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Writing: Romeo and Juliet Final writing review Point of view: Third person Writing in third person means you take yourself out of the story. This means no “I” “me” “my” “us” “we” “our” or “mine.” Instead, let the survey results or one of your interviewees make the point for you.
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Romeo and Juliet Analysis
Writing: Romeo and Juliet
Final writing reviewPoint of view: Third person
Writing in third person means you take yourself out of the story. This means no “I” “me” “my” “us” “we” “our” or “mine.”
Instead, let the survey results or one of your interviewees make the point for you.
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Examples:For our next question, we move on to a more controversial topic.
The fix:The next question proved to be more controversial.
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Example:My results show that every single person surveyed disagreed with the statement “love means never having to say you’re sorry.”
Fix:The survey results show that every respondent disagreed with the statement “love means never having to say you’re sorry.”
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Also, avoid second-person: “you”
Example:You have heard the saying, “It is better to have loved and lost, than to never have loved at all.”
Fix:The survey asked respondents to agree or disagree with the statement, “It is better to have loved and lost, than to never have loved at all.”
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Example:The meaning of the actual feeling of love is beyond anything a dictionary could tell you.
Fix:The meaning of the actual feeling of love is beyond anything a dictionary can state.
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Tense:This paper is a bit unique: When referring to the survey, write in past tense. Seventy-five percent of those surveyed said…
But when referencing the play, write in present tense. Romeo immediately falls in love with Juliet at the moment he sees her.
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Review: Controlling purpose
You must give some context to/explanation for the survey before referring to it. This is the controlling purpose of the paper.
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Example:Seventy percent of people disagreed in a survey.
Fix:Seventy percent of respondents disagreed in a recent survey comparing modern views on love and romance to those expressed in William Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet.
Writing: Romeo and JulietStyle and structure: Mechanics Spell out numbers less than 10; use
numerals for 10 and greater (unless the number is the first word of a sentence; then spell it out).
Always spell out the word “percent” (do not use the symbol). Incorrect: 65% of those surveyed… Correct: Sixty-five percent of those surveyed…
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Mechanics cont. Place the period after the citation:
“…crimson in thy lips” (5.3.92-95). Place commas inside quotation marks:
“…love at first sight,” Miller said. Always include the author’s full name when
introducing the work: William Shakespeare’s The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet.
When referring to the play, italicize Romeo and Juliet. Do not italicize when referring to the characters. Romeo and Juliet are the main characters in Romeo
and Juliet.
Writing: Romeo and JulietMechanics cont. When quoting people, always use first and last names
when possible. Otherwise, your writing loses credibility. Stay objective: avoid subjective words like “amazingly”
and “surprisingly” and “incredibly.” Use first and last names on first reference; last name
only after that. Sabrina Southwick said she believes in love at first sight.
“The problem is I’ve fallen in love too many times,” Southwick said.
Be careful about “absolute” words like “everyone” and “nobody,” unless you have evidence to back up your absolute statement.
Example: Everyone knows William Shakespeare’s timeless tale of Romeo and Juliet.
Writing: Romeo and JulietMechanics cont.Comma splices
When you have two complete sentences or thoughts in one sentence, you cannot “splice” them together with a comma.
Example:Love doesn’t mean you don’t have to say you’re sorry, you say you’re sorry because you love.
Here, you have two complete sentences in one (the first is boldfaced, the second italicized), that are incorrectly separated or “splice” with only a comma.
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This can be fixed by replacing the comma with a semi-colon, or by replacing the comma with a period and forming two sentences.
Love doesn’t mean you don’t have to say you’re sorry; you say sorry because you love.Love doesn’t mean you don’t have to say you’re sorry. You say sorry because you love.
Writing: Romeo and JulietStructure: Pronoun/antecedent agreement (number)
Pronouns must agree with their antecedents in number.
One person said they do not believe teenagers know what true love is.
person=singular they=plural
Fix:
One person said he does not believe teenagers know what true love is.
Several people said they do not believe teenagers know what true love is.
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Structure: Transitions
Transitions are words and phrases that provide a bridge from one point or paragraph to the next. Transitions make writing more fluent and coherent.
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(last sentence of prior paragraph)Unfortunately, Mr. Johnston’s successful pick-up lines were absent when he first tried to win her heart.
(first sentence of next paragraph)However, many people agree with Mr. Johnston’s theory that love at first sight can happen.
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This is a good transition because the line that begins the new paragraph – “However, many people agree with Mr. Johnston’s theory…” links it to the previous paragraph. This bridge provides good writing flow.
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That’s enough for now. It’s late at night. Or is it early in the morning? Is that the nightingale? Or is it the morning lark? I’m tired. I think the dream fairy is here. Good night.
