Powerpoint Templates Page 1 Powerpoint Templates English 105,
Meeting 4 by Teri Tosspon, Heald College
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Powerpoint Templates Page 2 Meeting 4 Review: Commas/
Capitalization, Thesis Intros/Conclusions New material: Run on
Sentences Body Paragraphs Compare/Contrast
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Powerpoint Templates Page 3 Futbol del Tosspon or some
variation thereof 15 minutes to correct the capitalization and
punctuation on the handout Decide a batting order choose which
player is going first. That player is responsible for answering the
question drawn. The ball will move one line forward for each ITEM
the player corrects from the handout, IN ORDER If they player
misses one, the other team has a chance to steal the ball and move
it down the field the opposite direction. If they make an error,
the original team can steal back Both teams will try to move the
ball down the field When a team scores, the ball starts all the way
at the other end of the field.
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Powerpoint Templates Page 4 Combining Sentences Coordinating
1.Use a comma & a coordinating conjunction The speaker rose to
his feet, and the room became quiet. 2. Use a semicolon, an
adverbial conjunction, and a comma I worked hard; therefore, I
expected results. 3. Use a semicolon I worked hard; I expected
results Subordinating 1. Subordinating Conjunctions While he was
eating breakfast, the news came on. 2. relative pronoun. (Who,
whose, whoever, what, whatever, whichever, when, that) The
researcher who was studying diabetes had a breakthrough.
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Powerpoint Templates Page 5 Clauses A clause is a group of
words with a subject and a verb SubjectVerb Youstink. Sallyis
talking. SubjectVerb Ilovegrammar Sallyis talkingloudly wMost
clauses have further information after the verb
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Powerpoint Templates Page 6 Two Types of Clauses Independent
clause (Main clause) Can stand alone as a sentence Can be joined to
another clause Fred filled a cardboard tube with gunpowder.
Dependent clause (Subordinate clause) Cannot stand alone as a
sentence Must be joined to an independent clause Because he wanted
to make his own firecrackers. A word that joins clauses is a
conjunction
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Powerpoint Templates Page 7 Joining Clauses A dependent clause
can be joined to an independent clause to make a sentence Fred
filled a cardboard tube with gunpowder because he wanted to make
his own firecrackers. Or Because he wanted to make his own
firecrackers, Fred filled a cardboard tube with gunpowder. When the
sentence starts with the dependent clause, it must have a comma
before the independent clause
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Powerpoint Templates Page 8 Run-ons green book pg 32-34 Run-ons
are independent clauses that have been combined incorrectly. There
are several types: The AND run-on The Fused run-on The comma splice
We will be going into detail on each one
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Powerpoint Templates Page 9 The and run on (pg 146) two or more
relatively long independent clauses with a coordinating conjunction
without any punctuation. Goal 1 AND per sentence (some situations
warrant 2) (Because this has no punctuation, we have to read it in
one breath.) I met Charlyce in a yoga class at the YWCA and we
liked each other immediately and we soon became friends and we
often hang out at each others houses.
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Powerpoint Templates Page 10 The Fused run on two or more
independent clauses run together without any punctuation. The girls
made the fire the boys cooked the steaks.
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Powerpoint Templates Page 11 The comma splice run-on The comma
splice: two or more independent clauses run together with only a
comma. I met Charlyce in a yoga class at the YWCA, we soon became
friends. Sounds right? It is actually two separate independent
ideas/clauses. We COULD add a ; (semicolon) to make it correct, or
we could separate into two sentences.
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Powerpoint Templates Page 12 Run-ons In the story of Fred,
identify what kind of run-on these are! Fred didnt throw the
firecracker, he placed it between his legs, he wanted to put the
lighter away first. Comma splice Fused The fuse burned too quickly
before he could throw it the explosive blew up between his
legs.
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Powerpoint Templates Page 13 There are 3 ways to fix Run- Ons
1.Make into 2 (or more) separate sentences. 2.Make a compound
sentence *using the methods of coordination* 3.Make a complex
sentence *using the methods of subordination*
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Powerpoint Templates Page 14 Practice- Packet 1. I'd like to
buy a piano, but I really don't have the money right now. 2. She
gives wonderful parties, I can't wait for her next one. 3. The
people on the park bench who meet every day and eat lunch together.
4. I'm saving money for a trip to Oklahoma my brother lives out
there. 5. He was beaming he got an A on the exam. 1. No Change! I'd
like to buy a piano, but I really don't have the money right now..
2. Run On! She gives wonderful parties. I can't wait for her next
one. 3. Fragment! The people on the park bench who meet every day
and eat lunch together. ; 4. Run on! I'm saving money for a trip to
Oklahoma ; my brother lives out there. 5. Run on! He was beaming.
He got an A on the exam.
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Powerpoint Templates Page 15 Body Paragraphs (p 47) Chpt 3,
Turn to pg 50 Think of your essay like a Hamburger . Mmm Without
all of the pieces its just not complete! Introduction/Hook
Paragraphs prove your thesis. Your thesis is the MEAT!!!
Conclusion
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Powerpoint Templates Page 16 Each Paragraph has a part to play
Your individual paragraphs are like pieces of pie. Topic sentence
Prove your point: Evidence, a story, a quote, data, research Why
does this point matter to your topic???
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Powerpoint Templates Page 17 Topic Sentence (pg 50) Supports
the thesis by clearly stating a main point in the discussion
Announces what the paragraphs will be about Controls the subject
matter of the paragraph Its like an umbrella for the paragraph All
of the information in the paragraph should RELATE to the topic
sentence The Topic sentence should prove or discuss a portion of
the thesis!
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Powerpoint Templates Page 18 Focusing & Placing (pg 53)
Focusing be specific (read examples pg 53) Placement usually the
first sentence in the body paragraph, but does not HAVE to be (read
examples pg 54-55)
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Powerpoint Templates Page 19 Paragraph Development (59) Include
enough supporting info/evidence to make readers understand the
topic sentence Make the information clear and specific Avoid vague
generalities and repetitious ideas
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Powerpoint Templates Page 20 Paragraph Length (pg 62) Long
enough to accomplish its purpose and short enough to be
interesting. Avoid one- or two-sentence paragraphs Divide long-ish
paragraphs at a logical point. Use transitional phrases
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Powerpoint Templates Page 21 Paragraph Unity Stick to the
subject Unify sentences around a central or main idea- the topic
sentence Unify paragraphs around a thesis
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Powerpoint Templates Page 22 Paragraph Coherence Use a
recognizable order Time Space Deductive Inductive Use transitional
phrases Use examples, compare/contrast, sequence, results Avoid
whiplash maintain coherence!
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Powerpoint Templates Page 23 Practice Pg 57, Letter C Add topic
sentence to the paragraphs Not all inventors had it easy in life.
Items originally owned by Elvis have increased in value
substantially. Most people do not consider writing a real
occupation. Just as records are kept for collge football winners,
records are kept for college football losers!
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Powerpoint Templates Page 24 Exposition: Compare and Contrast
Pg 227
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Compare and Contrast these 2 clips Exposing the subject: give
information about it
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Powerpoint Templates Page 26 Choose a partner. Work together to
do a compare/contrast of the trailers 1 do the point-by-point
comparison (sample on pg 228) 1 do the Block Method comparison
(sample on pg 228) 1951 vs 2010 2010
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Powerpoint Templates Page 27 Theme Characters 1951 Version
Colors 1.Happy/bright 2.Greens/yellows Characters 1.Child Alice
2.Silly, over-the-top Words 1.Constant text on screen 2.Descriptive
+ Sentences 2010 Version Colors 1.Dark 2.Reds and blacks Characters
1.Nearly adult Alice 2.Intense, scary Words 1.Almost NO text 2.Text
it actors names, etc. Block method: Trailer for Alice in
Wonderland
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Powerpoint Templates Page 28 Point by Point Thesis: The 2010
version of Alice in Wonderland a was MUCH darker and more sinister
movie than the 1951 version. Colors 1.1951 Version: Happy/bright;
Greens/yellows 2.2010 Version: Dark; Reds/blacks Characters 1.1951:
Child Alice; Silly, over-the-top 2.2010: Nearly adult Alice;
intense/scary! Tone 1.1951: Wonder, surprise; Mischievous 2.2010:
evil/harmful magic; fearful, intense
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Powerpoint Templates Page 29 Known Issues (pg 230-231) 1.So
what? a)Why should your reader care? FIND A PURPOSE b)Direct your
thesis to a particular audience 2.Describe your subjects clearly
and distinctly 3.Avoid a choppy essay use transitions! (pg
231)
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Powerpoint Templates Page 30 Paragraph planning part 2 Take
each one of your topics from the pre-write Develop each one more
fully into a paragraph with an example (quotes, stories, data,
facts, etc.) This will help you determine what you need to research
The queen of hearts was similar in both films. The Queen in the
1951 version was fat, angry and yelling at her staff, ordering, Off
with his head for a card off who had minor slip of talking to
Alice. The queen of hearts was evil, self- centered, and murderous
in both films. But in the 1951 version, shes not as brutal. In
comparing the first appearance of the queen in each movie, it was
noted 1951 movie, 22:30 2010 movie, 18:11 It shows that both films
are similar in the main characters personalities. The queen is less
scary. Most of 1951 A-in-W s characters were more innocent and
childlike than the 2010 version The Queen in the 2010 version was
small, angry and yelling at her staff, saying You're right, Stayne.
It is far better to be feared than loved.
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Powerpoint Templates Page 31 Assignment 1.Choose your topic
choose from: 231-232
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2.Do a pre-write for your topic (during class today) 3.Complete 2-3
Paragraph plan handouts 4.Determine what kind of information you
will need for your quotes Next week: how to introduce quotes.
5.Research. Find sources and appropriate
quotes/data/information/opinions.
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Powerpoint Templates Page 32 Some additional topic options pg
231-232 Halloween night to prom night. Your best friend to your
archenemy. Weeds to flowers. Slave insurrection to the
Revolutionary War. Being the president to being a homeless person.
Being a snob to being a nerd. Christopher Columbus to early
astronauts. School bullies to dictators. Writing essays to going to
the dentist. Church sermons to campaign speeches. Acting to lying.
Hurricanes to blizzards. The 1970s to another decade. The decisions
of Red Riding Hood to the decisions of Goldilocks. Wandering on the
African plain to drifting in the open sea. Making an apple pie to
making a mud pie. Being afraid to being bored. The influence of
music to the influence of books. The influence of celebrities to
the influence of parents. Learning to ride a bike to learning to
drive a car. Going to a movie to watching a movie at home. Spending
time with your friend to spending time with your dog. Playing Wii
games to playing real games.
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Homework Compare/Contrast 1st draft DUE @ beginning of NEXT
MEETING (50 points) Read: Compare/Contrast Student Essays pgs
233-239 Research Scaffold Vocab 3 choose 10 words from the articles
you choose for your compare contrast paper or GRE words
