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8/19/2019 Corrected 191. Task 1. Line Unemployment
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the graph shows the unemployment rates in the us and japanbetween march 1993 and march 1999.
The line graph illustrates the unemployment proportion rates of
US and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999.
!erall" the unemployment rates in both # countries changed
signi$cantly. Tthere was a gradual decrease in the
unemployment percentagepercentage of wor% force in the US
o!er the period of & years. 'owe!er" that inthe $gure for Japan
increased sharply from March 1993 to March 1999.
(lthough the unemployment rate in the US declined o!er a &
year)se!en)year period" it was higher than that in Japan from
&* in March 1993 to +* in March 1999. ,t reached a high
pointpea%ed at & * in March 1993 and reached the lowesta low
point at below +* in March 199-.
The unemployment proportion rate in Japan went up from #.+*
to .+ * o!er a period of & years. ,t pea%ed at + * in March1993" which was twice as much as the its lowest point in March
199-.
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Task
Achievem
ent
6 Not enough words. Good overview. Good
description.
8/19/2019 Corrected 191. Task 1. Line Unemployment
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Cohesion
and
Coherenc
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7 Lack connection sometimes.
Vocabular y
6 Clumsy expressions. Mistakes in word choices.
Grammar 7 Good.
Overall 6.5 ork on your voca! more. "ay attention to the word
count.