Brittany Palmer
How to craft a memorable scholarship essay
Common Application Features
Resume or Activities list Reference letters Transcript Supporting materials Letter and/or essay Poll question
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The Importance of the Essay
Your opportunity Express your voice and personality
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Scholarship Essays are Possible
Length Range from 200 to 1200 Average: 500 words
you One strong essay
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Essay Themes
Extracurricular and Community Work Describe an activity that you are passionate about and why.
Challenges Describe a time you challenged yourself by taking on a task/project
that was beyond your scope and capability at the time. Why did you
do it? What happened?
Leadership and Initiative Describe how your community and school involvement has
contributed to your development as a leader?
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Selecting a Topic
What is something unique about you? What highlights your strength? What makes you stand out as a scholarship candidate?
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Major Themes
Well rounded Demonstrate initiative and leadership Involved in school and community
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Selecting a Topic
What is something unique about you? What highlights your strengths? What makes you stand out as a scholarship candidate? What is your passion?
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The Introduction
Critical component Captivate the reader immediately
#1 item to avoid: Regurgitating the essay question
How to tackle the introduction? Different strategies
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Tell a story
The power of a story: Adds an original and personal element
What story to tell? Important moment in your life
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Example: Important Moment
His gift safely tucked under his arm, the man heads toward the door. He sees the girl: a smile creases his weathered face, one familiar with the touch of time. He extends his hands, enclosing the girl's with his frail fingers as he you." I have never forgotten that man. Nor the others like him I have met over the past eight years through the Feed the Less Fortunate program.
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Tell a story
The power of a story: Adds an original and personal element
What story to tell? Important moment in your life OR Simply transform your topic into a narrative
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Example: Narrative
Instead of saying how you enjoy being in choir, you can say:
A calm settles over me as I step onto the stage. The glow of the spotlight warms me as I look over the darkened audience. Butterflies slowly fade as I raise the microphone and sing the first note. Music is my vehicle for expression that has made an incredible impact on my life.
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Start with a Strong Statement
Begin your essay with an assertive statement Clear and concise Set the stage for a powerful essay
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Example: Strong Statement
I am a dedicated leader. Throughout my high school career I have evolved into a community minded individual with a passion for creating positive change within my school and community.
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Compare and Contrast
Question Discuss an activity that you are passionate about and why
Topic
Being a member of the school football team
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Regurgitating the Question
I am I attend practices where I train and work alongside my teammates. I play in weekly games and enjoy being on the field. Football is something that I am passionate about.
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Telling a Story
I hear the dull roar of the crowd in the background as I sprint down the field. Alert and ready, I feel the adrenaline rush through me and anticipation tingle down my spine. The thunder of cleats echoes behind me as the ball falls into my hands and I focus on my destination. With a final burst of energy, I cross into the end zone: touchdown. This is football and this is my passion.
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Strong Statement
The field is my second home. Football is ingrained into every aspect of my life and has shaped me into the dedicated leader that I am today. Through endless hours of grueling practices, studying play books and building team relationships, my commitment to the sport has transformed into my true passion.
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Two Working Introductions
Can be helpful Alternate as necessary
What to do when asked for a letter?
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The Essay Framework
Reflect on how experiences have impacted your life: 1) What you have learned
2) How you have used those skills in other areas of your life:
positive impacts 1) How you plan to continue to grow with those skills at
your post-‐secondary institution
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Tie it Together: The Conclusion
As important as the introduction Finish strong: leave a lasting impression Reiterate your strengths Reference your future
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Future Reference
I see only potential for growth within myself. By nurturing this through my years at university, I have the utmost confidence that I will cultivate my place in the world and continue to bloom as a community-‐minded individual inspired by the possibilities and devoted to exploring them.
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Future Career Path
Poll question Do not be concerned if you have not decided on your future career Helpful exercise:
Make a list of your top 3 potential fields Brainstorm at least 2 reasons why that career is of interest to you
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Emphasize your Strengths
An essay is no time to be humble Articulate your strengths
Important life skill Use commanding language
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Maintain Balance
While articulating your strengths, be mindful of tone Such a thing as over-‐confidence You do not want to appear arrogant or cocky
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Do your Research
Research the institution/organization Who are they? What is their mission statement?
Brainstorm connections Incorporate this into your conclusion
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Break Down the Question
Break down the essay question
Answer a series of smaller questions first
Structure the questions around the
essay framework
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Breaking Down the Question: Example
Discuss the role education has played in your life:
What does education mean to you in one word?
What are three valuable life skills you have learned?
How have you used these skills in other ways?
How will these skills assist you as you begin your
post-‐secondary journey?
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Edit, Edit, Edit!
Make every sentence count Respect the word count
Constantly ask yourself: How is this relevant?
Pay close attention to grammar and spelling Ask others for feedback
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Multiple Drafts
Embrace the concept of multiple drafts Do not agonize over word choice
Result: frustration and a blank screen
Key: get your thoughts on paper
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Word Choice
Notice that you repeat the same word often? Use resources to expand your vocabulary Utilize online thesaurus or dictionary Longest word best choice
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Make your Essay Work for You
Create a dynamic template
Extract paragraphs so they can stand alone
Certain applications have a series of smaller
questions
For example:
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