Warm Up Sentences

Quarter 1 and 2

Warm Up Sentenceswimming desperate to reach the shore a light was seen in the distance

Corrected: 

Swimming desperately to reach the shore, Bob saw a light in the distance. (active vs. passive voice)

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put small dry twigs at the bottom of a fire that makes it easier to start the fire said juan ortiz our counselor

Corrected:

          "Put small, dry twigs at the bottom of a fire to make it easier to start," said Juan Ortiz, our counselor. (appositive)

IF YOU HAVE EITHER A YARDSTICK OR A MEASURING TAPE SAID MR DIXON BRING THEM TOMORROW        

Corrected: 

“If you have either a yardstick or a measuring tape," said Mr. Dixon, "bring it tomorrow."

Other options… “ …” / “ ‘ …’”

Can you believe that Mr. Dixon said, “If you have a yardstick bring it tomorrow”?

(punctuating the entire sentence---quotation is inside)

Sally complained to me, “I can’t believe that Mr. Dixon said, ‘bring it tomorrow.’”

(Sally is quoting Mr. Dixon—single quotation mark inside double)

Tuesday, October 18

Fix this! before them girls may play said coach pasternak they hafta meet the requirements in the manual

Corrected

“Before those girls may play,” said Coach Pasternak, “they have to meet the requirements in the manual.”

Thursday, October 20th

donna did mr ecklund require your class to read the short story flight to freedom bridget asked

       

Corrected

  "Donna, did Mr. Ecklund require your class to read the short story 'Flight to Freedom’?" Bridget asked.

Friday, October 21st

the macaroni and cheese was made by saras mom for the party, the dish was liked by every one at the party

Corrected Sara’s mom made the

macaroni and cheese for the party; everyone liked the dish.

or Everyone at the party liked

the macaroni and cheese dish that Sara’s mom made.

run-ons or fused and comma splice ppt.pps Comma splice— two independent

clauses separated by a comma when a semi-colon, period, or additional coordinating conjunction is needed.

Fused sentence (also known as a “Run on”) two or more independent clauses in a sentence that are not separated by any punctuation, but that should be.

Fix This!

a plaque at riverside park bears this quotation form thoreaus book walden that man is the richest whose pleasures are cheapest

       

Corrected:   A plaque at Riverside Park bears this quotation from Thoreau's book Walden: "That man is the richest whose pleasures are the cheapest."

Use a Colon : After an independent clause that precedes a list.

The use of these punctuation marks often confuses students: comma, semicolon, colon, hyphen, and dash. The Stearns County Theatrical Company announces the opening of the following plays: Lear, May 10th; Death of

a Salesman, June 15th; and Camelot, August 20th. There are three historical sources of belief: reason or intellect, custom or habit,and inspiration.

To separate an explanation, rule, or example from a preceding independent clause. After a sleepless night, the senator made her decision: she would not seek re-election. Music is more than a mechanical arrangement of sounds: it is an expression of deep feeling and ethical values. A way to remember which direction to move the hands of the clock when changing to or from Daylight Savings

Time: spring forward, fall back. After the salutation of a business letter.

Dear Mr. Peterson: Dear Faculty Member:

In the heading of a business memo. TO: SUBJECT:

Between the hour and the minutes. 5:30 p.m. 3:00 a.m.

Between the chapter and the verse in the Bible, in citations for some literary works, and between the volume and the number of some publications. Genesis 1:18-20 Part 3:121 Vol. 2:34

As part of a title. Grey Power: A Practical Survival Handbook for Senior Citizens.

In a bibliography between the place of publication and the name of the publisher. Bloomington, Indiana: Indiana University Press, 1966.

en to use a colon :

Thursday, October 27Warm Up Sentence ---Quiz Today!!! Lesson 4

looking for my assignment it was found that someone sat it under a pile of house beautiful magazines

        

Corrected

Looking for my assignment, I found that someone had set it under a pile of House Beautiful magazines.

Titles and Punctuation Short Stories— “quotation marks” Poems-- “quotation marks” Plays —underline or italicize Movies —underline or italicize Television Programs —underline or italicize Episodes on television “quotation marks” Songs “quotation marks” CDs/Albums —underline or italicize

Wednesday, November 2nd

camping near lake george we went fishing in the lake have taken many hikes and we like to explore in the area

       

Verb Tense and Consistency1. Went fishing past tense2. Have taken many hikes past perfect tense3. Like to explore present tense

Went fishing Went hiking

Went exploring—too many “wents”Fishing, hiking, exploring

Fished, hiked, explored Fish, hike, and explore

Corrected:

  Camping near Lake George, we fished, hiked, and explored the area.

Smiley-face technique? ____________

Quarter 2 Thanksgiving in two weeks

What are YOU thankful for? Don’t end in a preposition!

For what are you thankful? Prepositions: for, in, at, to, of, words that indicate

“position” common prepositions are about, above, across, after, against, along, among,

around, at, before, behind, below, beneath, beside, between, beyond, but, by, despite, down, during, except, for, from, in, inside, into, like, near, of, off, on, onto, out, outside, over, past, since, through, throughout, till, to, toward, under, underneath, until, up, upon, with, within, and without.

Avoid ending with a preposition Where are you at?

Where are you? What suitcase should I use to put my

clothes into? Into what suitcase should I put my clothes?

Warm Up Sentence- #15

he hasnt never showed much self reliance or had growed much from his experiences

       

My Growth as a Writer/Reader/Thinker

When I was ten, I…

Now, I…

Corrected: 

He has never shown much self-reliance or grown much from his experiences.

The dreaded double negative--- Incorrect He can't convince no one to go with him.

Correct He can convince no one to go with him. He can't convince anyone to go with him.

Incorrect I haven't never gone to the circus.

Correct I have never gone to the circus. I haven't ever gone to the circus.

Correct These Please Once he gets going, there isn't nothing

that can stop him. Once he gets going, there isn’t anything

that can stop him.

I've tried to go with him, but I can't hardly keep up.

Warm Up Sentence#16—Nov 11/14

somebody must of lent my brother in laws ladder it weren't in the garage

       

Corrected:

Somebody must have borrowed my brother-in-law's ladder; it wasn't in the garage.

Was the sentence before an example of comma splice or fused?

run-ons or fused and comma splice ppt.pps Comma splice— two independent

clauses separated by a comma when a semi-colon, period, or additional coordinating conjunction is needed.

Fused sentence (also known as a “Run on”) two or more independent clauses in a sentence that are not separated by any punctuation, but that should be.

Warm Up Sentence #17 Nov 15/16

our neighbors left us see pictures of there photo safari in africa they plan to return back there soon

Corrected (wordiness/fused error)Our neighbors let us see pictures of their photo safari in Africa; they plan to return soon.

http://www.chompchomp.com/rules/csfsrules.htm

Anne enjoyed her high school reunion she hadn't seen her old friends in over ten years.

Comma splice? Fragment? Fused? Complete?Anne enjoyed her high school reunion, she hadn't seen her old friends in over ten years. Comma splice? Fragment? Fused? Complete?

Options for CS and Fusion Errors He has completed his research, he will not report

his findings to class today. (CS—incorrect) He has completed his research he will not report his

findings to class today. (FS—incorrect) He has completed his research, so he will report his

findings to class today. He has completed his research, but he will not report

his findings to class today. He has completed his research; he will report his

findings to class today.(All of these are grammatically correct, but context

and purpose dictate which works best.)

The tricky thing to remember is that comma splices and fused sentences can appear in a longer string of sentences with other punctuation. me more examples below.

Comma splice:To get ready for the party, Sharon baked cookies and brownies until she thought her oven would explode, finally, she cleaned the kitchen, satisfied that the goodies would be a hit.

Fused sentence:To get ready for the party, Sharon baked cookies and brownies until she thought her oven would explode finally, she cleaned the kitchen, satisfied that the goodies would be a hit.

Correct grammar:"To get ready for the party, Sharon baked cookies and brownies until she thought her oven would explode. Finally, she cleaned the kitchen, satisfied that the goodies would be a hit."

Warm Up Sentence #18—Nov 17/18

ms ruffalo shouldnt of left mr logan buy that computer she is president of design international

      

Corrected: 

  Ms. Ruffalo, president of Design International, shouldn't have let Mr. Logan buy that computer.

 What is the term between parentheses?

Happy Thanksgiving! Warm Up Sentence #19—Nov 21/22

41 pilgrims signed the mayflower compact which has established a government in plymouth colony

       

Corrected

Forty-one pilgrims signed the Mayflower Compact, which established a government in Plymouth Colony.

Warm Up Sentence #20 11/28/29

pocahontas lived in england for several years she dies and was buried in england

Describe your progress, or lack thereof, that you have had with your search for a college, a job, or a major for the fall of 2012.

Corrected

For several years Pocahontas lived in England, where she died and was buried

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Warm Up Sentence #21

my mother she is the person who you must ask for a copy of the book careers in computers

     

Is it Who? Or Whom?RULE. Use the he/him method to decide which word is correct.

he = who him = whom  

Corrected   My mother is the person whom you must ask for a copy of the book Careers in Computers.

Tom is the one I _____ I will meet.

Ask yourself. Who will you meet?

• Will you meet he?• or will you meet him?

Him sounds better, so choose WHOM

How to Decide?WHO WHOM

he himshe herthey them

(Who or Whom) ____________ wrote the letter?

Did him write the letter? (sounds weird)

Did he write the letter? (sounds ok)

Who wrote the letter? (Correct!)

For who/whom should I vote for president?

Should I vote for he? (nah….doesn’t sound right)

Should I vote for him? (yes, sounds like a plan!)

For whom should I vote for president?

Warm Up Sentence #22

of all my relatives uncle frank is more noted for his generosity he gives everyone the expensivest gifts at christmastime

      

Corrected #22 

Of all my relatives, Uncle Frank is most noted for his generosity; he gives everyone the most expensive gifts at Christmas time.

http://english-zone.com/teach/pdf-files/comparatives.pdf

Comparative (comparing)---more (than the other)

Superlative (assessing as to the best)---most (of all)

Big bigger biggest Jolly jollier jolliest Sweet sweeter sweetest Expensive more expensive most expensive Delicious more deliciousmost delicious(notice anything about the longer words …???)

run-ons or fused and comma splice ppt.pps Comma splice— two independent

clauses separated by a comma when a semi-colon, period, or additional coordinating conjunction is needed.

Fused sentence (also known as a “Run on”) two or more independent clauses in a sentence that are not separated by any punctuation, but that should be.

Describe a time in your life that you were face with a failure or adversity.

How did you respond at first? What was the outcome? How has your outlook on life changed as

a result? Was you proud of how you handled the

situation? Why or why not? What have you learned?

10H—Your Turn to Brag! In the tradition of the Anglo-Saxon BOAST Brag about yourself---Check out writing

prompt #38 in Writing Portfololio

What do WE value now in our culture? As adults? As kids? In high school? In Ashburn?

38.Your Turn to Brag (10H): The brag is a form of exaggerated boasting, reaching back to

the Anglo-Saxon epic Beowulf and flourishing in pioneer days. Read the following brag from a legendary riverboat pilot:

“I’m half wild horse and half alligator and the rest of me is crooked snags and red-hot snappin’ turtle. I can hit like lightning and whip my weight in wildcats. I can outrun, outjump, outshoot, outbrag, outdrink, and outfight, rough-and-tumble, no holds barred, any man on both sides of the river from Pittsburgh to New Orleans and back again. Come on, and see how tough I am!” -- Mike Fink

  

Journal Assignment Write your own brag. Although Mike Fink

limits himself to how tough he is, your abilities will undoubtedly be more varied. How intelligent, creative, talented, powerful, rich, important...are you? Impress me!

Warm Up Sentence #23 (Dec 6/7)   yes before grandmother arrives for the Holidays we finished painting the West Bedroom

Corrected (Dec 6/7)Yes, before Grandmother arrives for the holidays, we will finish painting the west bedroom.

Warm Up Sentence #24 (Dec 7/8)there is many events that have changed my life but my life was changed more by my little stuffed bunny flopsy

       

Corrected

  There are many events that have changed my life, but Flopsy, my little stuffed bunny, changed my life the most.

The Appositive

An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that renames another noun right beside it. The appositive can be a short or long combination of words. Look at these examples:

The insect, a cockroach, is crawling across the kitchen table. The insect, a large cockroach, is crawling across the kitchen

table. The insect, a large cockroach with hairy legs, is crawling across

the kitchen table. The insect, a large, hairy-legged cockroach that has spied my

bowl of oatmeal, is crawling across the kitchen table. Here are more examples:

During the dinner conversation, Clifford, the messiest eater at the table, spewed mashed potatoes like an erupting volcano.

Genette's bedroom desk, the biggest disaster area in the house, is a collection of overdue library books, dirty plates, computer components, old mail, cat hair, and empty potato chip bags.

Reliable, Diane's eleven-year-old beagle, chews holes in the living room carpeting as if he were still a puppy.

Punctuate the appositive correctly.

The important point to remember is that a nonessential appositive is always separated from the rest of the sentence with comma(s).

When the appositive begins the sentence, it looks like this:A hot-tempered tennis player, Robbie charged the umpire and

tried to crack the poor man's skull with a racket. When the appositive interrupts the sentence, it looks like this:Robbie, a hot-tempered tennis player, charged the umpire and

tried to crack the poor man's skull with a racket. And when the appositive ends the sentence, it looks like this:Upset by the bad call, the crowd cheered Robbie, a hot-tempered

tennis player who charged the umpire and tried to crack the poor man's skull with a racket.

Got the blues?

Some suggested formats: Make a list of crazy (and sane) things

you could do to distract yourself from your troubles.

Write about what makes you happy. Write a recipe for a happy day. Draw a funny cartoon that makes you

laugh.

Warm Up #25— Dec 9/12justin was reflecting back on his career in music entertainment and then justin thanks every one who he had been associated with

Corrected

Reflecting on his entertainment career, Justin thanked everyone with whom he had been associated.

Who or Whom? Whoever? Whomever?

One trick: [Isolate the phrase that includes the who/whom]

Ask yourself if the phrase (JUST the phrase) would sound better with the subjective form (he, she, we, they, I) or the objective case (him, her, us, them, me)?

We will be kind to [_ whoever____ knocks on our door.] she knocks; he knocks; we knock

Another: If the sentence itself sounds good without any pronoun, it is generally WHOM

Tom is the student ( whom ) the teachers picked as outstanding.

Test Yourself. Who or whom? Whomever? Whoever?

A prank was pulled on a student {____ I know quite well}.

When the going gets tough,{ _______are you going to call}?* To _______ am I speaking? (switch to sent) {________ we elect for president} will be in

office for the next four years.

*Ghost-busters!!

Warm Up# 26 Dec 12/13

the guidence counseler made a suggestion that seniors who are graduating should submit early applications to the colleges of there choices

(21 wds)

What is a Nominalization? Nominalization – a noun derived from a

verb or adjective, such as determination from determine

In general, try to avoid these and choose the stronger verb form to be concise

Made a suggestion= suggested Should submit early applications= apply

early

Active, strong verbs and adjectives

Analysis AnalyzeSuggestion SuggestConclusionConclude

Carelessness CarelessDifficulty Difficult

Try it… It was the intention of the steering

committee to interview all candidates face to face.

The steering committee intended to interview all candidates personally.

CorrectedThe guidance counselor suggested that graduating seniors should apply early to the colleges of their choice.*

*…their top colleges. (14)*. . . their chosen colleges.

(16 wds) *. . .their preferred colleges.

Warm Up Sentence #27 Dec 15/16

       the corruption of the church during the middle ages is illustrated by chaucer in the pardoners tale who uses allegorical references

Corrected

      Chaucer uses allegorical references to illustrate the corruption of the church during the Middle Ages in the “Pardoner’s Tale.”

(also a good thesis sentence!)

Warm Up # 28—Dec 19/20   wandering around in a daze, and blabbering incoherantly the paramedic made the decision that the motorcycle accident victim is in shock

RevisedThe paramedic decided the motorcycle accident victim, wandering around in a daze and blabbering incoherently, was in shock.

Misplaced (or dangling) ModifiersA.K.A. Dangling/misplaced participial phrases -ing After following the vision program for two weeks,

my doctor told me that my eyesight had improved.

THINK: Who’s? following the vision program? Are you or is the Doc?

Make sure your modifying participial phrase is close to its antecedent

Participle (the –ing word modifying the noun---acts as a modifier---thus, D.M.

Building blocks:   

A participle is an '-ing' word that modifies a noun. Very often, words that end in '-ing' are the present participles of verbs, such as swimming, talking, laughing, and so on. 

A participle can be part of a larger phrase, called a participial phrase, that modifies a noun. 

Quick rules: The participial phrase should be

followed by a comma and then by the noun that's being modified. When singing a tune, I often close my

eyes That noun must be the subject of the main

clause. When the participial phrase does not modify the subject, we say that it is dangling.

When singing a tune, the music is sweetly flowing.

Let's break down Ted's sentence.

After getting kicked off the basketball team, the mall became Jake's new favorite hangout.

As the sentence is written now, the subject of the main clause seems to be 'the mall.' Ted's teacher asked if malls could dribble and shoot (heh heh) because this sentence implies that the mall got kicked off the basketball team.

Correction: Sentences with dangling participles usually require some reworking. Here are two alternatives:

After getting kicked off the basketball team, Jake started hanging out at the mall.

The mall became Jake's new favorite hangout after he got kicked off the basketball team.

http://www.methodist.edu/english/dd_index.htm

Warm Up #29 Dec 21/Jan 3each year americans chop down more then 30,000,000 christmas trees, most of them are just throwed away after the hollidays

RevisedEvery year Americans chop down more than 30 million Christmas trees; most of them are just thrown away after the holidays.

Warm Up #29 Happy New Year!January 3, 2012

each year americans chop down more then 30,000,000 christmas trees, most of them are just throwed away after the hollidays

RevisedEvery year Americans chop down more than 30 million Christmas trees; most of them are just thrown away after the holidays.

Numbers in Writing Don’t begin a sentence with a numeral30 trees were planted in the forest. Individual numerals under 10---WRITE OUTI planted 3 trees. Numbers written out under two syllables ok---

over, use the numeralThe Sierra Club planted thirty five thousand trees.

Trivia: Roman Numerals--- To what does MC refer ? Roman Numerals I = 1 C = 100 V = 5 D = 500 X = 10 M = 1000 L = 50  

Block 1: Review Define: nefarious Which word means sneaky or

unnoticeable?: Discrete or Discreet

Define: Mellifluous

Which word from list seven means to wait in line, or as a noun, means the “line” itself?

More Review Give an example of a nominalization for: analyze. How about for determine? How would you punctuate a movie? Mission

Impossible Where does the period go when you are using

quotations for someone talking? “talking”, or “talking.”

What do we call conversation in a text? What is the difference between a memoir and a

narrative? How many headings are there in an I-Search paper?

Block 4 Mini Review Archetype vs. stereotype? Abhor? Amenable? Cajole? Belie?

Atrophy? Charlatan? Impervious? Garrulous? Forbearance? Extricate? Insolence? Indolence? Euphemism? Ephemeral?

Comitatus? Wergeild? Memoir vs. Autobiography? Annotation?

Comma splice vs. fused? Dangling/misplaced participial phrase? Appositives? Annotation? Capitalization/Punctuation of titles Comparative/Superlative?

Warm Up #30—Happy New Year!January 4, 2012

After visiting Agra the site of the taj mahal with the Morris’s, the photos were fun to look at.       

Corrected

After visiting Agra, the site of the Taj Mahal, with the Morrises, we had fun looking at the photos.

Correcting for appositive, misplaced participial phrase, and preposition placement

Revised 

On their trip to India, the Morrises stopped at Agra, the site of the Taj Mahal.

Possessives

1. Most English nouns form their possessives with an apostrophe s (’s) if they are singular, and an s apostrophe (s’) if they are plural. Singular possessive: The car’s hood. Plural possessive: The cars’ hoods. Remember, just because a possessive adds an s to a word, it does not make that word plural. On the

other hand, both singular and plural nouns can be made possessive. 2. For nouns that form their plural in ways other than the addition of an s, form the possessive

plural by adding ’s. For example: Woman’s/women’s, man’s/men’s, child’s/children’s, ox’s/oxen’s, deer’s/deer’s, mouse’s/mice’s 3. You have a couple of options in forming the possessive of singular nouns that end in s. You

can either: Add an apostrophe to the end of the word:

Jesus’ miracles Keats’ odes Dickens’ novels

…or add an apostrophe s to the end of the word: Jesus’s miracles Keats’s odes Dickens’s novels Choose the form that seems easier to pronounce or more natural. Nouns that end in s and have their

possessives formed by an apostrophe s can be difficult to pronounce; think of Homer’s struggles with his neighbor’s last name: Flandereses’.

More Possessives 4. The possessive of pairs:

a. To show joint possession, add ’s only to the second member of the pair: John and Mary’s mother (John and Mary have the same mother.)

b. To show individual possession, add ’s to each member of the pair: John’s and Mary’s tennis rackets (John and Mary each have their own tennis rackets.) 5. Form the possessive of group and compound nouns by adding ’s to the end of the unit: commander in chief’s, someone else’s, son-in-law’s 6. We usually reserve the ’s or s’ for the possessive of nouns naming living creatures (human

beings and animals). For inanimate objects we usually show possession with the of phrase: The roof of the house instead of The house’s roof Some common exceptions to this rule: A day’s wages, a week’s work, the year’s (storm’s, weekend’s) death toll, the school’s

policies, the government’s meddling, the car’s performance, the ship’s crew

Possessives without an apostrophe The following pronouns show possession without the use of an apostrophe: His Hers

Warm Up #31 Jan 6-B/Jan 9-A

Find SIX Problems:Toms and Jerrys Mother came to the conclusion that the two boys didn’t go to school neither toms nor jerrys lunch had been taken by him.

SIX problems… (one sentence –whew!!)

Capitalization--- his mother and my mother vs. “Mother!” Mother Jones

Nominalization— came to the conclusion = concluded FUSED sentence--- comma and coordinating

conjunction and --- FANBOYS Passive changed to Active----lunch was taken by=

had taken his lunch Agreement--- neither one (of them) took his or

their Possessive for compound subjects--- ‘s for BOTH

subjects if each takes a different object; ‘s for second subject if BOTH have the same object

Key= Cap Nom Poss’s CS/F Act/Pas

Tom and Jerry’s mother concluded that the two boys didn’t go to school, for neither one had taken his lunch.

Possessive for compound subjectsTom and Jerry’s (same mother) mother concluded that the two boys didn’t got to school; neither Tom’s nor Jerry’s lunch (different lunches) was missing.

Warm Up #32 Jan 11/12Tammy is the person who you should call if you need to get your hair cut in my opinion she is the better stylist in Ashburn

Revised

Tammy is the person whom you should call if you need to get your hair cut; she is the best stylist in Ashburn.

whom ; (cs) superlative(in my opinion)---just SAY it!!