Frank was a tall skinny boy. He had brown eyes and his hair was also brown. His mouth was quite thin. His nose was long and straight. He had long arms and legs and his feet pointed outwards.

Does this tell us anything about Frank’s character?

Why?

What does it tell us about Frank?

What he looks like.

Do you think it’s a good description?

Frank was always trying to put on weight, he hated being skinny. Sometimes when he looked in the mirror at his curly brown hair tumbling over his collar, his thin lips would curl into a smile and his calm brown eyes would light up. He had a habit of wrinkling up his long slender nose so that it would become as bumpy as a country road. Frank was often teased about the way he walked. Only last week Joseph Felbac had yelled out, “Penguin feet on giraffe legs.” “Least I got legs; stumpy.” Frank had shouted back.

Does this version tell us more about Frank?

What kind of phrases tell us about his character?Which passage is more interesting to read?

He had dirty hands.

Um? Not bad.

He had filthy, dirty hands.

Better!

He had filthy, dirty, grimy hands.

WOW!

She has old hands.They are new.It is creepy.There are bugs everywhere!