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Free Response: Comparative Essay
AP World History Writing WorkshopJulia M. Hyman
BISD K-12 Social Studies Consultant
Comparative Essay• The final free-response essay--comparative question that focuses on developments in two or more societies, and their interactions with each other or with major themes or events (e.g. culture, trade, religion, technology, migrations).
•You'll have 40 minutes to write the essay. It's recommended that you spend five minutes planning and/or outlining your answer before you begin writing.
Scoring GuidelinesBasic CORE: Competency Possible Points: 0 - 6
Has an acceptable thesis 1 point
Address all parts of the question 2 points
Substantiates thesis with appropriate historical evidence
2 points
Makes at least two relevant, direct comparisons among or
between societies
1 point
Expanded CORE: Excellence Possible Points : 0 - 3
Basic CORE of six points must be obtained before the expanded CORE can be earned.
Acceptable ThesisState directlyLocate at either the beginning or end of essay—do not split
Must include both similarities and differences
Focus on Subordinating Conjunctions!!
Format of the Thesis Sentence for a Comparative Essay
___________, coordinating conjunction ___________. (Coordinate: Of Equal Value use coordinating conjunction with a full sentence on either
side. Use words such as and, or, but, neither/nor, either/or, not only/but also)
If you need to show a relationship or demonstrate causality, go with one of the following formats:
_____________; subordinating conjunction, ________.
(Value one over the other use a subordinating conjunction. See Chart.)
Subordinating conjunction ____________, _________. (Value one over the other use a subordinating conjunction. See Chart.)
Subordinating ConjunctionsConcession
(Provide help on the thesis)
Compare Contrast
Although like although
Though same however
Even though both differ
While it may be true the same as unlike
In spite of similar even though
Granted that in the same way yet
Whereas most important but
While similarly instead
as on the contrary
too whereas
as well as while
compared to unless
and contrary to
or the reverse
Consider this Question:Compare and contrast the political and
economic effects of Mongol rule on TWO of the following regions:
China Middle East Russia
Address All Parts of the Question:Break Down the Prompt:
Compare and contrast the political and economic effects of Mongol rule on TWO of the following regions:
China Middle East Russia
Address all four parts = 2 full pointsAddress only two – three parts = 1 pointAddress only one part = 0 points
Brainstorm What You Know: 5 MinutesPolitical Evidence Economic Evidence
China •Kept modified civil service system•Upper level bureaucracy reserved for Mongols•Yaun Dynasty: Kublai Khan direct rule•General benevolence when no resistance•Religious toleration to consolidate rule
•Maintained Silk Roads, Postal System during ; safe travel encouraged international trade•Facilitated commerce and communication
Middle East •Ruthless annihilation of resistance (terror tactics)•Indirect rule: regents for the Khan
•Canal system destroyed•Sacked and destroyed Baghdad
Russia •General benevolence when no resistance•Religious toleration to consolidate rule; Russian Orthodoxy flourished•Heavy Taxes levied and collected by Moscow Princes•Indirect rule: regents for the Khan
•Outlet for the fur trade from Russia•Maintained Silk Roads, Postal System during ; safe travel encouraged international trade•Facilitated commerce and communication
2 or 3 historic examples = 1 point (One piece of evidence can count for more than one region if it is specifically explained for each region.)
•4 historic examples = 2 points
Format of the Thesis Sentence for a Comparative Essay
The Mongols had significant political and economic impact on both Russia and China during their rule, but China experienced a greater impact due to direct rule than did Russia under rule by proxy.
China and Russia both benefitted economically from Mongol rule; however, China experienced greater political intervention during the Mongol reign.
Although Russia and China both benefitted economically from Mongol rule, China benefitted more politically under Mongol direction.
Direct ComparisonsNeed at least two direct comparisons of the
regionsMay be either comparison or contrastOne must be politicalOne must be economic
Earn 1 point
Expanded CORE PointsCan only be earned if you receive a 6 on the
basic CORELooking for:
Clear, analytical and comprehensive thesisBalanced treatment of both regionsBalanced treatment of both similarities and
differencesBalanced treatment of both political and
economic analysesAmple historical evidenceComparisons in a larger global context