Form 5

FIRST ASSESSMENT 2017

An analysis of common errors

PAPER 1

*Based on 5SF and 5SK papers

SECTION A

Who are you writing as?

Concerned ABOUT?

Write to OCPD of YOUR town

Write a FORMAL letter on the rise in the crime rate in Taman

Sena Indah

FORMATAina Solehah bt Amin,No 3 Taman Sena Indah,01000 Kangar,Perlis._________________________________________

OCPDKangar District Police Station 01000 Kangar,Perlis. 12 Mac 2017

F1: writer and receiver’s addressesF2: appropriate salutationF3: appropriate closing

F1 = 0

FORMAT

• INAPPROPRIATE Closing – I want you to settle this problem quickly.

• APPROPRIATE Closing

I hope we can cooperate to deal with this problem

I hope the police will take measurable actionto settle this problem as soon as possible

CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE

x First, many cases of burglary. (STRINGING)

x The burglary was a few cases every night. (INCORRECT VERB)

x Many cases of burglary which a few cases every night. (COMBINED CONTENTS)

Taman Sena Indah was shocked by many cases of burglary since last week.

There were many cases of burglary reported this month.

CONTENTS AND LANGUAGEx Wild parties at night. (STRINGING/SIMPLY

COPYING)x Also, we need for more police patrols. (WORD

DOES NOT FIT IN)

Many residents has reported that there were wild parties at night. In fact, the parties usually end very late at four to five o clock in the morning.

We need more police patrols to ensure the residents’ safety.

There is the need to have more police patrols to work together with the residents.

Besides, I suggest that mobile police vehicles to be sent to monitor the area.

CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE

X It is so sad, you know. Pity the victim. I really angry at the burglars. It was so bad of him. He did not have sympathy.. (TOO EMOTIONAL)

X You know what? If you are the resident here, will you feel comfortable when it is noisy at night? You will help us to settle this problem, rite? (QUESTIONING/ASKING ARE NEVER ALLOWED)

CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE

X SUGGESTION: REPEATED SUGGESTION

- I suggest the police should go aroundthe neighbourhood to monitor the area

police who go around to monitor

= police patrol

CONTENTS AND LANGUAGEX SUGGESTION: IRRELEVANT SUGGESTIONS

-Suggestions that are not related to the police authority

x Parents should send their teenage children to tuition class on weekend and not let them go out and race.

x Teachers should teach the students good manners because it is not good to disturb people.

x The chairman of Taman Sena Indah should make a time table for the residents to take turn in monitoring the area at

night.

CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE

X We have asked them to lower the volume of the music. But they did not listen to us. And I suggest you to come and see with your own eyes

= improper language, informal language

= grammar: never start sentences with AND, BUT

= CORRECTION??

SECTION B

• QUESTION 1

• Describe your dream job

Keyword: job

DO NOT: Just write about the job and keep repeating the same point;

Only few descriptions of the job; the scope of work and too much focusing on feelings

SECTION B

• QUESTION 1

• Describe your dream job

Keyword: job

DO NOT: Just write about the job and keep repeating the same point;

Only few descriptions of the job; the scope of work and too much focusing on feelings

SECTION B

• QUESTION 1

• Describe your dream job

Keyword: job

DO NOT: Start writing with

Everyone/Everybody in this world has a

dream job. Same like me.

So do I.

SECTION B

• QUESTION 1

• Describe your dream job

Keyword: job

Good one: She writes about a specific job (a pastry chef); from how she first decided to

become one, the descriptions of the job, the place, the people, the scope of work and

reasons why she chooses the job

SECTION B

• QUESTION

- A story about your friend who never gives up

- End your story with the given line

NOT

…and I said, “I am proud of you’’. After the day, I am motivated to follow her footstep

and I will make sure…..

SECTION B

• QUESTION 4

- A story about your friend who never gives

up

- Explain the problems/challenges

- Elaborate the struggles/efforts

- - State the name clearly; be

consistent

SECTION B

• QUESTION 4

- A story about your friend who never gives

up

- She never gives up in anything she does.

- She never gives up in searching for her

mother.

- She never gives up in taking care of her

siblings.

SECTION B

• QUESTION 4

- A story about your friend who never gives

up

- She never gives up in anything she does.

- She put all her heart and soul into

searching for her mother .

- She was consistently patient and

responsible in taking care of her siblings.

Common Grammatical Errors

ERROR CORRECTION

more healthier healthier

more easy easier

more happy happier

Common Grammatical Errors

ERROR CORRECTION

The place has a beach

that makes me calm.

There is a beach at the

place that makes me

calm.

The place has not many

people who come.

There are not many

people come to the

place

Common Grammatical Errors

ERROR CORRECTION

You cannot spend too much time

on social networks. We have to

make time for your family too.

You cannot spend too much time

on social networks. You have to

make time for your family too.

We cannot spend too much time

on social networks. We have to

make time for our family too.

We need to be determined to

achieve your dreams.

We need to be determined to

achieve our dreams.

You need to be determined to

achieve your dreams.

Common Grammatical Errors

ERROR CORRECTION

Most youngsters have

their own social

networks such as

facebook, twitter,

instagram and

others/many

others/another.

Most youngsters have

their own social

networks accounts such

as on Facebook, Twitter

and Instagram.

Common Grammatical Errors

ERROR CORRECTION

A shoes A pair of shoes

A shoe

An enemies An enemy

A new friends A new friend

As a teenagers As a teenager

As teenagers

One of the student One of the students

A lots of problems A lot of problems

Lots of problems

Common Grammatical Errors

ERROR CORRECTION

His father was proud

with him.

His father was proud of

him

The teacher was angry

to me.

The teacher was angry

with me.

The teacher was angry

at me.

*angry at

Common Vocabulary Errors / Choice of

word

ERROR CORRECTION

Make revision Do revision

Make an action Take an action

You have to practise to do the

questions.

You have to practise to answer

the questions.

I would like to story about my

successful friend.

I would like to tell about my

successful friend.

I would like to tell a story about

my successful friend.

I very like / I very very love I really like / I extremely love

Common Spelling Errors

ERROR CORRECTION

Succesful

Successful

?

Untill ?

Good morning to our

principle, Pn. Aminah

?

Smilling ?

Peoples ?

Futhermre ?

Dissapointed

Dissappointed

?

Affect vs effect ?

PLEASE..

1. READ the questions extra carefully

2. WRITE the Question No. in your answer sheet

SEE YOU IN YOUR

NEXT WRITING

GOOD LUCK!