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Being Forthright. Precise. Clear. Forthright. Familiar. Concise. Fluid. Short words are the best, and old words, when short, are best of all . Winston Churchill. NYP 45063. Use strong nouns and strong verbs. Nouns. Verbs. Control tone. tone. - PowerPoint PPT Presentation
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Being Forthright
Short words are the best, and old words, when short, are best of all.
Winston Churchill
Concise
Familiar
Clear
Fluid
Precise
Forthright
NYP 45063
To make your language forthright, you should control tone and use strong nouns and verbs
Use strong nouns and strong verbs
Nouns
Verbs
Control tone
tone
arrogantcasual
obfuscated silly
forthright
Tone is the attitude that the writershows about the subject
much; many
For formal situations, do not use informal language
a lot of
But...
And...
&
btw
vs.
However,...
In addition,...
and
by the way
versus
Many scientists and engineers conveyarrogance in their writing
As is well known, the use of gaseous insulation is becoming increasingly more widespread, with gases such as air and sulfur hexafluoride featuring prominently. There has been some discussion of using gas mixtures like nitrogen and sulfur hexafluoride, and of course nitrogen is the major constituent of air.
Obviously,...
Tone often goes out of controlin correspondence
For the facilitation of this end, Division 8463 willinterface with Division 8265.
As per your request...I beg to differ with...Enclosed please find...
The liquid propellant fuel experienced an unscheduled partial disassembly.
Clichés are expressions that are too familiar
When you come up to speed, I'll touch basewith you and we'll knock heads together!
I am in search of a meaningful growth position, and your company is a gateway to the highest professional levels and beyond…
sly as a foxbusy as a beefaster than a speeding bullet
To make your language forthright, you should control tone and use strong nouns and verbs
Use strong nouns and strong verbs
Nouns
Verbs
Control tone
tone
Experimental design is a method of efficiently performing a comparative analysis. Specifically, a 23 design compares the main effects and the interactive effects of three variables on a final measured characteristic. The use of experimental design results in correct problem structuring, efficient experimentation, and data analysis leading to correct conclusions.
Relying on abstract nouns weakens the writing
Experimental design is a method of efficiently performing a comparative analysis. Specifically, a 23 design compares the main effects and the interactive effects of three variables on a final measured characteristic. The use of experimental design results in correct problem structuring, efficient experimentation, and data analysis leading to correct conclusions.
Relying on abstract nouns weakens the writing
Weak verbs hide the energy of your work
A new process for eliminating nitrogen oxides from diesel exhaust engines is presented. Flow tube experiments to test this process are discussed. The percentage decrease in nitrogen oxide emissions is revealed.
can
Also, the tighter the verb form,the stronger the verb
is capable of
is composed of
is used to detect
makes a decision
makes a measurement of
performs the development of
consists of
detects
decides
measures
develops
Needlessly passive verbs slow your writing
Misconception: Scientific writing must be written in the passive voice.
Needless Passive Active
1. Allow inanimate objects to act
2. Use the first person judiciously
Problems can arise using the activevoice with inanimate objects
Safe
Dangerous
The oscilloscope displayedthe voltage.
The oscilloscope measuredthe voltage.
V
+
-
The oscilloscope calculatedthe voltage. V=
Misconception: In scientific writing,you cannot use the first person.
Misconception: In scientific writing,you cannot use the first person.
Users of the First Person
Einstein
Feynman
Darwin
Crick
Maxwell Faraday
Freud Curie
Non-Users of the First Person
It was decided that...
It was assumed that...
It was realized then that...
Using the first person is fine as long as the emphasis remains on the work
Avoiding the first person often convolutes sentences
In that an effort to identify a specific control circuit responsible for the failure of the gear box was unsuccessful, it was determined appropriate to resurvey the collector field for torque tube damage.
Because we could not locate the control circuitresponsible for the gear box failure, we resurveyedthe collector field for torque tube damage.
Weak verbs hide the energy of your work
A new process for eliminating nitrogen oxides from diesel exhaust engines is presented. Flow tube experiments to test this process are discussed. The percentage decrease in nitrogen oxide emissions is revealed.
This paper presents a new process for eliminating nitrogen oxides from the exhaust of diesel engines. To test this process, we performed experiments in flow tubes. These experiments revealed a 99 percent decrease in nitrogen oxide emissions.
Being Forthright
Short words are the best, and old words, when short, are best of all.
Winston Churchill
Concise
Familiar
Clear
Fluid
Precise
Forthright
NYP 45063