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    Essay Format-

    Concrete Details and

    Commentary Statements

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    Concrete Detail (CD)

    stuff from the storythe what ;

    it can be quotation or paraphrase

    facts; examples; illustrations;

    evidence; support; plot

    references; citations;

    What really happened in the

    story? ; play-by-play announcer

    TERMS TO KNOW-

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    Commentary(CM)

    stuff from your head-

    the so what?

    - words with feelings behindthem that you can describe to

    someone else; analysis;

    interpretation; a charactersfeelings; opinion; inference;

    insight; reasons; color

    commentator

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    Ratiothe amount of CD:CMin a body paragraph

    In Standard English,the essay ratio is 1:2+

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    Specific details that form thebackbone or skeleton of your

    body paragraphs

    Synonyms for concrete details

    include: facts, examples,

    quotations, specifics,

    descriptions, illustrations,

    support, proof

    What ARE concrete details?

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    WHEN should concrete details be written?

    -Concrete details must be included in every essay

    -Include enough concrete details to support each point(in general, three separate detailswill be the minimum

    needed to support one point)

    WHY should concrete details be written?

    -To support your thesis

    -To give reasons for your audience to agree

    with your position

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    HOW should concrete details

    be written?

    For beginners, include a minimum of two concrete

    details to support each point you are trying to make.

    Introduce your concrete detail with transition words

    (workbook p.7), such as- For example

    - Furthermore

    - Finally

    For intermediate writers, include a minimum of three

    concrete details for every point

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    Young children are difficult toteach, but they still like learning.

    Their minds have not yet

    developed the necessary skills to

    solve complex or even simple

    problems. Even so, they live

    surrounded by unbounded

    mysteries and wonder. We couldlearn about life from children.

    -

    http://www.uoflife.com/wc/creative/concrete.htm

    Sample paragraph WITHOUT concrete details-

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    Same piece WITH concrete details

    Young children are difficult to teach, but they still love

    learning. For example, when a toddler will experiment

    with a model tool bench, he cannot grasp that thesquare peg will not fit into the round hole. He must try

    to fit the peg himself, which results hours of fun. This

    means that while he may not grasp a concept quickly, he

    wants to understand it. Even when they are frustrated

    by what they dont understand, toddlers live surrounded bywonder.A young child will reach out his arms to grab everything

    within reach at a store, and those objects are immediately placed

    in the mouth. This shows that toddlers have incredible curiosity.

    Even when they dont understand the use for something, theirinstinct is to learn as much about it as possible. These examples

    show a love of knowledge that comes through experimentation

    rather than formal learning.

    Thesis point Concrete detail(s) Commentary statement(s)

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    Why can writing concrete details be SO HARD?

    You have to have a purpose

    know your thesis and understand it.

    Each detail you choose should help

    support that thesis

    You have to do some research. If youre writing a

    research paper, this is obvious.

    If youre writing a literary analysis, this

    means you go back to the text and look for

    your specific examples.

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    What concrete details ARE NOT-

    Abstractyou can find them,

    see them, touch them on a page

    or take a photograph of them,

    etc.

    Generalyou should be as

    specificas possible in your

    writing

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    Sentence #1 -Topic SentenceTS

    Sentence #2CDstarts with

    For example

    Sentence #3CM - (This shows that)Sentence #4CM(This also show

    that; This is because;

    This is important because)

    Sentence#5Concluding Sentence

    CSSums it up and ties back to the

    thesis (As a result)

    One-Chunk Body Paragraph

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    Chunk Paragraph with 3 details

    Sentence #1 -Topic SentenceTS

    Sentence #2CD 1

    Sentence #3CM

    Sentence #4CM

    Sentence#5CD 2Sentence #6CM

    Sentence #7CM

    Sentence #8- CD 3

    Sentence #9CM

    Sentence #10CM

    Sentence #11- Concluding Sentence

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    Without homework on weekends, students wouldbe able to spend quality time alone. Forexample, someone could use the time to readwhat she likes to read. This could broaden herknowledge of a specific subject or just provide arelaxing activity. She could also spend timealone pursuing a hobby, like crafting. Personal

    hobbies enrich life and provide opportunities todo for others, such as creating crafted gifts forfriends and family. In addition, time alone couldprovide a chance to catch up on much needed

    sleep- to rejuvenate mind and body. As a resultof having time alone, a student could feel morepositive about and be better prepared for thenext week of school responsibilities