Creative Writing Unit 3b

Year 10

What do you think of when you someone

says, “It happened out of

the blue.”

Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts (creative writing) Re-creations. Taking a text and turning it into another

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“Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another ”

Controlled Assessment.

Success Criteria

Band 3 – ‘Clear, Consistent’• Cleat links between sentences;

some discourse markers to create fluency.

• Consistent accuracy with greater range of punctuation.

Band 4 – ‘Confident, Assured’• Phrase and sentence constructions

self-consciously crafted for effect.• full range of punctuation marks

used assuredly and accurately.

Band 5 – ’Sophisticated, Impressive’• High levels of whole text coherence.• Varied and sophisticated sentence

structures used to impressive effect.

Success Criteria

Learning Outcomes

• Identify the success criteria for Producing creative texts.

• Evaluate the best examples of descriptive language and prioritise which are most effective. • Peer assess the work of others.

PROGRESS

English Language Unit 3 (b) Producing creative texts. Controlled Assessment

Learning Objective

LO1: To explore the poem ‘Out of the Blue’ by Simon Armitage. LO2: Develop skills in creative and descriptive writing in preparation for the Controlled Assessment on “Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another ’

Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another

2012/2013 Bank

Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another

1200 words over 2 Controlled Assessments = approx 600 words per CA

What do you think

when you see these images?

This is how it was revealed to the UK on September 11th 2001.

• http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=449l-QO93JU

• http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yacjArDnRbY (Video)

Extract from 'Out of the Blue'

You have picked me out.Through a distant shot of a building burningyou have noticed nowthat a white cotton shirt is twirling, turning. In fact I am waving, waving.Small in the clouds, but waving, waving.Does anyone see asoul worth saving? And when will you come?Do you think you are watching, watchinga man shaking crumbsor pegging out washing? I am trying and trying.The heat behind me is searing, searing,but the white of surrender is not yet flying.I am not at the point of launching, leaving.

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http://www.helpmewithenglish.co.uk/page_2111251.html

A bird goes by.The depth is appalling. Appallingthat others like meshould be wind-milling, wheeling, spiralling, falling. Are your eyes believing,believing?Here in the gillsI am still breathing. But tiring, tiring.Sirens below me are wailing, firing.My arm is numb and my nerves are sagging.Do you see me, my love. I am failing. Flagging.

Out of the Blue• This poem comes, as its title suggests, from the

much longer poem 'Out of the Blue' which Simon Armitage wrote to commemorate the victims of the attack on the World Trade Centre in September 2001 known as 9/11 and the fall of the Twin Towers.

Out of the Blue – Simon Armitage

• Some things that you might like to note about the poem... It is a monologue in four-line stanzas, in the voice of one of the victims of the attack on the World Trade Centre in September 2001 known as 9/11.

• Armitage has imagined himself into the place of one of the people involved, a man who finds himself trapped on the top floors of the burning building, aware of his position, but unable to escape. This situation was one of the ones which most horrified people who watched footage of the attacks--people could be seen waving from windows, looking for help, and yet there was no way to reach them before the towers collapsed.

• The speaker directly addresses us as readers throughout, actually making us feel slightly voyeuristic (ghoulish) in watching this film, and selecting this person to watch: 'you have picked me out / Through a distant shot of a building burning'. In this respect it is interesting in that it deals with a non-combatant (combatant – someone taking part in war), and a victim of conflict, though not a victim of a war, but of a terrorist attack. The speaker's horror and disbelief are powerfully conveyed in the poem, and the extract ends with the dark suggestion that his ability to keep speaking is disappearing 'I am failing, flagging'.

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Annotation of the poem• Pronoun 'you' draws reader's focus• white cotton shirt is the 'uniform' of the average office worker• Man is waving for help, but is in an impossible situation where nobody can reach him,• He asks if anyone sees a soul worth saving, perhaps casting a judgement on his life?• Horrified at the thought that people are helpless to help him but watching him

nonetheless• Wonders if people truly realise the horror of his situation• The heat of the fires behind him drive closer towards death, even though he refuses

to give up and• 'launch' himself into the air.• A bird flies by highlighting his inability to save himself and the appalling height of the

building• He sees other people falling and jumping from the windows• He questions whether or not he is still alive and tries to imagine what others are

thinking as they look at him• He reminds himself that he is still drawing breath• The physical drain of holding on has taken it strain, his arms and grip is failing.• The poem ends on a 'cliffhanger'

Out of the Blue – Simon Armitage

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Before 9/11

After 9/11

Before 9/11

After 9/11

Creative Writing

• What perspective could you recreate this story from?

Unit 3: Part b: Producing creative texts Re-creations : Taking a text and turning it into another

IDEAS TO HELP YOU…

• You could be an onlooker describing the events unfold?

• A reporter

• A victim in the twin towers

• A survivor

• A relative of a victim watching the events on tv etc…

• The child of a victim. You have never met your father /mother etc and wonder what they were like…

• A teenager watching the news as it unfolds on the news in front of your very eyes…

• A doctor with someone telling their last moments….

The list is endless. Pay attention to your writing skills: You will be marked on :

sentences structure, punctuation and grammar, etc..