developed and demonstrated that talent over time?

4. Describe how you have taken advantage of a significant educational opportunity or worked to overcome an educational barrier you have faced.

5. Describe the most significant challenge you have faced and the steps you have taken to overcome this challenge. How has this challenge affected your academic achievement?

6. Describe your favorite academic subject and explain how it has influenced you.7. What have you done to make your school or your community a better place?8. What is the one thing that you think sets you apart from other candidates applying to the

University of California?

Jessica-Point Park

From the moment I was born, I was plunged into a life of medical chaos. My older brother, Neil, was diagnosed with a kidney tumor at age two. By age seven, when I was four, he developed Leukemia. He relapsed at age 15. All in all, he’s had, and survived, cancer three times.

Because of his illness and my family’s dedication to helping him survive, I was never surprised when family members, teachers, and friends treated me differently from other kids. It was as if I were the one who was sick. I received just as much sympathy as my brother. I brushed it off; I became emotionally numb to the entire situation.

However, strong emotions began to surface while I was in middle school, during Neil’s third round of cancer. I refused to allow myself to be angry about this new occurrence; after all, it was nobody’s fault. However, having heard that often siblings of cancer patients tend to have major emotional issues, my parents, were concerned about me. I didn’t want them to worry, so I struggled to keep myself busy by playing soccer, attending choir rehearsals, figure skating, and taking voice lessons. It wasn’t until the eighth grade that I finally found my best emotional outlet: Musical Theatre.

Four Major Application Types:3 and 4. Other systems

Many conservatories have their own applications as do many privates and publics.

Yet their applications for financial aid or academic support programs add in those requirements. Washington State, for example, several short essays which they share with other state systems. Boston Conservatory has one personal statement

The Universal Application is another system. It has fewer colleges on it than The Common Application.

Develop A Master Chart

Tip 3. Keep a chart of all essays required by each college, including short responses and optional essays. View each essay or short response as a chance to tell a new story and to share your core qualities.

I recommend three sheets. 1. Major deadlines and needs. Break it down by the four

application types 2. Core essays-Color code all the similar or overlapping essays. 3. Supplemental essays. Each college has extra requirements

on the common application. Again color code similar types: Why are you a good match for us? How will you add to the diversity of our campus?

Write the Fewest Yet Most Effective Essays…

Tip 4. Find patterns

between colleges essay requirements.

Use essays more than once.

UC 1 or 2=Common App =Scholarship Essay

Where to Begin: Brainstorm

Individual and Collaborative

Positive Personality Traits

5. Other Brainstorming Tips

Help them brainstorm1.Make a resume. 2.Write about three of your major activities.3.Reading model essays from actual college websites4.Looking at other college’s essay prompts-U Chicago, Tufts5.Creating a letter to future roommate or an amazing list of what makes you you.6.Looking at 5 top FB and Instagram Pictures7.Reading models from other students8.Do culture bags

What Did You Do Last Summer?

Into, Through, and Beyond Essay Approach

Tip 7. Follow Dr. Joseph’s Into, Through, and Beyond approach.

It is not just the story that counts.

It’s the choice of qualities a student wants the college to know about herself

Into, Through, and Beyond

Into

It’s the way the reader can lead the reader into the piece—images, examples, context. Always uses active language: power verbs, crisp adjectives, specific nouns.

Through

What happened…quickly…yet clearly with weaving of story and personal analysis Specific focus on the student Great summarizing, details, and images at same time

Beyond

Ending that evokes key characteristics Conveys moral Answers ending prompts of two UC essays

UC 1”and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.” UC 2 “What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person

you are”

Goal of Into Through Beyond

Share positive messages and powerful outcomes.

Focus on impact, leadership, and initiative.If you want to include challenges, lead

quickly to who you are now.Some states can use only socio-economic

status, but not race, in admissions, but in your essays, your voice and background can emerge.

 

 

Write the Unexpected

I knelt on the ground, aching from the asphalt grinding into my dusty and blackened knees. A piece of thick blue chalk in hand, with one fluid sweep of the arm, and then another, I connected two paths, creating a loop, where one path swung back and reconnected with itself. I stood up. Colorful lines intertwined with each other, knotting, weaving, splitting off, and joining back together. Taking careful steps, I walked over my creation, around the corner of a building, and watched as it continued to stretch out towards one end of school. I spied the start, looked back around the corner, and imagined the end.

A few middle-schoolers stood at the edge of my maze, eying one particular path from their feet, all the way until they lost it, then returning to their school day and continuing on to class. A pair of freshman walked the paths, twisting and turning, often looping back around; careful to stay within the lines I had drawn. I walked back to where I was working, picked out a new piece of yellow chalk, and quickly broke an open end of a path into two open ends, then two into four, sweeping, crossing over, then under one another, morphing into green when the yellow chalk ran out.

“I did it!”

I looked up. One of the freshmen stood at the end of one of the numerous openings of my half finished maze, arms raised above his head, spinning slowly in circles. Staring blankly at him was his counterpart, still lost deep within the curls of the maze.

It was not for myself that I had drawn the maze. It was for the kids mindlessly walking from class to class, staring at the asphalt under their feet as they thought about equations and essays. I created it so that these kids would have another world to enter as they crisscrossed the school, letting their minds wander to a land of color and art.

But just as easily as I can draw a chalk line on the ground, I can drowsily greet hundreds of students on a misty morning, moisten the ground, and wash away my chalk line. My work with film is different though. When I create films, I expect them to last forever. I expect to be able to dig them out of an old dusty attic box, plug in a dusty and outdated DVD player and watch what I made. When I come up with an idea, a thought, I expect that idea to be buried deep within the folds of my memory for eternity, waiting to be rediscovered.

But not chalk. When using chalk, I expect whatever I make to be gone almost as soon as I draw it, which makes whatever I create all the more precious. When I only have a few seconds, a few hours, a few days to cherish something, those fleeting moments become all the more powerful. All I can do is work to make the most beautiful creations possible and cherish them while they last.

Tip 8. Use active writing: avoid passive sentences and incorporate power verbs. Show when possible; tell when summarizing.

Tip 9. Have trusted inside and impartial outside readers read your essays. Make sure you have no spelling or grammatical errors.

Take the Time With These Essays

Essays Are One Piece of The Applicant’s Quilt

Test Scores

Grades

Rigor of Coursework

Activities

Rec Letters

Unique passions and potential

Demonstrated Interest

Final Thoughts

Tip 10. Most importantly, make yourself come alive throughout this process. Write about yourself as passionately and powerfully as possible. Be proud of your life and accomplishments. Sell yourself!!!

Students often need weeks not days to write effective essays. You need to push beyond stereotypes.

Admissions officers can smell “enhanced” essays.

You can find many great websites and examples but each student is different.

Contact Dr. Joseph

Rebecca Joseph, PhD Professor, Cal State LA Founder, Get Me To College

and All College Application Essays

Current 2016 Unsung Hero, LA County

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