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Writing ExpressACDV 65/ English 60
Professor ParksOnly for
Spring 2014
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Student Questionnaire
name ____________________________
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(kindly, attach a picture of you)Please answer the following questions in complete
sentences.
1. When did you finish high school? What high school did you attend?
2. Why did you choose to attend B.C.?
3. What is your career goal?
4. How will writing help you achieve your goals?
5. What are your strengths as a writer?
6. What are your strengths as a student?
7. What newspapers or magazines do you read on a regular basis?
8. What do you write about in your spare time?
Fill in your school (specific classes) and work schedule.
name ________________________
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address __________________________________
phone __________________________
email ________________________________
Monday Tuesday Wednesday Thursday Friday _______________________________________________________8AM________________________________________________________9 AM__________________________________________________________10AM
_______________________________________________________11 AM_______________________________________________________12 Noon _______________________________________________________1 PM _______________________________________________________2 PM _______________________________________________________3 PM_______________________________________________________4 PM_______________________________________________________5 PM_______________________________________________________6 PM_______________________________________________________7 PM
Fill in the blanks about students in the class
Classmates.....................
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.......who have children .....who play an instrument or sing
1. 1.
2. 2.
3. 3.
.......who have read a good book ...who were not born in Bakersfield
1. 1.
2. 2.
3. 3.
....who have pets ......who like sports1. 1.
2. 2.
3. 3.
....who have favorite foods .... who have had embarrassing moments
1. 1.
2. 2.
3. 3.
Quick Write - Write for 3 to 5 minutes on your impressions of this class (you can include your
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thoughts on the instructor, coursework, books, and classmates).
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PREPOSITIONS
about down regarding
above during since
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across except through
after for throughout
against from to
along in toward
amid inside under
among into underneath
around like until
at near up
atop of upon
before off with
behind on within
below onto without
beneath out
beside outside
between over
beyond past
but (meaning except)
by concerning
Exercise: Run-onsCorrect each run-on by putting a period at the end of
the first complete thought and a capital letter at the beginning of the second complete thought.
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Some of the run-ons may be three complete thoughts.
1. I got to the sale too late no sweatshirts were left.
2. He came home tired and hungry he ate and took a nap.
3. The beach was once beautiful, now soda cans and discarded
candy wrappers are everywhere.
4. The private school down the street just closed down it ran out of
money.
5. The car needed to be vacuumed the kids emptied the sand from
their shoes.
6. It rained a lot last winter, we turned the sprinklers off.
7. Our son misbehaved at school he went to the principal’s office.
8. Mindy uses the cartoon section of the newspaper as wrapping
paper it saves money and the environment all her friends like it.
9. Ted bought a cell phone the instructions were impossible to
understand he asked a friend for help.
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Exercise: Fragments and run-ons.Identify which of the below are sentences, fragments, or run-ons. Fix the fragments by adding words. Fix the run-ons by adding a period.
_________ 1. On the way to the hospital.
_________2. She got the paper and took it in the house.
_________3. Darlene ran a red light, luckily she didn’t hit anyone.
_________4. The waiting room was full she had a long wait.
_________5. Henry was glad that he had brought a book.
_________6. Cats are cute. Especially long-haired ones.
_________7. I was unhappy about the school's dirty bathrooms I found others who we also unhappy we complained. Things changed.
________8. At finals time, many students are in the library studying for tests, writing term papers, and reading their text books, so if you want a desk or a computer, get there early.
_________9. Get up.
_________10. To run down the street.
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Exercise: Cross out the prepositional phrase. Underline the subject once and the verb/verb phrase twice. Put parenthesis around any infinitives.
1. A bird is sitting on our sidewalk.2. Take this to the train station with you.3. Many large hotels have been built along the beach.4. The gardener and his helper have finished all their work.5. The children ate lunch, rested under the trees, and swam
in the pool.6. They didn’t want to drive so far.7. May I offer you another helping of dessert?8. Two classmates met to talk about their homework.9. Please finish this sewing project for me. 10. Each of the parents had been sent a note concerning flu shots.11. When do you plan to eat?12. Don’t expect to see the lions.13. We prefer to use a dish towel and not to use paper towels.
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name ____________________________Exercise: Cross out the prepositional phrase. Underline the subject once and the verb/verb phrase twice. Put parenthesis around any infinitives.
1. Please put the table and chairs in the closet.2. I have two extra tickets to the basketball game.3. She has never been to Canada.4. Maggie has always wanted to have a twin.5. Some Saturdays Josh’s family gathers at his uncle’s house, plays Scrabble, and eats pizza.6. My brother and his wife have traveled from L.A. to visit me.7. Snoopy and the Pink Panther are popular characters.8. My cat will go to the vet to get shots next summer.9. Give the turtle some lettuce. 10. People depend on their cell phones.
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List of irregular verbs
infinitive present past past participleto arise arise arose arisento awake awake awoke/ awoke/awaked to be is/am/are was/were beento bear bear bore borneto become become became becometo begin begin began begunto bend bend bent bentto bite bite bit bittento blow blow blew blownto break break broke brokento bring bring brought broughtto build build built builtto burst burst burst burstto buy buy bought boughtto catch catch caught caughtto choose choose chose chosento cling cling clung clungto come come came cometo cost cost cost costto cut cut cut cutto dive dive dove dived/ doveto do do(es) did doneto drag drag dragged draggedto draw draw drew drawnto drink drink drank drunk
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to drive drive drove drivento eat eat ate eatento fall fall fell fallento feed feed fed fedto feel feel felt feltto fight fight fought foughtto find find found found
infinitive present past past participle
to fly fly flew flownto forgive forgive forgave forgivento freeze freeze froze frozento get get got gottento give give gave givento go go(es) went goneto grow grow grew grownto hang(clothes) hang hung hungto hang(execute) hang hanged hangedto have have(has) had hadto hear hear heard heardto hide hide hid hiddento hold hold held heldto hurt hurt hurt hurtto keep keep kept keptto know know knew knownto lead lead led ledto lay(to place) lay laid laidto lie(to recline) lie lay lainto leave leave left leftto lend lend lent lentto let let let letto light light lit litto lose lose lost lostto make make made madeto mean mean meant meantto meet meet met met
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to pay pay paid paidto pet pet pet petto put put put putto raise(lift/increase) raised raised
to read read read readto ride ride rode ridden
infinitive present past past participle
to ring ring rang rungto rise(to get up) rise rose risento run run ran runto say say said saidto see see saw seento seek seek sought soughtto sell sell sold soldto send send sent sentto set(to place)set set setto shake shake shook shakento shine shine shone shoneto shrink shrink shrank shrunkto shut shut shut shutto sing sing sang sungto sink sink sank sunkto sit(to rest) sit sat satto sleep sleep slept sleptto speak speak spoke spokento spend spend spent spentto spin spin spun spunto spit spit spat spatto spring spring sprang sprungto stand stand stood stoodto steal steal stole stolento stick stick stuck stuckto sting sting stung stungto stink stink stank stunk
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to strike strike struck struckto strive strive strove stroveto swear swear swore swornto swim swim swam swumto swing swing swung swungto take take took takento teach teach taught taughtto tear tear tore tornto tell tell told toldto think think thought thoughtto throw throw threw thrown
to understand understand understood understoodto wake wake woke/ waked woken/wakedto weave weave wove wovento wear wear wore wornto win win won wonto wring wring wrung wrungto write write wrote written
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parts of speech
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Exercise: Parts of speech. Identify the following: noun, adjective, verb, article, pronoun, coordinating conjunction, and preposition. After crossing out the prepositional phrase, underline the subject once and the verb twice. Put the infinitive in parenthesis.
1. You must attend the meeting after work about freecycling.
2. Will the girls practice this evening?
3. One of the cats ran down the stairs to eat.
4. Howard should have seen my new hybrid car.
5. Kacie and Tamie are famous in their hometown.
6. Everyone has a radio in his or her car.
7. Around the corner and down the street is Edgehill Drive.
8. Stop that car.
9. There are three eggs in the refrigerator.
10. In the morning, Sal jogs down the street and chats with a
neighbor by the high school.
11. I have searched for the check.
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12. He joined a law firm in Orlando.
13. Mary doesn’t like loud people.
14. The young author read from her book of poems.
15. Courtney is nervous about the swim meet.
16. There are many reasons to stay in school.
17. No one wanted to buy the green apples or the purple grapes.
18. They did not agree on her plan and would not vote for her.
19. Do your homework at night and be on time for class.
20. After the party, everyone went home.
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SENTENCE TYPES
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A simple sentence has a single independent clause. The sentence may be long or short.
examples:Sally studies with a tutor.
Sally and Bob study with a tutor.
Sally and Bob study with a tutor and form study groups.
A compound sentence has two or more simple sentences joined
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with a comma and coordinating conjunction (FAN BOYS - for, and, nor, but, or, yet, and so); with a semi-colon and conjunctive adverb (consequently, accordingly, therefore, nevertheless, however, then, moreover); or with just a semi-colon. A compound sentence has no subordinate clause.
1. I, cc i
, F A N B O Y S
for-
and-
nor-
but-
or-
yet-
so-
Exercise: Choose the correct punctuation and conjunction (FANBOYS). Put them in the space
provided.
1. I turned off my sprinklers ________________it was raining.
2. Every Friday night, I order Chinese food __________I order a pizza.
3. I love my car __________it rattles and squeaks a lot.
4. She couldn’t play the piano ______________could she sing.
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5. I fed the cats ____________I went to school.
6. I put gas in my car _________the tank was almost empty.
7. I was hungry _________I stopped to get a veggie sandwich.
8. I stayed up late ______________I woke up on time feeling rested.
2. I; ca, i
common conjunctive adverbs:
consequently also as a resultindeed obviously afterwardtherefore for example besidesunfortunately accordingly frequentlythen moreover in factnevertheless however for this reasonfurthermore in addition stilllikewise on the other hand thushence
Exercise: Choose the correction punctuation and
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conjunctive adverb. Put them in the space provided.
1. Yesterday my car battery went dead ________________ I am taking the bus today.2. Maggie loves her dog ________________ she wishes it didn’t shed so much.3. My nephew does well in college __________________ the whole family is proud.
4. My aunt is an excellent cook ________________________ she makes an incredible spinach quiche. 5. The saleswoman didn’t know which price codes to use _____________ she was rude.6. First he got out all his tools _________________ he changed the oil in his truck.
3. I; iThe two independent clauses must be related ideas.
examples:
1. Saturday the vet’s office is closed; I take my cat during the week.
2. My uncle ate a high meat diet; he had a heart attack and died.
3. It was windy; the power went out.
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Exercise: Finish the following compound sentences with a related idea, and add the punctuation.
1. My cat sleeps all day ______________________________.
2. Lorenzo likes to dance ______________________________.
3. Marlon has big feet ________________________________.
4. Many families watch too much T.V. ___________________
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Exercise: Practice all three kinds of compound sentences.example:two simple sentences: He made some muffins. He squeezed some fresh orange juice.compound sentences:He made some muffins, and he squeezed some fresh orange juice .He made some muffins; then, he squeezed some fresh orange juice.He made some muffins; he squeezed some fresh orange juice.
1. two simple sentences: Delores felt sick. She went to the health center. compound sentences:
2. two simple sentences: Reyna called a friend who lived near her for a ride to school. Her car wouldn't start.compound sentences:
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3. two simple sentences: She formed a study group, saw a tutor, visited her counselor, and asked her professor for help. She had a successful semester. compound sentences:
4. two simple sentences: My friend left early for the play. She arrived late.compound sentences:
5. two simple sentences: Annie doesn't want to contribute to the land fill. She fixes her broken things instead of throwing them away and buying new ones. She saves money.compound sentences:
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The complex sentence is an independent clause with one or more dependent clauses. example: After I finished eating, I washed the dishes.or I washed the dishes after I finished eating.independent clause: I washed the dishesdependent clause: After I finished eatingDependent clauses start with subordinating conjunctions:
after although untilas because whetherbeforeeven though ifsince so that whileunless when wheneverwhere wherever
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In a complex sentence one idea is emphasized over the other. The more important idea is in the independent clause; the lesser idea is in the dependent clause.1. I d or I sc i2. D, i or Sc i, i
example: I drank a cup of tea. I went to bed1. I drank a cup of tea when I went to bed.
2. After I went to bed, I drank a cup of tea.
Exercise: Create complex sentences from simple sentences. Be sure to use correct punctuation.1. My dad grew forgetful. He stopped working.
2. You have been gone. I have not been the same.
3. Aaron had a test. He spent hours in the library.
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4. The janitors cleaned up. The program was over.
5. I don’t believe it will rain. I will take my jacket.
6. You will be hired. You do well on the tests.
7. You may go to the party. Your homework is done.
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Exercise: Add the independent clause to create a complex sentence.
1. ___________________________________________ before you forget.
2. _____________________________________________even if it rains.
3. _____________________________________________since you are here.
4. ____________________________________________after I drove away.
5. ______________________________________if you ask nicely.
6. __________________________________________ although I just cleaned the kitchen.
7. ____________________________________________because your car broke down.
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Exercise: Sentence combiningdirections: Combine the following groups of short sentences into one or two longer sentences. Create compound and complex sentences. You may add, delete, or alter words in the interest of clarity.
1. My dog is black and white. Her name is Sammie. She is ten years old. She hates the letter carrier. He must have startled her one time.
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_________________________________________________2. Every Tuesday my parents play bridge. I have the house to myself. I make popcorn. I also rent videos.
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3. Our cabin is located in the Sierra Nevada Mountains. It is near Lake Tahoe. It is small. It needs a new roof. We want to sell it.__________________________________________________
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4. Helen has her learner’s permit. She took her first driving lesson yesterday. It lasted half an hour on a deserted highway. Her mother was a nervous wreck afterwards.
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Exercise: sentence combining
On a separate sheet of paper, combine these sentences into a single paragraph. You may add, delete, or change words to make the paragraph clearer.
1. The kitchen was full of quiet activity.2. Little Vera poured the milk into the mixing bowl.
3. Sammie added an egg.4. Some of the liquid fell on the floor.5. The cat licked it up.6. Timothy put flour and spices in the bowl.7. Louise stirred the batter.8. Hailey poured some into the griddle.9. They made eight pancakes.10. Janice scrambled the eggs.11. Sammie wanted to add cheese to the eggs.12. Timothy wanted to add some spinach.13. Sammie didn’t want to add anything green.14. They made two omelets.15. Louise sliced fresh oranges and apples for a fruit salad.
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16. They tried to be quiet.17. Mom was sleeping.18. Today was her birthday. 19. Breakfast was her present.
Exercise: sentence type review1. Write a compound sentence using “and.”
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2. Write a complex sentence with “because” as the subordinating conjunction in the middle of the sentence.
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3. Write a simple sentence with compound verbs.
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4. Write a complex sentence with “when” as the subordinating conjunction at the beginning of the sentence.
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5. Write a compound sentence with the conjunctive adverb “however.”
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6. Write a simple sentence with compound subjects.
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7. Write a complex sentence with “while” as the subordinating conjunction in the middle of the sentence.
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8. Write a compound sentence using a semi-colon.
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9. Write a complex sentence with “whenever” as the subordinating conjunction at the beginning of the sentence.
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10. Write a simple sentence with compound subjects and compound verbs.
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a review of simple, compound, and complex sentences
1. Join the two sentences using a coordinating conjunction. adverb.
Jay was a stray cat and lived in the garage of our neighbor. We took the only surviving kitten from one litter ________________ we named the kitten Jackson. Our neighbors planned to catch Jay before she had more kittens.
2. Identify the following sentence as simple, compound, or complex. Underline the dependent clause.
Before they could enact their plan, she was pregnant again.
3. Write your own sentence like # 2.
4. Identify the following sentence as simple, compound, or complex. Underline the dependent clause.
Since one of the kittens looked like Jackson, we decided to take it when it was old enough to leave its mother.
5. Write your own sentence like # 4.
6. Join the two sentences to create a compound sentence either using a conjunctive adverb or a coordinating conjunction.
The kittens were as scared of people as their mother _______________ we couldn‘t catch him.
7. Identify the following sentence as simple, compound, or
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complex.
Luckily for us, that kitten fell in the neighbor’s pool and couldn‘t get out.
8. Write your own sentence like #7.
9. Identify the following sentence as simple, compound, or complex. Underline the dependent clause.
Our neighbors, who had been feeding the family of mother and kittens, fished him out and called us. We took the kitten and named him Jayme.
10. Write your own sentence like # 9.
11. Join the two sentences to create a compound sentence either using a coordinating conjunction or a conjunctive adverb.
I don’t know if Jackson knows that Jayme is his younger brother _____________ they get along and play like brothers.
12. Add a subordinating conjunction to create a complex sentence.
____________ I am the only one who took time to comfort and get to know Jayme, he has become my cat.
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sentence types review
Identify the following types of sentences as simple, compound, complex, or compound complex. Underline any dependent clauses.
1. Last July was hot, but August was even hotter.
2. When the rain started, everyone left.
3. Recycling takes time and effort, but it reduces garbage in landfills.
4. The snails ate my marigolds; only the stems remain.
5. Sam can improve his health if he just walks three times a week.
6. I left because you were late; I couldn’t wait any longer.
7. You need to hurry up; otherwise, we won’t be on time.
8. Even though there was a sale, many people stayed home, and others went to the fair.
9. My son went outside to get wood for the fire but returned empty handed because the wood was too wet to burn.
10. When the telephone rang, everyone ran to answer because
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they were expecting phone calls.
Underline the subject once, and underline the verb twice. Put parenthesis around any infinitives. Cross out any prepositional phrases.
1. Scrambled eggs are good on Sunday mornings.
2. Other people would rather eat poached eggs.
3. Sallie and Maggie make the best pancakes in the world.
4. They add milk, sprinkle in cinnamon, pour in a little vanilla, and stir in the pancake mix.
5. Will you ever go to the store for me?
6. Write a compound sentence using “but.”
7. Write a complex sentence using a “although.”
8. Write a simple sentence.
9. Write a complex sentence that starts with “Since.”
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Commas: Three rules for use
1. Use a comma in front of a coordinating conjunction (FAN BOYS) that connects two independent clauses.
example:
1. I drive by the bakery everyday but I don’t stop.
Exercise: commasAdd a comma before a coordinating conjunction in
the compound sentences. Note: not all sentences are compound and need commas.
1. He did the laundry and folded the clothes.
2. He does not watch sports on television nor does he like to attend sporting events.
3. Mom bakes breads and she juices vegetables for she likes to be healthy.
4. Alisa played the piano then did her homework.
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5. I went to Kentucky in the winter yet I did not see any snow.
6. My husband will go to his meeting or he will return phone calls.
7. I will make dinner or order pizza in.
8. I planted new plants for the others died.
9. I called my aunt but she wasn’t home.
10. The machine hadn’t been turned on yet.
2. Use commas to separate three or more items (words or phrases) in a series.
example:
1. A toothbrush toothpaste and mouthwash had been packed.
2. Before the party, I need to pick up the food hose off the patio set up the tables and chairs and find the dominoes.
Exercise: commas in a series
1. After the basketball team won the game, everyone wore team shirts attached team banners to their cars and attended the parade.
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2. Participants included accountants bookkeepers and the IRS.
3. Pass the salt and pepper.
4. Before her trip to Amsterdam, Natalie applied for a passport brushed up on her Dutch and bought her Eurorail tickets.
5. Ron Tyrone and Ernest are leaving for Australia today.
6. College sweatshirts are available in the cafeteria in the bookstore and in the student union.
7. Eat drink and be merry.
8. The librarian purchased two encyclopedias and dictionaries.
9. My mother didn’t allow me to throw a ball in the house eat cookies in bed or answer the door when she wasn’t home.
10. Can you bend the rules and accept my application after the deadline?
3. Use a comma after an introductory word, phrase, or clause.
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example:
1. Yes they can use the camper.
2. As far as I am concerned everyone is welcome.
3. While he waited for the bus he read the newspaper.
Exercise: commas after introductory material.
1. By the way you are going to be late.
2. If you need additional information please don’t hesitate to call.
3. Bill please tell me what time it is.
4. During the storm snow drifted through the cracks in the roof of the cabin.
5. Since she had burned dinner she ordered Chinese food.
6. From behind the curtain he could see the audience was getting restless for the show to start.
7. Though feeling awkward Robyn continued her speech.
8. When you study the history of the post World War II period you can understand the women’s movement better.
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9. Yes my second draft is much better than my first.
10. First of all none of us knows the future.
11. After watching a YouTube video he knew how to compost his leftover food.
12. He also learned that coffee grounds were good fertilizer for roses.
13. In other words most people eat more protein than they need.
14. In contrast cats are quite clean.
Exercise: Add the necessary commas using the following comma rules: comma around nonessential information or interrupters, comma after a dependent clause, and comma before a coordinating conjunction in a compound sentence.
1. Will Smith who was promoting his new movie attended the basketball game.
2. Lung cancer the leading cause of cancer deaths kills more than 150,000 Americans.
3. I did not stop searching until I found the perfect dress for the party.
4. While Gordon was working on the student newspaper he decided to become a journalist.
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5. Beer vending machines some say will encourage minors to drink.
6. My cat that used to be a stray will share the sofa with anyone. (I have three cats; only one used to be a stray.)
7. Jayme scratched on the door and I let him in the house.
8. After I let him in I saw that he had something in his mouth. 9. It had a tail and was moving.
10. I was of course quite surprised.
11. I thought it was a mouse but I was wrong.
Exercise: Add the necessary commas using the following comma rules: items in a series, comma after introductory word groups, and other rules.
1. When he studied at college he realized that he wanted to be a high school teacher.
2. Sallie enjoyed talking with her grandchildren playing tennis and teaching art at the senior center.
3. Before the cat ran away he meowed at me.
4. Startled at the noise he jumped and hit his knee on the table.
5. After he picked out the notebook textbook and pens he paid for his purchase.
6. With a smile on his face he gave his speech.
7. He went around town picking up cans and taking them to the
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recycling plant.
8. Sweating and panting Junior finished weeding the yard.
9. Parents should have their children in activities so that the children will improve their skills meet other kids and stay out of trouble.
10. First of all don’t insult your reader.
The semi-colon: two rules for use
1. Use a semi-colon between two independent clauses when the ideas are related.
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example:
1. The skates were too small; my feet hurt after skating.2. The fence blew down my dog is running around the neighborhood.3. The car show is in town this weekend my son has math homework and can't go.
2. Use a semi-colon between two independent clauses when a conjunctive adverb is used to separate them.
Common conjunctive adverbs:
Also, use a comma after conjunctive adverbs that are more than one word. Examples are
example:
1. My aunt’s house is cluttered moreover it is dirty.2. My cousins spend every Christmas with their mom consequently they spend Thanksgiving with their dad.3. Pat enjoys exercising for instance she can’t wait to get to her kickboxing class three nights a week.
Exercise: the semi-colon
Put a semi-colon and/or comma where needed.
1. Mary is tall and thin likewise her brother is tall and lanky2. The movie is starting please don't talk to me.
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3. It’s tax time so my accountant is busy.4. It’s almost final exam time consequently the library is full of students.5. The former president called a press conference however no one showed up.6. The instructor was sick unfortunately class had to be canceled.7. The laundry was in one big pile and Mom asked the kids to sort it. 8. The car was badly damaged thus the tow truck was called.9. Sandy plays soccer her mom is the coach.10. The yard sale fund-raiser was a huge success hence they voted not to have the bake sale. 11. Jay’s brother plays the piano very well.
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The colon: three rules for use
1. Use a colon before a list of items. I: list
example:
1. We visited four states last year Nevada, Idaho, Montano, and Colorado.2. Mix the following eggs milk flour and vanilla.3. Three items came in the mail a bill a package and a letter.note: Do not use a colon after a preposition or a verb.practice:
1. At the zoo, I saw tigers lions bears and zebras.2. At the zoo, I saw the following tigers lions bears and zebras.3. My favorite newspapers are the Los Angeles Times, the Washington Post, the Wall Street Journal, and The New York Times.
2. Use a colon before an explanation. (A semi-colon is OK as well if the explanation is a complete sentence)
I: explanation
example:
1. My son's other love is music: he sings in the choir, plays the piano, and plays the drums.2. My daughter's friend is an overachiever: she graduated
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from high school with a 4.0 GPA and finished college in three years while running a cake business.
3. Use a colon before a quote.
I: "quote"
example:
1. Isaac Asimov's advocates not trying to avoid challenges: "It has been my philosophy of life that difficulties vanish when faced boldly."2. Chris Rock shows his support for gay marriage by joking: "Gay people have a right to be as unhappy as the rest of us."3. Martin Luther King said "Take the first step in faith. You don't have to see the whole staircase. Just take the first step."
Exercise: the colon
Insert a colon and commas where needed.1. Vanessa’s favorite flowers are daisies roses and marigolds.2. Please purchase five things from the market butter broccoli apples tofu and lettuce.
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3. The bank teller loan officer and receptionist seemed uneasy.4. Those who passed the test are Ruby Jessica and Luisa.5. Famous basketball coach John Wooden is known for his quips about life: "If you don't have time to do it right, when will you have time to do it over?"
Exercise: Add the necessary commas, semi-colons, and colons.
1. I have several interests photography water skiing and
traveling.
2. Gardening is a hobby I enjoy in addition my yard looks
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beautiful.
3. After recovering from surgery my aunt had only one request
go shopping.
4. Sharon remodeled her house consequently her property
value went up.
5. I have a quote by Maya Angelou that helps me keep life in
perspective “I want to thank you, Lord, for life and all that is in
it.”
6. I have several tasks this weekend.
7. There are several people who contributed to my success my
mom my dad my grandparents and a few teachers.
8. I went to the store to get several items not everything was
in stock.
9. I went to Los Angeles to see a play to visit with a good friend
and to shop.
10. She voted for two reasons she believes in her candidate and
in the electoral process.
11. Kids who spend a lot of time on the computer don’t get much
exercise.
12. Mr. Henson the guest artist prepared an impressive art display.
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13. Among those competing were Judy Mason Fairfax High School
Marilyn May Bellville High School and Peter Benjamin Golden
Valley High School.
14. Our itinerary requires the following stops Las Vegas Barstow
and Tehachapi.
15. His castle in Laguna Beach California was burned down in the
fire.
16. Realizing that she was unprepared for the recital she feigned
illness.
17. I went snowboarding a few years ago and I’m not eager to go
again.
18. People who get spam every day can get annoyed.
19. Pass the peas potatoes and bread.
20. He didn’t leave when the fire alarm rang on the contrary he
continued talking on the phone.
21. Tom get the newspaper while I’m out of town.
22. Marion planned my trip bought my ticket and drove me to the
airport.
23. Yes dinner will be on time.
24. We will if time permits consult Jared our next door neighbor.
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25. Jim Satherson who lives on North Street asked to speak to the
class.
26. Their first child was born on June 16 2008 in San Diego.
27. Benjamin Franklin encourages people not to waste time "Lost
time is never found again."
Exercise: comma review
Add commas, semi-colons, and colons where needed.
Advice
Advice can come from unusual places. Jon was a high school track star but he was still nervous about the upcoming meet. Although he regularly ran in and won the 220 meter at the last minute his coach had entered him in the 100 meter. In the quarter finals Jon had placed fourth this was just enough to qualify him for the semi-finals. As he walked home he pondered many things getting a good start running his fastest making his coach proud and bringing home a trophy. He was so deep in thought that he didn’t notice the neighborhood bum sitting in the middle of the sidewalk. Startled Jon almost walked into him. The bum pulled Jon close and whispered in his ear. His voice was raspy his breath smelled like whiskey and his clothes reeked of urine. “Hey boy. I saw you run the 100 today.
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Tomorrow, put your starting blocks in the opposite position,” the bum said. Jon was caught off guard but nodded. By the next day Jon had disregarded the drunken man’s advice. He put his blocks in their usual position and looked at his competition. The other runners looked fast prepared and intimidating. Then the old man’s words came to his mind. Since Jon figured he had nothing to lose he decided to change his blocks at the last minute. At the sound of the gun shot he exploded out of his blocks although it felt awkward to start on his left foot. During the race he felt no one on either side of him. Exhilarated Jon crossed the finish line .5 seconds ahead of the rest and set a meet record. After he caught his breath he looked up to see the bum sitting on the sidelines.
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After the content is complete, peer editing a second draft involves looking for errors, such as spelling, verbs, punctuation, and vocabulary. Review these commonly confused words.
Vocabulary: confused words
1. there, their, they’rethere - location or introductory worde.g..
their- shows possessione.g..
they’re - contraction of they aree.g..
a. Let’s go ______________
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b. ______________ leaving in the morning.c. She sang at _____________wedding.
2. too, to, twotoo - also, excessivelye.g..
to - toward (a preposition)e.g..
two- 2e.g..
a. We would like ________ install ________phones in the office.b. That man had _______much sand on his feet ______go into the restaurant.
3. whose, who’swhose - shows possessione.g..
who’s - contraction of who ise.g..
a. _____________ going on the picnic?
b. _______________jacket is this?
4. your, you’reyour - shows possessione.g..
you’re - contraction of you aree.g..
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a. It is ___________turn.
b. _____________one of the most intelligent people I’ve known.
5. it’s, itsits- possessione.g.
it’s - contraction of it ise.g.
a. ________ getting late.b. The dog is wagging _______tail.c. ____________a nice day.
6. our, areour - shows possessione.g..
are- a verbe.g..
a. We _________ going to buy a newspaper.
b. We _______ on _________way to Los Angeles.
7. whether, weatherweather - climatee.g..
whether - compares ideas (subordinating conjunction)e.g..
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a. It will be an enjoyable event, ____________ or not it rains.
b. Today’s ____________ is foggy.
8. threw, throughthrew - past tense of to throwe.g..
through - used to compare ideas (subordinating conjunction)e.g..
a. She ___________the ball over the fence.
b. ______________the years, my children have had many colds.
9. already, all readyalready - previouslye.g..
all ready - everyone or everything is readye.g..
a. I ___________made dinner.
b. We are ________________to go.
10. advice, adviseadvice - a suggestion (noun)e.g..
advise - to suggest (verb)e.g..
a. I ___________you to do your best.
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b. My _____________ to all students would be to come to class.
Preposition usage listaccuse someone of (be) good at think about
(be) accustomed to (be) grateful to someone for
adjust to (be) guilty of (be) tired of
(be) afraid of (be) happy about
agree with hear about (be) upset about
(be) amazed at/by hear of (be) upset with
(be) angry about hope for (be) used to
(be) angry at/with (be) incapable of wait for
apologize for insist on/upon (be) worried about
approve of (be) interested in worry about
argue about (be) involved in
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argue with (be) jealous of
(be) ashamed of (be) known for
(be) aware of (be) lazy about
believe in listen to
blame someone for look at
(be) bored with/ by look for
(be) capable of look forward to
care about/ for (be) mad about
compare to/with (be) mad at
complain about (be) made from/of
(be) concerned about (be) married to
concentrate on object to
consist of (be) opposed to
count on participate in
deal with plan on
decide on pray to
depend on/upon pray for
(be) different from (be) prepared for
disapprove of prevent someone from
(be) divorced from protect someone from
(be) engaged to (be) proud of
(be) excited about recover from
(be) familiar with (be) related to
(be) famous for rely on/upon
feel like (be) responsible for
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(be) fond of (be) sad about
forget about (be) satisfied with
forgive someone for (be) scared of
(be) glad about (be) sick of
(be) sorry about/for speak about
speak to/with succeed in
(be) sure of/about (be) surprised at
take care of talk about
talk to/with thank someone for
Word Parts and Prefix List
Word part means examplesA, an not, without amoral, atypicalArch chief architectAm, amat love amateur, amiableAnte before anteroom, antecedentAnti opposite, against antipathy, antibodyAqu water aquarium, aqueductAud, audit hear audible, auditoriumAuto self autograph, autobiographyBene good benefit, benedictionBi teo bicycle, bifocalBio life biology, biopsyChron time chronic, chronologyCircum around circumscribe, circumferenceCo together coagulate, coeducationalCrypt secret cryptic, cryptonymDe from, down deport, descendDem people democracy, epidemicDerm skin dermatologist, pachydermDic, dict say contradict, dictateDis opposite of disagree, disappearDyn power dynamic, dynamiteEu good, well euphoria, eulogy
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Fac make, do factor, factoryHyper excessive hyperIm, in not incorrect, immovableIn in inland, inhalingInter between interculturalLog word, study monologue, embryologyLuc light translucent, lucidMal bad malice, malodorousMan hand manufacture, demandMis wrong misquoteMot, mov move motive, commotionMor, mort death mortician, mortalNeur nerve neurologist, neuronNon not nonsenseOrth right, true orthodontists, orthodoxPan all panacea, panhellenicPath feelings empathyPed foot pedestrian, centipedePend spend, think, hang pending, expendPhil loving bibliophile, philanthropistPsych mind, spirit psychic, psychotherapyPort, portal carry portable, transportPost after postgraduatePre before prehistoricPro to move ahead,for promotion, proposeRe again recycleScrib, script write conscription, prescribeSoph wisdom philosophy, sophomoreSol alone isolate, solitaireSpec, spect look introspection, circumspectSub under subtitle, submarineSuper more than supermarketTele far telephoneTerra earth territory, terra cottaTherm heat thermostat, hydrothermalTrans across transversal, transportTri three trio, tricycleUn not unquestionableUni one unicornUrb city urban, suburbVer true verifyVoc, vocat call revoke, vocation
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Sentence types
Simple – one independent clause
Compound – two or more independent clauses
Complex – one independent clause and one or more dependent (subordinate) clauses
Compound complex – two or more independent clauses
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and one or more dependent (subordinate) clauses
Coordinating Conjunctions (cc)(FANBOYS)for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so
CA- conjunctive adverbI – independent clauseD – dependent clauseSC- subordinating conjunction
Common subordinating conjunctions (SC) used in complex sentences
Cause or effect Conditionas even ifbecause ifin order that if onlysince providedso that since
unlessConcession whenalthough wheneveras if whethereven if howeven thoughthough
Comparison or contrast Purposeasas if so thatas though that
___________________________than Relative connectors
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whereas (pronouns, adj., adv.)whether whichwhile that
whateverSpace or time whoseafter since whicheveras long as whombefore when whatnow that whoonce where whomeverwhenever whoeverwherever whyuntil while where
** Subordinating conjunctions and relative connectors start subordinate (dependent) clauses in complex sentences
Common conjunctive adverbs (CA) and transitional phrases
Used in compound sentences
Addition Comparison or contrastalso howeverbesides in comparisonfurther in contrastfurthermore instead converselyin addition likewise on the other handincidentally neverthelessmoreover otherwise
similarlynonetheless
Emphasiscertainlyindeed Cause or effectin fact accordinglystill as a resultundoubtedly consequentlyspecifically hence
thereforeTime thusfinally
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meanwhilenextnow Misc.then for examplethereafter for instancesubsequently after all
even soanywayincidentally
** Conjunctive adverbs connect equal clauses (in compound sentences).I: ca, i
Common prepositions
about intoabove likeaccording nearaccording to ofacross offafter onagainst ontoalong outalong with outsideamong overaround pastas regardingat roundbecause of sincebefore throughbehind throughoutbelow tobeneath towardbeside underbetween underneathbeyond unlike
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by untilconcerning updespite upondown up toduring tillexcept withexcept for withinexcepting withoutfor next tofrominin addition toinsidein spite ofinstead of *** start prep. phrases, which add details
Parts of speech
Noun - names a person, place, thing, idea, feeling.
Pronoun - takes the place of a noun. Personal (I, you, he, she, etc.); reflexive (myself, himself, etc.); relative (that, which, that, whose, etc.); demonstrative (this, that, these, those); indefinite (everybody, few, each); possessive (his, hers, mine) and interrogative (who, what, etc.).
Verb - shows action or helps make a statementAction - shows actionLinking - links a subject to a describing word. These can be linking verbs : to be, to feel, to remain, to grow, etc.Helping - helps an action or linking verb. Examples are do, does, did, has, had, have, may, might, must, should, would, could, shall, will, can, is, am, are, was, were, be, being, been.
Adjective - modifies a noun, tells which one, how many, what kind.
Adverb - modifies adjectives and other adverbs, tells how, when, where, and to what extent.
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Preposition - shows a relationship between a noun or pronoun and some other word in the sentence. List is on previous page.
Conjunction - joins words, phrases, and clauses.Coordinating conjunction - for, and, nor, but, or, yet, soSubordinating conjunction - start dependent clauses (since, when, after, if, etc.)Correlative - (not only/but also, neither/nor, either/or, both/and)
Infinitive - to + a verb
Articles - a, an, the (are also adjectives)
Sentence partsSubject - a noun, pronoun, gerund, or infinitiveis never in the prepositional phraseis never here or therecan be understood or impliedpart of the sentence about which something is being said
Verb - see previous page
Clauses
Independent clauses - can stand on their own.
Dependent clauses - can not stand on their ownstart with a subordinating conjunction (listed on a previous page)have a subject and a verbneed an independent clause
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are needed to create complex sentencesExample: When I get up
Comma rules
1. Put commas around nonessential information, such as adjective clauses and appositives. Example: My brother, who drives a red truck, works in the film industry.I like to eat at Olive Garden, an Italian restaurant.
2. Put commas around interrupters.Example: The information, however, is subject to discussion.
3. Put a comma after a dependent clause.Example: After the cats ate, they went to sleep.
4. Put a comma after a coordinating conjunction in a compound sentence.Example: Jackson sleeps on the sofa, but Jayme likes to sleep in a hidden place.
5. Put a comma between items in a series of three or more.Example: Jayme meowed, ate his food, and ran around the house.
6. Put a comma after introductory word groups and direct address.
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Example: Luckily, I found the source of the leak.
7. Put a comma between a city and state. Example: Her house in Bakersfield, California, is air-conditioned.
Semi-colon rules
1. Put a semi-colon between independent clauses.Example: Jayme is Jack’s brother; they play well together.
2. Put a semi-colon before a conjunctive adverb in a compound sentence.Example: Jack is blind; consequently, he runs into the furniture if he gets scared. 3. Put a semi-colon between items in a series that has commas.Example: I have invited my sister, who lives in Tennessee; my aunt, who lives in Maryland; and my friend, who lives in Los Angeles.
Colon rules
1. Put a colon after an independent clause and before a list or explanation.Example: The career has three qualifications: outgoing personality, good with statistics, and impressive research skills.
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2. Put a colon after an independent clause and before a quote.Example: He explained the colon rule clearly: “When a colon is used to introduce a quotation, the part of the sentence that precedes the colon should be grammatically independent.”
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mechanics
Underlining or italicsUnderline the complete work: newspaper, magazine, Cds, movie, novel, play
Quotes Put quotes around the part: article, song, poem, short story, TV episode
Apostropheused to make words possessive and in contractionsnever used on verbsnever used on possessive pronouns (his, hers, ours, theirs, etc.)if the word is plural and ends in s, just add an apostrophe
CapitalizationCapitalize the first word in a sentenceCapitalize proper nouns
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Sentences for grammar practice
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Instructions for marking sentences
Every day we will go over a different sentence and discuss parts of speech,
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sentence parts, clauses, and mechanics. Each sentence is written twice so
that we can discuss all of the above in an organized way.
On the sentence at the top of the page,
1. First mark parts of speech: noun, pronoun, verb, adverb, adjective,
preposition, conjunction, infinitive, and article.
2. Mark sentence parts: subject, verb, and prepositional phrases
On the sentence in the middle of the page,
1. Mark clauses: independent or dependent; then identify sentences as
simple, compound, complex, or compound complex.
2. Mark punctuation (comma, semi-colon, and colon), capitalization,
apostrophes, underlining, and quotes.
Each sentence should be finished before class. You may make any
corrections to your copy in class.
Some aspects of grammar that are discussed will not be taught at any other
time; others will serve as springboards into a grammar lesson.
There may be announced or unannounced quizzes on the sentences.
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Parts of speech
many people have a cell phone in their pocket
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sentence parts
clauses and sentence type
many people have a cell phone in their pocket
mechanics
Parts of speech
i slipped on a piece of paper and broke a large window
sentence parts
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clauses and sentence type
i slipped on a piece of paper and broke a large window
mechanics
Parts of speech
the four men worked hard to finish the job their boss gave them a large
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bonus
sentence parts
clauses and sentence type
the four men worked hard to finish the job their boss gave them a large
bonus
mechanics
Parts of speech
she never attends meetings she cannot sit still
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sentence parts
clauses and sentence type
she never attends meetings she cannot sit still
mechanics
Parts of speech
marsha flies kites so we bought her a new ball of string
sentence parts
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clauses and sentence type
marsha flies kites so we bought her a new ball of string
mechanics
Parts of speech
donnas expensive book fell in a puddle consequently the pages are wrinkled
and faded and donna won’t be able to sell the book
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sentence parts
clauses and sentence type
donnas expensive book fell in a puddle consequently the pages are wrinkled
and faded and donna won’t be able to sell the book
mechanics
Parts of speech
i must have drunk four cups of cocoa because i was cold after i skated on
lake kenton
sentence parts
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clauses and sentence type
i must have drunk four cups of cocoa because i was cold after i skated on
lake kenton
mechanics
Parts of speech
while we were driving on rosedale highway we saw a burning garage with
several cars in it so we called the fire department
sentence parts
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clauses and sentence type
while we were driving on rosedale highway we saw a burning garage with
several cars in it so we called the fire department
mechanics
Parts of speech
my uncle from pittsburgh pennsylvania recently bought a green boat which
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he will keep on our lake
sentence parts
clauses and sentence type
my uncle from pittsburgh pennsylvania recently bought a green boat which
he will keep on our lake
mechanics
Parts of speech
many students in the college contribute to the roughneck review our online
journal
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sentence parts
clauses and sentence type
many students in the college contribute to the roughneck review our online
journal
mechanics
parts of speech
i like the fact that edgar allen poe uses dark imagery in the raven
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sentence parts
clauses and sentence type
i like the fact that edgar allen poe uses dark imagery in the raven
mechanics
parts of speech
after we read the book a place to stand dr parks showed us the movie
sentence parts
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clauses and sentence type
after we read the book a place to stand dr parks showed us the movie
mechanics
parts of speech
alfonso my mothers cousin bought new running shoes since he runs on his
schools track team
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sentence parts
clauses and sentence type
alfonso my mothers cousin bought new running shoes since he runs on his
schools track team
mechanics
Parts of speech
jack who rides the bus to school on fridays has the best grade in spanish
sentence parts
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clauses and sentence type
jack who rides the bus to school on fridays has the best grade in spanish
mechanics
Parts of speech
donnas friend moved here from manteca california on january 11 2004 but
now her family is moving again
sentence parts
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clauses and sentence type
donnas friend moved here from manteca california on january 11 2004 but
now her family is moving again
mechanics
Parts of speech
ethels aunt kaitlyn likes to babysit so that she can play with childrens toys
sentence parts
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clauses and sentence type
ethels aunt kaitlyn likes to babysit so that she can play with childrens toys
mechanics
Parts of speech
andre took his broken- down car to his neighbors house because the
neighbor has tools
sentence parts
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clauses and sentence type
andre took his broken-down car to his neighbors house because the neighbor
has tools
mechanics
Parts of speech
mrs berry our teacher has told us that this is our last sentence of the year
but it is a tricky one
sentence parts
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clauses and sentence type
mrs berry our teacher has told us that this is our last sentence of the year
but it is a tricky one
mechanics
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Practice peer edit, first draftBy Josie Anderson
Some athletes with prosthetic legs have asked to be allowed to compete with other athletes in the Olympics. While some people may see this as a signal that these athletes are as good as others, this move could give these athletes an advantage. So, athletes with artificial legs should not be allowed to compete in college, national, and international competitions.
Some argue that it would show those athletes that they are accepted, thus boosting their self esteem. As they grow, they would feel that no doors were closed to them. They would know that they could achieve anything in a career realm as well as in the professional sports realm. But, they would not
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be competing on a level field. Prosthetic legs have improved, and the athletes could have an advantage. Prosthetic legs are becoming more light weight and with more spring. Conceivably, they would be able to jump higher, push off stronger, and run faster. This would not be fair.
If athletes with prosthetic legs were allowed to compete in the Olympics, where would this end? Would athletes in wheelchairs want to be part of the National Basketball Association? They could plow down another player with their chair. A boxer with a prosthetic arm and hand would have an unfair advantage with a hard hand that never got tired. In baseball a player with a prosthetic arm could throw a faster pitch and possibly hit more homeruns. These are unfair situations that should not be considered. So the line needs to be drawn to keep those with prosthetic limbs in a different league.
Athletes with artificial limbs can, and should, feel good about what they can accomplish in every field. They have wonderful role models and have broken down many barriers. But athletes with prosthetics and those with real limbs need to compete in different college and professional sporting categories. Now, what they do at the playground on the weekend is up to them.
Writer _________________ Reader ___________________
peer feedback sheet for argument writing first draft
How clear is the thesis?
How well does the writer include details and examples
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to back up his/her opinion?
Is one of the points an answer to the opposition?
How well does the conclusion sum up the argument?
How would you rate the strength of the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
Practice peer edit, first draftBy Miranda Lewis
At a high school football game, students cheer for their team, dressing up in their school colors and wearing items associated with their mascot. If their mascot is a Brave, a Warrior, a Redskin, or an Apache, students might dress up in red war paint, wear a feathered headband, and carry a tamahawk. While they are indeed supporting their team, they are, perhaps unintentionally, making fun of Native Americans. Many of the mascots have exaggerated clownish features and red skin. High schools should not use ethnic mascots. They are demeaning and send the signal that making fun of
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someone’s ethnicity is okay. Some argue that ethnic mascots are in good fun and that people are
being overly sensitive. But if people weren’t so prejudiced, they would realize that America has made fun of Native Americans for so long that it is taken for granted. We have seen them in cartoons and in movies as violent or unable to utter a word except “how.” They deserve more respect; Europeans took this country from them, killed them with their diseases, and put them on reservations. America turned them into a caricature. They are real people. One problem is many people don’t know real Native Americans to counter the cartoon the media has fed us.
Some argue that it would be expensive to change the school mascot. But if the mascot was your ethnicity, then you would want to change it. No one would allow the Orlando Orientals, who had squinty eyes, or the Washington Wetbacks, who drove around in low riders. Imagine the Nebraska Negroes, who ate watermelon. Each of the above ethnicities would be up in arms, and no one would blame them. We have made fun of Native Americans so long that it is part of our culture.
No matter the cost, this should not be permitted in high school sports. As teams buy new uniforms, replace helmets, and paint the gym, the change can take place. Allowing ethnic mascots teaches our youngsters that it is okay to make fun of Native Americans. This attitude only continues as they grow older and spreads to their treatment of other cultures.
Writer _________________ Reader ___________________
peer feedback sheet for argument writing first draft
How clear is the thesis?
How well does the writer include details and examplesto back up his/her opinion?
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Is one of the points an answer to the opposition?
How well does the conclusion sum up the argument?
How would you rate the strength of the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
by Paula Lynn Parks
High school students need more homework
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High school students would get more out of their education and
practice time management skills if teachers assigned more homework and if
students completed it. One benefit of students completing homework is that
it reinforces what was taught in class that day. Homework provides
additional practice, and it should not require help at home because many
parents are not available to help or are not able to help. This type of
reinforcement allows students to get more out of what was covered that day.
In addition to increasing learning, homework can help students with time
management. Students who successfully juggle homework, responsibilities at
home, sports, and part-time jobs are better prepared for college or full-time
work. The time students set aside to spend on homework is a valuable
investment that would increase what they learn in high school as well as
increase their success in college and the work place.
by Paula Lynn Parks
High school students need more homework
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As long as there has been school, there has been homework.
Preschoolers love it because it makes them feel grown up. But as students
get older, their interest wanes, and they may feel it's busy work or takes up
too much time. In fact, as students get older, the value of homework
increases. So much material needs to be covered in high school that
practicing what has been taught is imperative. Students would get more
from their education and practice time management skills if high school
teachers assigned more homework and if students completed it.
Students benefit from doing homework because it reinforces what was
taught in class that day. Homework provides additional practice, and it
should not require help at home because many parents are not available to
help or are not able to help. Reinforcement helps cement the lesson that
was introduced and practiced in class. This type of reinforcement allows
students to get more out of what was covered that day. The next day the
teacher can clear up any questions and move on to the next topic rather
than repeating the previous day's lesson.
In addition to increasing learning, homework can help students with
time management. Certainly, students have lives outside of high school.
But students who successfully juggle homework, responsibilities at home,
sports, and part-time jobs are better prepared for college or for full-time
work. Since college students will be assigned homework, students need to
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practice combining homework with other responsibilities. Since full time work
is equally time consuming, students need practice juggling for that as well.
The time students set aside to spend on homework is a valuable
investment that would increase what they learn in high school as well as
increase their success in college and the workplace. When students learn
more in high school, they are better prepared for the rigors of college. If
they used effective time management techniques in high school, students
would find themselves better able to combine homework and other
activities. This is good practice for their life ahead whether they go to college
or to work or both.
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Create a reverse outline by identifying the thesis statement in the first paragraph and the topic sentence of each body paragraph and conclusion.
Thesis:
1.
2.
concluding sentence
essay template
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1. introduction
2. body paragraph # 1
body paragraph #1
3. body paragraph #2
4. conclusion
Peer conference sheet for essay
writer's name ________________________________________
Thesis statement:
Topic sentence:
topic sentence:
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Writing assignments
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OCE services assignment
Identify a service on campus. Choose from the following: library, child care center, health and wellness center, writing center, counseling, tutoring, student government association, and financial aid.
Visit the place with your group. Ask what services they provide, their hours (drop in, make an appointment), how to qualify for their services (testing, application, etc.), whether they offer classes, what the cost is, etc. You may go in groups and share information.
In your paper, describe the place inside and where it is (what building, what part of campus), describe the services they provide, how you can use their services, and how that service fits in with your goals.
Include a reference to the TIB article and/or NPR program "Struggle for Smarts."
length: about 250 words typed
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Tutoring Center
1. Where is it? ___________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________
2. When are you open? _____________________________________________
3. How can I sign up for a tutor? ____________________________________
______________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________
4. How much does it cost? _____________________
5. How often can I see a tutor? ____________________________________
6. Do you have drop in tutoring? What subjects?
______________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________
7. Do you have ESL tutors? If yes, what are their hours?
_________________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
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8.________________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
Attach a brochure or handout
Health and Wellness Center
1. Where is it? ___________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________
2. When are you open? _____________________________________________
3. What services do you offer? _______________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
4. Do I need an appointment or can I drop in?
_________________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
4. What is the cost?
_________________________________________________________________
5. When is the doctor in? _____________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
6. What additional services does he provide? _____________________________
_________________________________________________________________
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7. When is the counselor in? How do I make an appointment?
Attach a brochure or handout
Student Government office
1. Where is it? ___________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________
2. When are you open? _____________________________________________
3. What clubs are on campus? _____________________________________
_______________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________
4. How can I find out more about a club or start a club? _______________________
_________________________________________________________________
5. How does student government work? _________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
6. How can I get involved? ___________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
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7. How does the food pantry work?
_________________________________________________________________
8. Do you have other special programs? What is the AAMP? Veterans' Center?
Attach a brochure or handout
Child Care Center
1. Where is it? ___________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________
2. When are you open? _____________________________________________
3. What age kids do you accept? ____________________________________
_______________________________________________________________
4. How do I apply? ____________________________________________
5. How long does it take to be accepted? __________________________
6. What is the cost? ____________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________
7. What do kids do? What equipment is there? _____________________
_____________________________________________________________
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8. ______________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
Attach brochure or handout
Financial Aid Office
(Since they are so busy during the beginning of the semester, you might have to pick up brochures and gather information online.)
1. Where is it? ___________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________
2. When are you open? _____________________________________________
3. What type of government aid is available? What are the deadlines?
______________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________
4. Do you have emergency loans or grants ?
_____________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________
5. How can I find out about other scholarships? __________________________
________________________________________________________________
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6.What is the EOPS program? ____________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
Attach brochure or handout
Library
1. Where is it? ___________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________
2. When are you open? _____________________________________________
3. What do I need to check out a book? _________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
4. Are there computers for doing homework or typing papers? Where?
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
5. Are there places to study? _________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
6. What workshops or classes do you offer?
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_________________________________________________________________
7.
_________________________________________________________
Attach brochure or handout
Counseling Center
1. Where is it? ___________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________
2. When are you open? _____________________________________________
3. How can I make an appointment to see a counselor or advisor?
_________________________________________________________________
4. How long would I have to wait for the appointment? ____________________
5. Is there drop in counseling? _____________What days and times?
_________________________________________________________________
6. How can advisors/counselors help a student? _____________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
7. What classes do you offer?_________________________________________
8. Are any of them required? In what ways are those classes helpful? _____________________________________________
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_________________________________________________________________
Attach brochure or handout
Accommodations
1. Where is it? ___________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________
2. When are you open? _____________________________________________
3. What services can you provide? _____________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
4. When do you offer testing? _______________________________________
_______________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
Attach a brochure or handout
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Writing Center
1. Where is it? _______________________________________________________
2. What are your hours? ________________________________________________
3. Do you have study areas or places to use the computers or places to print out papers?
____________________________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________________
4. How can a writing consultant help me with my papers? ____________________
____________________________________________________________________
5. Is this just for papers written for English classes? ________________________________________
6. Do you have handouts on writing or grammar? _____________
____________________________________________________________________
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bring a brochure or handout
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outline for services assignment
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paragraph # 1Introduction
*thesis statement:
paragraph # 2*Topic sentence: where you visited and what it looks like/what services they provide)
example or evidence
paragraph # 3*Topic sentence:(about how you can benefit from their services and how using this service fits in with your goals)
example or evidence
Conclusionsummary of points plus
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peer review of outline of student services assignment
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writer's name ___________________________
reader's name __________________________
1. Does the writer have a thesis statement that includes where he/she went and how he/she can benefit from the service?
2. Does paragraph 2 have description of where he/she visited and where it is located?
3. Does paragraph 2 have information on what services are provided?
4. Does paragraph 3 have information on how he/she can benefit from the service and how the service fits in with his/her goals?
5. Any suggestions for the writer?
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peer review of outline of student services assignment
writer's name ___________________________
reader's name __________________________
1. Does the writer have a thesis statement that includes where he/she went and how he/she can benefit from the service?
2. Does paragraph 2 have description of where he/she visited and where it is located?
3. Does paragraph 2 have information on what services are provided?
4. Does paragraph 3 have information on how he/she can benefit from the service and how using the service fits in with his/her goals?
5. Any suggestions for the writer?
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Writer _________________ Reader ___________________
peer feedback sheet for services first draft
Is the thesis/opinion stated in one clear sentence?
How well does the second paragraph describe the service?
How completely does the writer explain how his/her goals fit in with the service ? How well is the article used as evidence to back up his/her opinion?
Does the conclusion sum up the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
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Writer _________________ Reader ___________________
peer feedback sheet for services first draft
Is the thesis/opinion stated in one clear sentence?
How well does the second paragraph describe the service?
How completely does the writer explain how his/her goals fit in with the service ? How well is the article used as evidence to back up his/her opinion?
Does the conclusion sum up the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
Conference sheet : services essay
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fill this out and take it to your conference with your second draft and letter to the professor 1. What comments did you receive on your first draft?
2. What changes did you make?
3. What specific questions do you have for me on your second draft? (introduction, how to develop your ideas, quoting, punctuation, fragments, run-ons, etc)
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Criteria for argumentative essay. Services
Keep it up!(Met expectations)
Opportunities (Inconsistently met expectations)
Want to talk?(Didn't meet expectations)
Content(40%)
Responds to assigned topic.Is insightful and interesting.Shows critical thinking about goals and services. Has a strong, logical argument. Includes appropriate details, examples, details, and evidence.Evidence is cited correctly.
Responds to the assigned topic. Has an argument.Argument could include more critical thinking or analysis.The argument could include more details, examples, or evidence.Evidence could connect to point better or cite more correctly.
Does not respond to assigned topic.No argument.No details or evidence. Examples may not fit the topic. Repetitive or confusing content.
Organization(30%)
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Introduction has appropriate background and hooks the reader. Each paragraph has one idea. Evidence is in the middle.Transition words connect ideas.Conclusion wraps up the topic and predicts or expands.
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Intro could have more background.Thesis could be stronger.Topic sentence(s) could be stronger reasons or connect to thesis.Body paragraphs could be on different points, include more examples, evidence, or development.
No thesis or thesis is not in the introduction.No transition words.No conclusion.Paragraphing is not clear. Hard to follow.
Grammar(30%)
virtually free of sentence errors: awk sentences, punctuation
Noticeable errors in awk sentences, punct, sp, frag,
Many distracting errors in awk sentences, punctuation, sp,
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errors or sp errors. Has sentence variety and appropriate vocabulary.
run-ons, verbs, vocab, pronouns, sentence variety.
frags, run-ons, or verbs.
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name _______________________________ class time _________
Get it?
OCE on services
What comments did you get on content? (such as needs topic sentences before examples, needs to use publication, each paragraph should be a different idea, quote is too long, needs your ideas, etc.)
What comments did you get regarding grammar? (such as punctuation, run-ons, fragments, stay in third person, w, etc)
What do you need to do differently on the next OCE?
What did you do well (or better) and need to keep doing? (such as good use of evidence, good conclusion, good topic sentences, etc)
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OCE on What I Know for Sure and spanking
Write an argumentative essay of at least 2 typed pages. Your essay should have an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Should California legislators pass a law making it illegal for parents to spank their child?
Make sure you address the involvement of the government, not just the issue of spanking. Remember spanking is not the same as discipline or punishment.
sources: You should refer to articles using proper citation for summaries, paraphrases and quotes.format: 2 pages types, 12 pt, double spaced typed
OCE What I Know for Sure outline for argumentative essay EXAMPLE
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paragraph # 1Introduction
*thesis statement: YOUR THESIS ANSWERS THE QUESTION OF WHETHER CALIFORNIA LEGISLATORS SHOULD PASS A LAW MAKING IT ILLEGAL FOR PARENTS TO SPANK THEIR CHILD
paragraph # 2*Topic sentence: A REASON THAT BACKS UP THE THESIS
example or evidence
WHICH ARTICLE
paragraph # 3*Topic sentence: A REASON THAT BACKS UP THE THESIS
example or evidence
ARTICLE, WIKFS, PERSONAL
paragraph # 5 Conclusionsummary of points plus
OCE What I Know for Sure outline for argumentative essay
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paragraph # 1Introduction
*thesis statement:
paragraph # 2*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
paragraph # 3*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
paragraph # 5 Conclusionsummary of points plus
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**************************************************peer review of outline of What I Know for Sure/spanking assignment
writer's name ___________________________
reader's name __________________________
1. Does the writer have a thesis that responds to the question about should California legislators pass a law making it illegal for parents to spank their child?
2. Does paragraph 2 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
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3. Does paragraph 2 include evidence from an article? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
4. 2. Does paragraph 3 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
5. Does paragraph 3 include evidence from an article? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
6.. What suggestions do you have for the writer?peer review of outline of What I Know for Sure/spanking assignment
writer's name ___________________________
reader's name __________________________
1. Does the writer have a thesis that responds to the question about should California legislators pass a law making it illegal for parents to spank their child?
2. Does paragraph 2 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
3. Does paragraph 2 include evidence from an article? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
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4. 2. Does paragraph 3 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
5. Does paragraph 3 include evidence from an article? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
6. What suggestions do you have for the writer?Writer _________________ Reader ___________________
peer feedback sheet for What I Know for Sure/spanking first draft
How clear is the thesis in answering the question?
How well do paragraphs 2 and 3 focus on one reason that supports the thesis of a law that makes it illegal for a parent to spank his/her child?
How well does the writer use evidence from an article/WIKFS to back up his/her opinion?
How well does the conclusion sum up the argument?
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How would you rate the strength of the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.Writer _________________ Reader ___________________
peer feedback sheet for What I Know for Sure/spanking first draft
How clear is the thesis in answering the question?
How well do paragraphs 2 and 3 focus on one reason that supports the thesis of a law that makes it illegal for a parent to spank his/her child?
How well does the writer use evidence from an article/WIKFS to back up his/her opinion?
How well does the conclusion sum up the argument?
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How would you rate the strength of the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
Conference sheet : argumentative essay, WIKFS OCE
SECOND DRAFT
1. What comments did you receive on your first draft?
2. What changes did you make?
3. What specific questions do you have for me on your second draft? (introduction, how to develop your ideas, responding to the other side, punctuation, fragments, run-ons, etc)
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Criteria for argumentative essay. OCE
Keep it up!(Met expectations)
Opportunities (Inconsistently met expectations)
Want to talk?(Didn't meet expectations)
Content(40%)
Responds to assigned topic.Is insightful and interesting.Shows critical thinking. Has a strong, logical argument. Includes appropriate details, examples, details, and evidence.Evidence is cited correctly from article/WIKFS
Responds to the assigned topic. Has an argument.Argument could include more critical thinking or analysis.The argument could include more details, examples, or evidence.Evidence could connect to point better or cite more correctly.
Does not respond to assigned topic.No argument.No details or evidence. Examples may not fit the topic. Repetitive or confusing content.
Organization(30%)
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Introduction has appropriate background and hooks the reader. Each paragraph has one idea. Evidence is in the middle.Transition words connect ideas.Conclusion wraps up the topic and predicts or expands.
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Intro could have more background.Thesis could be stronger.Topic sentence(s) could be stronger reasons or connect to thesis.Body paragraphs could be on different points, include more examples, evidence, or development.
No thesis or thesis is not in the introduction.No transition words.No conclusion.Paragraphing is not clear. Hard to follow.
Grammar(30%)
virtually free of sentence errors: awk sentences, punctuation
Noticeable errors in awk sentences, punct, sp, frag,
Many distracting errors in awk sentences, punctuation, sp,
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errors or sp errors. Has sentence variety and appropriate vocabulary.
run-ons, verbs, vocab, pronouns, sentence variety.
frags, run-ons, or verbs.
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name _______________________________ Time ______________
Get it?
OCE on WIKFS
What comments did you get on content? (such as needs topic sentences before examples, needs to use publication, each paragraph should be a different idea, quote is too long, needs your ideas, etc.)
What comments did you get regarding grammar? (such as punctuation, run-ons, fragments, w, etc)
What do you need to do differently on the next OCE?
What questions do you have?
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Assignment for ICE : What I Know for Sure
expository essay with examples
Write an expository essay of at least five paragraphs. Your essay should have an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
What aspects of Tavis Smiley's childhood most contributed to his persistence and transformation?
Options include, but are not limited to, growing up poor, his family's religion, being beaten, his relationship with his parents, growing up in a community where he was one of few African-Americans, enjoying public speaking, etc.
sources: You should refer to What I Know for Sure using proper citation for summaries, paraphrases and quotes.
format: in class
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(ICE ) What I Know for Sure: Outline for essay with evidence EXAMPLE
# 1 paragraph Introduction*thesis statement: Answers the question what most contributed to Tavis Smiley's persistence and transformation.
#2 paragraph *Topic sentence: One thing/person that contributed to Smiley's persistence and transformation.
example or evidenceExample from book (WIKFS)
add your ideas
# 3 paragraph *Topic sentence: Another thing/person that contributed to Smiley's persistence and transformation.
example or evidenceExample from book (WIKFS)
add your ideas
# 4 paragraph *Topic sentence: What situation/person contributed to your desire to persistence and/or transformation.
example or evidenceExample from your life
add your ideasparagraph # 5 Conclusionsummary of points plus
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(ICE ) What I Know for Sure: Outline for expository essay with evidence paragraph # 1Introduction
*thesis statement:
paragraph # 2*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
paragraph # 3*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
paragraph # 4*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
paragraph # 5 Conclusionsummary of points plus
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Criteria for expository essay. ICE
Keep it up!(Met expectations)
Opportunities (Inconsistently met expectations)
Want to talk?(Didn't meet expectations)
Content(40%)
Responds to assigned topic.Is insightful and interesting.Shows critical thinking. Has a strong, logical point. Includes appropriate details, examples, details, and evidence.Evidence is cited correctly from WIKFS
Responds to the assigned topic. Has a point. Essay could include more critical thinking or analysis.The essay could include more details, examples, or evidence.Evidence could connect to point better or cite more correctly.
Does not respond to assigned topic.No point. No details or evidence. Examples may not fit the topic. Repetitive or confusing content.
Organization(30%)
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Introduction has appropriate background and hooks the reader. Each paragraph has one idea. Evidence is in the middle.Transition words connect ideas.Conclusion wraps up the topic and predicts or expands.
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Intro could have more background.Thesis could be stronger.Topic sentence(s) could be stronger reasons or connect to thesis.Body paragraphs could be on different points, include more examples, evidence, or development.
No thesis or thesis is not in the introduction.No transition words.No conclusion.Paragraphing is not clear. Hard to follow.
Grammar(30%)
virtually free of sentence errors: awk sentences, punctuation errors or sp
Noticeable errors in awk sentences, punct, sp, frag, run-ons, verbs,
Many distracting errors in awk sentences, punctuation, sp, frags, run-ons, or
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errors. Has sentence variety and appropriate vocabulary.
vocab, pronouns, sentence variety.
verbs.
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Get it?
ICE
What comments did you get on content?
What comments did you get on grammar? (such as punctuation, fragments, run-ons)
What do you need to do differently on the next ICE?
What questions do you have?
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Assignment for OCE : A Place to Stand
expository essay with examples
Write an essay of at least 2 typed pages. Your essay should have an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
What situations or people caused Baca to embrace his culture?How did that ethnic pride contribute to his new identity/his transformation?
Options include, but are not limited to, friends/family on the outside, fellow prisoners, what he read or studied, dealing with the past, etc.
sources: You should refer to A Place to Stand using proper citation for summaries, paraphrases and quotes.
format: 12 point font, Times New Roman, double spaced.
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note taking guide for OCE
Situation that involved his culture (include page number). This could involve religion, language, family, holidays, history, etc.
People involved, such as family, friends, etc.
Effect on Jimmy Baca, how he felt/how he transformed
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(OCE ) A Place to Stand: Outline for essay with evidence EXAMPLE
# 1 paragraph Introduction*thesis statement: Answers the question what caused Baca to embrace his culture and how that contributed to his new identity/transformation.
#2 paragraph *Topic sentence: One thing/person that contributed to Baca embracing his culture
example or evidenceExample from book (APS)
add your ideas
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# 3 paragraph *Topic sentence: Another thing/person that contributed to Baca embracing his culture
example or evidenceExample from book (APS)
add your ideas
# 4 paragraph *Topic sentence: What situation/person contributed to your embracing your culture/ethnicity/gender/sexual orientation/nationality/religion/etc.
example or evidenceExample from your life
add your ideasparagraph # 5 Conclusionsummary of points plus
(OCE ) A Place to Stand: Outline for essay with evidence paragraph # 1Introduction
*thesis statement:
paragraph # 2*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
paragraph # 3*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
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paragraph # 4*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
paragraph # 5 Conclusionsummary of points plus
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peer review of outline of A Place to Stand assignment
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writer's name ___________________________
reader's name __________________________
1. Does the writer have a thesis that responds to the question about what/who contributed to Baca pride in his culture?
2. Does paragraph 2 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
3. Does paragraph 2 include evidence from APS? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
4. 2. Does paragraph 3 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
5. Does paragraph 3 include evidence from APS? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
6. Does paragraph 4 have a topic sentence about what/who contributed to the student feeling pride in culture/heritage/orientation/etc?
7. What suggestions do you have for the writer?
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peer review of outline of A Place to Stand assignment
writer's name ___________________________
reader's name __________________________
1. Does the writer have a thesis that responds to the question about what/who contributed to Baca pride in his culture?
2. Does paragraph 2 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
3. Does paragraph 2 include evidence from APS? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
4. 2. Does paragraph 3 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
5. Does paragraph 3 include evidence from APS? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
6. Does paragraph 4 have a topic sentence about what/who contributed to the student feeling pride in culture/heritage/orientation/etc?
7. What suggestions do you have for the writer?
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Writer _________________ Reader ___________________
peer feedback sheet for APS first draft
How clear is the thesis?
How well do paragraphs 2 and 3 focus on one person/situation that contributed to Baca embracing his culture/transforming?
How well does the writer use evidence from APS to back up his/her opinion?
How completely does the writer describe what contributed to his/her embracing his culture/gender, etc. ?
How well does the conclusion sum up the argument?
How would you rate the strength of the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
Writer _________________ Reader ___________________
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peer feedback sheet for argument writing first draft
How clear is the thesis?
How well do paragraphs 2 and 3 focus on one person/situation that contributed to Baca embracing his culture/transforming?
How well does the writer use evidence from APS to back up his/her opinion?
How completely does the writer describe what contributed to his/her embracing his culture/gender, etc. ?
How well does the conclusion sum up the argument?
How would you rate the strength of the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
Conference sheet: essay, APS OCE
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SECOND DRAFT
1. What comments did you receive on your first draft?
2. What changes did you make?
3. What specific questions do you have for me on your second draft? (introduction, how to develop your ideas, responding to the other side, punctuation, fragments, run-ons, etc)
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Criteria for expository essay. OCE
Keep it up!(Met expectations)
Opportunities (Inconsistently met expectations)
Want to talk?(Didn't meet expectations)
Content(40%)
Responds to assigned topic.Is insightful and interesting.Shows critical thinking. Has a strong, logical argument. Includes appropriate details, examples, details, and evidence.Evidence is cited correctly.
Responds to the assigned topic. Has an argument.Essay could include more critical thinking or analysis.The essay could include more details, examples, or evidence.Evidence could connect to point better or cite more correctly.
Does not respond to assigned topic.No argument.No details or evidence. Examples may not fit the topic. Repetitive or confusing content.
Organization(30%)
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Introduction has appropriate background and hooks the reader. Each paragraph has one idea. Evidence is in the middle.Transition words connect ideas.Conclusion wraps up the topic and predicts or expands.
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Intro could have more background.Thesis could be stronger.Topic sentence(s) could be stronger reasons or connect to thesis.Body paragraphs could be on different points, include more examples, evidence, or development.
No thesis or thesis is not in the introduction.No transition words.No conclusion.Paragraphing is not clear. Hard to follow.
Grammar(30%)
virtually free of sentence errors: awk sentences, punctuation
Noticeable errors in awk sentences, punct, sp, frag,
Many distracting errors in awk sentences, punctuation, sp,
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errors or sp errors. Has sentence variety and appropriate vocabulary.
run-ons, verbs, vocab, pronouns, sentence variety.
frags, run-ons, or verbs.
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name _______________________________ Time ______________
Get it?
OCE on APS
What comments did you get on content? (such as needs topic sentences before examples, needs to use publication, each paragraph should be a different idea, quote is too long, needs your ideas, etc.)
What comments did you get regarding grammar? (such as punctuation, run-ons, fragments, stay in third person, w, etc)
What do you need to do differently on the next OCE?
What questions do you have?
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Assignment for ICE : APS and non-violent drug offenders.
argumentative essay with examples
Write an argumentative essay of at least four paragraphs. Your essay should have an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Should non-violent drug offenders be subject to mandatory sentencing laws reserved for violent criminals? If so, why? If not, why not? What other options do you support?
sources: You should refer to articles using proper citation for summaries, paraphrases and quotes.
format: in class
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(ICE ) A Place to Stand Outline for argumentative essay with evidence EXAMPLE
# 1 paragraph Introduction*thesis statement: Answers the question whether non-violent drug offenders should be subject to mandatory sentencing laws
#2 paragraph *Topic sentence: a reason that backs up thesis
example or evidenceExample from article
add your ideas
# 3 paragraph *Topic sentence: a reason that backs up thesis
example or evidenceExample from article or book (APS)
add your ideas
paragraph # 5 Conclusionsummary of points plus
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(ICE ) A Place to Stand Outline for argumentative essay with evidence paragraph # 1Introduction
*thesis statement:
paragraph # 2*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
paragraph # 3*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
paragraph # 5 Conclusionsummary of points plus
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peer review of outline of A Place to Stand assignment
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writer's name ___________________________
reader's name __________________________
1. Does the writer have a thesis that responds to the question about whether non-violent drug offenders should be subject to mandatory sentencing laws?
2. Does paragraph 2 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
3. Does paragraph 2 include evidence from article? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
4. 2. Does paragraph 3 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
5. Does paragraph 3 include evidence from article/APS/your life? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
7. What suggestions do you have for the writer?
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peer review of outline of A Place to Stand assignment
writer's name ___________________________
reader's name __________________________
1. Does the writer have a thesis that responds to the question about whether non-violent drug offenders should be subject to mandatory sentencing laws?
2. Does paragraph 2 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
3. Does paragraph 2 include evidence from article? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
4. 2. Does paragraph 3 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
5. Does paragraph 3 include evidence from article/APS/your life? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
7. What suggestions do you have for the writer?
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Criteria for argumentative essay. ICE
Keep it up!(Met expectations)
Opportunities (Inconsistently met expectations)
Want to talk?(Didn't meet expectations)
Content(40%)
Responds to assigned topic.Is insightful and interesting.Shows critical thinking. Has a strong, logical argument. Includes appropriate details, examples, details, and evidence.Evidence is cited correctly from WIKFS
Responds to the assigned topic. Has a point. Argument could include more critical thinking or analysis.The essay could include more details, examples, or evidence.Evidence could connect to point better or cite more correctly.
Does not respond to assigned topic.No argument. No details or evidence. Examples may not fit the topic. Repetitive or confusing content.
Organization(30%)
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Introduction has appropriate background and hooks the reader. Each paragraph has one idea. Evidence is in the middle.Transition words connect ideas.Conclusion wraps up the topic and predicts or expands.
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Intro could have more background.Thesis could be stronger.Topic sentence(s) could be stronger reasons or connect to thesis.Body paragraphs could be on different points, include more examples, evidence, or development.
No thesis or thesis is not in the introduction.No transition words.No conclusion.Paragraphing is not clear. Hard to follow.
Grammar(30%)
virtually free of sentence errors: awk sentences, punctuation errors or sp
Noticeable errors in awk sentences, punct, sp, frag, run-ons, verbs,
Many distracting errors in awk sentences, punctuation, sp, frags, run-ons, or
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errors. Has sentence variety and appropriate vocabulary.
vocab, pronouns, sentence variety.
verbs.
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Get it? name __________________________________
ICE - non-violent drug offenders
What comments did you get on content?
What comments did you get on grammar? (such as punctuation, fragments, run-ons)
What do you need to do differently on the next ICE?
What questions do you have?
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Assignment for OCE: Persisting and transforming
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essay with examples
Write an expository essay of at least 2 1/2 typed pages. Your essay should have an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
In class, we will look themes in all books around persisting and transforming and generate questions for this essay.
sources: You should refer to What the Best College Students Do, A Place to Stand and What I Know for Sure using proper citation for summaries, paraphrases, and quotes.
format: 12 point font, Times New Roman, double spaced.
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***************************************************(OCE ) Persisting and transforming: What the Best College Students Do, A Place to Stand, and What I Know for Sure: Outline for essay with evidence paragraph # 1Introduction
*thesis statement:
paragraph # 2*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
paragraph # 3*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
paragraph # 4*Topic sentence:
example or evidence
paragraph # 5 Conclusionsummary of points plus
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peer review of outline of assignment on persisting and transforming
writer's name ___________________________
reader's name __________________________
1. Does the writer have a thesis that responds to the question about persisting and transforming?
2. Does paragraph 2 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
3. Does paragraph 2 include evidence from WBCSD, APS or WIKFS? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
4. 2. Does paragraph 3 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
5. Does paragraph 3 include evidence from WBCSD, APS or WIKFS? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
6. Does paragraph 4 have a topic sentence about persisting and transforming?
7. What suggestions do you have for the writer?
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peer review of outline of assignment on persisting and transforming
writer's name ___________________________
reader's name __________________________
1. Does the writer have a thesis that responds to the question about persisting and transforming?
2. Does paragraph 2 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
3. Does paragraph 2 include evidence from WBCSD, APS, or WIKFS? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
4. 2. Does paragraph 3 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
5. Does paragraph 3 include evidence from WBCSD, APS, or WIKFS? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
6. Does paragraph 4 have a topic sentence about persisting and transforming?
7. What suggestions do you have for the writer?Writer _________________ Reader ___________________
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peer feedback sheet for first draft on persisting and transforming
How clear is the thesis?
How well do paragraphs 2, 3, and 4 focus on persisting and transforming?
How well does the writer use evidence from WBCSD, APS, and WIKFS to back up his/her opinion?
How critically and completely does the writer argue about persisting and transforming?
How well does the conclusion sum up the argument?
How would you rate the strength of the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
Writer _________________ Reader ___________________
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peer feedback sheet for first draft on persisting and transforming?
How clear is the thesis?
How well do paragraphs 2, 3, and 4 focus on persisting and transforming?
How well does the writer use evidence from WBCSD, APS, and WIKFS to back up his/her opinion?
How critically and completely does the writer argue about persisting and transforming?
How well does the conclusion sum up the argument?
How would you rate the strength of the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
Conference sheet : argumentative essay, persisting and transforming, OCE
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Fill out this sheet, and take it with your second draft and letter to the professor to your conference.
1. What comments did you receive on your first draft?
2. What changes did you make?
3. What specific questions do you have for me on your second draft? (introduction, how to develop your ideas, responding to the other side, punctuation, fragments, run-ons, etc)
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Criteria for argumentative essay. OCE
Keep it up!(Met expectations)
Opportunities (Inconsistently met expectations)
Want to talk?(Didn't meet expectations)
Content(40%)
Responds to assigned topic.Is insightful and interesting.Shows critical thinking. Has a strong, logical argument. Includes appropriate details, examples, details, and evidence.Evidence is cited correctly. Three sources
Responds to the assigned topic. Has an argument.Argument could include more critical thinking or analysis.The argument could include more details, examples, or evidence.Evidence could connect to point better or cite more correctly.
Does not respond to assigned topic.No argument.No details or evidence. Examples may not fit the topic. Repetitive or confusing content.
Organization(30%)
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Introduction has appropriate background and hooks the reader. Each paragraph has one idea. Evidence is in the middle.Transition words connect ideas.Conclusion wraps up the topic and predicts or expands.
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Intro could have more background.Thesis could be stronger.Topic sentence(s) could be stronger reasons or connect to thesis.Body paragraphs could be on different points, include more examples, evidence, or development.
No thesis or thesis is not in the introduction.No transition words.No conclusion.Paragraphing is not clear. Hard to follow.
Grammar(30%)
virtually free of sentence errors: awk sentences, punctuation
Noticeable errors in awk sentences, punct, sp, frag,
Many distracting errors in awk sentences, punctuation, sp,
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errors or sp errors. Has sentence variety and appropriate vocabulary.
run-ons, verbs, vocab, pronouns, sentence variety.
frags, run-ons, or verbs.
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name _______________________________ Time ______________
Get it?
OCE on Persisting and transforming
What comments did you get on content? (such as needs topic sentences before examples, needs to use publication, each paragraph should be a different idea, quote is too long, needs your ideas, etc.)
What comments did you get regarding grammar? (such as punctuation, run-ons, fragments, stay in third person, w, etc)
What do you need to do differently on the next OCE?
What questions do you have?
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Assignment for OCE : This I Believe
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Write your own "This I Believe" about what you think is important and your values. Instructions are on page 272-273 in This I Believe.
Note due dates in your assignment sheet.
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peer review of outline of TIB
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writer's name ___________________________
reader's name __________________________
1. Does the writer have a thesis that responds to the TIB assignment?
2. Put the thesis in your own words.
3. How well does the outline show a plan that backs up the thesis?
4. What story or stories back up the thesis?
5. How appropriate is(are) the story (stories)?
7. What suggestions do you have for the writer?
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peer review of outline of TIB
writer's name ___________________________
reader's name __________________________
1. Does the writer have a thesis that responds to the TIB assignment?
2. Put the thesis in your own words.
3. How well does the outline show a plan that backs up the thesis?
4. What story or stories back up the thesis?
5. How appropriate is(are) the story (stories)?
7. What suggestions do you have for the writer?
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Writer _________________ Reader ___________________
peer feedback sheet for first draft TIB
Is the thesis/opinion stated in one clear sentence early in the essay?
Does each paragraph contain only one idea?
Does the writer include enough details, examples, and stories with feeling to back up his/her opinion?
How would you rate the effectiveness of the essay?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
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Writer _________________ Reader ___________________
peer feedback sheet for first draft, TIB
Is the thesis/opinion stated in one clear sentence early in the essay?
Does each paragraph contain only one idea?
Does the writer include enough details, examples, and stories with feeling to back up his/her opinion?
How would you rate the effectiveness of the essay?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
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conference sheet: This I Believe
Fill this out and bring it and your second draft, and letter to the professor to your conference 1. What comments did you receive on your first draft?
2. What changes did you make?
3. What questions do you have related to fragments, run ons, verb errors, vocabulary errors, punctuation errors, introduction, etc.
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Criteria for essay. TIB
Keep it up!(Met expectations)
Opportunities (Inconsistently met expectations)
Want to talk?(Didn't meet expectations)
Content(40%)
Responds to assigned topic.Is insightful and interesting.Shows critical thinking. Has a strong, logical argument. Includes appropriate details, examples, details, and evidence.
Responds to the assigned topic. Has an argument.Argument could include more critical thinking or analysis.The argument could include more details, examples, or evidence.Evidence could connect to point better
Does not respond to assigned topic.No argument.No details or evidence. Examples may not fit the topic. Repetitive or confusing content.
Organization(30%)
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Introduction has appropriate background and hooks the reader. Each paragraph has one idea. Evidence is in the middle.Transition words connect ideas.Conclusion wraps up the topic and predicts or expands.
Thesis is in the first paragraph. Intro could have more background.Thesis could be stronger.Topic sentence(s) could be stronger reasons or connect to thesis.Body paragraphs could be on different points, include more examples, evidence, or development.
No thesis or thesis is not in the introduction.No transition words.No conclusion.Paragraphing is not clear. Hard to follow.
Grammar(30%)
virtually free of sentence errors: awk sentences, punctuation errors or sp errors. Has
Noticeable errors in awk sentences, punct, sp, frag, run-ons, verbs, vocab, pronouns,
Many distracting errors in awk sentences, punctuation, sp, frags, run-ons, or verbs.
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sentence variety and appropriate vocabulary.
sentence variety.
Instructions for writing summaries
1. Mark the thesis statement, main ideas, and important supporting details.
2. Make a brief outline.3. The thesis is the author’s main point or opinion. 4. The supporting details are examples/evidence/facts that
support the main ideas. 5. Include only the most important supporting details.6. Don’t include your opinions.
Instructions for writing reading responses
A reading response is your reaction to what you read. It can include your opinion on the issue as well as how you connect to the article or essay. Do you think differently about the issue now? A reading response does not include a summary. Do not quote the article.
1. Use verbs like (I) like, feel, think. 2. Use phrases like.. this reminds me of…, gives me the
impression….., I wonder if….., If I were in that situation…., I was surprised that…., I didn’t understand why…., I agree because....., I disagree because....
Double spaced, typed, 12-point font, 1 1/2 pages
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Read the sample essays and answer the following questions.
Sample A Sample B1. Is there enough background in the introductory paragraph?
Yes no yes no
2. Does the introductory paragraph have a clear thesis statement that states the writer’s opinion?
Yes no yes no
3. Does each paragraph have one idea that supports the thesis?
Yes no yes no 4. Is there enough support (such as evidence and examples) in each paragraph?
Yes no yes no
5. Does the concluding paragraph bring the ideas together?
Yes no yes no
6. Do you find the grammatical mistakes distracting?
Yes no yes no
7. What does this writer do well? What did you learn from either sample?
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Read the sample essay and answer the following questions.
Sample A Sample B1. Is there enough background from the question in the introductory paragraph?
Yes no yes no
2. Does the introductory paragraph have a clear thesis statement that states the writer’s opinion?
Yes no yes no
3. Does each paragraph have one idea that supports the thesis?
Yes no yes no 4. Is there enough support (such as evidence and examples) in each paragraph?
Yes no yes no
5. Does the concluding paragraph bring the ideas together?
Yes no yes no
6. Do you find the grammatical mistakes distracting?
Yes no yes no
7. What does this writer do well? What did you learn from either sample?
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Discussion questions for What I Know For Sure
Gulfport to Gotham
Gotham to Gulfport1. Compare how drinking is discussed in APS and in WIKFS.
Gulfport to Bunker Hill
The Trailer and the Church
Men Were walking on the Moon
2. What historical references are mentioned? What is the purpose?
3. What are your thoughts on the Holiness Pentecostal denomination and the family's church schedule?
4. What are your thoughts on family life and structure in the trailer?
5. What is Tavis' relationship with the white world? Compare to Baca's.
P. 37The Bully and the Lesson
6. What do you think about how Tavis' mother reacted to Tavis being beat up?
The Revelation
In My Fathers' House
"Shame on the Smileys!"
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The Boxcar Children
7. On page 72, Smiley writes that he had trouble making sense of how his father whom he respected as a hardworking man and as a father had reacted that way.
How do you make sense of what his father did?A Rage That Reaches to Heaven
8. How does Smiley understand what happened in the context of his faith in God?
Despising the Shame
9. How does the beating change him and his relationship with his family? How is he able to go home?
P. 85 Turn the Fear to Energy
10. How would you describe Tavis' 8th grade year? How does his culturalisolation contribute?
America Has Defaulted
11. What does Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr. 's March on Washington speech (1963) mean to Tavis?
High School Hierarchy
Hustle and Flow
12. "My spirit remained walled off," writes Smiley.
Dangerous Unselfishness
Conflict of Suffering
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13. How would you describe his relations with his parents? What about hisrelations with God?
P. 125 The Paradox Paradigm
14. What do you think of how he lived a compartmentalized life?
IU
15. " Anyone who thinks he's gotten ahead in life without the help of others is living in a fool's paradise," writes Smiley.
Brave New World
16. How is his adjustment to college and freedom?
Discuss Richard Pryor
RIP Denver Smith
17. What is the significance of Smith's death to Smiley?
Madam Mayor
Why does Tavis include the information about him padding his hours?
End of the Road
18. What was your reaction to his father's phone call?
P. 167 Urban Angels
19. What are your comments on Tavis' campaign to get an unpaid internship in Mayor Bradley's office? Have you ever done anything like that to get a job?
Discuss Mayor Bradley
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Hustle and Flow Revisited
Urban Angels Revisited
20. Any thoughts on his determination to advance in the office?
P. 193 Lame-Duck Hoosier
21. What are the factors that contributed in Tavis not finishing his senior year?
How could the situation have been avoided?
Chillin' in the Deep Freeze
End of the Eighties
I Lost
22. What do you think of the risks he takes?
Just a Thought
23. Any comments on his networks/contacts?
24. Other thoughts on his successes to date?
Discuss Tom Joyner.
P. 219 A Good Bet
25. What do you think of his on-air response to Russell Simmons?
The Press and the President
26. Can someone be a journalist and an advocate? Page 223
Castro
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27. Any thoughts on Smiley's exchange with Castro? Why did Smiley include it in the book?
Big Mama
Spring Thaw
28. Any thoughts on Smiley's relationship with his dad?
Final Bet
The Beginning29. Smiley included two examples of him being "justified but not dignified." Why?
Forces of Light
30. How do you think about him at the end of the book? His personal life,spiritual life, accomplishments, etc?
Discuss Tavis 10.
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Discussion questions for A Place to Stand
Prologue:
1. Why did Baca write the book?
Chapter 1:2. What is Baca's relationship with the white world? Compare to Smiley's.
3. Why is there so much alcoholism and drug use in his family? Compare to Smiley's
4. How did he cope with his circumstances?
Chapter 2:5. How did Baca's time in the detention home change him?
6. What are some differences between Meiyo and Jimmy?
Chapter 3:7. How do you think his past, including time in the D-home, affect his relationships with others? How do you think it affected his short stint in jail with Marco?
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8. What do you think his reference to the title means on page 62?
Chapter 4:9. How much of his current situation is what happens to him as compared with what he is responsible for?
10. Do you notice any references Baca makes to culture?
Chapter 5:11. What conflicting thoughts does Baca have about books?
12. What was the purpose of the pig story?
13. Why does Baca describe his trip to Florence in such detail?
Chapter 6:14. What are the prison rules that he learns from Macaron and others?
15. What do you think about his statement on the very bottom of page 121: "Implicit in his encouragement was that it was up to me to decide my fate, but it really wasn't like that. Others had a lot to do with whether you did good or bad."
16. How would you characterize his time in solitary this first time?
17. How would you explain Macaron's explanation on page 130 - 131 on the heart and mind and surviving prison?
Chapter 7:18. How would you characterize his second time in solitary?
19. What does the wind represent as described on pages 152-153?
Chapter 8:20. Explain Baca's statement on page 164 : "I knew in my soul that if I had gone along with their classifying me as they wished,
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simply ignoring my request for school, that I would still be in prison today."
21. How would you characterize his third time in solitary?
22. Explain Baca's comment on page 172 that his grandfather "died of a broken heart."
23. Comment on how Baca ends chapter 8 about betrayals.
Chapter 9:24. What does Baca mean on page 188: "A little voice in my head was finally talking about what I had known all my life. With every word I was gulping fresh air and filling my lungs. I felt I was writing for my life."
25. What does Baca notice that prison does to someone? Include inmates and guards and from all you've read.
26. Visits with Mieyo/Lori and Theresa.
Chapter 10:27. His poetry. William Carlos Williams
28. How is poetry changing him?
29. Nut run and his "need to speak"
Chapter 11:30. What is Baca learning about his history and culture and what is the effect on him? Compare to Smiley.
31. Any comments on Baca's statement on page 224: "When their dreams had been crushed, when their prayers seemed never to be answered, when life seemed to cheat them out of every glimmer of happiness, their hearts broke. And then alcoholism and despair set in."
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32. What do you get out of the poem "Healing Earthquakes" and the reference to the title of the book?
33. Discuss the news he gets from the warden and how Baca reacts to it.
Chapter 12:34. How does his relationship with Virginia affect his view of himself in the context of his culture?
35. What do you think of his out-of-body travels and what he describes as a"nervous breakdown"?
36. What does he mean by "power of vision"? Any connection to the story about when he was born on page 107-108?
Chapter 13:37. Why all the appearances before the parole board? What was it doing to him? Was It what Macaron described on page 130-131?
Epilogue:38. Baca writes: "It has taken me a long time to understand how so much injustice could happen to such good people." What does he understand?
39. What does the ending in the church mean?