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Mastery Writing

Student Self-study

Workbook 3

Mastery Writing Self-Study Unit 3: Parent and Student Guide

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This booklet is for KS3 students to practise writing on their own or with the help of a parent, guardian or carer.

This is the third Mastery Writing workbook and you should have completed workbooks 1 & 2 before you

complete this workbook. If you have not fully completed the first 2 workbooks, go back to workbooks 1 & 2 to

fully complete those activities first before you attempt this booklet.

What will I do and learn?

• You will learn to write well-structured action stories and fantasy quests featuring an opening, problem,

solution and happy ending.

• You will learn about key grammatical rules that will make your writing more accurate and precise.

How do I use the booklet?

• Set aside 1 hour to complete each lesson (20 minutes on grammar tasks and 40 minutes on the writing

task).

• Read the grammar rules and explanations carefully before completing the tasks.

• For the grammar tasks, you can find the answers in the answer booklet.

• If you are unfamiliar with some of the grammar rules and terminology, go back to workbooks 1 & 2

where you will find full explanations.

How do the lessons work?

Each lesson is divided into four parts:

1. Do Now reviewing previously studied grammar: 5 minutes

2. New grammar instruction and exercise one: 5 minutes

3. Revision exercises two and three: 10 minutes

4. Error correction. 5 minutes

5. Explanation of how to structure your story: 10 minutes

6. Planning and writing your story: 20 minutes

7. Reading and checking your story: 5 minutes

How can I check the quality of my writing?

• After finishing your writing, re-read and check through it. Circle the key vocabulary. Underline and label

the Mastery Checks.

• Use the online Cambridge Learner’s Dictionary to check any key vocabulary you do not know.

• If you have not used all the Mastery Checks or key vocabulary, edit your work to include them.

Can parents, carers and siblings help?

Yes, of course! Family members can help in the following ways:

• Help you check your work using the answer booklet we provide.

• Help you with the planning of the story and check your writing after you have completed it using the

Mastery Checks.

• Write a story at the same time as you. You could then compare your stories and check each other’s

writing.

What else can I do if I love writing and I want more of a challenge?

• Keep writing stories using your own ideas.

• Use the structure you learn in this unit to write other types of stories, such as fantasy quests and

mysteries.

https://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/learner-english/

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Lesson 1

Do Now

Task: Put the commas in the correct places in this student’s writing.

Last Wednesday Khaled Tamara and I went to the park. I arrived before them

despite leaving late getting lost and getting stuck in traffic. For twenty minutes I

waited for them and wondered where they had got to before they finally arrived.

I didn’t mind that they were late because they brought a wonderful picnic of

sandwiches crisps and lemonade. Khalid apologised and said “Sorry we were so

late”. Just before I left my mum said that she needed everything in the fridge for

pack lunches. At the last minute I had to unpack what I’d made go to the shops

and make up a whole new picnic.’

Exercise 1

Task: Correct the comma splice or fragment.

1. Supermarket eggs can’t hatch, that’s impossible.

2. A young man wanted to hatch a duck from an egg, he bought the eggs from

the supermarket.

3. Even though his parents knew that he was determined to hatch a duck from

an egg.

4. The young man had bought a special egg incubator from ebay, it worked!

5. Although he enjoyed keeping his baby duck in the bedroom in the beginning.

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Exercise 2

Here are some grammatical rules to help you with Exercise 2.

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Task: Fill in the blank space with the correct version of the verbs below.

get work understand remember check deserve

fill ring bring show

When I mark my students’ essays, I ___________________ a warm and fuzzy feeling.

There is one student who ___________________ particularly hard. He

___________________ everything that I teach him. He ___________________ everything

I say. He always ___________________ for corrections. In my opinion, he

___________________ a reward. This essay that I am holding in my hands now

___________________ me with joy and hope for the future generation. Each word

___________________ out with truth. The ending ___________________ a tear to my

eye. It ___________________ that I am not such a terrible teacher, after all.

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Exercise 3

Task: Add speech punctuation and a P whenever you think there should be a new

paragraph.

Good morning said Kim, I’d like to buy a shirt please. The shop assistant looked at

him and smiled. Are you looking for something smart or casual? she asked. Quite

smart, please Kim replied. We have a large selection over here the shop assistant

replied. I think blue would suit you. Do you know your size? Yes thank you. I will have

a look replied Kim. He wandered over to the display to find the perfect shirt.

Error Correction

Correct the errors in this passage (There are 9 errors)

Two days after Christmas I decide to visit Sherlock Holmes. I wanted to wish him a

merry Christmas. When I arrived at Baker Street, I found my friend resting on the

sofa. Next to him an old worn, dirty hat was slouched over the back of a chair, I saw

a magnifying glass sitting on a nearby table.

“I suppose this hat has something to do with a crime? I asked.

“No, my dear watson,” answered Holmes. “It’s not to do with a crime but is just

one of those odd little events that take place in a large city like London. I received

the hat on Christmas morning from a policemen named Peterson.

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Writing

You are going to write a comeuppance story. It builds on the problem-solution story

structure. A comeuppance is when someone who does something bad receives a

punishment for what they did.

Let’s look at the structure for a comeuppance story.

Before you write your comeuppance story, plan the story in the boxes on the next

page. Use the slide below to help you.

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Story Writing:

• You should make sure you have planned your story by writing your ideas for each

story part in the boxes on the next page.

• Look at the vocabulary below the image on the next page. You will need to use

each of these words in your writing to help you write your comeuppance story.

Tick off the words as and when you use them in your story.

• You will also need to make sure you have included all of the mastery checks in

your writing. You have 30 minutes to complete your writing.

Part one: Opening Part two: Bad deed

Part three: Bad deed revealed Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary

livid swallowed drenched shocked

ashamed hurled apologised humiliated

Mastery Checks

Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3

I have included at least one

sentence with two

subordinate clauses in it.

I have included speech and

punctuated it correctly.

All my verbs are in the right

form for their subjects.

Crafting check: I have written a clear comeuppance story in which a character

does a bad thing and is punished for it.

Dave

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Lesson 2

Do Now:

Correct the following sentences.

1. This sentence demonstrate everything that are wrong with students who don’t

proofread.

2. Even J.K. Rowling check her work before she send it off to the publishers.

3. Rushed work show the reader that the student do not care enough about

what they is studying.

4. Everybody make mistakes. This is why your teacher ask you to proofread your

work.

5. The student who say, “There are no need to proofread because my essay

have no errors,” will surely find that their essay are full of errors.

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Exercise 1

Task: Add speech punctuation and a P whenever you think there should be a new

paragraph.

Would anybody mind if I took the last apple? I asked, reaching into the fruit

bowl. Not at all. You’re welcome to it, my friend replied, and please don’t buy any

more of them. What have you got against apples? I asked, raising one eyebrow. I

just prefer fruit from plants, she said, like strawberries, raspberries and blackberries.

Rather than apples, pears and plums, I laughed. Exactly, she said. Please remember

that the next time you go shopping. Next time, why don’t you buy your own fruit? I

said, signalling an end to the conversation. She looked up but didn’t reply.

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Exercise 2


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State whether the sentences have been written in the first, second or third person.

1. I was at Baker street at three o’clock precisely, but the train had already

departed.

2. Kenny and Kyle developed a special handshake to prove their friendship.

3. You whip the eggs really well and add cheese.

4. We made our way into the forest to escape the wicked witch.

5. Aliens are a real threat to planet Earth.

6. “You have taken my pencil from me!” cried the upset child.

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Exercise 3

Task: Make any fragments into complete sentences by adding independent

clauses.

1. Despite my warnings.

2. To make sure that she could afford to go on holiday.

3. She looked through the window.

4. At the end of the street and round the corner.

5. Whether or not you want to go to school.

6. Due to the rain, wind and cold temperatures.

7. When she got home from school.

8. However much he tried.

9. I ran for the bus and ripped my tights.

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Error Correction


The two boys took Oliver to a new part of the city. There was no empty and

rundown building on these streets. In this part of town the sidewalks were clean, the

buggies were shiny, and all of the people were well dressed except Oliver Dodger

and Charley. There was so many people on the street that no one noticed them.

Dodger and Charley wove their way through the crowd. Oliver walked behind

him. Oliver walked behind his friends he watched as they picked their way through

the crowd. Dodger would stand very close to a gentleman while Charley kept

watch. When Charley gave a quick, sharp, whistle, Dodger jumped back and they

walked away. This happened several times as Oliver watched, he were confused

about this game. What were they doing.

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Writing

Today, we are going to look at horror stories, which are often underpinned by the

comeuppance structure.

Here is the structure of a horror story:

Story Writing:



• Look at the vocabulary below the image on the next page. You will need to use

each of these words in your writing to help you write your horror story. Tick off the

words as and when you use them in your story.



Plan your story outline in the boxes on the next page. Use the slide below to help

you.

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Writing a comeuppance horror story



Vocabulary

chilling panic eerie sinister

fatal menacing fog obscured

Mastery Checks


I have not used any

fragments.



All my verbs are in the right

form for their subjects.

Crafting check: I have written a horror story with a clear comeuppance structure.

Andy

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Lesson 3

Do Now: Look at the sentences. State whether they have been written in the first,

second or third person.

1. Your cooking is wonderful because you always use exactly the right spices.

2. Caliban can be seen as a monster, but I actually see him as a sensitive

character.

3. We went swimming in the sea before we came to see you.

4. The whole family went on a camping trip together last year.

5. I am writing to inform you that your application for work experience has been

successful.

Exercise 1

Task: Rewrite this conversation between Mr. and Mrs. Sowerberry with the correct

speech punctuation and paragraphing.

Mrs. Sowerberry placed her hands on her hips and said well? She did not sound

very happy. My dear said Mr. Sowerberry. I’ve brought home a workhouse boy.

We can put him to work in the shop. He looks pretty small she frowned. Well, yes

Mr. Sowerberry said He is rather small. I’m sure that he will grow, though. Of

course, she snapped he will grown on our food and money.

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Exercise 2 Part 1

Task: Identify which of these sentences are punctuated correctly.

1. In the depths of the jungle, the explorers cautiously crept towards the rare

parrot.

2. They didn’t want to scare it, they had to be very quiet.

3. As they approached, there was a loud “crack”.

4. Ashanti stared angrily at Dan, he blushed.

5. He had tried to be quiet, there were just so many twigs on the ground

6. Ashanti rolled her eyes.

7. She liked Dan, he could be really clumsy.

8. The bird had not moved, so they continued to pick their way towards it.

9. Ashanti raised her camera slowly.

10. She felt a flutter of excitement, she had waited a lifetime for this moment

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Exercise 2 Part 2

Task: Re-write these sentences so that they no longer use a comma splice. Change

one of the independent clauses into a subordinate clause for each.

1. They didn’t want to scare it, they had to be very quiet.

2. Ashanti stared angrily at Dan, he blushed.

3. He had tried to be quiet, there were just so many twigs on the ground

4. She liked Dan, he could be really clumsy.

5. She felt a flutter of excitement, she had waited a lifetime for this moment.

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Exercise 3

Task: Correct the errors in the following sentences.

1. The teacher was not pleased, the student had brought a dog with him to

detention.

2. Unless it has a good reason to be here the dog needs to go said the teacher.

3. The student claimed that it wasn't his fault, because he hadn't encouraged

the Dog to come.

4. He pleaded with the Dog ordered him to leave and threw a ball out of the

window.

5. Although the Dog was tempted to chase the ball through the window

he decided to stay.

6. The teacher was furious, either that dog leave or I do, she said.

Error Correction


As I watched him enjoying the concert. I think about his various moods. When

he was hard at work on a case he was serious, determined and cold, as he listened

to the music. He was light hearted happy, and dreamy. I also knew that his happy

moods often meant he had solved a case, if I were a criminal. I’m not sure which of

Holmes’ mood I would prefer.

Outside the hall, a refreshed Holmes turns to me and said Watson, I believe that we

are just in time to stop a serious crime, I will need your help tonight. Would you

please bring your gun and meet me at Baker Street at ten o’clock.”

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Writing

Last lesson you completed the outline of your own horror story. In this lesson you are

going to focus on the opening of a story.

This is what you should include in the opening of a story:

Story Writing:



• Look at the vocabulary below the image below. You will need to use each of

these words in your writing to help you write your horror story. Tick off the words as

and when you use them in your story.



Plan your story outline in the boxes on the next page. Use the slide below to help you.

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Writing a horror story.

Focus: openings



Vocabulary


fatal menacing fog obscured

Mastery Checks


I have not used any

fragments.



I have written consistently in

the third person.


Amir Gran

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Lesson 4

Do Now: Add speech punctuation and a whenever you think there should be a

new paragraph.

Why do you always take so long to eat breakfast? It’s because I thoroughly

chew every bite. Does that not get boring? Quite the opposite, actually. That’s

interesting. What do you mean? Well, if I’m chewing fruit then I get lots more juicy

goodness if I chew it thoroughly. What about toast? It’s just the same. I get to

appreciate all the interesting flavours of the bread. Sounds good. I might try it. You

definitely should. Your life will be better for it.

P

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Exercise 1

Task: Correct the following sentences.

1. My favourite novel epitomise everything I love about the fantasy genre.

2. The author present her characters so skilfully, and convey their predicament

so convincingly.

3. Everything I read demonstrate my commitment to imaginary worlds and

faraway kingdoms.

4. For example, Narnia present the adventures of four children who climb into a

wardrobe.

5. JRR Tolkien use his fictional world to illustrate what happen when the little man

stand up and fight the big people.

6. My love of fantasy imply that I don’t like reality much.

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Exercise 2

Task: Decide whether the sentences have been written in the first, second or third

person.

1. Everybody feels better after a good walk.

2. Some primary schools ask children to walk for a mile every morning.

3. Teachers and children walking together every single day is lots of fun.

4. You can talk to a friend as you walk.

5. Even though sometimes it rains, we just put on our wet weather gear.

6. The teacher might choose their favourite student to walk with.

7. I love walking and talking with my friends.

8. I especially like it when the teaching assistants join us.

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Exercise 3


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Task: Turn the full form of these words into words that use an apostrophe of omission.

RULE: The apostrophe shows when letters have been missed out of a word.

Full form With apostrophe Full form With apostrophe

I am Could have

You are Would have

They are Does not

I have Is not

You have Could not

She has Would not

He has I had

They have You had

Cannot He had

It is She had

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Error Correction

Correct the errors in this passage. There are 7 errors.

Theres no lake at Camp Green Lake. There once is a very large Lake here. That

was over a hundred years ago. Now, it is just a dry, flat wasteland. There used to be

a town of Green Lake as well, the town shrivelled and dried up along with the lake.

During the summer, the daytime temperature hovers around ninety-five degrees

in the shade if you can find any shade. Not much shade in a big dry lake. The only

trees is two old oaks on the eastern edge of the dried out lake. A hammock is

stretched between the two trees and a log cabin stands behind that. Out on the

lake, rattlesnakeses and scorpions find shade under rocks and, in the holes dug by

the campers.

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Writing

Last lesson you focused on the opening of a story. Today you will focus on Part 2: The

Bad Deed.

Here are some things to remember about the bad deed:

Story Writing:








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Focus: bad deed – ignoring the warning



Vocabulary


fatal menacing conscious isolated

Mastery Checks


I have not used any

fragments.



I have written consistently in

the third person.

Crafting check: I have written a horror story with a clear comeuppance structure

and a particularly creepy place.

Lily Bernie

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Lesson 5

Do Now:

Correct this student’s work.

My alarm goes off at 7am and I got out of bed. I quickly shower, get dressed,

and eat my breakfast. Once I’ave eaten, I brush my teeth and help my little sister

get ready, she can be quite naughty. Sometimes she runs around the house and

refuses to get ready. If I offer to do her hair for her, she usually calms down bit but

she often keeps bouncing up and down. Not always easy to get her to keep still!

She likes it when I do bunches for her and put bows in her hair. Even though she can

be a pain, sh’es my baby Sister and she is pretty cute.

Exercise 1


1. If I take a few minutes each day to be calm.

2. I try to focus on each moment as it comes, each sound, smell and taste is

special and important.

3. The sound of birdsong can really lift my mood, it always makes me smile.

4. Although some people think you should be constantly busy.

5. A few deep breaths are really relaxing, I make sure I do this whenever I’m

feeling overwhelmed.

6. Whenever I have a test in class.

7. My friends understand how much I need this time, they give me space when I

ask for it.

8. Even though the classroom can be loud and busy.

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Exercise 2

Task: State whether they have been written in the first, second or third person.

1. Only when she was alone in the room did she open the crate and lift out the

cage within.

2. You need to think very carefully about what you want to do after school.

3. We’re walking across the wild fields south-east of town, those ones that slope

down to the river and head on towards the swamp.

4. “I don’t want to!” bellowed the small girl as she stamped her feet with rage.

5. The first time Matthew Arnatt saw the cloud of death, it was floating out of the

first-floor window of a house near where he was living.

6. I had seen little of him lately. I feared that I had neglected our friendship.

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Exercise 3


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Task: In this passage, find the contractions and write them out in full.

She’s no idea what a photograph is, but I bet she’d rather not be photographed.

Don’t believe that she hasn’t spotted the camera. She’s got her eyes trained right

on it. I can’t stop thinking about those eyes. Even though she’s the predator, she’d

have felt threatened, too. This picture doesn’t just show a lion in her natural habitat.

It has won competitions. It has been shown in museums all around the world. She’s

beautiful, she’s deadly and she’s famous.

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Error Correction


“Wheres Papa going with that axe?" said Fern to her mother as they were setting the table

for breakfast.

"Out to the hoghouse," replied Mrs. Arable. "Some pigs were born last night." "I

dont see why he needs an axe," continued Fern, who was only eight.

"Well said her mother, "one of the pigs is a runt, it's very small and weak, and it

will never amount to anything. So your father has decided to do away with it."

"Do away with it?" shrieked Fern. "You mean kill it? Just because it's smaller than

the others?"

Mrs. Arable put a pitcher of cream on the table. "Don't yell, Fern!" she says. "Your

father is right. The pig would probably die anyway."

Fern pushed a chair out of the way and ran outdoors. The grass was wet and the

earth smelled of springtime. Fern's shoes was drenched by the time she caught up

with her father.

"Please dont kill it!" she sobbed. "It's unfair."

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Writing

Last lesson you focused Part 2, the bad deed of a story. Today you will focus on Part

3: The bad deed is revealed.

Here is some information to remember when revealing the bad deed:

Story Writing:








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Focus: bad deed revealed – meeting a monster

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem


Vocabulary



Mastery Checks


I have written consistently in the

third person.

I have used apostrophes

of omission correctly.

I have included speech in

the present tense and used

the correct verb form


I have stretched the “bad deed revealed” section out to make it more exciting.

Mr Jones

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Lesson 6

Do Now:

Decide which of these are fragments and make the fragments into complete

sentences.

1. Whenever Jude saw animals.

2. Laundry drying in the sun.

3. In the morning, in the afternoon and at night.

4. The lady sang.

5. Running along the road, sweating and feeling the burn in my muscles.

6. Behind the wardrobe door, to the children’s amazement.

7. I love peanuts.

8. Although meat can look delicious.

9. Sighing in the breeze.

10. Went to the shops and bought an ice cream because it was sunny.

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Exercise 1

Task: Add speech punctuation and a whenever you think there should be a

new paragraph.

One friend asked the other, if you could have a superpower, what would it be?

Easy, came the reply, I would choose the ability to spot and correct all the errors in

my essays and writing. Not invisibility, or seeing through walls or the ability to travel

through time, then? With accurate writing, I’d get better grades at school and be

far more likely to get an interview when I apply for a job. Isn’t that just proofreading,

though? asked the first friend. Do you really need a superpower to check and

correct your work? The second friend thought about it, and then said, if

proofreading was that easy, then why do so many people make mistakes in their

writing?

P

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Exercise 2

Task: Each of the following sentences contains some words that can be changed

into a word with an apostrophe.

Cross out the words that can be changed into a contraction. Replace them with a

word using an apostrophe.

1. I will forgive you for what you did.

2. I would not do that if I were you.

3. Teri wondered why the cat had not eaten the food.

4. The Lions could have won the championship if their team had fewer injuries.

5. They are going to meet us over there.

6. My sister did not know that I had already finished my homework.

7. She has already said that she will pick me up from the bus stop.

8. I had a delicious sandwich for lunch. We can go there next week if you would

like to.

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Exercise 3


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Task: Decide whether the following sentences use the apostrophe of omission

correctly or not and correct the sentences that don’t.

Exercise 3

1. We’re all going to Manchester for Christmas this year.

2. My dad often send’s his brother emails about what we are all up to.

3. The chef on TV use’s interesting ingredients.

4. I’ve always wondered how they make mobile phones.

5. My granny has a garden. She love’s to grow vegetables and flowers.

6. They’re mum always makes us delicious cakes.

7. They decided they we’re too tired to drive home, so they stayed another

night.

8. There aren’t any apples left in the supermarket today.

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Error Correction


Grammar exercises make you really think about how language works.

Because I think I know the rules I don’t always check my work. Even though my

teacher mark’s my grammar mistakes there is always a little voice inside me that

thinks that it is really the teacher who has made the mistake. He work’s hard and

look’s like he stay’s up too late, I would not be surprised if he made mistakes

sometimes. Whenever he call’s me to talk to him at the end of the lesson he ask me

if I check my work before handing it in. The essay sits there between us on the desk,

it is covered in the teacher’s pen marks.

Because he asked me to go through my entire exercise book and label my

mistakes with the reason why they are wrong I know that I will not be able to go to

my friend’s house after school. Even though I feel angry I still do the work. Each

mistake on the capital letter rule the apostrophe rule and putting an ‘s’ on the 3rd

person of the present tense is a big wake-up call. My book prove that I don’t know

the rules as well as I think I do.

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Writing

Last lesson you focused on Part 3: The bad deed is revealed. Today we will look at

Part 4: The comeuppance in more detail.

Story Writing:








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Focus: the comeuppance



Vocabulary



Mastery Checks


All my plural nouns are spelt

correctly.

I have avoided putting

an apostrophe on any

plural nouns.

I have avoided putting an

apostrophe on any verbs

apart from contractions.


If I have written a gruesome ending, it is appropriate to the monster the character

meets.

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Lesson 7

Do Now:

Complete the table with the correct singular or plural word.

Single Plural Single Plural

berry goose

child woman

man loaf

louse species

battery quiz

thief deer

foot kiss

boot lady

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Exercise 1


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Task: Find the apostrophes in this passage and remove any that are incorrect.

The Amazon Rainforest is the larges’t rainforest on earth. It’s home to 427

mammal’s, 1,300 birds, 378 reptile’s and more than 400 amphibians. It covers 40% of

the South American continent. The Amazon consists of several ecosystem’s and

vegetation types and has thousand’s of species’.

Some of the animals here can’t be found anywhere else in the world. The

Amazon Rainforest provides an ideal habitat for lot’s of different kinds of animals. It’s

home to about 2,000 birds and mammal’s. That's not to say, however, that the rest

of South America doesn't have some unique and intriguing species’ of its own.

RULE: You never use an apostrophe to turn a singular into a plural.

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Exercise 2


1. My cousin make terrible cups of tea.

2. Would you like a cup of tea, she asks.

3. She do this because she know that nobody will ever say, “yes.”

4. Even though she drinks two or three cups a day.

5. I feel sorry for people when they come to the house and accept her offer of

tea, they just don’t know how bad it’s going to be.

6. Her problem is that she puts the milk in before the hot water, the tea doesn’t

mix properly she forgets to stir it and it tastes too milky.

7. Because no one has told her she will never learn.

8. If we tell her how bad her tea is.

Exercise 3

Task: Correct this student’s work by adding and removing apostrophes as necessary.

My mother often say’s to me, “I know that you dont like studying, but if you

aren’t careful, youll do badly in you’re exam’s”. Shes always trying to get me to do

more. When she sees that Im not doing my homework, she presse’s her lip’s

together, frowns and breathe’s through her nose really loudly. Sometimes, she talks

to her sister about me when Im trying to watch TV. My Aunt roll’s her eyes, tuts and

start’s to lecture me as well. My family thinks that education is very important and

cant understand that I am more interested in sport’s than science.

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Error Correction


In the winter, it snow’s in New York. Snow is cold, wet, and dangerous. Snow

covers the roads and makes driving difficult. Snow cover’s the sidewalks and makes

walking difficult. Some people cant get to work or dont manage to get to the shops

for supplies.

The snow can also be pretty. Sparkles and glistens when the sun shines on it.

Some people enjoy playing in the snow they build snowman or snow forts. They have

snowball fights when they ca’nt go to school they slide down hills on sleds or

toboggans. They ski down hills. Snow dosent need to be miserable.

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Writing

Over the last few lessons, we have been focusing on horror stories. Let’s re-cap what

makes a good horror story:

Story Writing:








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Focus: a slow reveal



Vocabulary



Mastery Checks


All my plural nouns are spelt

correctly.



plural nouns.





If I have written a gruesome ending, it is appropriate to the monster the character

meets.

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Lesson 8

Do Now:

1. Complete these sentences.

2. Say whether they are written in the first, second, or third person.

a) I never knew that after all these years, you here all along.

b) I going to wait for the last train.

c) We going to the shops. Do you want anything?

d) When we heard the final whistle, we exhausted.

Exercise 1

Task: Correct this student’s work by removing incorrect apostrophes and adding

them where they are needed.

On Saturday, I’m going to meet a dog called Frieda and I cant wait. She's a

really important member of the team helping to save people in Mexico, after the

huge earthquake there. Like the human’s on the team, she need’s special

equipment like boot’s to protect her feet from sharp rocks, and goggles to protect

her eyes from dus’t.

She uses her amazing sense of smell to find survivor’s trapped under rocks so the

emergency services can get them out. She dosen’t let anything get past her. She’s

a proper hero - the Navy says shes already saved 50 live’s.

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Exercise 2

Task: Correct the following sentences

1. I cant remember what life was like before we met Geoffrey, it was certainly

emptier.

2. Geoffrey enjoy’s cuddle’s, treat’s and stroking.

3. Although we found him in the rescue centre.

4. Thats the one, shouted my sister when she saw him.

5. He need’s special medicine to stop him from getting flea’s.

6. Once he brought a rat in the house, he thought that we would be pleased.

7. My brother cant stand rat’s, he screamed, Get it out of the house.

8. Geoffrey didnt bring us any more present’s after that, he preferred cuddle’s

and treat’s.

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Exercise 3

Task: In this passage, find the contractions and write them out in full.

When primary school finished, my mother was always waiting for me at the

school gate. She didn’t miss a day. She’s very punctual, and she probably just

wanted to make sure that I couldn’t get in trouble. She’s quite strict like that. She

couldn’t stand the idea of me wasting time after school. The other students couldn’t

believe that my mum had the time to come and meet me. They’ve always laughed

at me about it. It’s easy to feel frustrated when parents stop you from doing what

you want to do. I didn’t feel frustrated, though.

I couldn’t have persuaded her to wait for me at home even if I had tried. My father

sometimes came with her. He’s a fireman, so he’s often out at night but around

during the day. They’ve always enjoyed hearing about my day at school.

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Error Correction


What a lot of hairy-faced men there are around nowadays.

When a man grow’s hair all over his face. It is impossible to tell what he really

looks like.

Perhaps thats why he does it. He'd rather you didnt know.

Then there's the problem of washing.

When the very hairy one’s wash their faces, it must be as big a job as when you

and I wash the hair on our heads.

So what I want to know is this: how often do all these hairy-faced men wash their

faces? Is it only once a week, like us, on Sunday nights? And does they shampoo it?

Do they use a hairdryer? Do they rubs hair-tonic in to stop their face’s from going

bald? Do they go to a barber to have their hairy faces cut and trimmed or do they

do it themselves in front of the bathroom mirror with nail-scissors?

I don't know. But next time, you see a man with a hairy face (which will probably

be as soon as you step out on to the street) maybe you will look at him more closely

and start wondering about some of these things.

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Writing

You have now written various horror stories in which a character ignores a warning

about danger and is punished. You have also written stories in which characters

faced problems and overcame them to bring about a happy ending. Today, we will

look at our final story structure: poetic justice.

Here is some information to help you with your writing:

Poetic justice is when characters in a story who do good things get a happy ending

and characters who do bad things get a comeuppance.

Story Writing:




these words in your writing to help you write your story. Tick off the words as and

when you use them in your story.



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Writing a horror story

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Bad decision Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary



Mastery Checks


I have used apostrophes of

omission correctly.



plural nouns.




Crafting check: I have written a horror story with poetic justice. The main

character makes the wrong choice and receives a comeuppance.

Alice

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Lesson 9

Do Now:

Correct this student’s work. Remove any incorrect apostrophes and add apostrophes

where they should be.

My granny love’s Autumn. She says its her favourite of all the season’s. Often, she

goes to the local park, sits on a bench and stare’s at the tree’s with their golden,

orange and red leaves. Shell sit for hours and she doesnt mind if she doesnt talk to

anyone. She says that she cant believe how beautiful nature is and how lucky she is

to just be able to enjoy it. She tell’s me that I shouldnt rush around so much and

forget to just look up at the tree’s now and then.

Exercise 1

Task: Rewrite this paragraph so that it is in the third person, rather than the first person.

Stay in the present tense.

I know I’m not an ordinary ten-year-old kid. Sure, I do ordinary things. I eat ice

cream. I ride my bike. I play ball. I have an XBox. Stuff like that makes me ordinary.

Inside, I feel ordinary as well, but I know ordinary kids don’t make other ordinary kids

run away screaming in playgrounds. I know ordinary kids don’t get stared at wherever

they go.

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Exercise 2

Task: Each sentence in the next exercise contains some words that can be changed

into a word with an apostrophe. Cross out the words that can be changed into a contraction. Replace them with a word using an apostrophe.

1. Even after everything he has been through, he is still smiling.

2. Sammy is coming to the party later, but she will have to leave early.

3. Romesh turned to me and asked, “Jack is your brother? He does not look like

you at all.”

4. Nish has just one fear: he cannot stand snakes.

5. “I had no idea you were coming!” Marlon said. “If I had known, I would have

baked a cake.”

6. Eileen is going to be unable to walk because she has had surgery on her knee.

7. “Linford is the favourite to win this race,” the commentator said.

8. In the interview, I said, “Rudy is not as good as he used to be.”

RULE: Only turn Name + is/was into a contraction if it is within speech.

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Exercise 3


Task: Find the contractions and write them out in full.

Even when Oliver Twist leaves the workhouse, the reader knows that his life won’t

be any better with Mr. Sowerberry, the undertaker. Oliver’s already been through a

lot of hardship in the workhouse, where he wasn’t fed properly and was made to do

hard work. Oliver hopes that life outside the workhouse will be better for him. He’s

wrong, though. As soon as Oliver arrives, he is shown where he’ll be sleeping. Mrs.

Sowerberry says, “You don’t mind sleeping among the coffins, do you?” Oliver is

about to find out that his situation is going to turn from bad to worse. At least in the

workhouse he was allowed to sleep in a bed. Now, living with the undertaker, Oliver

has to spend his nights in the bare coffins that have been prepared for the dead

people soon to enter them. Mrs. Sowerberry isn’t interested in giving Oliver a more

comfortable bed. She tells him, “Don’t suppose it matters much if you do mind,

though. There’s no place else for you to go.” This situation isn’t healthy, and would’ve

been eerie and intimidating for Oliver. Sleeping in a coffin sounds ridiculous and

terrifying, even though it is the best Oliver has.

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Error Correction


It was dusk – winter dusk. Snow lay white and shining over the hills and icicles

hung from the forest trees. Snow lay piled on the dark road that cut through the fields,

but from dawn mans had been clearing it with brooms and shovels. They’re were

hundreds of them at work and they were wrapped in sacking because of the bitter

cold. Kept together in groups for fear of the wolves and their heavy breathing

formed grey clouds as they cleared the snow from the road.

Snow lay thick, too, upon the roof of Willoughby Chase, the great house that

stood in the heart of the area. The Chase looked like an inviting home. Its rosy brick

was bright and well-cared-for its numerous turrets stand up sharp against the sky and

the balconies each held a golden square of window. The house was all alight inside,

and the joyous noise of activity contrasted with: the hideous howling of the wolves

outside.

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Writing

Last lesson we looked at poetic justice. Poetic justice is when characters in a story

who do good things get a happy ending and characters who do bad things get a

comeuppance.


Story Writing:








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Writing a horror story with a happy ending


Part three: Good decision Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary



Mastery Checks



omission correctly.



plural nouns.




Crafting check: I have written a horror story with poetic justice. The main

character makes the right choice and receives a happy ending.

Alice

Same as last lesson. Today you will write a different second half.

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Lesson 10

Do Now:

Fill in the blanks with an appropriate word that contains an apostrophe.

The first one has been done for you.

a) I can’t see the stage from back here.

b) I won’t come if going to be cruel.

c) We go that way.

d) got to taste it!

e) Sorry, but we make it later.

Exercise 1


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Task: Turn these phrases into sentences that use apostrophes of possession.

1. The pen belonging to Ms. Ali

2. The bone belonging to the dog

3. The paper belonging to the father

4. The printer belonging to the school

5. The car belonging to the woman

6. The house belonging to the family

7. The book belonging to Jack

8. The bike belonging to Shaharin

RULE: Add ‘+s to singular nouns that don’t end in “s” to that they own something.

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Exercise 2

Task: All of these sentences need an apostrophe for possession. Put the apostrophe in

the correct place.

1. The spiders web was hanging from the branch.

2. My mums headache had got worse as the time went by.

3. Bens dog makes a loud noise when it barks.

4. My best friends sister is called Jodie and she likes shopping.

5. I like that girls coat.

6. The boys pet snake is crawling along the floor.

7. I’ll buy the food for Kates party.

8. Abirs party wasn’t very much fun.

Exercise 3

Task: Each of these sentences contain an apostrophe of omission and an apostrophe

of possession.

Circle the apostrophe of omission.

Underline the apostrophe of possession.

1. I’ve forgotten where I put Terri’s keys.

2. It’s strange how much the teacher’s voice reminds me of my uncle.

3. I haven’t been to my sister’s house for two years.

4. Sherlock’s powers of observation weren’t able to help him solve the case.

5. It isn’t like him to forget about his best friend’s birthday.

6. The goalkeeper’s foot was broken and she wasn’t able to play in the final

game of the season.

7. My phone’s not able to receive calls but my sister’s phone is.

8. He’s going to decide which of Shakespeare’s plays is his favourite.

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Error Correction


Every year in the spring, the Year Eights go away for three day’s and two night’s to a

place called the Broadwood Nature Reserve in Norfolk. Its a four-hour bus drive away.

The kids sleep in cabins with bunk beds. There are campfires, marshmallows and long

walks through the woods. The teachers have been prepping us about this all year

long, so all the kids is excited about it except for me. It’s not even that I’m not

excited, because I kind of am. It’s just I’ve never slept away from home before and

I’m kind of nervous. Most kids have had sleepovers by the time they’re my age not

me not unless you include hospital stays, but even then Mum or Dad always stayed

with me overnight. I never slept over at Aunt Kate and Uncle Pete’s house. When I

was really little that was mainly because there were too many medical issues.

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Writing

You have now written two stories that started the same way. The choice the

character made defined what happened in the rest of the story. They received

poetic justice. Today we are focusing on a fantasy quest.


Story Writing:








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Writing a fantasy story with a happy ending


Part three: Good decision Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary

searing groaned scrambled escape

thrust fiery grasped terror

Mastery Checks



omission correctly.


apostrophes on words

that don't show omission

or possession.

I have used a more formal

tone by avoiding

contractions.

Crafting check: I have written a fantasy quest with poetic justice. The main

character makes the right choice and receives a happy ending.

Tom

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Lesson 11

Do Now:

Put all the apostrophes in the correct places in these sentences.

a) I wont be able to go to Davids birthday.

b) He couldnt score with an open goal.

c) This nights going to be special.

d) I really wanted to learn more about the authors life.

Exercise 1

Task: Each of these sentences contain an apostrophe of omission and an apostrophe

of possession. Some sentences contain more than one of each. Circle the apostrophe

of omission.

Underline the apostrophe of possession.

1. I can’t wait to go to Jamie Oliver’s new restaurant.

2. The sheep’s wool didn’t sell for much money.

3. Ever since the injury she suffered last season, Paula’s speed hasn’t been the

same.

4. It doesn’t matter if you don’t like it: just say that your father’s cooking is

wonderful.

5. I’m so glad that you think this spaghetti bolognese is better than your aunt’s.

6. He’s going to be upset if you don’t come from back from Zara’s home right

now.

7. It’s a matter of opinion whether you prefer Ms. Smith’s class or Mr. Wright’s.

8. Harry’s scar was hurting which meant that he couldn’t waste another moment.

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Exercise 2


1) I cannot wait to get to Zaras birthday party.

2) The pupils exam paper was not handed in on time.

3) Despite a number of warnings, Yacoobs behaviour has not improved.

4) We have seen lots of exam papers, but Wilsons is certainly the best in the

school.

5) Later on tonight, I will be playing basketball with Toms brother.

6) The boys knees were bleeding, but he did not care.

7) Could you tell Jessicas mum that I will be back for dinner?

8) It has been five years since we visited Amys house.

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Exercise 3

Here is some information to help you with Exercise 3.

Task: You are about to read a student’s essay. They have written in a style that is too

informal.

• Remove contractions from the essay.

• Leave any contractions that are quotations as they are.

• Leave possessive apostrophes as they are.

Bill Sikes doesn’t trust anyone at all. After Oliver has been taken in by Rose and Mrs.

Maylie, Bill meets with Fagin and Monks. Even though he’s a violent thug, Bill doesn’t

trust Monks. He also loses trust in Nancy. When Nancy tells Bill that she’s going to see

her friend, Bill says, “Let’s not get angry. We might suspect you have something to

hide.” It is true that Nancy knows about all of Bill’s crimes, however she is more

interested in Oliver’s safety. She can’t sit and watch Bill hunt and kill Oliver. Nancy

doesn’t want to see Oliver killed, but she also doesn’t want to see him turn to a life of

crime. We see Nancy’s kindness try to overcome Bill’s violence and aggression.

Although Nancy wins the battle for Oliver’s life, it is a tragedy that she’s got to pay for

it with her own.

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Error Correction


Very quickly I stripped off my pyjamas and put on my shirt and my jeans. I pulled

my sweater over my head. It was neither navy-blue nor black. It was a sort of pale

brown. It would have to do. My sneakers was the wrong colour too. They were white.

But they were also dirty and that took a lot of the whiteness away. How long would it

take me to get to the wood? It would take an hour and a half. As I bent down to tie

the laces. I noticed my hands were shaking and my stomach had that awful prickly

feeling as though it were full of small needles.

I ran down the steps: of the caravan and across to the workshop to get my

fathers torch a torch is a good companion when you are alone outdoors at night and

I wanted it with me. I grabbed the torch and went out of the workshop. The moon

had long since disappeared, but the sky was clear and a great mass of star’s was

wheeling above my head. There was no wind at all, there was no sound of any kind.

To my right, going away into the blackness of the countryside, lay the lonely road that

led to the dangerous wood.

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Writing

Last lesson, you wrote a story about Tom making the right choice and receiving

poetic justice.


Story Writing:








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Writing a fantasy story with a comeuppance


Part three: Bad decision Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary

searing groaned scrambled escape

thrust fiery grasped terror

Mastery Checks


I have included an apostrophe

of possession for one of the

characters


apostrophes on words

that don't show omission

or possession.

I have used a more formal

tone by avoiding

contractions.

Crafting check: I have written a fantasy quest with poetic justice. The main

character makes the wrong choice and receives a comeuppance.

Same as last lesson. Today you will write a different second half.

Tom

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