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Compare/Contrast Essay Peer Edit

The Great Gatsby

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MLA Format• Times Font 12 pt.; double space ENTIRE document

• Proper heading– Last name and page number in header.• Heading

• Title (centered)

Example

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Introduction Paragraph

1) Is your lead catchy? Share it with the person next to you. Revise it for your rough draft, if needed.

3) Is the thesis in the correct format? (See slides 5 and 6 ). Underline it in your draft.

2) In the exposition, have you made sure to include the authors’ names and titles of the works? (The Great Gatsby; F. Scott Fitzgerald, etc.)

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Thesis Statement (Essay # 3)

Dunbar’s poem “We Wear the Mask” identifies struggles that racially discriminated people must fight on a daily basis in order to achieve the American dream—likewise, the socially upper class in society must also weather disappointments of a certain sort in the quest for their American dreams.

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Thesis Statement Example (Essay #4)

According to modern literature, the achievement of the American dream remains as much elusive, and sometimes even harder to attain for many Americans today, as it was in the early 20th century because of the conditions of society.

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Body Paragraphs

1) Make sure topic sentences (TS) are aligned with your thesis statement. Begin sentences with a variety of different words. (Watch for repetitive words or phrases).

2) Make sure you add context to your evidence (see slide 8) and that the evidence is smoothly integrated. Cite quotes correctly.

3) Avoid repetitive analysis—make sure to add more than the obvious (see slide 9)

4) Your concluding sentence should sum up your main points from the paragraph.

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Context in Italics

Dunbar emphasizes the suffering of African Americans in the following excerpt, “This debt we pay to human guile;/With torn and bleeding hearts we smile” (3-4).

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Example Analysis

The pain of racism in the early 20th century is apparent in the previous lines because Dunbar uses the image of the torn and bleeding heart to show the ongoing damage of prejudice. Also, he illuminates how that through the suffering, African Americans still have to “grin and bear it” in order to survive.

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Language Enhancement

1) Replace dead verbs with powerful verbs (refer to your handout, or go to my website).

2) Add transitions when needed (refer to handout or go to website)

3) Refer to your vocabulary lists and employ words that will enrich the reading of your essay.

4)Use words of compare/contrast

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December 16th: Final essay due!!!

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For next time…OR Friday…put your papers in this order…TOP(#1)…and so on…

1) Rubric (blue) with your name on it2) CLEAN final draft—ALL corrections made—underline thesis

statement , highlight semicolons, words of compare/contrast3) Peer edited draft & peer edit sheet4) Outline 5) Typed an stamped drafts—nothing handwritten--there should

be a total of 36) All readings (poems and articles) look at order on Website7) Study guide answers8) SUBMIT FINAL DRAFT of essay TO TURNITIN.COM by midnight

December 16th. If you are submitting for extra credit—turnitin.com needs to be completed by the time you get to class Wednesday!!

**DO NOT SUBMIT YOUR PACKET IF IT IS MISSING SOMETHING—I WILL GIVE IT BACK TO YOU!! NOT IN MLA FORMAT?? IT WILL BE RETURNED TO YOU!