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DESCRIPTIVE PARAGRAPH DRAFTS

Step #1: PrewritingDirections: Be sure to complete all of the elements below. If you fail to do so, your content for this assignment will be incorrect.

Topic: Lake cabin at dawn.

Overall impression / Point: It is one of the most beautiful places on earth when the sun rises on the lake.

Audience: Campers

Purpose: To inform

Topic Sentence: Mornings at the lake, when the sun is rising, is one of the most beautiful places on earth.

Your Vantage Point: Sitting in a lawn chair, by the fire, looking across the lake in the morning.

Spatial Order: From the fire, to the lakeshore, to the lake, to the far side of the lake, to the sky.

Brainstorm Sensory Details:

Sights: The sun, the fire, the deere, the birds, the flowers, the trees, the mountains

Sounds: The fire crackling, the birds chirping, The wind rustling through the trees.

Tastes: The fire, coffee

Textures: coffee

Smells: The fire

Plan: Arrange your sensory details in an order according to your chosen spatial order, just as shown on page 91 of your textbook. Provide your plan in the space provided below.

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Step #2: Descriptive Paragraph Rough DraftDirections: Write a rough draft that follows your paragraph plan, beginning with your topic sentence. Do not worry about spelling or grammar; just let your thoughts flow. End with a good concluding sentence that restates your controlling idea or expresses a thought that restates your dominant impression. It should be approximately 150 words, no less and not too much more.

Mornings at the lake when the sun is rising is one of the most beautiful places on earth. As you sit bhy the fire looking at the bright orange flames dancing off of the logs surrounded by the grey stones, it takes the morning chill out of the air. Tasting and smelling your first cup of coffee, with the smell of smoke rolling into your nostrils, looking up at the beautiful bright sun creeping over the trees, it takes your breath away. You look out over the green lush meadow to the a chocolate colored mother deer and her new born fawn grazing in the distance, and look at the various colors and syteles of flowers that God has created reaching out to the morning sun for their daily sunshine Off in the distance the magnificent snow covered peaks of the mountains completes the perfect picture of God beauty and lets you know how lucky you are to be a witness to his majesty.

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Step #3: Descriptive Paragraph Revised DraftDirections: Copy your Descriptive Paragraph Rough Draft (from above) and paste it below. If you are using Microsoft 2007, click on the Review tab above and find the Tracking group. Select Track Changes. (If you are using Microsoft 2003, select Track Changes from the Tools menu.) Any changes that you make are now indicated by revision marks. This is so your instructor can see all the changes you make. Begin reading through your rough draft and make changes to the content as you see fit. Add more supporting details if needed or delete irrelevant ones that do not relate to your controlling idea. Add transitional words or phrases to help the paragraph flow in a logical order. Then, save the draft with the changes.

Mornings at the lake when the sun is rising is one of the most beautiful places on earth. As you sit by the fire looking at the bright orange flames dancing off of the logs surrounded by the grey stones, it takes the morning chill out of the air. Tasting and smelling your first cup of coffee, with the smell of the wood smoke rolling into your nostrils. Looking up at the beautiful bright sun creeping over the trees, it takes your breath away. You look out over the green lush meadow to the a chocolate colored mother deer and her new born fawn grazing in the distance.an The various colors and sytles of flowers ,that God has created, seem to dance across the meadow reaching out to the morning sun for their daily sunshine Off in the distance the magnificent snow covered peaks of the mountains completes the perfect picture of God,s beauty and lets you know how lucky you are to be a witness to his majesty.

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Step #4: Descriptive Paragraph Edited Draft

Directions: Turn off the Track Changes feature. Copy your Revised Descriptive Paragraph Draft (from above) and paste it below. Turn the Track Changes feature on. Edit for any spelling, punctuation, or grammatical errors. Focus especially on using compound and complex sentences and avoiding run-ons and fragments like you should have recently studied. Save these changes.

NOTE: Use of contractions (can’t, won’t, doesn’t, etc.) and second person (any form of the pronoun “you”) is strictly prohibited and will result in loss of points on writing assignments.

Mornings at the lake when the sun is rising is one of the most beautiful places on earth. As you sit by the fire looking at the bright orange flames dancing off of the logs surrounded by the grey stones, it takes the morning chill out of the air. Tasting and smelling your first cup of coffee, with the smell of the wood smoke rolling into your nostrils. Looking up at the beautiful bright sun creeping over the trees, it takes your breath away. You look out over the green lush meadow to the a chocolate colored mother deer and her new born fawn grazing in the distance.an The various colors and sytles of flowers ,that God has created, seem to dance across the meadow reaching out to the morning sun for their daily sunshine Off in the distance the magnificent snow covered peaks of the mountains completes the perfect picture of God,s beauty and lets you know how lucky you are to be a witness to his majesty.

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Step #5: Descriptive Paragraph Final Draft

Directions: Turn off the Track Changes feature. Copy your edited draft (from above). Paste it below and highlight it. Then in the Review tab, find the Changes group and select Accept All Changes from the Accept drop-down menu (if you are using Microsoft 2003, on the Reviewing toolbar click Accept Change). Sign the honor statement below. Then, open your Descriptive Paragraph Rubric and copy and paste it after the honor statement. Save the changes to this document. Use the link provided in Blackboard to submit this document to your instructor.  The instructor should then be able to see the entire process you took to create your final draft.

Mornings at the lake when the sun is rising is one of the most beautiful places on earth. As you sit by the fire looking at the bright orange flames dancing off of the logs surrounded by the grey stones, it takes the morning chill out of the air. Tasting and smelling your first cup of coffee, with the smell of the wood smoke rolling into your nostrils. Looking up at the beautiful bright sun creeping over the trees, it takes your breath away. You look out over the green lush meadow to the a chocolate colored mother deer and her new born fawn grazing in the distance.an The various colors and sytles of flowers ,that God has created, seem to dance across the meadow reaching out to the morning sun for their daily sunshine Off in the distance the magnificent snow covered peaks of the mountains completes the perfect picture of God,s beauty and lets you know how lucky you are to be a witness to his majesty.

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Honor Statement

Please read and sign this honor statement prior to submitting your assignment:

By typing my name in the space provided, I certify that all words and ideas in my writing assignment are mine alone, and if I used another person’s words or ideas (by summarizing, paraphrasing, or directly quoting), I gave credit to that author, and I also put quotation marks around any direct quotations.By typing my name, I also understand that if I have copied someone else’s ideas or words, I have plagiarized, and I understand that the penalty for plagiarism is course failure.

Student Name: ___Brian L. Nelson_____________________________________________

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