Character analysis essay

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  • 1. The Character Analysis Essay

2. The Introduction

  • Hook
  • Mention author and title of work
  • Two to three sentences which discuss Okonkwo generally
  • Thesis statement : indicates that the essay will cover both strengths and weaknesses.

Go 3. The Hook

  • This essay will be about Okonkwo inThings Fall Apartby Chinua Achebe
  • The book is calledThings Fall Apartby Chinua Achebe.
  • In the novel,Things Fall Apart,Chinua Achebe introduces his main character, Okonkwo.

A B C 4. Sentence C

  • In the novel,Things Fall Apart,Chinua Achebe introduces his main character, Okonkwo.
  • This sentence correctly introduces the title, the author and the subject matter. It does not use the purpose statements of the previous examples nor does it use the words essay, topic or paper.

Next 5. 2) Mention two to three Statements about the Character.

  • Okonkwos a really good guy, hes just misunderstood a lot. He is described in many different ways.
  • In spite of his father being a failure, Okonkwo starts working hard and sets goals for himself so he will not end up like his father. He wants to be prosperous and works hard to gain this, but does not always make the best choices.

A B 6. Option A

  • Okonkwos a really good guy, hes just misunderstood a lot. He is described in many different ways.

This sentence is too informal for formal essay writing. It commits acomma spliceand usescontractions.The first sentence is too vague to be specific to Okonkwo (it could be a statement about anyone) and the second sentence also does not help the reader understand more about Okonkwos personality. Back 7. Option B

  • In spite of his father being a failure, Okonkwo starts working hard and sets goals for himself so he will not end up like his father. He wants to be prosperous and works hard to gain this, but does not always make the best choices.

These sentences show a good understanding of Okonkwo in general. They offer general motivation for his actions ( his fathers failure) and hints at his positive qualities . The second sentence does a good job ofhinting at his weaknesses, and thus preparing the reader for the thesis statement. Next 8. 3) Thesis statement

  • He is strong and hardworking, but he is also violent and very impatient.
  • His strengths are that he is strong and hardworking and his weaknesses are that he is violent and very impatient.
  • Ill talk to you about his strengths and weaknesses.

A B C 9. Thesis A

  • He is strong and hardworking, but he is also violent and very impatient.
  • This is a good thesis; it states both strengths and weaknesses and is simple and to the point!

Next 10. The First Body Paragraph : Strengths

  • Topic sentence: both strengths stated
  • Introduce quotation and then insert quotation
  • Explain how quotation supports your point
  • State second strength.
  • Introduce quotation and then insert quotation
  • Explain how quotation supports your point

Go 11. TopicSentence

  • One of his strengths is that he is strong.
  • He has a lot of strengths.
  • Okonkwo is both strong and hardworking.

A B C 12. Topic Sentence A

  • One of his strengths is that he is strong.
  • This topic sentence only states one of the strengths. Because youre talking about two, the topic sentence needs to mention both.

Back 13. Topic Sentence B

  • He has a lot of strengths.
  • This thesis does not actually mention the two strengths. It is too vague to be a strong topic sentence.

Back 14. Topic Sentence C

  • Okonkwo is both strong and hardworking.
  • This topic sentence is perfect; it is short but also mentions both strengths.

Next 15. 2) Introduce quotation and then insert quotation

  • The following quote, he had brought honor to his village by throwing Amalinze the Cat (Achebe 3) proves he is strong.
  • In the book it says, he had brought honor to his village by throwing Amalinze the Cat.
  • While still quite young, he had brought honor to his village by throwing Amalinze the Cat (Achebe 3).

A B C 16. Intro quotation #1

  • The following quote, he had brought honor to his village by throwing Amalinze the Cat (Achebe 3) proves he is strong.
  • It is not good practice to write following quote. It is not a smooth quotation integration. You should also not use the word prove with literature.

Back 17. Intro quotation #2

  • In the book it says, he had brought honor to his village by throwing Amalinze the Cat.
  • First, you should use the word novel, not book. Also, you will notice it doesnt actually refer to anything and is a vague reference. Its also missing the parenthetical reference (last name of author plus page number in parenthesis)

Back 18. Intro quotation #3

  • While still quite young, he had brought honor to his village by throwing Amalinze the Cat (Achebe 3).
  • This is a good introduction to the quotation because it offers context (information about the quotation) and is still a complete thought with the quotation.

Next 19. 3) Explanation

  • A) This quote proves that Okonkwo is strong.
  • B) Okonkwos strength is proved due to the fact that he beat Amalinze.
  • C) Okonkwos ability to beat a famous wrestler at a young age shows how he has great physical strength.

A B C 20. Thesis B

  • His strengths are that he is strong and hardworking and his weaknesses are that he is violent and very impatient.
  • While this is an acceptable thesis, it is needlessly wordy with the words strengths and weaknesses. Good writing is simple.

Back 21. Explanation A

  • This quote proves that Okonkwo is strong.
  • Notice that this explanation does not actually explain why the quotation illustrates Okonkwos strength. The writer leaves it up to the reader to figure out why. The writer also used proves which is not an appropriate term for English ( you can prove a math equation, but not a literary opinion)

Back 22. Explanation B

  • Okonkwos strength is proved due to the fact that he beat Amalinze.
  • While this is slightly better than the first explanation, it does not explain very well; why does beating Amalinze illustrate his strength? Also, the phrase, due to the fact is unnecessarily complicated and should be simpler .

Back 23. Explanation C

  • Okonkwos ability to beat a famous wrestler at a young age shows how he has great physical strength.
  • This explanation points out the context of the quotation and show how it supports Okonkwo is strong. It also avoids seeming repetitive by writing strength instead of strong .

Next 24. Last,

  • 4) State second strength.
  • 5)Introduce quotation and then insert quotation
  • Explain how quotation supports your point
  • After you state the second strength, you repeat the previous process: introduce the quotation, insert the quotation, and explain how the quotation supports your point.

Next 25. Thesis C

  • Ill talk to you about his strengths and weaknesses.
  • This thesis uses first person (never used in formal essays) and does not mention the strengths or weaknesses. It is too informal and sounds as if the writer is chatting with us.

Back 26. Sentence B

  • The book is calledThings Fall Apartby Chinua Achebe.

Like Sentence A, this sentence lacks creativity and imagination. The purpose of the hook is to draw the reader in. This sentence not only incorrectly calls it a book instead of a NOVEL, it does not really help the reader understand what the essay will be about! Back 27. Sentence A

  • This essay will be about Okonkwo inThings Fall Apartby Chinua Achebe

This opening hook is too obvious a purpose statement. It is neitherinteresting nor does it grab the readers attention.The purpose of the hook is to draw the reader in with a thought-provoking idea. Just stating what the essay will do lacks imagination and interest. Back 28. For the Weaknesses,

  • Youd follow the exact same procedure: state both weaknesses, introduce a quotation and then insert the quotation, and then explain it. State the second weakness, introduce the quotation and then insert the quotation, and then explain it.
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29. Notes on the Conclusion

  • For the conclusion, it is always best to avoid I.
  • Many of you put I think______ will happen when you could simply have put _______ will happen because_____. Using I, you or we is not appropriate for formal writing.