FeedbackQuality of written expression The accuracy of your writing is improving (spelling, punctuation, grammar) – keep it up Your vocabulary choices were pleasingly varied Well done for making an effort to use a range of different sentence forms

Quality of narratives You have so many great ideas – very genuinely, I enjoyed reading your narratives You were able to connect your ideas clearly I really like the way that some of your stories placed the reader at the centre of the action right

from the start You were able to create a range of realistic and engaging characters I was impressed by how varied your stories were and by how seriously you took the task

TakeawaysSome things to keep in mind Keep reading widely: it’s the single most effective way of improving your writing (and it’ll make

you smarter) Keep proof-reading: do it at least twice before putting your pen down Continue to experiment with the structure of your sentences: try starting a sentence with an

adverb (e.g. slowly, she…) Be adventurous with your similes: even seemingly unlikely comparisons can work (e.g. he smiled

and his face was like the sun...) Don’t neglect planning: it’s far easier to write something really decent if you think about what

you want to achieve first

Example

Norwegian Wood, by Haruki Murakami