Corrected 187. Task 1. Line Books

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    1. The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women

    at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

    The line graph indicates the figures for books read by men and women at Burnaby

    Public Library between 2011 and 2014.

    !erall" the number of books read at Burnaby Public Library increased o!er the

     period of 4 years. The figure for books read by women were was higher than that

    read byfor  men from 2011 to 201# but lower in 2014 it was lower .

    The number of books read by men increased slowly from #000 to 4000 in 1 year 

    and then it rose dramatically at to 14000 in 2014. $t can be seen that the number of 

     books read by men were lowest at #000 in 2011 and highest at 14000 in 2014.

    n the contrary" books read by women went up %uickly from &000 to 10000

     between 2011 and 201# and it decreased to '000 in 2014. The number of books

    read by women reached a low pointtrough(the lowest point at &000 in 2011 and a

    high pointpeak  at 10000 in 201#.

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    7 Good overview. Good description.

    Cohesion

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    7 Good.

     Vocabular 

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    7 Several mistakes. Mostly simple words.

    Grammar  7 Acceptable.

    Overall 7 Try to add some more uncommon words to make

     your essay better.