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The line graph illustrates the average figures for of
English people who commute daily between from their
residences and to work places by car, bus or and train
from 1970 to 200!
"verall, the number of #$ commuters travelling each day by both
car and train have
been increasing continually, while people
commuting by that of bus have been decreasedover the period
of %0 years! &n three trends, the average number of commutes
travelling by car is the highest!
&n the 1970' 19(0 period, the figure
for travelling by car remained steady steadily at
)millions! *owever, in the two following decades, this number
increased at to 7 millions!+dditionally, +ccording to the graph, by
the 200, a great number of commuters traveling bycar will
would have risen rise at to 9 millions, which is the highest
point during %0 decades!
+lthough two trends were similar in term of a general decline
increase, the number of
people commuting by train were lower than that by car!
+lso, over the same period, there wasa significant growth in the
number of commutes from 2 millions to nearly ) millions!
eanwhile, the figure for by bus declined gradually between -
millions and about millions which is the lowest point in the graph
over the %0 years!
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Response
6.5 Your points and ideas in the whole essay is quite
easy to understand and clear,
Cohesion 6 Quite good supporting sentences but you should
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Coherenc
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to repeat to structures of the sentences, pay
attention to write your sentences briey
Vocabular
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6 Good vocabulary, some spelling mistaes
Grammar 6.5 Good grammar
Overall 6!6.5 "ry more to reach higher band
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