English 1 Mr. Ronzoni

English 1 Mr. RonzoniCorrecting passive and second person constructions1Change passive to activeEliminate all of the following passive verbs from formal writing: am, are, is, was, were, be, being, beenRead the sentence. Sometimes, you may be able to do a simple switcheroo, front to back and back to front:(passive) Mary was given the award by the principal.(active) The principal gave the award to Mary.Remember that passive is not wrong; prefer active.2Change passive to activeMany times, however, the correction is not that easy. You may have to reword the sentence:

(passive) The matter was settled quickly, but there were too many unanswered questions.

(active) I settled the matter quickly, but many unanswered questions still exist. Note: A writer may discover several ways to change from passive to active.

3Change passive to activeThe following exercises may require a change from passive voice to active voice. Write the original. Then make the best correction.Original: Tall buildings and mountain roads were avoided by Janet because she feared heights. 4Change passive to activeActive:Because she feared heights, Janet avoided tall buildings and mountain roads.or Janet avoided tall buildings and mountain roads because she feared heights.or Fearing heights, Janet avoided tall buildings and mountain roads.5Change passive to activeOriginal:I was surprised by the teacher's lack of sympathy. 6Change passive to activeActive:The teachers lack of sympathy surprised me.7Change passive to activeOriginalFor several years, Mark was raised by his elderly grandmother. 8Change passive to activeActive: For several years, Marks elderly grandmother raised him.9Change passive to activeOriginal:An unexpected tornado smashed several homes and uprooted trees in a suburb of Knoxville.10Change passive to activeWhoa.dont make a change! Smashed and uprooted are active verbs. An unexpected tornado smashed several homes and uprooted trees in a suburb of Knoxville.11Change passive to activeOriginal:There is a better way to write this sentence.12Change passive to activeActive: Rewrite this sentence.or Compose this sentence differently.

13Change passive to activeOriginalThe major points of the lesson were quickly learned by the class, but they were also quickly forgotten by them.14Change passive to activeActive:The class learned the major points of the lesson quickly, but they also quickly forgot them. or15Change passive to activeActive:The class learned, but quickly forgot, the major points of the lesson.16Change passive to activeFinal pointsRead each sentence with a passive verb. Then rewrite each sentence, keeping the original meaning. Once you finish the corrections, read the paper again to make sure that you have removed all forms of the verb to be.17Second personWriting in the second person is OK if giving directions or speaking directly to a person; for example:Will you please lower the sound on the TV?orKim, do you have your assignment?orFirst, you should call your mother.

18Second personAvoid preaching which is making a statement such as:When you listen to the CD you will understand why Electric Grapefruit is a great band. Maybe the reader has no interest in the CD, or maybe the reader will not enjoy the CD when she listens to it.19Second personRewrite this sentence, eliminating second person.Original: If you do not follow directions, your TV may not work.20Second person If I do not follow the directions, my TV may not work.orWhen setting up a TV, follow the directions to make sure that it works.

21Second personOriginal:Why do you have to fill out so many forms to apply for financial aid?22Second personRevision:Why must a student fill out so many forms to apply for financial aid?orWhy do colleges require parents to complete many financial aid forms?

23Second personFinal pointsAvoid writing in second person in a formal essay. Write in the second person when speaking directly to a person or when providing directions.24