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Example of an Introduction & Conclusion
Assignment task (in brief):
Avoidance of obesity is an important factor in maintaining
health and retarding the
progression of chronic disease. Discuss. (1500 word essay)
Students Introduction:
When striving for health and vitality there are many conditions
of the
physical constitution which must be examined; one of these is
obesity.
According to McLaren and Meguid, obesity occurs when there is
an
imbalance in the height-to-weight ratio in individuals,
specifically where the
weight component is too high for the height factor. An excess of
body fat of
20% or more is classed as obese with the lesser condition of
overweight
measuring between 10% and 19% (1988, p. 148).The effect of
obesity can
be far-reaching, affecting the quality of life physically1,
psychologically
2,
socially3
and economically4, thus necessitating serious and focused
action
to avoid being obese and therefore achieving the desired result
of good
health. Whilst many other factors contribute to the loss of
general well
being and to the onset of disease, the avoidance of obesity is
an important
factor in maintaining health and retarding the progression of
chronic
disease.
Students Conclusion:
Certainly, a causal relationship between obesity and loss of
general
wellbeing exists. Physically1, extreme overweight detracts from
the
maintenance of health through the individuals decreased ability
to
operate to the highest potential and increased proclivity to
chronic
diseases such as CVD, diabetes and cancer, and reduced life
expectancy.
Obese individuals are also affected psychologically2
and socially3
as they
are likely to experience a lessening of the quality of life
through increased
physical disability, low self-esteem, social discrimination and
exclusion, and
elevated risk for disease. There is also an economic4
impact (e.g. provision
of treatment, loss of productivity) which costs both the
individual and
society. Given that the prevalence of obesity in the adult
population is on
the rise and that it has serious implications for loss of health
and wellbeing,
the management of obesity is vital to maintaining health and
vitality and
avoiding disease.
Notice the introduction:commences with a
statement that sets
the context
includes a definition
of obesity ( the key
concept) with an in-
text reference
includes a position
statement (answer
to the question)
provides anoverview of the
reasons 1,2,3,4 for
this judgement in
the order they will
be presented in the
body of the essay.
Notice the conclusion:
restates the
writers position
gives an overview
of the justification
for this position
has a more
detailed
explanation of
reasons 1,2,3,4
(discussed in thebody) than is
provided in the
introduction.
Remember, there should be
no new information
presented in the conclusion.
Notice that the words critically
analyseare not usedhere, but
the implication of discuss is to
analyse and make a judgement
about whether you agree with
this statement or not.
