Writing Task I MAP
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The diagram below shows the various stages involved in the
production of
beer.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main
features.
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The diagram shows the process of production beer. Overall, the
whole process is
divided nine stages.
In the first stage, malted barley is milled by a machine. After
milling, the milled
barley is mixed with hot water in a vat to mash. Next, the mash
is pumped to a
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Comment [h2]: Following this / After being milled
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WATER nh
Comment [h4]: Pumped into
Writing Task I MAP
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machine in order to extract the liquid from the grains. The
grains are used to
produce animal feed and the liquid is moved into a tank where it
is boiled with
sugar and hops. As soon as the boiling process finishes, the
boiled hops and liquid
are set into a whirlpool for whirling. After the mixture
substances are cooled by a
machine, they undergo the process of fermenting in a large tank.
At this stage,
yeast is added to the mixture to produce the beer. After the
beer is matured in a
tank, it is pumped in a filter to maintain.
In the final stage, the beer is put into bottles, cans and bulk
tanks to supply to
customers.
nh gi chung: 5.75 6.0
Task Achievement: 6.0 ( Bi nhn chung cover c cc quy trnh cn
cp
sn xut bia. Tuy nhin i ch vn cha r rng, cn b sung r hn thng
tin
v d nh cu Overview chng hn, cn ni thm l quy trnh bt u v kt thc
t
u)
Cohenrence : 6.0 ( T chc thng tin , cc trong bi tm n, tng i d
theo
di. Tuy nhin i ch cha chnh xc v d nh on anh comment l hot
water trn)
Lexical Resource: 6.0 ( T vng sai hi nhiu v gii t i km )
Grammatical Range v Accuracy: 5.5 ( Em s dng cu n l ch yu, cu
trc
ng php cng cha a dng. Bi ny ly 6.0 tiu ch ng php, nn s dng
mnh quan h ni cc cu, to s a dng, phc tp v ng php)
Comment [h5]: Into
Comment [h6]: Is packed in bottles
Comment [h7]: Delievered by trucks
