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AdaptationandtheAdaptationandthechaptertwochaptertwo
Adaptation and theSelectionofWordsAdaptation and theSelectionofWords
OverviewOverview
Role of adaptation in selecting wordsRoleofadaptationinselectingwords Simplifyingwithshortandfamiliarwords Appropriate use of technical words and acronymsAppropriateuseoftechnicalwordsandacronyms Selectionofwordswithappropriatestrength Use of concrete words and active voice Useofconcretewordsandactivevoice Achieveclarityandprecisionbyavoidingcamouflaged verbs selecting the right words andcamouflagedverbs,selectingtherightwords,andusingidiomscorrectly.
Use of words that do not discriminateUseofwordsthatdonotdiscriminate
NeedforAdaptationNeedforAdaptation(fitting the message to your readers)(fitting the message to your readers)(fittingthemessagetoyourreaders)(fittingthemessagetoyourreaders)
How to do it:Howtodoit: Visualizeyourreaders
h th thi k howtheythink whattheyknow theireducationlevel etc.
Thenwriteforthem
HowtoAdapttoMultipleReadersHowtoAdapttoMultipleReaders
Write for the bottom levelWriteforthebottomlevel. Usuallythismeanssimplifyingthemessage
h h f ll i i Thus,thefollowingsuggestionsstresssimplification
Useshort,familiarwords.Useshort,familiarwords.
DONTDONTDON TDON TIn effect, it was hypothesized that certain physical data categories including housing types and densities, land use characteristics, and ecological location constitute a scaleable content area. This could be called a continuum of residential desirability. Likewise, it was hypothesized that several social y , ypdata categories, describing the same census tracts and referring generally to to the social stratification system of the city would also be scaleable This scale could be called acity, would also be scaleable. This scale could be called a continuum of socioeconomic status. Thirdly, it was hypothesized that there would be a high positive correlation between the scale types on each continuum.
Useshort,familiarwords.Useshort,familiarwords.
DODOOne can tell from an aerial photograph where rich and poor people live The rich live in big
DODO
rich and poor people live. The rich live in big houses set far apart. The poor live in small houses set close together.houses set close together.
Prefertheshort,familiarwordPrefertheshort,familiarwordto the long unfamiliar wordto the long unfamiliar wordtothelong,unfamiliarword.tothelong,unfamiliarword.
Long, Unfamiliar Words Short, Familiar Words Shorten Do
AbbreviateAccomplish
Long, Unfamiliar Words Short, Familiar Words
Do About Find out
AccomplishApproximately
Ascertain Find out Begin M h
AscertainCommence
C id bl Much Decide H f l
ConsiderableDetermine
HarmfulDetrimental
Prefertheshort,familiarwordPrefertheshort,familiarwordto the long unfamiliar wordto the long unfamiliar wordtothelong,unfamiliarword.tothelong,unfamiliarword.
Long, Unfamiliar Words Short, Familiar Words Copy Height
DuplicateElevation
Long, Unfamiliar Words Short, Familiar Words
Height Equal Build
ElevationEquivalentFabricate Build
Give Vague
FabricateFurnish
Indeterminate g Show Useless
IndeterminateIndicate
Ineffectual
Prefertheshort,familiarwordPrefertheshort,familiarwordto the long unfamiliar wordto the long unfamiliar wordtothelong,unfamiliarword.tothelong,unfamiliarword.
Long Unfamiliar Words Short, Familiar Words Hinder Smallest
InterruptMinimal
Long, Unfamiliar Words Short, Familiar Words
Smallest Change Go
MinimalModification
Proceed Go Replace Last
ProceedSupersede
Ultimate Last Picture Proof
UltimateVisualize
Verification ProofVerification
Use Technical Language with Caution.Use Technical Language with Caution.Social SecuritySocial Securitys technical language found s technical language found yy g gg g
to be misunderstood by outsidersto be misunderstood by outsiders::
Technical Language Improved Version
Has worked long enough (under Social Security) to become
Has sufficient quarters of coverage to acquire an
Technical Language Improved Version
Social Security) to become insured.Family insurance paymentsA job covered by Social Security
coverage to acquire an insured status.Survivors benefitsCovered employment A job covered by Social Security
Worker who has diedTo apply for insurance payments
Covered employmentDeceased wage earnerTo file a claim
Workers past 65Aged workers
UseinitialsandacronymsUseinitialsandacronymswith cautionwith cautionwithcaution.withcaution.
What do these letters mean?
RFID FTC
Radio Frequency Identification Federal Trade Commission FTC
CDIPO
Federal Trade Commission Certificate of Deposit/Compact Disc Initial Public Offering IPO
RVNATO
Initial Public Offering Recreational Vehicle N th Atl ti T t O i ti NATO
IRS North Atlantic Treaty Organization Internal Revenue Service
PrefertheconcretetoPrefertheconcretetothe abstractthe abstracttheabstract.theabstract.
Abstract ConcreteOur research shows that 87 percent of those using this technique are successful
We have found that this technique is successful.
successful.Your department may hire three new stock clerks.We will ship the Moss No 41 desk sets
Your department may hire somenew employees.We will ship your order soon We will ship the Moss No. 41 desk sets
you ordered October 12 by Arrow Freight on October 15.Each of the branch managers will
We will ship your order soon.
Each of the branch managers will Each of the branch managers will received a 15 percent pay raise.This process requires a constant temperature of 10 degrees centigrade
Each of the branch managers will receive a substantial pay raise.This procedure requires a constant low temperature temperature of 10 degrees centigrade.low temperature.
Prefertheactivetothepassive.Prefertheactivetothepassive.Passive Active
I believe they padded the bill.
The president read your report.
It is believed that the bill was padded.Your report was read by the p y p
The treasurer prepares the profit and loss statement each month.
p ypresident.The profit and loss statement is prepared by the treasurer each
We suggest that you clean the element in warm, soapy water.
p p ymonth.It is suggested that you clean the element in warm, soapy water.
Mr. Wong wants you to bring this matter to the attention of the manager.
It is desired that every effort be made to have this matter brought to the attention of the manager.
PreferstrongverbstoverbsPreferstrongverbstoverbscamouflaged as nounscamouflaged as nounscamouflagedasnouns.camouflagedasnouns.
Camouflaged Verb Strong Verb
. . . classify . . .. . . make a classification . . .
Camouflaged Verb Strong Verb
. . . compute . . .. . . explore . . .
inform
. . . make a computation . . .. . . conduct an exploration . . .
provide information . . . inform . . .. . . negotiate . . .. . . observe . . .
. . . provide information . . .. . . engage in negotiation . . .. . . make an observation . . .
. . . represent . . .. . . provide representation . . .
PreferstrongverbstoverbsPreferstrongverbstoverbscamouflaged as nounscamouflaged as nounscamouflagedasnouns.camouflagedasnouns.
Camouflaged Verb Strong Verb
We canceled the order on the 12th.
Cancellation of the order was made on the 12th.
g g
The change eliminated the deficit.Ms Brown manages this
Elimination of the deficit was brought about by the change.The management of this office Ms. Brown manages this
office.The safety officer distributed
The management of this office is conducted by Ms. Brown.Distribution of the special
the special equipment.equipment was accomplished by the safety officer.
Choosethepreciseword.Choosethepreciseword.
The committee (comprises) (constitutes)The committee (comprises) (constitutes) representatives from all four sales districts.
This building site cost a large (sum) (amount) of g g ( ) ( )money.
She was (notorious) (noted) for her concern for ( ) ( )the poor.
We found no evidence that would (cause) (enable) us to support him.
The management of this store is independent (of) (from) the main office.
Choosethepreciseword.Choosethepreciseword.
She (claimed) (maintained) (said) that she was ill.She(claimed)(maintained)(said)thatshewasill. Heisangry(about)(with)theloss. I will try (to) (and) correct the errorIwilltry(to)(and)correcttheerror. Idiffer(with)(from)youonthisconclusion. If he is late I will not wait (for) (on) him longer than Ifheislate,Iwillnotwait(for)(on)himlongerthantenminutes.
She has an interest (in) (for) technical writingShehasaninterest(in)(for)technicalwriting.
SuggestionsforSuggestionsforNondiscriminatory WritingNondiscriminatory WritingNondiscriminatoryWritingNondiscriminatoryWriting
Avoid sexist pronouns byAvoidsexistpronounsby rewordingtoeliminatetheoffendingword,
ki h f l l d makingthereferenceplural,and substitutinganeutralexpression(heorshe,he/she,s/he,you,one,person).
Reword to eliminate the offending word.Reword to eliminate the offending word.gg
Sexist NonsexistWe will reimburse any employee for travel expenses
Sexist Nonsexist
We will reimburse any employee who paid his
paid.A customer who pays promptly is placed on our preferred list
travel expenses.If a customer pays promptly, he is placed on our preferred is placed on our preferred list.
A physician should treat
he is placed on our preferred list.A physician should treat his
patients with respect.patients with respect.
Makethereferenceplural.Makethereferenceplural.
Sexist NonsexistIfcustomerspaypromptly,they areplacedonourpreferredlist.When unauthorized employees
Ifacustomerpayspromptly,heisplacedonourpreferredlist.When an unauthorized employee Whenunauthorizedemployees
enterthesecurityarea,they aresubjecttodismissal.
bl f
Whenanunauthorizedemployeeentersthesecurityarea,heissubjecttodismissal.
bl f Supervisorsarenotresponsibleforsuchlossesifthey arenotnegligent.Whencustomersneedservice,they
Asupervisorisnotresponsibleforsuchlossesifheisnotnegligent.Whenacustomerneedsservice,itis
havetherighttoaskforit.herrighttoaskforit.
Substituteaneutralexpression.Substituteaneutralexpression.
Sexist Nonsexist
If a customer pays promptly, he or she is placed on our preferred
If a customer pays promptly, he is placed on our preferred list.
list.When an unauthorized employee enters the security area, he/she
When an unauthorized employee enters the security area, he is y ,
is subject to dismissal.A supervisor is not responsible for such losses if s/he is not
y ,subject to dismissal.A supervisor is not responsible for such losses if he is not for such losses if s/he is not
negligent.When service is needed, onehas the right to ask for it
for such losses if he is not negligent.When a customer needs service, it is her right to ask for it has the right to ask for it.it is her right to ask for it.
AvoidwordswithaAvoidwordswithamasculine originmasculine originmasculineorigin.masculineorigin.
Sexist Nonsexistmanufactured, of human originpersonnel, workers
man-mademanpower
representative, member of Congressbusiness executive, businesspersonletter carrier mail carrier
congressmanbusinessmanmailman letter carrier, mail carrier
police officerfire fighter
mailmanpolicemanfireman
camera operatorserver
cameramanwaiter/waitress
MasculineMasculinesoundingWordssoundingWordsNo Masculine OriginNo Masculine OriginNoMasculineOriginNoMasculineOrigin
manufacturemanufacture management historyhistory manipulate mannequin mannequin manicure mandolin mandolin histrionichi t i histamine
Avoid words that lower oneAvoid words that lower ones status.s status.
Instead of Use
my girllady doctor
my secretary doctorlady doctor
authoressactress
doctor author actor
poetesssculptress
male nurse
poet sculptor nursemale nurse
male secretary nurse secretary
GenerallyavoidwordsthatstereotypeGenerallyavoidwordsthatstereotypebybybyby
Race ahardworkingAfricanAmerican anhonestSicilian
Age goldenageryoungster youngster
Disability deaf and dumbdeafanddumb crippled
SexualOrientation homosexual gay
Why use two words when one will do.
Thomas Jefferson--Thomas Jefferson