Week 6Today’s Goals:•Revision•Begin Unit II: The Equality of Work

Essay #1 What is revision? Why do teacher’s require revision? What is

the purpose? How do you go about a revision? What is

your process? What do I expect from a revision?

Revision More important than grades is that revising your

papers teaches you to be a better writer. Studies have shown again and again that the best

way to learn to write is to rewrite. In the revision process, you improve your reading

skills and your analytical skills. You may even discover patterns of error or habits

of organization that are undermining your papers.

RevisionFour Types of Revision: Large-Scale Revision Small-Scale Revision Editing Proof-reading

Revision

Good writers understand that revision is an ongoing process, not necessarily something that you do only after your first draft is complete.

What should you revise?

Revision Tips Give yourself enough time Print a hard copy Read aloud Get a second reader Be a second reader

Revision• According to David Zinczenko in his essay “Don’t Blame the

Eater” the government should be responsible for our health. Also he believes that the government should be responsible for what we eat at schools, restaurants and even vending machines.

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Revision Author David Zinczenko states in his essay “Don’t

blame the Eater” growing up his parents were separated and his mother worked long hours and left the food choices up to him.

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Unit II: The Equality of Work

Why are you in college?

What is the American Dream? What makes the American Dream American? Why not the Chinese Dream or the Russian Dream?

The Equality of Work

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The Equality of Work 1. What is the American Dream as it relates to

work? Give examples and decide on a group definition.

2. Does everyone have access to the American Dream?

3. If no for question #2, who doesn’t and why?

definitions “getting a job that you love to do and be able to support yourself” “stable career that can provide security and happiness” “stable job with room for growth in the union” “a job with good benefits” “opportunity to change jobs” “promotion- financial also more responsibility “job that cares about its workers and allows dissent” “flexible hours- work at home, health issues” “The American Dream is the freedom to maintain a stable

job that provides growth, benefits, and flexibility”

The Equality of WorkHomework for Sunday, March 11: Essay #1 Revision: Due next Sunday March 11 (see

website) Pre-writing 2.1:

Read DePalma’s “Fifteen Years on the Bottom Rung”. Remember to use our reading strategies to increase comprehension (glossing, annotations, double-entry notes).

Question Guide: Look at the questions on the back of the reading. Instead of treating each question like a checklist, choose one or two questions to guide your response. Write a few paragraphs in order to increase deep thinking. We will use your response in class and I will collect it.