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Word Choice in Terms of Style, Tone, and Clarity. Tutorial #1: Delete Redundant Material. Redundant material includes words or phrases that repeat ideas in the sentence. The Rule: Delete redundant Words and Phrases. Avoid wordiness. Explanation of Skill. - PowerPoint PPT Presentation
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Word Choice in Terms of Style, Tone, and
Clarity
Tutorial #1: Delete Redundant Material
Redundant material includes words or phrases that repeat ideas in the sentence.
The Rule: Delete redundant Words and Phrases. Avoid wordiness.
Explanation of SkillRedundant Phrase: Mary was alarmingly startled
by the lightening strike.
Concise Sentence: Mary was startled by the lightening strike.
Redundant PairsTerrible tragedyPast historyEach individualFinal outcomePast memoriesTrue facts
Redundant Categories(large) in size(heavy) in weight(period) in time(tall) in height
Abbreviation CategoriesAIDS syndromePIN numberATM machineCD diskAM morningPM afternoon
Incorrect:The football player suffered a harmful injury
during the game. Tom stood in his backyard behind his house.
Correct:The football player suffered and injury during
the game.
Tom stood in his backyard.
ACT Examples
It wasn’t long before the mob had William completely surrounded. It hadn’t gone unnoticed that William had been spending his afternoons outside of the community center.
A. NO CHANGEB. entirely surroundedC. surrounded completelyD. surrounded
ACT ExamplesIt wasn’t long before the mob had William completely surrounded. It hadn’t gone unnoticed that William had been spending his afternoons outside of the community center.
A. NO CHANGEB. entirely surroundedC. surrounded completelyD. surrounded
ACT Examples
In An Ordinary Man, Paul Rusesabagina’s autobiography of his life, Rusesabagina examined the complexities of the Rwandan Genocide and offers commentary on how to prevent future atrocities from happening.
A. NO CHANGEB. autobiographyC. own autobiographyD. autobiography of his own
ACT Examples
In An Ordinary Man, Paul Rusesabagina’s autobiography of his life, Rusesabagina examined the complexities of the Rwandan Genocide and offers commentary on how to prevent future atrocities from happening.
A. NO CHANGEB. autobiographyC. own autobiographyD. autobiography of his own
Obvious RedundancySally went to the store. At the store, she bought
candy, and then she left the store.
Can be changed to:
Sally went to the store, bought candy,
and left.
Subtle RedundancySuzanne wrote a very unique story.
Can be changed to:Suzanne wrote a unique story.
Rewrite this paragraph