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English for E&BEWeek 9, lesson 4• peer feedback• individual essay• critical review
• stress and intonation
Individual essay
week Group member A Group member B Group member C Group member D
9 Peer review student A’s essay
Peer review student A’s essay
Peer review student A’s essay
10 Peer review student B’s essay
Peer review student B’s essay
Peer review student B’s essay
11 Peer review student C & D’s essayteacher consultation about individual essay
Peer review student C & D’s essayteacher consultation about individual essay
Peer review student D’s essay
Peer review student C’s essay
12 teacher consultation about individual essay
teacher consultation about individual essay
Week 9: individual essay
Yantao (Tim and Ruth give feedback)Daniel (Yimin and Jim give feedback)Zhang Jing (Stijn,Tom and Casper give feedback)Anne (Yulian and Oliver give feedback)Amber ((Jan-Paul, Mike and Bas give feedback)
Deadline sending essays to teacher and peers: 3th of MarchDeadline sending peer feedback: 5th of March
Week 10: individual essay
Tim (Yantao and Ruth give feedback)Yimin (Daniel and Jim give feedback)Stijn (Zhang Jing, CasperTom give feedback)Yulian (Anne and Oliver give feedback)Jan-Paul (Amber, Bas and Mike give feedback)
Deadline sending essays to teacher and peers: 10th of MarchDeadline sending peer feedback: 12th of March
Week 11: individual essay
Ruth (Yantao and Tim give feedback)Jim (Daniel and Yimin give feedback)Tom and Casper (Zhang Jing and Stijn give feedback)Oliver (Anne Yulian and give feedback)Mike and Ruth (Amber and Jan-Paul give feedback)
Deadline sending essays to teacher and peers: 17th of MarchDeadline sending peer feedback: 19th of March
Consultationindividual essay
Week 11Group members A and B
Week 12Group members C
• specific feedback and help in areas that you were struggling with
• reflection on personal feedback• discussion peer feedback process
Individual essay peer feedback You are going to give each other feedback on theindividual essays.
Feedback given should be constructive – giveexamples of why, for example, you feel it isinformal, or why you feel the text is incoherentand perhaps give suggestions how this can beimproved.
Hand-out: peer feedback essay
Writing/rewriting paragraphs
How did that go?Are you happy with your adjustedintroductory paragraph?Did you manage to write a goodnew paragraph?
Revising paragraphs
Wadsworth Handbook chapter 7
To indent or not to indent?
It is common in essays to indent the first line ofeach paragraph one-half inch (1 tab) and notadd any extra lines or spaces betweenparagraphs.
However, it has become more and more commonthese days to leave spaces between paragraphs
andto start the first sentence without indenting.
Kinds of body paragraphs• Narrative paragraphPresents events in chronological order.• Desciptive paragraphCommunicates how something looks, sounds or feels• Exemplification paragraphSupports the topic statement with specific examples• Process paragraphsDescribe how something works,, presenting steps in chronological order• Cause-and-effect paragraphsExplores causes or predicts or describes results• Comparison paragraphsExamine similarities and contrasts between subjects• Transitional paragraphSummarize what you already have writte nbefore before you move on to a new point.• Devision / classification paragraphTakes a single item and breaks it into parts.Take many seperated items and group them into
categories,comparing and contrasting them with each other• Definition paragraphDefining something by telling a story or explain how it works.
Classification paragraph
A first date can end up being categorized as successful, a clingy, a boastful or awkward. Successful first dates include both parties expressing information about what they like, who they are, and so forth. Usually, these dates will end in tentative plans for a second one. Clingy dates end up with one of the parties practically begging for information about the other. However, the non-clinger is not interested. On boastful dates, one member of the duo talks about all of his or her skills, talents, and abilities. The listening end of the pair is never asked about his or her life. Awkward first dates generally involve lots of silence or one or both of the partners not knowing how to act appropriately. While many dates occur every day, they can generally fall into one of these categories.
Exemplification paragraphAchoura is one of the most important celebrations in which Muslims do various activities. It is celebrated on Muharram 10th every year. On this occasion, families meet together for a special meal of dried fruit and couscous with guedid. They also eat cakes and drink milk or juice. More importantly, they offer Zakat to poor people. Moreover, families and friends meet each other on the big day to play their drums while singing and dancing. In addition, Achoura is an opportunity for children to play with toys that their parents bought for them, such as dolls, plastic guns, cars and masks. Furthermore, children spray each other with water on the day of Zem Zem. In the evening they light bonfires as well as fireworks and start singing and dancing around the fire late into the night. In brief, Achoura is a mixture of religious, cultural and traditional practices.
Transitional paragrah
For most people, the word ‘cloning’ is not only associated with Dolly the sheep but also fears about cloning human beings. This confusion makes it hard for people to understand the difference between therapeutic cloning and making a cloned baby. On the other hand, a more precise term, such as "nuclear transplantation," which describes the technique used to make copies of stem cells, doesn't advance the debate either because most people don't understand what it means. What the public really needs to understand is that there is scientific technique now that can be used in several ways, and one way of using it is to find new medical therapies.
Cause-and-effect paragraph In recent decades, cities have grown so large that now about 50% of the Earth's population lives in urban areas. There are several reasons for this occurrence. First, the increasing industrialization of the nineteenth century resulted in the creation of many factory jobs, which tended to be located in cities. These jobs, with their promise of a better material life, attracted many people from rural areas. Second, there were many schools established to educate the children of the new factory laborers. The promise of a better education persuaded many families to leave farming communities and move to the cities. Finally, as the cities grew, people established places of leisure, entertainment, and culture, such as sports stadiums, theaters, and museums. For many people, these facilities made city life appear more interesting than life on the farm, and therefore drew them away from rural communities.
Definition paragraph
The IAU has so far recognized five dwarf planets differentiated from planets by a parameter of “planetary discriminant” which allows estimating the capacity to dominate orbits. According to NationMaster Encyclopaedia dwarf planets follow orbits which are not free from other minor celestial bodies. Simultaneously, they always circulate the Sun and not other celestial objects (they are not satellites). Several dwarf planets have already been scrutinized effectively. Their physical properties have been calculated through routine Earth-based observations as well as advanced image-searching software. Since current data may not be entirely accurate, further examinations are undertaken by astronomers and physicists world-wide.
Paragraphs check
• Does the introductory paragraph make you want to read further?
• Is the information in the body of the essay well-structured into paragraphs?
• Does the concluding paragraph review the main point?
• Does the concluding paragraph contain a statement that you will remember?
Don’ts• Don’t announce your topic (In my paper…, this
essay is about…)• Don’t undercut your credibility (I am not an
expert on …)• Don’t mention the difficulty of the subject • Don’t simply repeat your introduction in other
words in the conclusion• Don’t introduce new point in your introduction
European you-nityby Deborah Cameron
• What is the thesis of this text? If you feel the text does not contain a clear thesis, then formulate it yourself.
• Make an outline of the text. Provide the topic sentence of each paragraph (make it up if you have to), and briefly indicate how it is supported .
• Using WW 7d, try to identify the underlying patterns of development for each body paragraph (the introduction and conclusion speak for themselves).
• Consider the first paragraph (from the text) of page 134 (Meanwhile … courtesy). Discuss/identify the elements that create unity and coherence (WW 7a and b) and whether this paragraph is or is not well-developed (WW 7c).
• Identify those passages where you 'hear' the author's voice most clearly (in other words, indicate which parts are clearly subjective).
• Is Cameron presenting a fair text? Do you think she is credible? Explain. • Does the text fail or succeed as an argumentative essay? Explain.
Structure of an outlineI. MAJOR SUBTOPIC
A. Minor Subtopic 1. Major Detail
(a) Minor Detail (b) Minor Detail
2. Major Detail B. Minor Subtopic
II. MAJOR SUBTOPIC
Example of a thesis statement
• There is a non-uniform trend concerning the use of T/V forms among different European countries.
Example of an outlineI T/V pronoun system
A reciprocally1 intimacy and solidarity2 mutual respectB non-reciprocally1 power
II social and political influences A social change1 aristocratic use2 social mobilityB familiar versus polite1 egalitarianism2 power and statusC Swedish paradox1 older people2 customersD German dilemma1 West2 East
IV synthetic personalisationA custom careB relationships1 superiority / inferiority2 fake intimacy
English, a stressed language
English is a stressed language. We give stress tocertain words while other words are quickly spoken(some people say eaten!). Many other languages are syllabic. (there is stress,But each syllable has its own length).
English however, spends more time on specificstressed words while quickly gliding over the other,less important, words.
Content words are stress words
• Nouns e.g. kitchen, Peter
• (most) principal verbs e.g. visit, construct
• Adjectives e.g. beautiful, interesting
• Adverbs e.g. often, carefully
Function /structure words are non-stressed words
• Determiners e.g. the, a, some, a few
• Auxiliary verbs e.g. don't, am, can, were
• Prepositions e.g. before, next to, opposite
• Conjunctions e.g. but, while, as
• Pronouns e.g. they, she, us
To do in Nestor week (week 10)Individual essayWork on individual essays and givefeedback on each other's essays. PresentationPrepare a 7 - 10 minute pair presentation on an academictopic of choice. After the presentation in week 11, you will write areflection reportAWLStudy AWL sublist 4 and 5
Quiz 4 Question1 Spelling Spell the word .................. without any spelling mistakes.
Question 2 abbreviationWhat does the abbreviation UFO stand for?
Question 3 General knowledge Nine films were nominated for best film 2013. Name at least four. Question 4 EconomyWhich country lost its triple A status last weekend? Question 5 PictureWhat is this?
Sublist 3Exercise 1Alternative considerable fund documents minor tasks cores schemeproportion interactExercise 2Published circumstances sequence technical illustrating dominated justifyconstant negated corporateExercise 3Constrained immigrated react outcome sex comments techniquecorrespond layer emphasisExercise 4Compensate register link ensure shifted partner technology contributesimply criteriaExercise 5Locate initial philosophy convened specify valid rely deduce componentexclude
