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Handicapped people To begin with, I´d like to say that these people are people who have someone (estaria incorrecto mejor some=algún) handicap. Nevertheless, they need always (always need, recuerda! adverbio delante de verbo excepto el caso Del verbo to be) help. They have handicap since that have borned (el participio es born) and their parents care of (for es la preposicion correcta que va con ´care´) them. In Spain, there are a lot of children and adults with handicap, but there are associations which help them. Schools have a teacher for that they can learn a few of maths, science and likewise, that (podemos quitar este that) they can learn to read and to write that is very important for their lives. On the one hand, there are children who are very hard- working and they learnt (learn=aprenden, sin la t) much whereas, there are others that don´t learnt nothing. These children are very loving. Besides, there are adults who can realise (=darse cuenta) (mejor ponemos do a job) for if alone (=por ellos mismos, for themselves) and, this is very successful for them due to, they needn´t anybody for their future. On the other hand, there are people that make fun of them for their handicap (people that make fun of their handicap MEJOR) therefore, we must help these people not only for their handicap but also for that they could (MEJOR can=puedan) live as a normal person. To put it in a nutshell, we must help these handicapped people for that they have a better life. CORRECCIÓN (Los errores cometidos están señalados en rojo y encontráis la corrección entre paréntesis)

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Handicapped people

To begin with, I´d like to say that these people are people who have someone (estaria incorrecto mejor some=algún) handicap. Nevertheless, they need always (always need, recuerda! adverbio delante de verbo excepto el caso Del verbo to be) help. They have handicap since that have borned (el participio es born) and their parents care of (for es la preposicion correcta que va con ´care´) them.

In Spain, there are a lot of children and adults with handicap, but there are associations which help them. Schools have a teacher for that they can learn a few of maths, science and likewise, that (podemos quitar este that) they can learn to read and to write that is very important for their lives.On the one hand, there are children who are very hard-working and they learnt (learn=aprenden, sin la t) much whereas, there are others that don´t learnt nothing. These children are very loving. Besides, there are adults who can realise (=darse cuenta)(mejor ponemos do a job) for if alone (=por ellos mismos, for themselves) and, this is very successful for them due to, they needn´t anybody for their future.On the other hand, there are people that make fun of them for their handicap (people that make fun of their handicap MEJOR) therefore, we must help these people not only for their handicap but also for that they could (MEJOR can=puedan) live as a normal person.

To put it in a nutshell, we must help these handicapped people for that they have a better life.

CORRECCIÓN

(Los errores cometidos están señalados en rojo y encontráis la corrección entre paréntesis)

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PERO:

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BIEN.- FRASES SIMPLES Y CORTAS.