Draft 1- Audience Feedback And

Targets By Will, Tom, Josh and Ollie

Feedback •Our feedback of our first draft was to actually

complete the draft and have all the footage, put titles/credits on the OTS and put some sound that matches the OTS shown.

•Improve the lighting so the images you’re trying to record is visible to the audience.

•Use a wider range of shots

•More controlled use of the camera

•Actually have music with the images on screen.

Feedback Continued •Change the location to a location that

your audience can relate to.

•Make it clearer that the killer started off timid and harmless but then becomes harmless and carries a knife to kill the boy who has been bullying him.

•Use some form of make up e.g. blood.

•Film at hours that give you a lot of light so that the footage is well lighted.