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Seating Chart (Period 2). SEATING CHART (Period 5). Opening: Bell Work. Four Corners Game How to play: Read the question Decide on an answer Move to the corner that you think is the answer. Question 12. - PowerPoint PPT Presentation
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Stephanie Beniek
Malaurie Heidenescher
Albert Crichton
Julie Dix Jack (Curtis) Greene II
Ashlin Idemoto
Leilani Akana
Christian (David) Lam
Projection Cart
Valerie Lane Bryan Jason Maderas
Justin Maunupau
Carina Pelletier
Kamele Manoa
Joshua Nishimoto
Cody Okada-Krueger
Anissa Pasion
Teachers’
Hitsa Pham Courtney Piche
Charlette Joy Ragudos
Taliau (King)Tavela-Afalava
Renay Dayton-Gerona
Desk
Seating Chart (Period 2)
SEATING CHART(Period 5)
Mahlon Kapule III
Heather Corpuz
Adam Denis Preston Matteo Donato
Leonard Firme Jr.
Kristen Joy Foronda
Petrice Goto Pualani Howard
Lazarus Jove
Projection Cart
Courtney Ledesma
Arianna Lee Johnathan Lonso
Jovy Manzanares
Michael OMeally
Emily Moses Derrick Ogawa-Staples
Joshua Pangayan
Shonnel Patao-Galacgac
Marcus Sabado
Teachers’
Jonnel Santos
Keani Sayles
Miurina Soyon
Ahley Ferreira
Desk
Opening: Bell Work
Four Corners Game
How to play:
• Read the question • Decide on an answer• Move to the corner that you think is the answer
Question 12
12.(D) “much closer” describes “must study,” which is a verb phrase. We must use adverbs to describe verb phrases.
“much closer” should be “much more closely.”
Question 13
13. (B) This violates the parallel construction rule. “has been” is a verb phrase. The “and” should connect it to another verb phrase. However, “her popularity” is a noun phrase.
It should read something like this:
“Because Deborah has been a representative for over 20 years and has been popular among her constituents . . . .”
Question 14
14. (D) This is a word choice error. “respectfully” is a way to describe someone’s actions.
“respectively” means “the first goes with the first; the second with the second, etc.”
Question 15
15. (D) We have a verb tense agreement violation here.
The sentence starts out in present tense with “bears show.”
“would have considered” is past tense
It should read something like:
“ . . . from anyone whom they consider to be a threat.”
Question 16
16. (E) No error
Question 17
17. (C) We have a number agreement error here. “the fund deficit” and “the disillusionment” add up to two things.
“a problem” (one; singular) should be “problems” (two or more; plural)
Question 18
18. (B) We have a subject-verb agreement error here.
“either . . . or” means that only one is possible.
“were” (plural; two or more) should be “was” (singular; one)
Question 19
19. (C) Nouns are divided into two “amount” categories:
count nouns are things that can be counted. These nouns use the adjective “fewer.” We can pluralize these nouns. Example: After the storm there were seven fewer trees in the park.
Non-count nouns are things that aren’t counted. These nouns use the adjective “less.” We don’t pluralize these nouns. Example: I’m on a diet, so give me less rice on this plate.
“defense attorneys” is a count noun, so “less” should be “fewer.”
Question 20
20. (B) Parallel construction error here. The speaker is comparing the service at certain restaurants.
This should read something like:
“The service at Centro is much better than the service at the other restaurants we frequent . . . .”
Question 21
21. (A) Very technical error here, relating to verb tense.
“rose” should be “had risen”
(I don’t know how many people will call you on this, though)
Question 22
22. (C) Number agreement error.
“child” is one (singular); “they” is two or more (plural)
“they” should be “he or she”
Question 23
23. (C) Parallel construction error
“because of” should be “by.”
Question 24
24. (E) Although this sentence could use some restructuring, there’s nothing technically wrong with it . . . I think.
Question 25
25. (B) Number agreement “The Senator and his opponent” is plural (two
or more); “he” is singular (one).
It is unclear which man—if the Senator is also male—made the racially insensitive comment
Question 26
26. (C) Verb tense agreement error
“were observing” is past tense; “are” is present tense
“are” should be “were”
Question 27
27. (C) I think this is a word choice error.
“advocate” means to support; to defend; to take a stand for something that others may oppose.
There is no reason to believe that there’s something wrong about testing for abestos.
This should be something like:
“. . . Testing . . . is widely recommended for . . . .”
Question 28
28. (A) pronoun case error
Since “between” is a preposition, we must use the pronoun “me,” the objective case for first person singular pronoun
Question 29
29. (C) “duo” is treated as a singular noun, so
“their” (plural) should be “its” (singular)
AgendaAugust 31, 2010
• Objective: We will be able to… Revise our personal narratives
• Opening: Bell Work SAT prep questions
• Revision Activity• Closing: Exit Pass
Explain the changes you have made or will make to your 2nd draft.
Revision Activity
Note:
You will need your handout, “Why I Have To Take U.S. History Again”
by Tal Vigderson
You will also need your personal narrative 2nd draft
Group 1 Group 2 Group 3 Group 4 Group 5 Group 6
King Charlette Justin Hitsa Cody Julie
Ashlin David Malaurie Mele Anissa Bryan
Valerie Carina Renay Courtney Curtis Leilani
Joshua Stephanie Albert
Directions: Pass your personal narrative to the left.
Directions: Pass your personal narrative to the left.
Group 1 Group 2 Group 3 Group 4 Group 5 Group 6
Emily Jonnel Shonell Petrice Leonard Arianna
Marcus Mahlon Miurina Adam Courtney Joshua
Derrick Michael Kristen Preston Lance Heather
Ashley Pua John Jovy Keani
Introduction
• Paragraph 1 of “Why I have To Take U.S. History Again” is the story’s introduction
• Read the introduction of your partner’s personal narrative.
• Ask yourself:• Is it captivating? • Does it catch your attention?• Does it make you want to read on?• Does it have a thesis statement?
• Make comments about what you liked or didn’t like and any improvements this person needs to make to his or her introduction
Background Information• Paragraphs 2-4 of “Why I have To Take U.S. History Again” gives the reader some background information about the event.
• Read your partner’s personal narrative and see if you can find background information.
• Ask yourself:• Is there anything that I don’t understand? • Is there anything that is irrelevant?• What details need to to be elaborated on?
• Make comments about what you liked or didn’t like and any improvements this person needs to make to his or her background information
Event• Paragraphs 5-12 of “Why I have To Take U.S. History Again” explains the actual event
• Read your partner’s personal narrative and see if you can find “the event.”
• Ask yourself:• Is there anything that I don’t understand? • Is there anything that is irrelevant?• What details need to to be elaborated on?• Did the author use quotes to make the reading more interesting?
• Make comments about what you liked or didn’t like and any improvements this person needs to make to his or her event section
Moral/Lesson Learned• Paragraphs 13-20 of “Why I have To Take U.S. History Again” explains the moral or lesson learned
• Read your partner’s personal narrative and see if you can find moral or lesson learned.
• Ask yourself:• Is there anything that I don’t understand? • Is there anything that is irrelevant?• What details need to to be elaborated on?• Did the author use quotes to make the reading more interesting?
• Make comments about what you liked or didn’t like and any improvements this person needs to make to his or her moral or lesson learned
Conclusion• Paragraph 21 of “Why I have To Take U.S. History Again” is the conclusion.
• Read the conclusion to your partner’s personal narrative.
• Ask yourself:• Does this personal narrative feel complete? • Does the author express a final thought about the event, moral, or lesson learned?
• Make comments about what you liked or didn’t like and any improvements this person needs to make to his or her conclusion
Drafting
Based on what you’ve learned today, make changes to your 2nd draft.
Note: use a different colored pen.
Closing: Exit Pass
Explain the changes you have made and/or will make to your 2nd draft.
HW (write in your planner): Bring a hard copy of your personal narrative 3rd draft to class on Thursday, Sept. 2, 2010.
typed, double-spaced, size 12 Times New Roman font