English 105, Dec 9, 2010

Heald CollegeTeri Tosspon

Respond to ONE of the articles you read

50 minutes to write, worth 80 points

2-3 pages longAddress ALL of these questions

Summarize (tell what happened) What kind of intro (look at your

textbook)? What was the main point? How did the author support his/her

point? Write (at least 2 paragraphs) about what

YOU think: did you like it? Was it a powerful story? Did it remind you of anything? Can compare to others.

Chapter 3: Body Paragraphs

In groups of 3-4, you will be assigned to create a graphic or symbol to represent one of the following areas:

Paragraph Development Paragraph Length Paragraph Unity Paragraph Coherence Paragraph Sequence Transitions

Body Paragraphs (pg 47 –both books)

Planning Thesis essay map: can include a

basic “map” in your introduction paragraph

The Topic Sentence (pg 50)

Must support the THESIS of the paper

The most GENERAL sentence in your paragraph

Announces what your paragraph will be about

Focusing/Placing your Topic Sentence (pg 53 –both books)

Focus! Revise so they are specific and Unfocused: too many people treat

animals badly in experiments. Focused: The cosmetic industry often

harms animals in unnecessary experiments.

Placing your sentence Put it where it FEELS natural Can go 1st in paragraph, 2nd, or even last.

Paragraph Development(pg 59 new, 58 old)

Include enough supporting evidence to make readers understand the topic

Make the infoclear and specific

Avoid vaguegeneralities and repetitious ideas

Paragraph Length(pg 62 new, 61 old)

Long enough to accomplish its purpose and short enough to be interesting

Avoid the one- or two-sentence paragraph

Divide longish paragraphs at a logical point; use transitional phrases

Paragraph Coherence(pg 65 new, 64 old)

Recognizable order Time, space, deductive, inductive

Use transitional words/phrases Give examples Comparison/Contrast Sequence Results Repeat key words (substitute

pronouns too) Avoid whiplash – maintain

coherence!

Sequence and Transitions(pg 77 new, 77 old)

Sequence Consider logic and effect

Transitions Use to link paragraphs and/or ideas Vary the type and placement to avoid

boredom

• First• Begin1st

• Next• In

addiction2nd

• Finally• Then3rd

Fragments (pg 564, Old: 536)

A complete sentence requires: Subject: someone or something doing the

action Verb: the action Complete thought

How can you check? Add the words “It is true that…” before

your sentence. Fragments won’t make sense

Intentional fragments used for emphasis or to convey a tone.

Francis named her new mutt Super Dog because he could

leap fences in a single bound.

Subject Verb

Practice Fragments (565 B, 537B)B. 1. The idea of a credit card first appeared

in 1887. According to Lawrence M. Ausbel, author of “Credit Cards,” in the McGraw-hill Encyclopedia of Economics.

2. Originally an imaginary concept in a futurist novel by Edward Bellamy. The card allowed characters to charge against future earnings.

3. Around the turn of the twentieth century some American stores issued paper or metal “shoppers’ plates.” Although they were only used by retailers to identify their credit customers.

1. According to Lawrence M. Ausbel, author of “Credit Cards,” in the McGraw-hill Encyclopedia of Economics, the idea of a credit card first appeared in 1887. 2. Originally an imaginary concept in a futurist novel by Edward Bellamy, the card allowed characters to charge against future earnings.3. Around the turn of the twentieth century, some American stores issued paper or metal “shoppers’ plates,” although they were only used by retailers to identify their credit customers.

Practice Fragments (565 B, 537B)4. The first real credit card was issued

in 1947 by a New York bank and was a success. Despite the fact that customers could charge purchased only in a two-block area in Brooklyn.

5. Travel and entertainment cards soon appeared that allowed customers to charge items and services across the country. For example, the American Express card in 1958 and Carte Blanche in 1959.

4. The first real credit card was issued in 1947 by a New York bank and was a success, despite the fact that customers could charge purchased only in a two-block area in Brooklyn.

5. Travel and entertainment cards soon appeared, including the American Express card in 1958 and Carte Blanche in 1959, that allowed customers to charge items and services across the country.

Run-on (or Fused) Sentence (566 new, 538 old)

Run on= 2 sentences together w/out any punctuation. Use a period Use a semicolon Use a comma + coordinating conjunction

(FANBOYS) Inserting a comma only makes the sentence

a different kind of fragment: a comma splice! Instead you need to fix it through a method

above.

Victoria Woodhull was the first American woman to run for the presidency, she was defeated in 1872 by Ulysses S. Grant.

Subject

Verb

The indicted police chief submitted his resignation the mayor accepted it gratefully.

Subject

Verb

Subject

Verb

Run On / Splices (568 B, 540B)1. My mother is very politically

conservative, she’s written in King George III for president in the last two elections.

2. Mary Lou decided not to eat the alphabet soup the letters spelled out “botulism.”

3. A dried gourd containing seeds probably functioned as the first baby rattle, ancient Egyptian wall paintings show babies with such gourds clutched in their fingers.

1. My mother is very politically conservative; she’s written in King George III for president in the last two elections.2. Mary Lou decided not to eat the alphabet soup because the letters spelled out “botulism.”3. A dried gourd containing seeds probably functioned as the first baby rattle. Ancient Egyptian wall paintings show babies with such gourds clutched in their fingers.

Run On / Splices (568 B, 540B)4. Opportunists who came to the South after the

Civil War were often called “carpetbaggers,” they carried their belongings in cheaply produced travel bags made of Belgian carpet.

5. A friend of mine offers a good definition of nasty theater critics on opening night , according to him, they’re the people who cant wait to stone the first cast.

6. When English scientist James Smithson died in 1829 he willed his entire fortune to the United States to establish a foundation for knowledge, that’s how the Smithsonian Institution was started.

4. Opportunists who came to the South after the Civil War were often called “carpetbaggers,” because they carried their belongings in cheaply produced travel bags made of Belgian carpet. 5. A friend of mine offers a good definition of

nasty theater critics on opening night . According to him, they’re the people who cant wait to stone the first cast.

6. The Smithsonian Institution was started when English scientist James Smithson died in 1829 he willed his entire fortune to the United States to establish a foundation for knowledge.

Run On / Splices (568 B, 540B)7. The word “jack-o’-lantern” may have come

from the legend of Irish Jack. A mean old man in life, he was condemned after death to wander the earth carrying a hollow turnip with a lump of burning coal inside.

8. People forget how large the blue whale is. It has a heart as large as a Volkswagon Beetle and can hold an elephant on its tongue.

9. Correct!10. The famous Eiffel Tower, built for the 1889

Paris Exposition, has inspired many crazy stunts: in 1891, Silvain Domon climbed the 363 steps on stilts.

Homework:

Avoid fragments/comma splices (p 565A 1-5, + 567A 1-5)

Sentence BaseballReviewing Chapter 20– Identify Fragment or Run-On

Quick review To be a complete sentence-

Subject Verb Express a

complete thought▪ Watch for words

like “although” and “because”!

Run on = combined incorrectly linked w/ only a comma = comma splice

Baseball Teams stand in “batting order” in the

dugout (each team should have a row).

Answer the questions on the worksheet to “hit” A Single – identify if it is a Fragment (F),

Run On (R) or Sentence (S) (take 1 base) A Double – correct the F or R (2 bases) 2nd Inning Home Run : identify Subject

AND Verb Strike Out: incorrectly identify (F/R/S or

Subject/Verb), incorrectly correct the sentence.

Process Analysis (Bottom of 209- new; 197- old)

Giving directions (not informing)Give •Select appropriate subject

•Describe appropriate equipment

Good •Define special terms•State steps in a logical order

Directions•Explain each stop clearly, sufficiently, accurately•Organize steps effectively•If you have many small steps, organize them into chunks! *see 211*

Problems to avoid

Include a thesis! What is your topic and what are you

going to tell us about it?

Pay special attention to the conclusion Tell us the significance, or end with a

story – just don’t abruptly end!

Partner Up: Read!TO BID THE WORLD FAREWELL

Pg 218 (old: 207) Answer questions 1-

10

PREPARING FOR THE JOB INTERVIEW

Pg 227 (old 212) Answer questions 1-

10•Assign 1 person to each story (if you finish early, answer your questions then begin reading your partner’s story).

•Each of you answer 1-10 (end of your story0 on your own paper.

•Then, talk through your answers.

•Each of you write your own response: •How are these articles similar? •How are they different?

• What do you think about them (like/dislike, understood/didn’t)?

Choose your topic & Pre-Write

Pg 212 (old: pg 200) Once you’ve chosen a topic, use the

Process Analysis Topic Starter

Rough Draft (2 copies) due 12/16/2010 @ beginning of class next week

Final draft due 01/06/2011 (though I would appreciate it via email

by 01/01/2011

Homework

Avoid fragments/comma splices (p 565A 1-5, + 567A 1-5)

Write first draft – Process Analysis Essay (50 points, 2 copies due @ beginning of next week)

Write a reflection/journal about anything you want (1-2 pages)