Story Development Handout

Story & Character Development Guide by Norman Ray Fitts

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Story and Character Development Define Development: A process of growth, change, or elaboration.

In this presentation we will explore the method I’ve developed to bring a story to life, but first you have to

have some idea of what story you want to tell.

Stories can come from real life relating to an event that happened to you, to someone you know or to

someone you don’t know. They can relate to an historical event or they can come from your imagination.

Even fiction can use true events as a backdrop. James Mitchner, an American author, wrote historical

fiction. He took real events and populated them with fictional characters.

Developing The Idea For the purposes of this lesson I am going to use “The Submarine Effect” a novel that I wrote, and

then turned into a screenplay

The idea that started it all “As we know, the world has become a very dangerous place. There are factions, if given the chance,

would dictate to the rest of us what to think, what to say, and what to believe in. What if one day, in the

not too distant future, it came to pass?”

This is, in no way, an original idea. In fact there are only thirty-six different plots. Everything you write is

a version or a combination of those plots. How you tell the story is what makes it unique. I have included

those plots in the Glossary section of this guide.

From Thought to paper My next thought was how do I tell this story in a unique way and what will be the outcome?

Now let’s take a moment and think about this…

Development Notes

These were some of the general notes I jotted down to start the creative process.

Our world will end, as we know it.

How does it end and what do we do about it? What is the one thing that would remain untouched no matter how devastating the attack? Our submarine

fleet.

Ntes

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The attack on us, and our retaliation, will leave most of humanity dead.

How does our way of life survive? The survivors have to be protected. They have to leave the surface.

How much time will pass?

What will they find when they resurface.

Where will we go from there?

Now let’s expand it…

“Our World ends”

Their attack has to be in a form that it would leave the ecosystem intact.

It will have to be decisive and quickly take out our entire population all at once. A biological attack.

I think I want it to affect only human DNA leaving the animal population alone to somehow later mutate

into something else.

There are two submarine broadcast stations that actually exist, one on each coast. Because of something

we put in place, they will survive and send a message to our submarine fleet. The message will begin

“The Submarine Effect is activated.”

This will send our fleet to specific locations where they will launch a retaliatory strike.

“A place to escape to” Where will humanity go? How will they get there? What will make it possible?

I decided to put it under water. A semi-secure body of water, but deep enough to make it inaccessible. The

Gulf of Mexico. The Sigsbee Abyssal Plain, the deepest part of the Gulf, fifteen thousand feet down.

A structure large enough to house the crews of the submarines. A structure three thousand feet in

diameter and four hundred feet tall. Fabricate it from a new material lighter than aluminum and strong

enough to handle the water pressure and capable of withstanding the destructiveness of seawater,

Tiridium. Name this place New Atlantis.

Power it with a new generation nuclear power plant.

Build a sub-story around the construction of New Atlantis and show to what length they will go to conceal

it.

Only a small fleet of specially designed submarine, crewed mostly by women is capable of reaching New

Atlantis to transfer the crews from the other submarines. The new subs will carry perishable goods and

the specialized talents needed to finish adapting New Atlantis.


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“Hundreds of years later”

How will life evolve on the bottom of the Gulf and what

will bring them back to the surface?

About twenty-five hundred crewmembers will have transferred to New Atlantis.

You can’t expect all these people to survive for hundreds of years in a tin can. The population growth

alone would make that impossible. They will develop a way to manipulate seawater at the molecular level

and create a bubble or blister that will allow them to expand their world.

Rename their city to Quanterra. It will grow to a population of several million.

The center of the movement to revisit the surface will be a group called “The Dry Earth Society.”

The leaders of Quanterra do not want this to happen for fear of losing control.

Those leaders will allow the start of an expedition to the surface with a scheme to end it once, and for all.

They have to have a way up. One of the ancient submarines has survived the test of time. It is a relic

sitting aside, ignored for centuries.

The leaders of the expedition discover the plot to destroy the sub once it leaves Quanterra and they

escape by the narrowest of margins.

The world they find on the surface is very different from the world depicted in their ancient archives.

What has evolved is very lethal.

Two groups still survive on the surface in the area where they land. One is from a small group that had

survived in an underground site near Houston Texas.

The other is a genetically engineered group cloned by the first group using animal and altered human

DNA. This was done to create a species capable of surviving on the still contaminated surface. It was

born out of a need to know what had survived. This species, simply called Humanoids, will break away

and form their own society.

A hundred years later, these two groups will fight a brief war which neither side will win, sign a peace

treaty and will live apart for hundreds of years.

The injection of the Quanterrians will bring the three groups together. There will be growing pains.

Afterwards they will form a team made up of all three groups to venture forth in search of other survivors

at other sites around the world.

The story parameters shown above were the product of several days of thinking and rethinking the

story I wanted to tell. Through the use of the Internet I pulled together the technical information I

needed to add realism to the story and expand on the notes shown above.


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Characters

As important as the story is, it’s the characters that populate the world you create that will give it life. If

you truly want to connect with your readers, or your audience, the story has to be delivered through

your characters. Below are notes I made to start this process

It will be important to develop the characters that will fight to preserve our way of life in the first half of

this story. I needed to create a bond between those characters and the reader. When we lose those

characters the reader needs to feel a since of loss.

We will have a completely new set of characters in the second half, but in the back of the reader’s mind

they know these people are descended from those in the first half. In the first half the bad guys were

faceless. In this half the bad guys will have faces.

I will use teams of characters. In the first half I need people with the special talents required to create

New Atlantis .I decided on six main characters. Their names are Jake Taylor, Janet Crowley, Christopher

Wincrest, Jonathan Chambers, Peter Arnest and Edward Willingham.

One will be a leader or facilitator (Jake). Four will be the scientist and engineers needed to design New

Atlantis (Janet, Christopher, Jonathan and Peter) and the last would be the Commander of the SeaBee

detachment that would perform the actual construction (Edward).

“SeaBee” stands for Construction Battalion (C.B.). This whole project would be government

sponsored so it would make sense that they would use the construction arm of their military.

In the second half of the story I will build everything around one central character and let him attract the

team to him. His name is Colin Becker and he’s the Curator of “The Hall of the Ancients.” This will

allow him access to all of the information his expedition will need once they reach the surface.

Colin will need two groups, one to examine and document what they find, and another to create a time

line and an historical record of their journey. Bethany Lender will be the scientist and Aaron Colure will

be the historian. We will also need someone to command the submarine (Zackery Ulysses Kemp). He’s

the only character with three names, don’t ask me why. And last but not least someone to command the

security team that will accompany them (Fredrick Hathaway).

The final group of characters will populate the world our adventures will discover on the surface. There

will be two distinct groups on the surface. On the human side I need at least one central character.

(Terrance Liberman) and on the Humanoid side I need the leader (Etac), a love interest for one of the

humans (Kera) and a military leader (Jton).

These will not be the only characters I will have. There will be others needed to flesh out the story, but

they will come up as I get into telling it. These sidebar characters will not necessarily need histories.

Character Histories

It is important to give your characters a distinct voice. Obviously I’m not talking about the sound of

their voice. I’m talking about what they say and how they say it. This stems from their physical

appearance and the historical background you give them. Below are a few examples of what I’m

talking about.


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Janet Crowley

She’s twenty-eight years old, with a slender build, short-cropped auburn hair, and bright emerald green

eyes. She has a PhD in Psychology. She specializes in the effects of long-term confinement on the human

ability to function as a team. She has designed most of the protocols in use by both the Space program

and the US Submarine Service. She has authored half a dozen books on the subject.

Christopher Wincrest

He’s thirty-seven years old. His six-foot tanned physique says beach volleyball when in fact he graduated

in the top two percent of MIT’s school of engineering. For most of his career he has specialized in robotic

and containments designed to handle the log-term effects of deep-sea exposure and pressure. His designs

are already in wide spread use throughout the oil and gas industry and on occasion have found their way

into some shadowy U.S. military projects.

Colin Becker

He’s in his mid fifties, with graying hair. At over six feet, he has a solid build. His father was a college

professor and his mother was a librarian. He was raised in the Travarian Sector of Quanterra. Born into

the Public Class, of a three-class system comprised of the Working Class, Public Class and Ranking

Class, he managed to elevate himself into the Ranking Class with his appointment as Curator of “The

Hall of the Ancients.” His life totally revolves around his work and he has never married. Colin uncovers

a number of long lost ancient records indicating that there may be human life surviving on the surface

and uses his influence to convince the Ruling Council to allow him to try and confirm it.

Before I detailed Kera I found it necessary to define Humanoid, as it will apply in the story. This made

it unnecessary to repeat the description over and over with each character.

Humanoid

They are genetically engineered from altered human and animal DNA; these clones were designed to be

able to survive in an eradiated environment. They have the capacity to alter themselves to conform to

changing conditions. They have an outward animal appearance, but possess a very high level of

intelligent. They have a shorten lifespan of about twenty-five years. That is made up for by the fact that

from birth it only takes about two human years to grow to maturity. The males are over six feet and

heavily muscled. Their hands, feet, shoulders and head are covered with fur like hair. The females have

an underlying human female shape, and are less extreme in their appearance, but are no less lethal. In

order to protect their young the females have razor sharp, extendable claws at the ends of their fingers

Kera

She is a Humanoid. She is in her third year of life by human standards. Her father is the leader of their

governing body. She works in a medical facility and she will be the love interest for Fredrick Hathaway.

You can make these histories as detailed as you feel they need to be. Bear in mind that just because you

include certain facts and events you may not need to use them all.


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… And the basis of the “The Submarine Effect” is born.

One of the reasons for laying out a detailed character history is to understand who and what your

characters are. Knowing them keeps you from placing them into uncharacteristic situations. For the

purpose of your story these are living, breathing people.

The Story line

Everything we’ve talked about up to now comes down to the story line. The story line is a one to five

page detailed telling of the story. This will come from the ideas and notes you’ve made. It will

introduce the main characters and lay out the three acts of the story. Take whatever time it requires

completing this. It will always keep you headed in the right direction. When, in the process of writing

the manuscript, or screenplay, you decide to alter a portion of the story that will change the ending or

change the story’s direction make sure you take the time to modify the story line to reflect the change.

You will never get lost when you always know where you’re headed.

Following is the completed Story Line (5 pages)

The year is 2073. The world as we know it is about to end. The United States and Canada are the

only bastions of free thought left in the world. An electromagnetic pulse fired from two hundred miles

above the North American continent leaves us deaf and blind to what comes next.

A biological missile attack kills ninety-five percent of the population. The architects of our

destruction are certain they have eliminated the last pocket of resistance to world domination. Like many

who came before them they underestimated our willingness to defend our way of life.

Following the attack surviving members of our military buried deep under ground shielded from

the effects of the pulse, and protected from the virus, turned keys and pushed buttons. This did not launch

an immediate retaliation. What it did do was send a flash message to our Submarine Commanders at sea.

The message began “The Submarine Effect is activated.”

Three days later our submarine fleet launched a nuclear attack that left most of the planet buried

under the fall-out generated by forty-three hundred warheads. In anticipation of this eventuality, twenty-

five years earlier steps were taken to insure the survival of our way of life.

It began with the efforts of Jake Taylor, Janet Crowley, Christopher Wincrest, Clinton Potts,

Jonathan Chambers and more than two hundred others in the construction of New Atlantis seventeen

thousand feet below the surface of the Gulf of Mexico.

Jake and his team with the help of a contingency of SeaBees (military construction battalion)

occupy a converted oil platform and in the course of three years secretly complete the most difficult

construction project every conceived on earth.

In order to guarantee the secret, after Jake and his team are removed, that night a pair of

missiles erases all evidence of the platform, everyone on board and hopefully the memory of the existence

of New Atlantis.


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Over the next twenty-five years the members of Jake’s team worked independent of one another

as preparations are made for the day when New Atlantis, and a number of underground sites on the

mainland, will be needed.

On that day, after the submarine fleet delivers its payload, our submarine crews occupy New

Atlantis.

Five hundred years after the events that destroyed ninety-five percent of human life on the surface

the city of Quanterra, founded by the original inhabitants of New Atlantis, a city of two million, that rest

two and a half miles below the surface of the Gulf of Mexico, has come into being. The members of “The

Dry Earth Society” join a member of the Ranking Class in an effort to reclaim their heritage. They have

managed to convince the Ruling Council, to restore an ancient submarine, the Georgana, and attempt to

revisit the surface the birthplace of their ancestors.

The Ruling Council agreed to this after being assured by others that the attempt to adjust the

immune systems of the volunteers to survive on the surface would fail thus preventing any future attempts

to leave the city. Having controlled the lives of millions of people for hundreds of years they feared the

loss of that power and control. When it became apparent that the mission might actually work they

attempted to prevent the launch.

News of that decision arrived in time for the Georgana to launch ahead of the forces sent to

prevent it. They leave the safety of Quanterra and the adventure of a lifetime begins.

The Texas coast is very different from what it was five hundred years earlier. Two intelligent

groups have survived. One group occupies a city referred to as New Houston. This city sprang from an

underground site located beneath it. This site and several others were constructed at the same time as

New Atlantis in an effort to ensure that at least some would survive. The second group, referred to as

Humanoids due to the fact that this second group was created by the first, inhabits an established

territory close to the coast.

A hundred years after most of the human life was destroyed on the surface the members of the

underground site genetically engineered a life form that could survive in the still contaminated world

above ground. Unfortunately they created both genders and gave them a high level of human intelligence.

This new life form quickly forgot about their creators trapped below ground and formed their own

society. To make them useful in a short time they were designed to mature in only two years. As a failsafe,

to prevent them from over populating, their life span was limited to about twenty-five years.

A hundred years later when those trapped below ground found their way back to the surface they

tried to reclaim what they still considered to be their property. The Humanoids at first extended the hand

of friendship but then defended their right to exist. The two years of conflict that followed came to an end

when someone remembered what caused the near extinction of humanity in the first place and a truce was

signed, so to speak, and from that point on there was almost no contact between them for close to three

hundred years. In that time both societies flourished.

With the introduction of the Quanterrians everything changed. At first the Humanoids thought

these new arrivals were in fact Sub-Humans, the name given to their creators shorten from Subterranean

Humans. The Quanterrian beach encampment was attacked. The entire landing party would have been

killed except for the heightened sense of smell of the Humanoids. When they were close enough they

noticed the difference between these humans and their old adversary.


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A few of the landing party escaped first back into the gulf, and then after having to beach their

damaged inflatable boat, into the jungle. Among these were Aaron Colure, Betheny Lender, and Colin

Becker. The first two were researchers and the last was the Ranking Class member who organized the

mission. Another key member Fredrick Hathaway the man commanding the security detachment with the

landing party was among those captured on the beach.

After the Ruling Humanoids debriefed their captives they notified New Houston that they were

holding living survivors from the past and that there were others that would need their help in the jungle.

Terrance Lieberman a distant relative of the son-in-law of one of those who designed and built

New Atlantis received the word and immediately left to recover the lost members of the landing party. The

contaminated environment, over the long passage of time, had mutated almost every plant, animal and

human left on the surface into something a great deal more lethal. Terrance and his party arrived just in

time to save most of the remaining landing party from becoming a meal for some of the local wildlife.

Aaron, Betheny and Colin were among the survivors. They were returned to New Houston and

after being treated for some local infestations were brought up to speed on the history of New Houston,

the underground site it sprang from, and the creation of the Humanoids that had attacked their camp.

Betheny and the others filled Terrance’s people in on Quanterra and its beginnings.

It was almost immediately recognized by Terrance, and the Humanoid leaders, that this was the

event that could bring both sides back together. Not everybody on both sides saw it that way. In the mean

time Fred Hathaway had gotten to know Kera, a female Humanoid assigned to look after him. That

relationship turned into something no one could have expected.

Fred, Kera, the Humanoid Leader, some of his ministers and the rest of the surviving captives, at

the invitation of Terrance, began the journey to New Houston. Members from both factions wanting to

destroy what was beginning to form attacked the procession. The attack would have worked except for the

intervention of a fourth group of beings.

Fearing an attack by their first group of creations the members of the underground site cloned a

second Humanoid termed a Super Humanoid. They were bigger, stronger and as it turned out smarter

than the first. The one difference was they had no gender. The only way they could reproduce was

through cloning. That attack never came and when the conflict began on the surface years later they

refused to join in. In their words it was illogical. As it turned out they were right.

A good part of the security force of New Houston was made up of Super Humanoids. They

uncovered the plot and stepped in almost arriving too late. Fred was gravely wounded. Having to pass

through a screening process in order to gain access to New Houston it was discovered that Kera was

carrying a child, Fred’s child.

Through video records left behind Terrance had learned the location of a command center in the

Caribbean. He developed a plan to form a joint crew for the Georgana and seek out the site. It was

learned that the memories of many of the people at that site, when the world ended, had been transferred

into storage. If they could recover those memories and somehow reverse the process back into a clone the

historical information recovered would be invaluable.

Afterward he wanted to travel to other underground sites he believed to still exist. Aaron, Betheny

(Beth) and Colin volunteered to be part of it. To show them what they might be up against Terrance put

together an expedition to the south of the city. Living in what was left of the underground in what used to


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be the original site of Houston Texas were the mutated remnants of the human population caught above

ground those many years ago.

It was a bad idea and Colin Becker was killed. Aaron has to take his place. This event did not

sway them from the attempt to reach the Caribbean site. Because of the child, and the extent of his

injuries, Fred elects to stay behind and promotes someone else to command the security force made up of

both humans and Humanoids.

The leader of the Humanoids on the mission is named Jton. Before leaving for the Caribbean the

Georgana, with its integrated crew, pays a visit to Quanterra. Because of the possibility of the

introduction of organisms from the surface into the almost sterile environment they are not permitted into

the city. They are told that the plotters to kill the crew of the Georgana had been uncovered and dealt

with. Until now it was thought they had succeeded in destroying the sub. The new leadership in

Quanterra is more than anxious to become part of the new world forming above water.

On the submarine’s trek to the Caribbean site they decide to send the crew ashore just to get them

off the boat for a while. That was a mistake. Survivors on shore attack the first landing party and the

second landing party has to try and help them. Most of the first landing party is killed. It is during this

event that Jton develops a great deal of respect for Beth. She takes control of the second landing craft,

and showing no fear for herself, takes it in to rescue survivors being pursued in the water by attackers

from the beach. It wasn’t the lack of an outward appearance of fear that impressed him. Humanoids are

a blend of human and animal DNA and like most animals they can sense fear in another animal. He could

sense none of this in Beth. In his eyes she was completely fearless. From this point on he would take every

opportunity to be near her. It was in no way a sexual attraction but one of pure respect.

The fact that Fred and Kera had produced a child had proved to be a one in a billion event. A

medical team made up of both species failed at every attempt to reproduce it in a lab. It was concluded

that even Fred and Kera could not do it again making their son truly unique. Their son Robert Sata

Hathaway will have his on destiny to fulfill but not in this story.

The Georgana reached the Caribbean site and found it intact. It takes a bit of digging to find the

airlock to get inside. Once inside they discover why the site, after such a long time, still works. They meet

Ally a maintenance robot that has been caring for the site all these years. They also meet a digital

recreation of Jake Taylor one of the original team members that put New Atlantis together.

Jake informs them that the nuclear power source buried beneath the site is going critical. Aaron

and the others are informed that only five of the original fifty people that populated the site can be

recovered. Their original DNA was stored and formed the key to release the memory modules without

erasing them. They also learn that in order to resolve the problem of who would be sacrificed in order to

save the others Jake’s wife Ally had her memories, her essence, transferred to the robot along with the

process to restore those memories to a clone. At this point all Jake wants them to do is take Ally with

them. She absolutely refuses. For five hundred years the only thing that kept her sanity was the thought of

being with her husband again one day.

With the complex set to explode at any time the landing party wants to vacate the site. Aaron

insists on saving those that are left. Beth and Aaron have been together almost the entire time and had

fallen in love. The ships captain had married them right before reaching the site. Beth argued against it,

but lost. Aaron sent her and the others back up and went with Ally to recover the memory modules. The

modules and the required DNA are recovered but Aaron is severely injured in the process.


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Jton could see how worried Beth was and went back in. He reemerges carrying Aaron with Ally

behind him pushing a cart with the modules. Aaron dies in Beth’s arms. Jton finally has to pry her away

from his body and takes her back to the sub.

The submarine is on its way back when the massive wave caused by the underwater blast at the

site passes overhead. The Georgana returns to New Houston delaying the rest of the mission. They

needed time to heal.

Aaron is buried next to Colin and both will be remembered through time as the ones mainly

responsible for the resurrection of mankind. Beth made a promise to Aaron before he died to complete the

mission. With Jton, and the cloned likeness of Jake Taylor by her side, she does just that.

Beth will remain with Jton until the end of his life cycle about fifteen years. Together they will

have many adventures. Legend has it in that time she bore him a daughter. Historians say that was

impossible, but then again that’s what legends are made of. But that’s another story.

In a storyline I’m completing “A Brave New World; the Betheny Colure Chronicles”, the

discovery of her diaries, a thousand years later, will continue this story.

This story line did not come together overnight. It is the culmination of a couple of weeks of writing

and rewriting, but when it was completed the foundation was laid on which the novel was built

Marketing the novel

Marketing a novel or a screenplay can be a very frustrating experience. If you can’t take rejection then

write for your own pleasure and forget about trying to make a living with it. That being said I’m going

to introduce you to some of the tools you will need.

The Synopsis

The synopsis is a very brief telling of the story, limited to one page. You will probably rewrite it several

times. It will briefly depict at least the first two acts that make up the story; the beginning, the

obstacles(s) to be overcome, but in order to peek someone’s interest it may, or may not, give the

complete resolution.

You will not include the names of the characters but you may use titles (i.e. The Doctor, The

Researcher, The Scientist). The reason for this is, this may be passed around in order to market the

story before the story is completed and in the meantime something may necessitate a name change.

Following is the synopsis for “The Submarine Effect”

The year is 2073. The world as we know it is about to end. The United States and Canada are the only

bastions of free thought left in the world. An electromagnetic pulse fired from two hundred miles above

the North American continent leaves us deaf, and blind to what comes next.


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A biological missile attack kills ninety-nine percent of the population. The architects of our destruction

are certain they have eliminated the last pocket of resistance to world domination. Like many who came

before them they underestimated our willingness to defend our way of life.

Following the attack surviving members of our military buried deep underground shielded from the

effects of the pulse, and protected from the virus, turned keys and pushed buttons. This did not launch an

immediate retaliation. What it did do was send a flash message to our Submarine Commanders at sea.

The message began “The Submarine Effect is activated.”

Three days later our submarine fleet launched a nuclear attack that left most of the planet buried under

the fall-out generated by forty-three hundred warheads. In anticipation of this eventuality, twenty-five

years earlier steps were taken to insure the survival of our way of life.

It began with the construction of New Atlantis seventeen thousand feet below the surface of the Gulf of

Mexico. It continued with the occupation of New Atlantis by our submarine crews. It

will culminate hundreds of years later when they resurface to a world unlike anything you can imagine.

Join the new crew of the Georgana a submarine that has survived its ancient past. They leave the safety

of Quanterra, a city founded by the original inhabitants of New Atlantis; a city of two million, three and a

half miles below the surface of the Gulf of Mexico.

These adventurers will now risk everything in an attempt to reconnect with the surface the birthplace of

their ancestors; a place that, with the passage of time, has mutated into something very lethal.

The Logline

The logline is a one sentence telling of the story and perhaps the most difficult thing to write. The

following is the logline for “The Submarine Effect.”

A highly coordinated attack on the United States, and Canada, has rendered us unable to respond in the

conventional way leaving only our submarine fleet to retaliate, and afterwards to guarantee human

survival.

This will become your “Elevator Pitch” to a literary agent or producer. You only have as long as the

elevator ride last, so to speak, to get and keep their attention.

I have this apocalyptic tale about a highly coordinated attack on the United States, and Canada, that

renders us unable to respond in the conventional way leaving only our submarine fleet to retaliate, and

then afterwards to guarantee human survival.

On the next page is the “Novel/Short Story Structure”. It graphically depicts the layout of the story.


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