Welcome to CAHSEE BOOTCAMP

Week 7

Celebration Time!!!!

Do Now Choose the option that makes the most

sense1. That collection of essays, John wants on

the bottom shelf.A. John wants them, that collection of essaysB. John wants that collection of essaysC. Wanted by John, that collection of essaysD. Leave as is

** Issue is the object word order

Do Now… 2. Walking and to jog and to cycle are

activities many people can enjoyA. To walk, and jogging and cycleB. To walk, to jog, and cyclingC. Walking, Jogging, and cyclingD. Leave as is

** The problem with this question is parallel structure

AGENDA Do Now- (5 Minutes) PPT- Writing Strategies (15) Group Activity #1- (Paragraph Essay) (5-7) Activity #2- Transitions (5-7 ) Group Activity #3-Sentence Variety (10 Minutes) Group Activity #4- Redundant Expressions (10 min) Group Activity #5-Precise language (10 min) Review Exemplary Essay (10 min) Survey/Goals (10 min) Reminders (1 min) If there is time remaining have students complete their

biographical essay (week 6)

Coherence In coherent writing, sentences fit

together and flow in a logical and clear way. The ideas tie together smoothly and clearly, and readers can easily follow along

Factors of Coherent Writing

Appropriate paragraph breaksAppropriate transitionsSentence varietyConcise and precise languageAppropriate verb form

Paragraphs Tell the reader when a new point or new

information is presented. Each paragraph should tell the reader something new and important.

Indent to begin new paragraphs…At the beginning of a storyChanging topicMaking a new pointWhen the speaker changesWhen the place changesWhen time changes

Activity I ( Paragraph Essay) Students will work on pages 5 &6 Students can work independently or

with a partner Prepare to share with the class (5-7 Minutes)

Transitions Readers want to know when changes are coming

or when important points are going to be made.

Words or phrases that serve as bridges from one idea to the next

Without transitions sentences and paragraphs seem choppy

Transition ExamplesTransitions to Compare Transitions to Contrast

AlsoIn the same wayJust as…LikewiseAs in…Here, too,

AlthoughWhileOn the contraryNeverthelessYetUnlike/ HoweverTransitions to Emphasize Transitions to Clarify

IndeedTrulyFor this reasonSimply statedIn factAnother key pointMost importantly

For exampleFor instanceIn other wordsSimply statedTherefore

Transitions…Transitions to add Information

Transitions to Conclude

In additionMoreoverFurthermoreEqually importantAnother factor

FinallyIn summaryIn conclusionLastlyThereforeTransitions to List Information

FirstSecondThirdIn additionAnother factorIn the beginning/end

Activity II (Transitions Exercise) Students will work on page 9 Students can work independently or

with a partner Prepare to share with the class

Sentence Variety Readers become board with words and sentences

that never vary Avoid short, choppy sentences in which the same

pattern is repeated. There are five ways to avoid choppy sentences:

1. Use commas2. Use conjunctions3. Use relative clauses4. Use participles5. Use subordinate clauses

(Activity III)Examples & Practice Complete pages 11-15 as a class Review the examples and complete and

answer all the questions

Complete page 16 (individually)

Concise Writing Avoid redundant words (unnecessary and

repetitive).

Examples: Kind of Sort of Type of Really Basically Actually

Activity IV(Redundant Expressions)

Student will individually complete page 20

Prepare to share with the class

Precise Language Use specific words Avoid using terms such as “nice.” “good,” or

“thing. They make the writing dry and uninteresting.

Example: The man is good. ** How is the man good? Is he

compassionate? Is he generous? Is he equitable?

Activity V (Precise language) Students will complete page 27. Prepare to share with the class.

Example Of Essay Review what a solid essay looks like

(See attachment) Attached to email.

Reminders: (1 min) ELA Cahsee- Tuesday 3/18Math Cahsee- Wednesday 3/19Testing in Advisory classes BOTH DAYS start at 7:45am Study over your notes!Be on time!Late or Absent= won’t take the test (automatic NO PASS!!!)

Escort students to the cave at

10:30am (lunch and shirts)