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During the the peer workshop we got into small groups and read each others assignment one. As we were reading over it, we had to make a peer review. We had to write five comments that were 3-5 sentences. The feedback was very helpful because it helped me catch things that i missed. Some of the feedback was not helpful because it was asking for me to talk about something that i had already addressed in my paper. I revised my paper by adding more detail and explaining in more depth.

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  • Assignment One Mariah Romero

    Background Information: It is set in a town called Rosewood in Pennsylvania. This show follows a group of friends, Aria Montgomery, Hannah Marin, Spencer Hastings, and Emily Fields. They fell apart when the leader of their group Alison DiLaurentis. One year later, this group of girls received a text message from a mysterious person named A who threatens to expose their deepest darkest secrets. They join forces to figure out who this A person is and they gather the different clues that A left them. Figured world: A figured world is a large social structure that has specific rules and convections for appropriate behaviors.

    Pretty Little Liars is about four girls, Hannah, Spencer, Aria and Emily. Who are trying to figure out who killed their friend Alison. The Killer was known as A and this A person tormented the girls by black mailing them with their dark secrets, coming after their family, etc. It is mostly placed in the girls town Rosewood. I plan to focus on season 3 because that is when who we thought was A changed and it the show atmosphere. The communication is mainly done through cell phones and in person conversation. The A person only contacted the girls through texting or leaving messages on walls. Many times the girls will meet in the coffee shop to discuss the different clues that they have received from A or they are at each others houses. Loud noises are a major distraction because in their town is was quiet and when loud noises happen it usually is not a good thing. Most of the times it is when A is scaring the girls or attacking them. It is expected for to a clue from A and for the girls to get closer to trying to find out who this A person was and what happened to Alison. Its acceptable to keep secrets from adults or from other close friends that are outside of the group. Its inappropriate to get close to new comers right off the back and to let them know what is going on. The Community of practice would be Aria, Hannah, Spencer, Emily because they are all working together to figure out who is targeting them and why.

    Actors: Actors is a person that plays a specific role within the community.

    Hannah Marin: Once was overweight and was mocked by Allison for it. After Allisons death, Hannah lost a much of weight and became the it-girl of the group. She took over Alisons spot as the most popular girl in Rosewood High. She is not the brightest but she sticks up for her friends through everything.

    Spencer Hastings: Is the brains of the group. Very intelligent and ambitious, she tries to live up to her parents high expectations by being perfect in everything she does. Her biggest rival is her older sister, Melissa.

    Emily Fields: Is the jock of the group, she was a competitive swimmer on Rosewoods swim team. She is the sweetest and shy of the group. She is very trusting of others. She was the closest to Alison before she died.

    Aria Montgomery: Is the most outgoing in fashion and she picks what she sees fits for acceptable behavior. She began a relationship with an older man named Ezra, who turns out to be her English teacher. Most of the drama happened around her love life and family life.

    A: A is the antagonist of the story. A is a person who is going after Allisons friends (Hannah, Aria, Spencer, Emily) and A is the suspect for Alisons murder. A knows all the

    Comment [Office1]: This introduction is very vague. Instead of using words like "it" or "this show", use the name of the show in your beginning sentences. This will prevent any confusion for the reader. - Lauren Bray Comment [Office2]: I think you forgot to complete this statement. It is unclear to me what happened to Alison DiLaurentis. You should add to the sentence. Gary Watts

    Comment [Office3]: Good job including this, but I would give examples of secrets they have hidden or any other rules and conventions that take place. Including examples will help the reader to understand why this behavior is appropriate/inappropriate. Maybe give some examples of threats that they receive or why they behave the way they do. - Lauren Bray Comment [Office4]: All the actors examples are great. You used great detail and gave good characters descriptions. This very helpful to the reader. Gary Watts

    Comment [Office5]: The actor descriptions were great. They were detailed and gave enough background information on the characters. I feel like I know the characters better now. Gary Watts

  • girls secrets, where they are, what they are doing at all times. In the second season we find out who A is and it turns out to be Hannahs close friend Mona. Mona hated Alison due to Allison bullying her. Mona is very smart and sneaky but the real question did Mona do everything by herself or did she help? Is there more As lurking around?

    Artifacts: Artifacts are the ideas, physical objects, emotions that has a meaning to that community.

    The main emotion throughout the show is being scared: Hannah, Spencer, Emily, and Aria are always having to look over their shoulders for A in fear of their secrets being release in the air or A coming after their family.

    Communities of Practice: A community of practice is where those people who share similar interests grow together as people. Where they do different activities together as well as helping and sharing information with each other.

    The Parents of the girls all share with each other about their concerns for their daughters behavior. They share each their experiences with one another.

    Domain: Is a group of people who share a common interest in some field, if they have a membership to said domain they have a commitment to the domain and distinguishes them from other members.

    A group: they all had problems with Allison/ the rest of the girls and they want revenge for it.

    Practices of the community: This is essentially a group of people who work together. They share similar stories and resources such as people in their network or maybe a way of addressing a reoccurring problem.

    Hannah, Spencer, Emily, and Aria: They are working together to figure out who is blackmailing them and why that person is doing what they doing to them.

    The Police: They are trying to solve Mayas murder and Alisons missing body/casket.

    Literacy Practices: It is the ways to commutating that is either written or spoken in person. Texting: The main communication through out all show. This was the main way for A

    to communicates with the girls.

    Observations: Pretty Little Lairs

    Season 3, Episode one It Happened That Night

    3 mins- Season starts off by recapping what the major shocks that happened in season 2. Which was that Mona being A, Officer Garrett Reynolds was charged with the Murder of Alison DiLaurentis, and Emilys love interest Maya was murdered. After the recap the scene is place in Spencers house and Aria, Hannah, Emily and Spencer are sitting around the fireplace, drinking and talking what they did over the summer. As the girls talk they are all laughing and joking but Emily was drinking way more than the rest of the girls and seem to be more down than the others. Spencer makes a toast to them making it to Senior year and everyone cheer but Emily as she said Not everyone made it talking about Maya who was killed. The atmosphere changed

    Comment [Office6]: Adding this background of A helps the readers who have never watched the show understand A's intentions. You did an adequate job at describing the characters and it was all very well organized. You kept it neat enough and not too complicated, even though it's a very complicated story line! - Lauren Bray

    Comment [Office7]: Highlight the artifact that you are talking about. The description is good but I don't know what the artifact is. Explain what "A" is. Michael Rowlands

    Comment [Office8]: I think your definition for domain is great. However, you could add to the example of domain. I don't know who "they" is and you could be more specific. Gary Watts

    Comment [Office9]: Your definition of Literacy Practice is well written. I would add a little more detail to the example though. Explain what "A" is. Michael Rowlands

    Comment [Office10]: Including this recap is helpful to the reader because they can more easily pick up on what's going on now and why. If you didn't include this recap, it would be very confusing. You showed that you are considering the reader. - Lauren Bray

  • instantly it became very sad and silent as the girls thought about Maya. Emily then says To Maya in a very sad low voice while taking slip from her cup. Hanna comforts Emily and the rest of them said To Maya also in low sad voices. 7 mins- Aria wakes up Hannah and finds Spencers back door being open. Spencer comes down stairs saying that she could not find Emily anywhere. Hannah quickly grabs her phone and starts calling Emilys phone. The scene goes to Emily holding her phone in her hand as it ringing and having a shovel in the other hand. Emily looks like she is in a trace. The camera zooms out and we see Emily is standing at the end of an open gravel which happens to be Alisons gravel and the casket is open with no body in it. The theme song of the show comes and afterwards we come back to being in the cemetery, the rest of the girls are with Emily trying to figure out how she got there in the first place. Spencer ask Emily for her phone and looks through it, she finds that Emily received a block call. Spencer ask Emily if she remembers who she talked to but Emily is still very drunk and only remembers being at Spencers house one minute and then the next she is at the grave getting the call from Hannah. Spencer still looking through Emilys phone, finds that Emily had actually gotten a call at midnight from herself but Spencer was asleep during that time. Spencer quickly takes out her phone and realizes that someone had been in her house and used her phone to call Emily. Spencer quickly also realizes that it was a set up, Hannah and Aria grabs the shovel and buries it. Back at Spencers house, Spencer buries the clothes Emily was wearing and they talked about Officer Garrett Reynolds and who helped him kill Allison and Maya. 14 mins- After Hannah and Aria got rid of the shovel, they were sitting in Hannahs car when they spotted Lucas coming out of a building and they duck down and watch him as he leaves off. In the next scene, all the girls left to go to Spencers cabin so that they can talk about what happened last night at the graveyard. At the cabin everyone agreed that what happened that night did not happen. The story they are going to tell was that they talked about how wonderful senior year is going to be, ate some marshmallows, and went to sleep at Spencers house. Aria at first wanted to go to the police but Hannah talked her out of it since they really had no evidence. Emily was shaken by last night also was talked into agreeing with the story. The scene cuts to Aria waking up from a nightmare at her boyfriend/English teacher, Ezras apartment. Ezra knowing about A comforts her and tells her that A can not hurt her anymore. Ezra then picks up the newspaper and asks Aria if she had heard about Allison body being taken out of the ground. Ezra starts talking about what connection Maya had to Alison that would have lead to Garrett killing her. Ezra asks Aria what was coming up and Aria responded it was Labor day which also is Alisons one-year anniversary of being gone. The scene cuts to Hannah shopping with her mom. Spencers mom (the defense attorney) comes into the store to talk to Hannahs mom about the case against Garrett. Also about how the girls were finally having a normal life. 25 mins- Hannah goes visits Mona (A) in mental intuition. Hannah is trying to get through Mona but Mona is silent and is staring right through her. Hannah really just wanted figure out what happen to make Mona hate her and why she did what she did to her and the girls. Hannah did not get anything from her so she left. The scene cuts to all the girls at school, Spencer and Aria are talking about how Arias dad is still not okay with her dating Ezra. Then Aria goes into the bathroom and as her was in the stall she hears some noise. She calls out is there someone here?. She then spots someone wearing all black with their hood on (this is what A would

  • wear). Aria begins to panic as she fears that it is A even though Mona is locked away. This person goes up the stall and Aria begins screaming. Soon after Hannah and Spencer come in the bathroom and finds Aria on the bathroom floor, scared out of her mind and crying. Hannah and Spencer comfort her and reassuring that Mona was locked up and can not hurt them anymore. 30 mins- Aria is helping her pack her things since her mom and dad are separating due to having a lot of problems in their relationship. Aria blames them separating on her relationship with Ezra. Arias mom reassures her that was not the case. The scene cuts to Emily in the coffee shop and Toby walks up to her. They begin to talk about how toby moved out and he said how much he is glad to be free. Emily asked about how Jenna (his sister) is doing, he reply that he does not really know. They then begin to talk about what happened to Allison grave site and he was just disgusted with whoever could do that and Emily is trying to put on a brave face and seem like she does not know about what happen. Emily then says she had something important to tell him. The scene is then cut to Spencer sitting in her car at night. She gets out of her car in front of a closed down resort called Lost Woods Resort. She begins to walk into the woods.

    Season 3, Episode 2 Blood is the New Black

    3 mins- This episode starts off with Spencer, Aria, and Emily in class. Arias mom is teaching the class and as she is talking about everyone needs to take notes, Emily is going through her bag when she pulls out this necklace with teeth on it and it said Dead Girls Cant Smile. Emily freaks out and runs out of class, Aria and Spencer run after her. Emily runs passes Hannah going towards the bathroom all the girls now follow her to bathroom, confused about what happened. Hannah, Spencer, and Aria walk into the bathroom to find Emily still upset and washing her hands. Aria asks Emily what was wrong so Emily pulls out the necklace and hands it to Aria. Aria freaks and passes it to Hannah who then passes it to Spencer. Aria ask if those were real teeth and if they were Alisons teeth. Emily who is still freaked out and wanted the necklace gone. Aria starts to get mad and saying how someone stole Allisons bones and now are they going to start getting pieces of her too. Spencer still looking at the teeth, says that the teeth are not even human. But Hannah said they was real human teeth. 7 mins- While the girls were talking the necklace, they heard girls coming into the bathroom, so they all rush into a stall. Aria starts talking about how they need to go to the police and stop digging themselves a hole. Aria believes that A is trying to frame them for Alisons body being gone. Spencer strongly disagrees being that they have already lied to the police before. Emily does not want to get the rest of the girls in trouble so she volunteers to take the blame for everything. The other girls disagree with her and then Emily says just get rid of the necklace. Hannah grabs for the necklace and Aria having it in her hand drops it into the toilet. Spencer starts to reach into the toilet for the necklace but then the school bell rang and she moved her hand which caused for the toilet to flush, causing them to lose the necklace. Spencer wants Hannah to go visit Mona at Radley to get more information out of her and Spencer was going to go to Garret to also get more information. While walking through the halls Emily was expressing to Aria and Emily about how she might fail the 11th grade and how she missed a lot of school. As they were talking Aria notices a blonde woman talking to the principal and she figures out who it is was, it is Meredith Sorenson (Arias Dad had affair with Meredith).

  • 14 mins- Aria questioned Meredith about why she was at her school. And Meredith said she was applying for the open teaching job. As Spencer is talking to Garret, he hints at the fact that some has been lying to her about their medical records. Spencer all confused asks him if it was Alison, he didnt respond and then she asks if it was Jennas and he doesnt respond either. He motions for the prison guard to take him back. Spencer still asking if it was Jennas records he was talking about. Hannah is now at Radley talking to Mona, telling about the stuff that has been happening at school, trying to get Mona to talk to her. Mona does not respond and just stares at Hannah. Hannah gets very upset and starts telling Mona how she owes her since Hannah did not tell the police about Mona trying to run her over. Emily meets Ezra for help for her make up English exam. Emily was very uncomfortable with Ezra being that he is dating Aria. 25 mins- Spencer ask Toby whether of not he knew where Jenna went after music camp. Toby didnt really know because his parents were trying to give her space after her eye surgery (she was blind because of Alison) didnt work. The girls were at school walking to Arias locker and when she opened it, she found an envelope with an earring in it. It then goes into a flashback with Aria and Alison breaking into Arias fathers office to see if they can find any evidence that he was still seeing Meredith. Alison finds an earring in the couch that matches the earring that was in Arias locker in the present time. Aria then looks in the couch and finds the other matching earring. Aria gets mad at the fact her father is still seeing Meredith and Alison tells her the best way to get Meredith out of her life to show her father the type of person she is. So they began to destroy he office and make it seem like Meredith did it. Now it flashes back to the present time. Hannah ask if Aria been keeping it and she responds no because she put the earrings in Alisons casket. So the girls now know someone stole them out of Alisons grave. Spencers mom finds out she went to the prison to see Garrett. Her mom tells her to never go back because it was not Spencers job to question him about what happened. 30 mins- Aria is sitting in her room looking at the earning, when she gets a text from A saying Daddy needs to know. Or I let the other one go. To the police. Night-Night. A. Aria then hears movement outside of her window and she looks around but didnt see anyone. The next day Aria tells her dad that it wasnt Meredith that trash his office, it was her. Her dad gets upset because he nearly called the police on her and said some harsh words to her. Her demanded that she gives Meredith an apology. Toby shows Spencer Jennas eye drops that was used for when she got her surgery and Toby thinks that Jenna can actually see because she keeps renewing her prescription for the eye drops.

    Season 3, Episode 3

    Kingdom of the blind 3 mins- The girls find out that Jenna can actually see and that she has been faking it. As they were walking the hall, they hear the principal yelling at Lucas about his grades. Lucas walks in front of them and gives them a dirty look and walks away. Hannah follows him and asks him what happened. He said that he wasnt being a positive student anymore and that was negatively impacted his grades. He then pulls out a lighter and burns the paper and throws it in the trash can. Hannah freaks out and tries to put out the fire but Caleb comes to her rescue and puts it out. He is very confused on what happened.

  • 7 mins- Hannah explains to Caleb what happened in the class with Lucas. Caleb is trying to convinces Hannah that Lucas is just going through a phase of being a bad boy. Hannah wants Caleb to go talk to Lucas and Caleb said he doesnt want Hannah to go to Radley to see Mona again. Aria tries to get closer to Jenna to expose her about being able to see. The girls talk about how Jenna might be apart of the A team and they began to talk about whoever took Alisons casket has all the stuff they put in there. Emily talks about how it might be a trap though. Suddenly Emily get a text from Arias mom about her English make up test. Emily got a 94% on her test and she knows it now right because she left the back of the test blank. Emily thinks someone went in and changed her grade. 14 mins- Caleb goes and talks to Lucas and what is bothering him. Caleb tells Lucas that he knows about A and Lucas hits that its not over and he shouldnt be close when it happens. Emily goes to talk to Arias Mom about her grade and ask her if it was correct. She recurs Emily that her grade is correct. Emily expresses to her that she couldnt have gotten a 94 on the test because she did not complete the test and how she thinks someone did something the test before she got it and that she did not do it. Arias mom tells Emily that her grade is correct and her test was completed. Spencer and Melissa (her sister) was at home and Spencer asks her about Washington. Their mom walks in and has to talk to both of them. She tells them that she is going to resent Garrett in his case and she was doing it for free. Spencer is very upset at this because she does not understand why her mom would defend him after he killed Maya. Spencer is also upset that Melissa is not saying anything about it and she said that it had nothing to do with her. Emily tells Aria that she thinks her mom finished her test for her and Aria does not think its a bad thing being that it isnt A. Spencer asks Melissa how does she feel about their mom working on Garrett case and Melissa does not feel anything about it. 25 mins- Aria is playing the keyboard in Jennas house as Jenna is playing the flute. Jenna begins to ask about how Emily was and talked about Emily sounds strong but she thinks she can only handle so much Aria talks about how someone took Alisons casket. The girls are back at Spencers house and they are talking about Spencers mom is defending Garrett. Hannah talks about how maybe Garrett was the one who got Melissa pregnant and thats why Spencer mom is doing what she doing for him. Spencer does not want to believe that her sister got pregnant by Garrett. Hannah goes visit Mona again at Radley. Mona this time is talking and happier. Mona said they changed her meds. As Hannah is leaving she sees Lucas go into Radley visiting someone. 30 mins- As Hannah walks out of Radley she sees Caleb waiting outside for her. He is very mad that she came back after they had a deal that she wouldnt go back. Caleb starts calling Mona a crazy person and Hannah starts defending her saying that he doesnt understand her. She needs help and Hannah wants answer to what happen with Mona. Hannah then notices Lucas leaving Radley. Hannah questions Lucas about visiting Mona and he said that she doesnt even know if Mona is really crazy or not. Hannah doesnt understand why Mona would fake being crazy and Lucas explain how it was better and safer than being in prison. Hannah ad Aria are in Hannahs car watching to see what Jenna is doing. Spencer posing as her sister calls the hospital that Melissa said that she was at, to get an abortion. But the lady on the phone said they had no record of Melissa being there.

  • Interview Questions:

    Interviewed Cameron Brophy

    1. Why do you believe Maya was killed? - Nates revenge for not loving him - Knowing something about Alison

    2. Tell me what you like about this season of Pretty Little Liars? - We find out more about Monas life as A - Adds more mystery to the story line.

    3. Do you believe Mona is only person being A? Why or why not? - No, it is too difficult for one person to handle

    4. Why does Hannah, Spencer, Emily, and Aria choose not to go to the police? - They are afraid that A would do something to hurt them or their families

    5. How do u think the story line would change if Mona was not A at all? - It would definitely be different because no one else had as big of a motive as she did

    to become A

    Comment [Office11]: This answer may come across as partial info to the reader. What may he know about Alison? Why does he think that this could be a reason for Maya's death? This question was a little too broad and I wish it would have asked for more explanation from the interviewer. - Lauren Bray

    Comment [Office12]: Your interview answers could be longer. The answers are short and could be explained. You did have some great questions though. Gary Watts