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Sound Words: One Wayto Start a Story
Credits:Kathy LivingstonMt. View Elementary, Broomfield, [email protected] Created: 3/21/2002 6:29:31 PM EST
VITAL INFORMATIONSubject Matter:Elementary, Writing
Grades:2
Software Application:StarOffice Writer
LESSON DESCRIPTIONSummary:Students will be given a blown-up balloon with a small piece of paper inside. Thepaper will have a sound word, such as "Bang!" or Pitter, patter" on it. The studentswill use their sound word to begin a new story. After finishing the story, they mayexplore ways to emphasize the sound word by underlining it, making it bold,changing the font, size or color, just as the authors of published books mightemphasize a word.
State & National Standards:
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CO- Colorado Academic Standards• Subject : Reading and Writing• Standard 2: Students write and speak for a variety of purposes and audiencesWriting and speaking are essential tools for learning, for success in the workplace,and for responsible citizenship. Developing a range of writing and speaking abilitiesrequires extensive study, practice, and thinking. Students need frequentopportunities to write and speak for different audiences and purposes, and they needto be able to communicate expressively, informatively, and analytically. Growth inwriting and speaking abilities occurs by applying skills to increasingly challengingcommunication tasks• Grade/Level : CO- Colorado Academic Standards• Grade/Level : Grades K-4 Performance Indicator : generating topics and developing ideas for a variety ofwriting and speaking purposes (for example, telling a story, publishing a classnewsletter, writing a letter to an adult, writing or orally presenting a book report,creating and producing a play, introducing a speaker or an event, narrating apresentation); Performance Indicator : organizing their speaking and writing Performance Indicator : choosing vocabulary that communicates their messagesclearly and precisely Performance Indicator : revising and editing speech and writing Performance Indicator : creating readable documents with legible handwriting orword processing at the appropriate time• Standard 3: Students write and speakusing conventional grammar, usage, sentence structure, punctuation, capitalization,and spellingStudents need to know and be able to use standard English. Proficiency in thisstandard plays an important role in how the writer or speaker is understood andperceived. All skills in this standard are reinforced and practiced at all grade levelsand should be monitored by both the teacher and student to develop lifelong learningskills• Grade/Level : CO- Colorado Academic Standards• Grade/Level : Grades K-4 Performance Indicator : knowing and using correct capitalization, punctuation,and abbreviations
Local Standards:Adams 12 Technology Skills Continuum Standard #1:Demonstrates the ability to select the appropriate technological tool.- Begins using text-driven menus and tool bars.- Practices using a variety of tools and begins to evaluate their effectiveness foraccomplishing the task.
Standard #2: Students use technology tools to enhance learning, increaseproductivity, and promote creativity.- Uses special function keys such as: tab, number pad keys, keyboard shortcuts, alt,control and symbols ($, #, %, etc.).- Edits text by using select /deselect, cut/copy/paste, delete, and undo.- Places the cursor at a specific location.- Changes character formatting such as: font, font size, and font style (B, I, U).
Lesson Outcomes:
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As we work on the Six Traits Writing curriculum, this lesson emphasizes the trait oforganization. Through this lesson, students will practice one way to begin a story in amanner which should "hook" their readers right from the start. Other "hooks" wehave talked about include starting with an exclamatory sentence, a question, andeven a warning.
Assessment:This lesson is designed as a practice lesson, and will not have a formal assessment.However, students will be encouraged to use the Organization sections of theattached writing rubric to edit their story beginnings.
Assessment/Rubrics:Rubrics:6 Traits Word Choice
CLASSROOM & TIME MANAGEMENTStudent Prerequisites:Students have discussed a few ways one might plan a story before writing. We havelooked at numerous books and shared how the authors have started their stories.
Lesson Preparation:Gather age-appropriate and interesting books to lead discussions on storybeginnings. Books we read aloud to introduce "sound words" concept include:"Wheels on the Bus," by Raffi"Splash, Splash," by Jeff Sheppard"Possum in the House," by Kiersten Jensen"THUMP, THUMP, Rat-a-Tat-Tat," by Gene Baer
Time Frame:2 class periods. 45 Min. per class.
Implementation Steps:1. We read several stories in which the authors used sounds to emphasize portionsof their stories, and discussed how this could be a powerful way to "hook" a readerinto reading on to learn what event might have caused such a sound. (See list ofstories under Lesson Preparation.)
2. I gave each student a balloon with a piece of paper inside on which I had writtenone of the sound words. Students safely popped the balloon (guidelines were givenabout safe behavior for this activity) and read the word inside.
3. Using the word they were given, students planned a story they could write.Students were allowed to trade words for one that might provide them with a betterstory idea.
4.I explained to students that this activity was designed to get a story started. I donot necessarily expect all to complete the story in two class periods. Later, when wework on endings, they may come back and finish this story. I also read them threeor four story beginnings that I had written (see examples under Lesson Resources.)
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5. In the computer lab, students began to write their story beginnings, using thesound word they had been given. They typed their story directly on the computer,not from a hand-written paper.
6. During the second session in the lab, students completed their story beginningsand learned how to change fonts, size, color and style. Once the story beginningswere edited and saved, students printed their story beginnings.
7. The final activity for this lesson was reading and displaying the stories in class.Students discussed the products and provided the authors with feedback.
RESOURCESLesson Resources:Attached are two files. Teacher Examples is a page of several sample story starters.The Sample Sound List was distributed to students before they began this lesson, togive them some possible ideas.Attachments: 1. Teacher Examples 2. Sample List of Sound Words
STUDENT PRODUCT(S)Product(s) Description:Attached are examples of three story beginnings by my second graders.Attachments: 1. Crack! 2. Buzz! 3. Zap!
REFLECTIONComments:While emphasizing story beginnings that "hook" the reader, the students were reallyhooked themselves by the balloon activity. Some of my students who rarely producequality written stories were thrilled with this lesson, and it was reflected in theirstories. (Hint about the balloons: use a bicycle pump to blow them up, and buycheap balloons because they pop more easily.)
Teacher Models for Story Starters
"Smash!"The two little boys huddles closer together in the
center of the tent, their eyes wide. It was as if they werefrozen. They couldn't move!
"Screech!"The teacher's nails accidentally scraped the chalkboard
as she wrote.
Pitter, patter!That busy squirrel had been running back and forth on
the treehouse's wooden roof for hours. He was on amission! Winter was coming, he could feel it.
Errrch!The car skidded to a sudden stop! "What on earth was
it?" cried Elaine. She wished she had stayed on the mainhighway.
Drip, drip, drip..The rain continued to fall steadily, drumming against
Jenny's window. She liked the sound it made. It made herfeel relaxed.
Sound Words for Story Starters
Crash! Smash! Drip, drip, drip...Bang! Woosh! Smack!Boom! Pow! Ding, dongPssst.... Crack! Shhh...Ouch! Kaboom! Thump!Zap! Blast! Whee!Beep, beep! Tear! Ha, ha, ha!Splat! Rip! Pow!Buzz... Crunch! Pitter-patterWham! Swish, swish... Zoom!
Nicole
Crack! I woke up startled ! What was that? Mymom was crashing in the kitchen? WhoWho?
Mom was saying “Go to sleep”. “But mom” Iscreamed . There’s a monster in my bed!Oh crack pop crack pop . You ate me, youwill pay. "Ann, where are you?" My dogwas just licking me.
6 + 1 Traitsof Analytic Writing Assessment Scoring Guide
(Rubric)
i IDEASi ORGANIZATIONi VOICEi WORD CHOICEi SENTENCE FLUENCYi CONVENTIONSi PRESENTATION
WOW!Exceeds expectations
°° STRONG:shows control and skill in this trait;many strengths present
¯̄ COMPETENT:on balance, the strengths outweigh theweaknesses; a small amount of revision isneeded
®® DEVELOPING:strengths and need for revision are aboutequal; about half-way home
EMERGING:need for revision outweighs strengths;isolated moments hint at what the writer hasin mind
¬¬ NOT YET:a bare beginning; writer not yet showing anycontrol
IDEAS AND CONTENT(Development)
5 This paper is clear and focused. It holds the reader's attention.Relevant anecdotes and details enrich the central theme.A. The topic is narrow and manageable.B. Relevant, telling, quality details give the reader important information that goes beyond the
obvious or predictable.C. Reasonably accurate details are present to support the main ideas.D. The writer seems to be writing from knowledge or experience; the ideas are fresh and
original.E. The reader’s questions are anticipated and answered.F. Insight—an understanding of life and a knack for picking out what is significant—is an
indicator of high level performance, though not required.
3 The writer is beginning to define the topic, even though developmentis still basic or general.A. The topic is fairly broad; however, you can see where the writer is headed.B. Support is attempted, but doesn't go far enough yet in fleshing out the key issues or story
line.C. Ideas are reasonably clear, though they may not be detailed, personalized, accurate, or
expanded enough to show indepth understanding or a strong sense of purpose.D. The writer seems to be drawing on knowledge or experience, but has difficulty going from
general observations to specifics.E. The reader is left with questions. More information is needed to "fill in the blanks."F. The writer generally stays on the topic but does not develop a clear theme. The writer has
not yet focused the topic past the obvious.
1 As yet, the paper has no clear sense of purpose or central theme. Toextract meaning from the text, the reader must make inferencesbased on sketchy or missing details. The writing reflects more thanone of these problems:A. The writer is still in search of a topic, brainstorming, or has not yet decided what the main
idea of the piece will be.B. Information is limited or unclear or the length is not adequate for development.C. The idea is a simple restatement of the topic or an answer to the question with little or no
attention to detail.D. The writer has not begun to define the topic in a meaningful, personal way.E. Everything seems as important as everything else; the reader has a hard time sifting out
what is important.F. The text may be repetitious, or may read like a collection of disconnected, random
thoughts with no discernable point.
ORGANIZATION5 The organization enhances and showcases the central idea
or theme. The order, structure, or presentation ofinformation is compelling and moves the reader throughthe text.A. An inviting introduction draws the reader in; a satisfying conclusion leaves
the reader with a sense of closure and resolution.B. Thoughtful transitions clearly show how ideas connect.C. Details seem to fit where they're placed; sequencing is logical and effective.D. Pacing is well controlled; the writer knows when to slow down and elaborate,
and when to pick up the pace and move on.E. The title, if desired, is original and captures the central theme of the piece.F. Organization flows so smoothly the reader hardly thinks about it; the choice of
structure matches the purpose and audience.
3 The organizational structure is strong enough to move thereader through the text without too much confusion.A. The paper has a recognizable introduction and conclusion. The introduction
may not create a strong sense of anticipation; the conclusion may not tie up allloose ends.
B. Transitions often work well; at other times, connections between ideas arefuzzy.
C. Sequencing shows some logic, but not under control enough that it consistentlysupports the ideas. In fact, sometimes it is so predictable and rehearsed that thestructure takes attention away from the content.
D. Pacing is fairly well controlled, though the writer sometimes lunges ahead tooquickly or spends too much time on details that do not matter.
E. A title (if desired) is present, although it may be uninspired or an obviousrestatement of the prompt or topic.
F. The organization sometimes supports the main point or storyline; at othertimes, the reader feels an urge to slip in a transition or move things around.
1 The writing lacks a clear sense of direction. Ideas, details,or events seem strung together in a loose or randomfashion; there is no identifiable internal structure. Thewriting reflects more than one of these problems:A. There is no real lead to set up what follows, no real conclusion to wrap things up.B. Connections between ideas are confusing or not even present.C. Sequencing needs lots and lots of work.D. Pacing feels awkward; the writer slows to a crawl when the reader wants to get
on with it, and vice versa.E. No title is present (if requested), or if present, does not match well with the
content.F. Problems with organization make it hard for the reader to get a grip on the
main point or story line.
VOICE
5 The writer speaks directly to the reader in a way that is individual,compelling and engaging. The writer “aches with caring,” yet isaware and respectful of the audience and the purpose for writing.A. The reader feels a strong interaction with the writer, sensing the person behind the words.B. The writer takes a risk by revealing who he or she is and what he or she thinks.C. The tone and voice give flavor and texture to the message and are appropriate for the
purpose and audience.D. Narrative writing seems honest, personal, and written from the heart. Expository or
persuasive writing reflects a strong commitment to the topic by showing why the readerneeds to know this and why he or she should care.
E. This piece screams to be read aloud, shared, and talked about. The writing makes youthink about and react to the author’s point of view.
3 The writer seems sincere, but not fully engaged or involved. Theresult is pleasant or even personable, but not compelling.A. The writing communicates in an earnest, pleasing manner.B. Only one or two moments here or there surprise, delight, or move the reader.C. The writer seems aware of an audience but weighs ideas carefully and discards personal
insights in favor of safe generalities.D. Narrative writing seems sincere, but not passionate; expository or persuasive writing lacks
consistent engagement with the topic to build credibility.E. The writer’s willingness to share his/her point of view may emerge strongly at some places,
but is often obscured behind vague generalities.
1 The writer seems indifferent, uninvolved, or distanced from the topicand/or the audience. As a result, the paper reflects more than oneof the following problems:A. The writer speaks in a kind of monotone that flattens all potential highs or lows of the
message.B. The writing is humdrum and “risk-free.”C. The writer is not concerned with the audience, or the writer’s style is a complete mismatch
for the intended reader.D. The writing is lifeless or mechanical; depending on the topic, it may be overly technical or
jargonistic.E. No point of view is reflected in the writing—zip, zero, zilch, nada.
WORD CHOICE
5 Words convey the intended message in a precise, interesting, andnatural way. The words are powerful and engaging.A. Words are specific and accurate; it is easy to understand just what the writer means.B. The words and phrases create pictures and linger in your mind.C. The language is natural and never overdone; both words and phrases are individual and
effective.D. Striking words and phrases often catch the reader's eye—and linger in the reader's mind.
(You can recall a handful as you reflect on the paper.)E. Lively verbs energize the writing. Precise nouns and modifiers add depth and specificity.F. Precision is obvious. The writer has taken care to put just the right word or phrase in just the
right spot.
3 The language is functional, even if it lacks much energy. It is easyto figure out the writer's meaning on a general level.A. Words are adequate and correct in a general sense; they simply lack much flair and
originality.B. Familiar words and phrases communicate, but rarely capture the reader's imagination. Still,
the paper may have one or two fine moments.C. Attempts at colorful language show a willingness to stretch and grow, but sometimes it goes
too far (thesaurus overload!).D. The writing is marked by passive verbs, everyday nouns and adjectives, and lack of
interesting adverbs.E. The words are only occasionally refined; it’s more often, “the first thing that popped into
my mind.”F. The words and phrases are functional—with only a moment or two of sparkle.
1 The writer struggles with a limited vocabulary, searching for wordsto convey meaning. The writing reflects more than one of theseproblems:A. Language is so vague (e.g., It was a fun time, She was neat, It was nice, We did lots of stuff)
that only a limited message comes through.B. “Blah, blah, blah” is all that the reader reads and hears.C. Words are used incorrectly, making the message secondary to the misfires with the words.D. Limited vocabulary and/or frequent misuse of parts of speech impair understanding.E. Jargon or clichés distract or mislead. Persistent redundancy distracts the reader.F. Problems with language leave the reader wondering what the writer is trying to say. The
words just don’t work in this piece.
SENTENCE FLUENCY
5 The writing has an easy flow, rhythm and cadence. Sentences arewell built, with strong and varied structure that invites expressiveoral reading.A. Sentences are constructed in a way that underscores and enhances the meaning.B. Sentences vary in length as well as structure. Fragments, if used, add style. Dialogue, if
present, sounds natural.C. Purposeful and varied sentence beginnings add variety and energy.D. The use of creative and appropriate connectives between sentences and thoughts shows
how each relates to, and builds upon, the one before it.E. The writing has cadence; the writer has thought about the sound of the words as well as
the meaning. The first time you read it aloud is a breeze.
3 The text hums along with a steady beat, but tends to be morepleasant or businesslike than musical, more mechanical thanfluid.A. Although sentences may not seem artfully crafted or musical, they get the job done in a
routine fashion.B. Sentences are usually constructed correctly; they hang together; they are sound.C. Sentence beginnings are not ALL alike; some variety is attempted.D. The reader sometimes has to hunt for clues (e.g., connecting words and phrases like
however, therefore, naturally, after a while, on the other hand, to be specific, for example,next, first of all, later, but as it turned out, although, etc.) that show how sentencesinterrelate.
E. Parts of the text invite expressive oral reading; others may be stiff, awkward, choppy, organgly.
1 The reader has to practice quite a bit in order to give this paper afair interpretive reading. The writing reflects more than one ofthe following problems:
A. Sentences are choppy, incomplete, rambling or awkward; they need work. Phrasingdoes not sound natural. The patterns may create a sing-song rhythm, or a chop-chopcadence that lulls the reader to sleep.
B. There is little to no “sentence sense” present. Even if this piece was flawlessly edited, thesentences would not hang together.
C. Many sentences begin the same way—and may follow the same patterns (e.g., subject-verb-object) in a monotonous pattern.
D. Endless connectives (and, and so, but then, because, and then, etc.) or a complete lack ofconnectives create a massive jumble of language.
E. The text does not invite expressive oral reading.
CONVENTIONS5 The writer demonstrates a good grasp of standard writing conventions (e.g.,
spelling, punctuation, capitalization, grammar, usage, paragraphing) and usesconventions effectively to enhance readability. Errors tend to be so few that justminor touch-ups would get this piece ready to publish.A. Spelling is generally correct, even on more difficult words.B. The punctuation is accurate, even creative, and guides the reader through the text.C. A thorough understanding and consistent application of capitalization skills are present.D. Grammar and usage are correct and contribute to clarity and style.E. Paragraphing tends to be sound and reinforces the organizational structure.F. The writer may manipulate conventions for stylistic effect—and it works! The piece is very
close to being ready to publish.
GRADES 7 AND UP ONLY: The writing is sufficiently complex to allow the writer to show skill in using a widerange of conventions. For writers at younger ages, the writing shows control over those conventions that aregrade/age appropriate.
3 The writer shows reasonable control over a limited range of standard writingconventions. Conventions are sometimes handled well and enhance readability;at other times, errors are distracting and impair readability.A. Spelling is usually correct or reasonably phonetic on common words, but more difficult
words are problematic.B. End punctuation is usually correct; internal punctuation (commas, apostrophes, semicolons,
dashes, colons, parentheses) is sometimes missing/wrong.C. Most words are capitalized correctly; control over more sophisticated capitalization skills
may be spotty.D. Paragraphing is attempted but may run together or begin in the wrong places. E. Problems with grammar or usage are not serious enough to distort meaning but may not be
correct or accurately applied all of the time.F. Moderate (a little of this, a little of that) editing would be required to polish the text for
publication.
1 Errors in spelling, punctuation, capitalization, usage and grammar and/orparagraphing repeatedly distract the reader and make the text difficult to read.The writing reflects more than one of these problems:A. Spelling errors are frequent, even on common words.B. Punctuation (including terminal punctuation) is often missing or incorrect.C. Capitalization is random and only the easiest rules show awareness of correct use.D. Errors in grammar or usage are very noticeable, frequent, and affect meaning.E. Paragraphing is missing, irregular, or so frequent (every sentence) that it has no
relationship to the organizational structure of the text.F. The reader must read once to decode, then again for meaning. Extensive editing (virtually
every line) would be required to polish the text for publication.
PRESENTATION(optional)
5 The form and presentation of the text enhances the ability for the reader to understand andconnect with the message. It is pleasing to the eye.
A. If handwritten (either cursive or printed), the slant is consistent, letters are clearly formed, spacing isuniform between words, and the text is easy to read.
B. If word-processed, there is appropriate use of fonts and font sizes which invites the reader into the text.C. The use of white space on the page (spacing, margins, etc.) allows the intended audience to easily focus
on the text and message without distractions. There is just the right amount of balance of white space andtext on the page. The formatting suits the purpose for writing.
D. The use of a title, side heads, page numbering, bullets, and evidence of correct use of a style sheet(when appropriate) makes it easy for the reader to access the desired information and text. These markersallow the hierarchy of information to be clear to the reader.
E. When appropriate to the purpose and audience, there is effective integration of text and illustrations,charts, graphs, maps, tables, etc. There is clear alignment between the text and visuals. The visualssupport and clarify important information or key points made in the text.
3 The writer’s message is understandable in this format.A. Handwriting is readable, although there may be discrepancies in letter shape and form, slant, and
spacing that may make some words or passages easier to read than others.B. Experimentation with fonts and font sizes is successful in some places, but begins to get fussy and
cluttered in others. The effect is not consistent throughout the text.C. While margins may be present, some text may crowd the edges. Consistent spacing is applied, although
a different choice may make text more accessible (e.g. single, double, or triple spacing).D. Although some markers are present (titles, numbering, bullets, side heads, etc.) they are not used to their
fullest potential as a guide for the reader to access the greatest meaning from the text.E. An attempt is made to integrate visuals and the text although the connections may be limited.
1 The reader receives a garbled message due to problems relating to the presentationof the text.
A. Because the letters are irregularly slanted, formed inconsistently, or incorrectly, and the spacing isunbalanced or not even present, it is very difficult to read and understand the text.
B. The writer has gone wild with multiple fonts and font sizes. It is a major distraction to the reader.C. The spacing is random and confusing to the reader. There may be little or no white space on the page.D. Lack of markers (title, page numbering, bullets, side heads, etc.) leave the reader wondering how one
section connects to another and why the text is organized in this manner on the page.E. The visuals do not support or further illustrate key ideas presented in the text. They may be misleading,
indecipherable, or too complex to be understood.