THE BATMAN ESSAY

WHAT DID I SEE?

I saw a lot of things that need to be

improved in your writing.

Although your thoughts and ideas were

pretty good, some of you still need some

practice in analyzing (Link).

There are also many fundamental issues in

writing that need to be learned, or re-

learned.

CONTRACTIONS

In a formal essay or research paper you should not

use contractions.

Instead of don’t, can’t, won’t, he’ll, wouldn’t, they’re…

say do not, cannot, will not, he will, would not, they are.

You know what I AM saying, DO YOU NOT?

TRANSITIONS In order to have a great paper, you need great

transitions. A great transition makes the paper

flow and sound more formal and intelligent.

Great transitions…• Initially• Furthermore• In the same light• Similarly• Moreover• Write another great transition word/phrase of

your own

CITATIONS

First and foremost, do not be lazy!!! Please use

the website I gave you, and identify how to

properly cite in the text and in your list of

sources at the end of the paper. How do you

find the website?

Example I saw in a paper…• In the article (Superheroes Rise in Tough Times), “I

think comic books and superheroes in particular provided an escapist form of entertainment that allowed the American public to go into a fantasy world where all the ills of the world were righted by these larger-than-life heroes” (Douglas Hyde).

• What is wrong with this?

LIST OF SOURCES Examples I saw in papers…

-Hyde, Douglas. Superheroes Rise In Tough Times:

Superman, Batman, Others Born During Great

Depression, Early World War II Years. CNN.com. N.d.

What’s wrong with this?

Hyde, Douglas. Superheroes Rise In Tough Times:

Superman, Batman, Others Born During Great

Depression, Early World War II Years. CNN.com. N.d.

What’s wrong with this?

THE LINK

Main Idea: Batman played a significant role in

the lives of Americans struggling in the Great

Depression.

Evidence: Batman was known for “fighting for

righteousness and apprehending the wrong

doer” (Finger).

Now you write the link, whether you believe

the main idea or not…

THE LINK

Main Idea: Bruce Wayne played a significant role in the

lives of Americans struggling in the Great Depression.

Evidence: In the story of the Batman it is evident that

Bruce Wayne is a very wealthy man, and he uses his

wealth in order to become Batman and help those in

need.

Now you write the link, whether you believe the

main idea or not…

PARAPHRASING

Don’t quote EVERYTHING!!

You can use somebody’s ideas and words without directly

quoting them, all you have to do is include the in text citation.

Quoting every piece of evidence or example can make you look

like you don’t know what you are talking about. Only quote

really interesting things that make for the strongest example

or piece of evidence.

Now we are going to practice paraphrasing.

MAIN CAUSES OF WWII

As you read, identify the best evidence that will help you

make the case for each cause of WWII.

Identify which cause was the most influential in starting

WWII.

Write your main idea ( ______________ was the most

influential cause of WWII).

Finally, pick three pieces of evidence that support your main

idea, but DO NOT QUOTE them. Restate each piece of

evidence in complete sentences, and IN YOUR OWN

WORDS.