Treament on the Feliz 2

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Jonny Sharples

The Writers Treatment, the Step Outline & Other Pre

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The Lady on The

Los Feliz


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The Lady on The Los Feliz

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The Treatment

Act One: Introduce Problem

Scene 1

Ext. Los Feliz Blvd Night,

Opening Shot Camera fades and we see a road sign Los Feliz Blvd

[Dialogue Dorian Narrating]. The camera pans down as we glance at Dorian

walking down a dark street from an elevated position just under the sign.

Tracking Dorian as he enters the building on his left (cameras right); the

camera turns to face the building and climbs until reaching a window [Steps

can be heard]. As we gaze in from the window; Dorian enters from a door on

the left which has Dt. Dayle written upon it.

Int. Dorian Office - Night,

Camera cuts fully body shot as Dorian walking around his desk in the centre

and sitting down as his chair. The camera goes to close up as Dorian picks

up a case file upon the desk. [No sooner the sound of high heels can be

heard] Dorian turns to face the window. Camera cuts to an over the shoulder

view as we look to see a woman walking in and out of the light which beats

down on the side walk. As she comes into the light for the final time the

camera cuts to a close up as she slowly turns towards camera her eyes

looking up at Dorian (off camera). Dorian sees her looking and walks out of

sight into the shadows of his room. Once again we get a close-up of Mave as

she brushes her hair behind her ear. She smiles and turns back to the

sidewalk. Final shot of is mid-shot as Dorian leans on the sill from the

shadows as he tries to peer and see her walk away.

Scene 2

Int. Cafe Midday,

The Cafe is dimly lit as we see a pan shot of Dorian reading a

broadsheet; a hot cup of coffee beside him. The camera goes to a mid

shot of Dorian [as high heels are heard again] dropping his paper he

looks to his right through the window as the figure of Mave walks

past. The camera takes an off centred position to the right as sunblinds the view of the environment inside leaving it white. As Mave

walks across the window she get mid-way before she stops as she

sense eyes staring. Turning, there are a bright light flashes and

blinds Dorians view of Mave before white noise takes over as the

scene transition to a static shot of Mave beaten face appears for a

second before white noise takes us to the next transition.

Scene 3

Ext. Los Feliz Blvd Night

After the transition, the camera fades in to a behind full-body shot

of Dorian silhouette standing under a street lamp; lighting his

cigar. A cab comes in to screen from the right as he pulls off the


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lamppost and stick his arm out hailing for the cab. The rain is

hitting the street hard bouncing up as the cab screeches to stop. As

Dorian moves towards the cab the camera cuts to a close-up of his

hand reaching for the handle of the cab. Suddenly a voice is heard

from behind. The camera has a close-up of Dorian face; he stands up

and turns to face the voice. The camera zooms in as Mave looks

towards him with drenched hair and a magnificent smile. [The

converse briefly] as the camera pans back to a full shot of the taxi

we see Dorian opens the back door and makes way for Mave to enter

before swinging round the other side and getting in.

Scene 4

Int. Taxi Late Night

The pair converse at an intimate position from one another as we see

from a mid-shot of the back seat. They appear to get closer as againMave pulls her hair behind her eye once again. The intimacy gets

frustrating, as they begin to whisper as their lips get closer.

Ext. Street Late Night

Camera sits on the street floor as the car comes into scene and

screeches to a halt with the front wheel skidding nicely into shot.

Int. Taxi Late Night

Camera goes back to mid shot of the back seat as both characters

correct themselves after being hurled forward. Dorian now showing a

facade of anger pulls himself towards the divide as the camera cutsto an over shoulder shot of Dorian. As he goes to converse a dark

figure turns and hits him with an object in a similar shape to a

guns handle. Dorian falls to the floor as the camera remains at the

same position. This time the figure retracts his arm [Mave can be

heard screaming] and moves into the light and for the first time we

see Sammy. His torso in the shadow we see him lift and point his arm

out once again through a hole in the divide. The camera zooms in on

what appear to be the silhouette of Sammy holding a gun. The scene

fades out to next transition

Act Two

Scene 5

Int. Taxi Morning

The scene fades in as we look over Dorian as we see him stir a wake.

The camera cuts to position on the backseat as Dorian rise and we

see a side shot of him. Fury present in his features. Dorian looks

around to find a dim light abandoned taxi [followed by the sound of

him grunting] he lifts him arm and reaches of screen [sound of door

handle opening] as he goes to lift himself out the cab the sun

invades and bleaches out the screen followed by static. A second

image appears of Mave lying motionless on the floor beside the sofa

in nothing more that bra and panties. Several puncture wounds are

visible as the scene is cut short by white static.


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Scene 6

Ext. 6th Floor of Los Feliz Apartment Block 1 (Sammys Home) Late

Night

White static open the scene as we look from behind as we track the

silhouette of Sammy walking down the corridor. Only to be lit by the

lightning coming through the windows on his right. As he nears his

apartment he turns to the left and we cut to a close up of Sammy

hand going towards the lock with his key before noticing the door

ajar. The camera swings up with vicious pace as we look from beside

Sammy face. A flash of lightning shows Dorian face as he grabs

Sammy. The camera cuts down the hall to down the hallway as we see

Sammy slung into his apartment. [Sounds of a struggle can be heard,

followed by punching] Finally Dorian and Sammy emerge back in the

hallway Dorian gripping him with two hands slamming him against the

wall. [Dorian screams a question at Sammy] The Scene fades out.

Scene 7

Ext. Alley Late night

The image of a door appears as from the fade in. The words crimson

can be seen. We look upon from a downward position as a leg appears

flying from stage left. It flings the door back with force leaving

the abyss behind it. The clip fades once more.

Int. Gang Hideout Late Night

We fade in to see an over head shot of Dorian coming out of thestairwell. His gun raised, he comes out in to the opening, static

disrupts for a millisecond; pivoting left we follow. Dorian drops

his gun as before him he sees Mave bound to a chair under a light.

The scene disrupted by static but continues as Mave showing her

weakness, bring up her head to see the figure in front. [We hear

Mave exclaim Dorians name in hope]. Static disrupts again for a bit

longer as [the sound of a phone ringing can be heard]. Dorian looks

to rush towards Mave as Static takes over and is replaced by white

noise [however the ringing remains] White noise takes over.

Act 03

Scene 8

Int. Living Room Late night

We begin totrack back from the white noise as we appear topass

through a transparent barrier. As we continue we see a black matte

border encircle the white noise which seconds later we gather it is

a TV set [meanwhile the ring has come to a stop and we hear two

voices conversing one crackling as it from the phone the other

clear]. As we see ourselves in a dark room which gradually as we

track further band from the TV becomes more visible as the light

fades away. The camera will reach mid way when it will slop upwards


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and we see Mave on a big poster above the TV and as the distance

between TV and the camera increase other posters littering the wall

appear. [Meanwhile we engage with the fact Dorian is being spoken

too by Sammy on the phone making arrangements]. Finally the camerapans back enough to see the silhouette of Dorian watching the TV

screen. He hangs up the phone and places it on the table on his

right. Finally his head drops as the camera fades. The image re-

appears with a close-up of the Mave poster above the TV. A sudden

flash [followed by gunshot heard] as we see the bullet makes contact

with the image of Mave just right of her rib cage. As we zoom slowly

in we begin to see trickling of liquid before a nice flow of blood

comes from the poster before the white static cuts the clip.


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The Step Outline

Act One: Introduce Problem

Protagonist sees the female for the first time in the street and isbewildered by her looks.

He sees her again as she passes by the window of the cafe.

Dorian halls for a cab and sees again Mave inside. They converse

before Dorian enters.

The car comes to a harsh stop as they continue talking. But as

Dorian goes to enquire hes knocked unconscious by the Driver

Sammy Jones.

Act Two: Fighting The Problem

Dorian regains consciousness and peers around the cab. Noticing hes

alone he lives the cab

Dorian tussles with Sammy in alley and knock him unconscious.

Dorian smashes through the door in the alley and walks in.

Entering the gangs hideout, Dorian peered down the room and sees

Mave tide up behind a small group of the gang. Mave cries out

Dorian.

Act Three: Twist ending

The image turns to white noise and we peel away to see weve been

watching the TV in a littered room.

We hear a conversation between Dorian and Sammy negotiating an event

that night.

We then see the entire room as we pan back and see Dorians

silhouette in an army chair looking glum.

Audience focus on poster above TV, suddenly flashing as a gun goes

off and blood sprays across the poster.

The camera pans back to see a different room with a body lay on the

floor and a shadow figure walk out the door.

The Premise

Story of a Detective, who faces his corrupt lifestyle which destroys

his dream film noir career when the women he loves, dies because of

him.

The Logline

Story of a Detective, whose dream to be like detectives, in film

noir is trampled on his corrupt lifestyle causing the death of his


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damsel in distress. Thus leaving him to solve the crime and put his

bad past behind him and be that perfect detective he dreams about.


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Character Biographies

The

Initiate

Name Samuel Jones

Height 6ft 2

Age 18

Back story Sammy Jones grew in the neighbourhood at the end ofLos Feliz Blvd and had been accustomed to crime from

an early age. This became an influence on his life as

he began to hang with gang member whilst at school

and at home. However when trying to initiate into the

local gang (The White Fences Whom would later join

part of Latin Kings) he wasnt excepted to due to his

colour even though his mother was from south American

origins. In result by the time he was 16 he was

isolated at his school and received a beating by the

gang 20yds from his house. This was a nearly the end

from SJ but lucky for him a Crip gang where riding by

and saw the white fence beating a fellow African

American.

The gang where shot down in an improvised drive-by

and SJ was escorted to the car and driven to the

nearby set safe house. His allegiance to the Crips

grew as he began to hang with the member at school

and saw himself accepted into the group. But as a

child he remained not a member until he came of age.

However it was a month after his 17th birthday when he

watched the awful image of his mother being mowed

down by a drive-by. At first it appeared to be

another gang but after an investigation began it

appeared to be that of the White fences.

In conclusion, SJ began to commit crimes against

South Americans; be it steals from a shop or beating

on locals walking home. In result his racial hate

grew and his ambition to be part of the cribs grew.

By the time it came to his 18th SJ was ready to become

a fully fledged crib and to locals had became known

as Diablo Muerte (- Devils Death or DD for Short).

As standard this began his initiate progress but for

his reputation the (Now known) Crimson had set him a

bigger task this one would be a famous actor of Latin

background.

Affiliations SJ, Sammy, Diablo Muerte, DD


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The Dame

Name Maryese Moreau

Height 5ft 7

Age 23

Back story Maryese had dreamed about becoming a model. Butreceived much rejection at the start of her career.

She instead for the time found work in a local

fashion shop and worked on her figure which due to

numerous rejection and comments by people within the

industry became her obsession. By the time she was 19

see became the ideal woman, the fashion industry icon

but at a huge price. Maryese had become bulimic;

vomiting after every meal, she became prone to

fainting but pushed passed health issues as she loved

the attention her body had given to her.

The obsession became curse, as much as it was a gift

to her. She remained ill most of the time suffering

from starvation. Her personality out of the limelight

became vacant and impassive; rendering her to, the

nickname of Sad Beautyto her friends as they watch

her old self deteriorate to a fashion zombie.

As her modelling career spiralled in legendary status

she was given by her agency, a mansion on the top end

of Los Feliz which she moved into from her home town

in Florida. This gave her more Job opportunity but

most of all entered her into the world of acting. By

the next summer she had starred in her first feature

film and brought her more fame and financial backing.

As the money came in, she used it to help the less

fortunate; setting up foundations and charities

across the states of America. Her work helping lower

youth unemployment and crimes nationwide. Her name

soon became The American Dream but to many she became

The American Saviour. With this came stalkers and

other psychopaths whom would send e-mails and letters

to her. Many of which mentioned her beauty andalthough they frightened her they made her happy

because of this. No sooner her obsession turned to

OCD as she became focused on nothing more than

maintaining her voluptuous body to get more praise

and in some terms stalker mail.

By the time she was 23 she was national icon and a

woman adored by the nation. Idolized by the women and

romanticised by men. She represented the best of

America but as the recession hit. Accolades meant

nothing as Maryese was about to find out.

Affiliations Sad Beauty, The American Dream, The American Saviour,Nations Princess


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The

Detective

Name Dorian Dayle

Height 6ft 5

Age 27

Back story Dorian past was full of accolades, from a young age heexcelled in school and he was awarded special

recognition for his extracurricular activities in

school. Playing the basketball team and American

football during his free time.

By the end of high school, he looked towards a career

in law, whilst still maintaining his physical abilities

running track for his college Yale. During his time

there he fell in love with Film Noir. Idolizing the

likes of Sam Spade (The Maltese Falcon), Philip Marlowe

(Murder, My Sweet) and Mark McPherson (Laura), whom

became influential as the first semester, came to a

close. Before his second his ambition had changed and

his work in law had shown so much corruption that he

came out and entered in to a Police academy. By his 23rd

birthday he graduated from the academy but due to his

knowledge and quick initiative during his final police

trials he was promoted immediately to detective.

During his career as a Dt. He became notorious to gangs

as he fished out cells one by one. Taking out big hits

which previously seemed untouchable. He became infamous

as The Cripplerto Crips and The Vampire to the Bloods.

As his legacy continued, his fame gained between the

Los Angeles community and infamy between gangs.

When the recession hit an all time low, things changed

as gangs came into power over local enforcement. The

Crips and Bloods especially had become a joint gang

which profited more than ever from their joint drug

ventures and as a collaborative force known as The

Crimson they began to run the streets. Organizing

themselves into stronger cells with different agendas

making it implausible for anyone to bring them down.

For Dorian this became a big hit as all cases went cold

and his great name in the community was dragged through

the dirt. By the first year of the depression he became

impatient with his failure to bring justice.

It was on a small gun crime charge turned his world

upside down as a Crimson Lieutenant was cornered down

an alley by Dorian. Before the arrest took place the

Lieutenant tried to bribe Dorian. As his mind tossed

over his choice he became aware of his possibility to

become a legend once again. Taking the bribe he told


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the Lieutenant to contact him once more to discuss an

agreement. By the end of the week Dorian had made a

pact with the Gang, As they made transaction with each

other to supply their needs. Dorian would pay off

members to stop crimes in certain areas or a planned

hit. Whilst he would take money for initiations. When a

gang recruit would kill a person to gain entry to the

gang, he would pull cops from that area giving them

false evidence of a crime on the other side of town.

With this he became the man of the hour once again and

he felt that during this time he became another hero of

the recession.

Affiliations Dt. Dayle, The Crippler, The Vampire

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