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REAL REVISION:
Sharing Authors’
Strategies with Students
http://www.katemessner.com
Revision should not be a
surprise.
Assignment:
Write for one minute, describing a place that you love.
WHAT REVISION ISN’T…
Spell Checking Hiring a professional editor Solitary A process with a single
correct solution or end point
WHAT REVISION IS
BrainstormingFree-Writing(and maybe
starting over)
Princess Marty Frog-Slimeand the
Nutcracker Ballet
Confessions of a Sea Monster
“Well…This is funny. But it sounds more
like a New Yorker cartoon than a book for
kids.”
Draft 1
Draft 2
Draft 3
Draft 4
Time to
Write!Sometimes poem…
Time to
Write!Sometimes poem…
WHAT REVISION IS
Finding & Strengthening the Heart of a project
This book is about _________________________________________________________________________________________. (But underneath that, it’s really about __________________________________________________________________________________________.
My book is about a figure skater from a small-town maple farm who earns a scholarship to train with the elite in Lake Placid & discovers a world of mean girls on ice.
But underneath that, it’s really about making a decision to follow your own dreams instead of the dreams that are chosen for you.
My book is about a future world where killer tornadoes are widespread and four kids at a science camp who are trying to stop them but discover a terrifying secret.
But underneath that, it’s really about using your powers for good.
This paper is about _________________________________________________________________________________________. (But underneath that, it’s really about __________________________________________________________________________________________.
If your poem/essay/personal narrative/ research paper could talk back to you right now, what would it say?
WHAT REVISION IS
Charts, maps, timelines, & outlines
More Ideas…
• Map the setting – note important events
• Chapter by chapter timelines• Plot charts with rising/falling
action• Outline (after writing) to
identify weak chapters
WHAT REVISION IS
Considering all five senses.
Time to
Revise!Sometimes poem…
Add SMELLS
WHAT REVISION IS
Returning to Research
WHAT REVISION IS
Details and Word Choice
Be specific.Be surprising.
Look for delicious details
Look for delicious details
Google Maps – Street View
Role Play!Replace Tired Body
Language
** Role Play! Replace Tired Body
Language
ANGRYFRUSTRATED
ANXIOUSSCARED
JOYFUL-EXCITEDDEPRESSED
WHAT REVISION IS
Being a Word Ninja
veryreallyjustthat
“what looked like”
JUSTANDRATHERBEGAN TOAS THOUGHTHENBUT ALWAYS
GLANCEDIN THAT MOMENTSO A BITI GUESSMAYBETHATVERY REALLY
Watch for “pet” stories, ideas,
themes, phrases…
Brainstorm: What words,
phrases, & pet stories are on your personal
“MOST WANTED” list?
Time to Revise!
***Sometimes poem… Cut at least 20 words
WHAT REVISION ISBeing Social
-Critique Groups/Partners
Post-It Note Critiques
ORANGE = “I LOVE THIS!”
GREEN = “I’M BORED.”YELLOW=“I’M CONFUSED”
WHAT REVISION IS
Making Lists……and getting to
work!
Five Reasons Kids Don’t Want to
Revise(and what teachers
can do about it)
REASON #1
“But I just FINISHED. And I
like my paper the way it is.”
SOLUTION:
Start the revision conversation
early.
After We Write…
REVISION – PART I REVISION – PART 2 REVISION – PART 3
REASON #2
“I already ran a spell check. I’m
good.”
SOLUTION:
Teach students the difference
between revising and editing.
REASON #3
“I don’t know where to start.”
SOLUTION:
Have a revision checklist ready…
Student Critique Partners• Trade papers with a partner•Use highlighters to indicate the following:• Pink = Consider cutting this part.• Green = I’m confused now.• Orange = Use more vivid details/precise language.
• Yellow = This part works really well!•In the margin next to each color (or on a Post-It note), write a note explaining your highlighting and making suggestions.
REASON #4
“Everybody says I’m a great writer.
Great writers don’t need to
revise.”
SOLUTION:
Use published authors as role
models, through text examples and
Skype visits.
GUESS HOW MANY DRAFTS?
14!
REAL REVISION:
Sharing Authors’
Strategies with Students
http://www.katemessner.com
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