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Why is the second example more effective than the first?
Many geologists think that the San Andreas Fault is
going to generate an earthquake. This earthquake is
likely to happen sometime in the next 20 years. This
earthquake is likely to be very intense.
Many geologists think that the San Andreas Fault is
going to generate a very intense earthquake sometime in
the next 20 years.
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When you combine short, related sentences and sentence parts into single sentences, your writing will
•flow more smoothly
•clearly show relationships among ideas
•be more interesting to read
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Use the following sentence combining strategies as you revise. Click on the strategy you want to explore.
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•Combine whole sentences
•Combine sentence parts
•Insert words or phrases
•Use an appositive phrase
•Combine with who, which, and that
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Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way.
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Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way.
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How could you combine these sentences using a coordinating conjunction?
Seabiscuit was a small horse. He had the speed of a
much larger animal.
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Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way.
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How could you combine these sentences using a coordinating conjunction?
Seabiscuit was a small horse. He had the speed of a
much larger animal.
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Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way.
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Seabiscuit was a small horse. He had the speed of a
much larger animal.
. He
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Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way.
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Seabiscuit was a small horse had the speed of a
much larger animal.
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Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way.
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Seabiscuit was a small horse had the speed of a
much larger animal.
, but he
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Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way.
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Seabiscuit was a small horse had the speed of a
much larger animal.
, but he
Notice how combining the sentences makes the relationship between the ideas clearer.
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Which of these sentences could be combined using coordinating conjunctions?
My great-grandfather Jorge was born in Zamora. His older
brother was born in Madrid. In those days, families often
had several sons. Only the oldest son inherited the family
fortune.
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Which of these sentences could be combined using coordinating conjunctions?
My great-grandfather Jorge was born in Zamora. His older
brother was born in Madrid. In those days, families often
had several sons. Only the oldest son inherited the
family fortune.
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My great-grandfather Jorge was born in Zamora. His older
brother was born in Madrid. In those days, families often had
several sons. Only the oldest son inherited the family
fortune.
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My great-grandfather Jorge was born in Zamora, and his
older brother was born in Madrid. In those days, families
often had several sons, but only the oldest son inherited the
family fortune.
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Use subordinating conjunctions like these to combine two sentences whose ideas are not equally important. The less important sentence then becomes a subordinate clause.
when
after
before
until
while
since
because
as if
so that
provided whether
if
unless
though
although
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How might these two sentences be combined using a subordinating conjunction?
I tried out for the swim team. I wanted to be like my
grandmother Maria.
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This revision combines the two sentences, making the less important idea the subordinate clause.
I tried out for the swim team. I wanted to be like my
grandmother Maria.
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I tried out for the swim team because I wanted to be like my
grandmother Maria.
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How would you combine these sentences using subordinating conjunctions?
Jorge decided to go to the Philippines. Opportunities were
better there. He didn’t know anyone. He found work right away.
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Notice how much more smoothly the revised sentences flow. Also notice that the relationships between ideas are now clearer.
Jorge decided to go to the Philippines. Opportunities were
better there. He didn’t know anyone. He found work right away.
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Jorge decided to go to the Philippines because opportunities
were better there. Although he didn’t know anyone, he found
work right away.
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Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate.
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Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate.
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How can these sentences be combined by creating a compound subject?
My teammates always laughed at my jokes. The coach
laughed, too.
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Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate.
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Because the students and the coach are both performing the same action, these sentences can easily be combined.
My teammates always laughed at my jokes. The coach
laughed, too.
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My teammates and the coach always laughed at my jokes.
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Which subjects and predicates in these sentences could be combined?
Jorge hoped to meet someone at the dance. Pilar Luisa
hoped to meet someone there too. They met during the first
samba. They have been together ever since.
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Which subjects and predicates in these sentences could be combined?
Jorge hoped to meet someone at the dance. Pilar Luisa
hoped to meet someone there too. They met during the first
samba. They have been together ever since.
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Combining similar subjects and predicates with coordinating conjunctions gives the paragraph a better flow and makes it more interesting to read.
Jorge and Pilar Luisa both hoped to meet someone at the
dance. They met during the first samba and have been
together ever since.
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Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence.
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How could these two sentences be combined?
We stumbled along the path. It was a rough and rocky path.
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Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence.
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How could these two sentences be combined?
We stumbled along the path. It was a rough and rocky path.
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Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence.
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Insert the description of the path into the first sentence.
We stumbled along the path. It was a rough and rocky path. path. It was a
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Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence.
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Insert the description of the path into the first sentence.
We stumbled along the path. It was a rough and rocky path.
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Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence.
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Insert the description of the path into the first sentence.
We stumbled along the path. It warough and rocky path.
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Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence.
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Insert the description of the path into the first sentence.
We stumbled along the pat rough and rocky path.
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Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence.
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Insert the description of the path into the first sentence.
We stumbled along the rough and rocky path.
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In this example, what words could be inserted from one sentence into the other?
The best-known earthquake fault in the United States is in
California. It is the San Andreas Fault.
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The new sentence is now concise and direct.
The best-known earthquake fault in the United States is in
California. It is the San Andreas Fault.
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One of the best-known earthquake faults in the United States
is the San Andreas Fault in California.
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Click to see the word that must change form
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Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly.
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Which word must change form when these sentences are combined?
The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute.
The changes were technical.
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Which word must change form when these sentences are combined?
The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute.
The changes were technical.
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Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly.
Which word must change form when these sentences are combined?
The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute.
The changes were technical.
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Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly.
The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute.
The changes were technical.The changes were technical.
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Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly.
The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute.
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Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly.
The changes to the drawings were challenging to
execute.
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Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly.
The changes to the drawings were challenging
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Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly.
The changes to the drawings were challenging
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technically
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The changes to the drawings were challenging
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technically
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What word in these sentences could change form in order to combine the two sentences?
We loved the marching band. They were from Australia.
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Adding –n to Australia turns it into an adjective which can be used to describe the marching band.
We loved the marching band. They were from Australia. ORIGINAL
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We loved the Australian marching band.
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A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence.
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A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence.
Which phrase in the second sentence could be moved to the first sentence to make a single statement?
The clowns were amusing. They were in the miniature car.
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A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence.
Which phrase in the second sentence could be moved to the first sentence to make a single statement?
The clowns were amusing. They were in the miniature car.
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A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence.
The clowns were amusing. They were in the miniature car.ORIGINAL
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The clowns in the miniature car were amusing.
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What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed?
Detour signs are posted along Route 91. They are posted
every twenty-five miles.
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What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed?
Detour signs are posted along Route 91. They are posted
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What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed?
Detour signs are posted along Route 91. They are posted
every twenty-five miles.
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Detour signs are posted along Route 91. They are posted
every twenty-five miles.every twenty-five miles.
They are posted
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Detour signs are posted along Route 91.
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Detour signs are posted along Route 91.
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Detour signs are posted along Route 91.
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Detour signs are posted along Route 91.
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Detour signs are posted along Route 91.every twenty-five miles
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Detour signs are posted along Route 91.every twenty-five miles
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An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun.
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An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun.
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What is the appositive phrase in this sentence?
A favorite dish in Japan is nori, a seaweed, and rice.
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An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun.
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What is the appositive phrase in this sentence?
A favorite dish in Japan is nori, a seaweed, and rice.
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When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive.
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Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence?
The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battaglia is the grand
marshal of the parade.
When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive.
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When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive.
Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence?
The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battaglia is the grand
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When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive.
Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence?
The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battaglia is the grand
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When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive.
The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battaglia is the grand
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. Battaglia is
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When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive.
The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battaglia is the grand
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When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive.
The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battagli the grand
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When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive.
The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battthe grand
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When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive.
The mayor met with Frank Battaglia the grand marshal
of the parade.
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When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive.
The mayor met with Frank Battaglia, the grand marshal of
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A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that.
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Which sentence could be turned into a clause?
Marie Curie won the Nobel Prize for chemistry. She founded
the Radium Institute.
A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that.
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Which sentence could be turned into a clause?
Marie Curie won the Nobel Prize for chemistry. She founded
the Radium Institute.
A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that.
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A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that.
Marie Curie won the Nobel Prize for chemistry. She founded
the Radium Institute.
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Marie Curie, who founded the Radium Institute, won a
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Which sentences could be combined by using who, which, and that?
Their oldest son Carlos was an outstanding athlete. He
became a champion swimmer. He competed in the Pan
Asian Games. These games were held in Manila. He won
the Silver Cup. It sits on their fireplace mantel.
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Which sentences could be combined by using who, which, and that?
Their oldest son Carlos was an outstanding athlete. He
became a champion swimmer. He competed in the Pan
Asian Games. These games were held in Manila. He won
the Silver Cup. It sits on their fireplace mantel.
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Turning these phrases into clauses makes this paragraph less repetitive and more concise.
Their oldest son Carlos was an outstanding athlete who
became a champion swimmer. He competed in the Pan
Asian Games, which were held in Manila. He won the
Silver cup that sits on their mantel.
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