Australia Essay Recap!

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KUDOS!!!

• Great MLA format• Nice job uniting thesis and topic sentences as

well as quote selection• Nice job avoiding weak words and the

informal I/YOU

Memorable Formal Titles

• Popular Terrain: The Varying Relationships to the Land in Australia

• Survival: The Mental and Physical Challenges in Australian Literature

• The Will to Survive: Extraordinary Literary Tales of Life in Old Australia

• Unjust Treatment: How Characters in Australia Literature are Unjustly Punished

Interesting, Relevant Hooks

• “Everyone has a prison cell, but the difference is what form it takes. What does it mean to be “imprisoned” or free? In “Breaking a Man’s Spirit” by Marcus Clarke, “Absalom Day’s Promotion” by…”

Topic Sentences

• “In Colin Johnson’s “Dr Wooreddy’s Prescription for Enduring the End of the World” the main character, Dr. Wooreddy, resists the colonizing Europeans’ authority, even though he appears to be assimilating into their culture”.

Quotes

• Quotes MUST be introduced• No quotes should stand alone• Ensure clear context

• ALL QUOTES SHOULD HAVE THOROUGH FOLLOW UP explaining how the quote is an example supporting the topic sentence/thesis statement

Excellent Quote Example

• “Wooreddy does not approve of this and is joyous when he kills a kangaroo: “[h]e would feed his sons real food, and not that white junk their mother too often served up” (Johnson 87). It is clear that Wooreddy is resisting assimilation, and wants to remain free of European influence.

Smooth Transitions

• Transition between body paragraphs into the next….this will help the flow

• Like the portrayal of Mangana’s survival, one had to assimilate into white culture and leave their Aboriginal past behind- much like the convicts that left their old lives in England behind.

– Example of a transition from “Absalom Day’s..” to “The Drover’s Wife” paragraph• Convicts were not the only people to be imprisoned

within Australia, and the settler perspective reveals this.

Conclusions

• Recap the main point in each paragraph “The characters in these works make

important decisions based pm their own personal price for freedom. For Rufus Dawes, his cost of freedom was low, but he did not want to pay up. Dawes eventually gave in, but it required weeks of solitary confinement and torture. In the case of Absalom Day, his cost of freedom was higher than simply admitting defeat. Day would have to execute eleven other prisoners and all future prisoners to be hanged… In each of these cases, the main characters make sacrifices to obtain their freedom.”

Rewrites• Old draft must have all of my comments

checked off, with the changes applied to the new draft

• Your new draft must have the highlighted changes

• I will take these (new and old draft) until Wednesday 11:00 (hand to me or put in my mailbox!!).

• Missing Something? Come in Wednesday between 9:00-11:00 to retake