BRAINSTORMING

Thesis statement:

The violence is a social problem and it causes a lot of damage in México.

Topic sentence 1:

Violence it’s one of the most important problems in México.

Topic sentence 2

The damages that violence causes are physical, psychological and emotional.

damage

Aggressive

. Problem.

Violence.

OUTLINE

Violence in Mexico.

Introduction.

1. Violence is an action when someone hurts another person intentionally, the

majority of victims are women.

2. The domestic violence is the most common in our country.

3. More than 133 thousand women in Mexico were victims of violence last year.

4. The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages.

5. In México we need new laws to try to prevent and eliminate violence.

Body Paragraph 1

1. Violence it’s one of the most important problems in México.

2. For example, “Violence can range from physical abuse within the family to

revenge killings”. Jose Luis Lacarriere (Dnonald, 2011).

3. I think that we need to improve the security in every place and try to make

campaigns against violence.

4. We should be more respectful with other people, try to control ourselves to

prevent violence.

5. Violent people are like that because they want to feel more powerful than others

hurting people.

Body Pargraph 2

1. The damages that violence cause are physical, psychological and emotional.

2. For example, “In Mexico, one in every seven families have been victim of

violence or at least one member of the family has been victim of a crime”

(Pereyra & Luis, 205).

3. Any kind of violence it’s an abuse, and you have to tell the authorities about

that, if every person do that we can control this problem.

4. To eliminate this social problem we don’t have to tolerate any violence.

5. We have to be a united and strong country to fight against this big problem.

Conclusion

1. The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages in México.

2. We need to be united to destroy the problem.

3. This problem almost always starts at home with the parents.

4. In México it’s more common because here the “machismo” is too strong.

5. Most of the women that are abuse don’t present charges because they’re afraid.

ROUGH DRAFT

Violence in Mexico

Violence is an action when someone hurts another person intentionally, the

majority of victims are women. The domestic violence is the most common in our

country. More than 133 thousand women in Mexico were victims of violence last year.

The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages. In México we need new

laws to try to prevent and eliminate violence.

Violence it’s one of the most important problems in México. For example,

“Violence can range from physical abuse within the family to revenge killings”

(Dnonald, 2011). I think that we need to improve the security in every place and try to

make campaigns against violence. We should be more respectful with other people, try

to control ourselves to prevent violence. Violent people are like that because they want

to feel more powerful than others hurting people.

The damages that violence cause are physical, psychological and emotional. For

example, “In Mexico, one in every seven families have been victim of violence or at

least one member of the family has been victim of a crime” (Pereyra & Luis, 205). Any

kind of violence it’s an abuse, and you have to tell the authorities about that, if every

person do that we can control this problem. To eliminate this social problem we don’t

have to tolerate any violence. We have to be a united and strong country to fight against

this big problem.

The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages in México. We

need to be united to destroy the problem. This problem almost always starts at home

with the parents. In México it’s more common because here the “machismo” is too

strong. Most of the women that are abuse don’t present charges because they’re afraid.

Bibliografía

Dnonald, D. M. (13 de agosto de 2011). Forbes. Recuperado el 25 de agosto de 2011, de

http://www.forbes.com/sites/greatspeculations/2011/08/24/fracking-takes-more-flack-from-

gray-lady/

Pereyra, C., & Luis, F. (205). Historia ¿pora que? México: Siglo XXI .

PEER REVIEW-

APA FORMAT (1 POINT EACH)

1. Does student have a cover page?

YES or NO

2. Does student use double space?

YES or NO

3. Does student use ARIAL ?

YES or NO

4. Does student use font 12?

YES or NO

5. Does student have margins set to APA

standards?

YES or NO

SPECIFICATIONS (1 POINT EACH)

6. Does student have 4 paragraphs?

YES or NO

7. Does student have 20 sentences (5 in

each paragraph)?

YES or NO

8. Does student use a printed resource?

YES or NO

9. Does student have an electronic

resource?

YES or NO

10. Does student have a bibliography APA

format?

YES or NO

WRITING PROCES

11. Brainstorming (4 POINTS)

Student focused his or her ideas, got the

thesis statement and topic sentence .

YES or NO

12. Outline (1POINT)

Student organized his or her essay in an

outline format (5X4)

YES or NO

13. Draft/Peer review (1POINT)

Student has a draft reviewed by a peer.

Yes /No

14. Final draft (1 POINT)

Student made corrections according to his

or her Peer recommendations.

YES or NO

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Running head: Violence in Mexico

Violence in Mexico

Oscar Ramos Pérez

Universidad del Valle de México

Group: 5T

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Violence in Mexico

Violence in Mexico

Violence is an action when someone hurts another person intentionally, the

majority of victims are women. The domestic violence is the most common in our

country. More than 133 thousand women in Mexico were victims of violence last year.

The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages. In México we need new

laws to try to prevent and eliminate violence.

Violence it’s one of the most important problems in México. For example,

“Violence can range from physical abuse within the family to revenge killings”

(Dnonald, 2011). I think that we need to improve the security in every place and try to

make campaigns against violence. We should be more respectful with other people, try

to control ourselves to prevent violence. Violent people are like that because they want

to feel more powerful than others hurting people.

The damages that violence cause are physical, psychological and emotional. For

example, “In Mexico, one in every seven families have been victim of violence or at

least one member of the family has been victim of a crime” (Pereyra & Luis, 205). Any

kind of violence it’s an abuse, and you have to tell the authorities about that, if every

person do that we can control this problem. To eliminate this social problem we don’t

have to tolerate any violence. We have to be a united and strong country to fight against

this big problem.

The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages in México. We

need to be united to destroy the problem. This problem almost always starts at home

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Violence in Mexico

with the parents. In México it’s more common because here the “machismo” is too

strong. Most of the women that are abuse don’t present charges because they’re afraid.

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Violence in Mexico

References

Dnonald, D. M. (13 de agosto de 2011). Forbes. Recuperado el 25 de agosto de 2011, de

http://www.forbes.com/sites/greatspeculations/2011/08/24/fracking-takes-more-

flack-from-gray-lady/

Pereyra, C., & Luis, F. (205). Historia ¿pora que? México: Siglo XXI .