Long lead-ins have to much information that is uselessEx..Wordy- this email message is being sent to all of you to let you know that new parking permits will be issued January 1. Concise- new parking permits will be issued January 1.
OUTDATED EXPRESSIONMODERN PHRASESARE IN RECEIPT OF AS PER YOUR REQUESTATTACH HERETOENCLOSED PLEASE FINDPURSUANT TO YOUR REQUESTTHANK YOU IN ADVANCEDI TRUST THATUNDER SEPARATE COVER
HAVE RECEIVEDAT YOUR REQUESTATTACHEDENCLOSED IS/AREAT YOUR REQUEST
THANK YOUI THINK, I BELIEVESEPARATELY
If these adverbs are taken away you sound more business like and more credible.Wordy- we actually didnt give his proposal a very fair trial.Concise- we did not give his proposal a fair trial.
Fatten sentenceBegin an Idea with there is Take up spaceFillers are some what unnecessary in certain places
Words to avoidShortens a messageImproves readabilitySubstituting pronounsReplace words used to much
More than is needed, desired, or required
Can be seen as professionalTraced to be 14th century old FrenchMeaning twitteringAn outlandish, technical language of a particular profession, group, or trade
Slang is compsed of language that go out of style right away No longer appealing Out of fashion
Clichs are the old coins of language: phrases that once made a striking impression but have since been rubbed smooth by repeated handling.
Gives a precise definitionIn stead of saying contact you you say I will telephone, fax, e-mail, visit
NeedlesslyConverted to wordy nouns Check page 86
Highly descriptiveDynamicDont over use theseMore concreteDont use to many
what to what for proof readingSpellingGrammarPunctuationNames and numbersFormat
Read carefullyDouble words Spell checkerFind errors and the tones Read every line twice standard proofreading marks
Print a copy double spacedTime to proofread adequatelyBe prepared to find more than usual errorsRead document at least 2 timesReduce your reading speedHave someone to read the document outloud
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Chapter 4 revising and proofreading business messages. This chapter contains understanding revision, concise wording, understanding the process of proofreading, and summing up and looking forward.*To be successful in the bussines world you need to understand learn and understand revision.**