Writing Style Final

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Writing Style for Effective

Communication

Mukta Atrey

Project Ekalavya under NMEICT

IIT Bombay

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First impressions!

Clarity of statement

Learning languages through technology

mirrors the sources behind it. The

technological equipments start its teachingwith listening.

Concise sentences (short and meaningful)

Come to the point immediately

(do not repeat ideas)

Avoid verbosity

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Use simple, clear language

Dont InsteadDO

It can be ascertained from the t-test

that the performance of the

randomly-chosen sample in the

experimental group, which wassubject to the treatment, was more

effective in the assessment designed

for the study, than the sample in the

control group.

Students who participated in

collaborative work performed

better on the test than those

who did not. We performed thet-test to determine if the

difference in the two groups

was significant.


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Clarity?

Computers slowly reduce the using of the other

technologies out of date at the tertiary level

especially in technical education. Indirectly it has

made the pupil and the teacher to be addicted touse the technology not only in learning languages

but also enhancing the learning of major subjects

through continuous using of technology. Many

researchers are breaking their brains in introducingnew methods through technology. But using of

technology depends upon the attitude of the

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Sometime(s) this approach may lead to violation of

SLA because it estimate(s) the heuristic cost by using

the waiting time and it give(s) more priority to the

job which is having (has) less heuristic cost. (The)

Main reason here is (that) some job might have less

heuristic cost and it is not the deadline based job ,

(may not have a deadline;) but (however) this job is

given more priority according to this approach. But

some deadline based jobs might have more heuristic

cost which will (may) suffer by starvation due to less

priority over the heuristic cost estimation.

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Abstract: We address to the pro

blem of Privacy Preserving BackPropagation Algorithm for a Vertically Partitioned Dataset. To

enhance cooperations in learning, it is important to address the

privacy concern of each data holder by extending the privacy

preservation notion to original learning algorithms. In this paper,

we focus on preserving the privacy in an important learning model,multilayer neural networks. We present a privacy-preserving

multiparty distributed algorithm ofback propagation which allows

a neural network to be trained without requiring either party to

reveal her data to the others. We provide complete correctness and

security analysis of our algorithms. The effectiveness of our

algorithms is verified by experiments on various real world data

sets.

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Follow grammatical rules

Use of capital letters in the middle of

sentences sometimes leads to unintended

meaning.

As it is evident effective teaching is not

possible without appropriate Aids.

As is evident, effective teaching is not possible

without appropriate learning aids.

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Voice

Use active voice as opposed to the passive

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Dont InsteadDO

The tests were done at three

temperatures

We did the tests at three

temperatures.

It was found that We found that

It can be shown that We show that

It might be noted that this method

only works in the static situation.

We would like to emphasize that

this method only works in the static

situation.

These guidelines were thought to be

valuable because .

We value these guidelines because


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Agreement of singular andplural

Technology helps listening to

play an effective role in the

lives of the pupil. (?)


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Tenses

(Continuous present tense, past tense)

The industrial development of nations in

recent years leads to global warming and other

environmental issues. The problems of globalwarming and energy exhaustion leads to the

use of renewable energy sources such as wind,

solar, tidal etc.

It give(s) more priority to the job which is

having (has) less heuristic cost.

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Tendency to translate from ones mother

tongue into EnglishMany researchers are breaking their brains in

introducing new methods through technology.

But using of technology depends upon theattitude of the users.

Continuing on these researches we could make

the living standards of disabled persons go

high.

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The long sentence

Break up long sentences. The readergets bored if there is too much

information in one sentence and it just

goes on and on.

Use the semi-colon, comma and full stop

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Use of the Apostrophe

Its, its, there, their, theres, theyre

To enhance cooperations in learning, it isimportant to address.

In the possessive case, it is used only for living

entities.The dogs tail, the tables leg

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Some advice

AVOID

Any slang (sms lingo)

Use formal language

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Stringent Proof Reading

Following are the steps in it Contrast

intensification, Smoothing & ImageSharpeningImage Restoration attempts to

restore images.

A fully functional hearts have been alsodeveloped. (This appears in an abstract.)

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Incomplete sentences do not make complete

sense (This sentence no verb.)

The development of a numerical model to

estimate heat transfer coefficient, compare &

analyze the performance of four types of

segment designs of seven segment plasma

torch. The effect of power & mass flow rate on

the heat transfer coefficient is studied.

Some argument about where imageprocessing ends and fields such as image

analysis and computer vision start.

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Use a dictionary. Please!

Similar sounding words which have differentmeanings:

Conform, confirm,

Affect, effect,

Whether, weather

Always use the spell check function in theword processor; U.S English or U.K English?

For example, formalize or formalise?Do not shift from one to another. Stayconsistent.

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Avoid short forms

The reasons for doing this include: highlighting

interesting images& making images more

visually appealing.

The effect of power & mass flow rate on the

heat transfer coefficient is studied.

More examples: Comp. Sc., dept., with ref. to

etc.,

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Common Mistakes

Atleast At least

Allright Alright

Onto On to

Upto Up to

However, into is into!

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Useful resources

The Elements of Style by W. Strunk and E.B. White

The MLA Handbook for Writers of Research Papers and

the MLA Style Manual and Guide to Scholarly Publishing

The Chicago Manual of Style

http://oxforddictionaries.com

http://www.ieee.org/conferences_events/conferences/pu

blishing/templates.html

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/

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Thank You!

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