Focus: Putting Analysis into your Paragraphs

FOCUS: PUTTING ANALYSIS INTO YOUR PARAGRAPHS

Outcome: SWBAT understand SHRIMP and break down a TE(SHRIMP)C paragraph.

PRACTICE ANALYSIS

For each of the following slides take 20 seconds and jot down the first ideas that come to your mind.

DO YOU REALISE WHAT YOU WERE JUST DOING? Just like the photographers in each of the more

interesting pictures, authors construct meaning without coming right out and stating it. When you take what the author has said on the page and explain the deeper meaning, that is called analysis.

When you just retell us what the quote has already said (ie. When Michael says, “A promise. You keep out of my life, I keep out of yours,” he and Josie are agreeing to keep out of each other’s lives) then you are stating the obvious like some of the less interesting pictures did. That is called summary or retelling.

START WITH WHAT WE KNOW…

Topic SentenceEvidenceExplanation Clincher

AN UPDATE FOR VCEAs VCE students we need to up the ante on our paragraphs.

Topic Sentence Evidence (your best piece, not just the first

that comes to mind) Explanation = Analysis = SHRIMP Clincher

What is SHRIMP? –We’ll get to that by answering a familiar question.

WHAT FACTORS CREATE A CHANGE IN JOSIE’S RELATIONSHIP WITH MICHAEL ANDRETTI? HOW HAS IT GROWN?

First underline key words and think of synonyms. Factors = causes, reasons, events, changing attitudes

etc. Change = development, alteration, shift Relationship = connection, bond, rapport Grown = developed, improved, matured

TOPIC SENTENCE Your Topic Sentence needs to address the topic and summarise your main argument for the paragraph.

What are the factors that influenced growth in the relationship? Josie’s personal growth Michael fulfilling his role as a father Christina and Katia accepting Michael into the family Events including (Michael rescuing Josie after she breaks

Carly’s nose and has an awful date with Jacob, Josie staying at Michael’s house and going to Adelaide, Michael offering to adopt Josie)

Example: Josie’s relationship with Michael Andretti develops due to her personal growth, and both his and Christina’s acceptance of his role as a father.

EVIDENCE This should be a key quote that sums up your

argument. Ie. “I’d be so proud to be an Andretti … Dad” Use words like demonstrated, revealed,

exemplified, represented etc. Example: The growth in their relationship is

exemplified when Michael asks to “adopt” Josie and Josie responds, “I’d be so proud to be an Andretti ... Dad” (p244).

ANALYSIS = SHRIMP(EXPLANATION) S = WHAT the scene is SHOWING? H = HOW the author has constructed

meaning through LITERARY DEVICES? R = HOW the READER is positioned to

feel/think/react/question to the example. I = WHY the scene/example is IMPORTANT? MP = HOW the example is connected to the

author’s MAIN MESSAGES or PURPOSE.

So, let’s look at these elements a bit closer…

S = WHAT THE SCENE IS SHOWING? This scene is highlighting, demonstrating,

emphasising, revealing…etc OR// …. is explored, developed, illuminated,

displayed through this scene

Example: This scene demonstrates that Josie now loves Michael and he is eager to fulfill his duty as a father.

H = HOW THE AUTHOR HAS CONSTRUCTED MEANING THROUGH LITERARY DEVICES? The author uses a ……….. structure to reveal

… The language of the character reveals …

about them. The metaphor/simile adds extra meaning to

the description of … The costumes symbolise … Example: In this scene, Marchetta uses

Josie’s pride in the Andretti name to symbolise her total acceptance of her father.

R = HOW THE READER IS POSITIONED TO FEEL/THINK/REACT/QUESTION TO THE EXAMPLE. How does the author make a reader feel a certain

way and WHY do they want to make their reader feel that way?...ect)

The reader is made to feel sympathetic/unsympathetic towards characters by …

The reader is positioned to ask questions about a scene/character …

The reader is made to feel shocked/angry/sad by… Example: The reader is positioned by Marchetta to

feel comfortable with Josie and Michael’s bond, as Michael confirms he is “not going back” (p244) to Adelaide.

I = WHY THE SCENE/EXAMPLE IS IMPORTANT? This is where you link your key evidence to other

evidence from elsewhere in the text. This scene is vital because it reveals … about a

character’s strengths/weaknesses This scene is pivotal as it reveals … about the

relationships between people This scene is crucial as it helps… progress the story/

develop a theme/highlight a VALUE or PERSPECTIVE/ link to conflict in the text/link to something social or historical

Example: This scene is pivotal because it represents the culmination of a series of events including Michael defending Josie when she breaks Carly’s nose, offering her a job in his law firm and is further entrenched when Josie travels with Michael to Adelaide to meet his family.

M = HOW THE EXAMPLE IS CONNECTED TO THE AUTHOR’S MAIN MESSAGES OR PURPOSE

The author/director is trying to teach readers ?....?....?

The example links to the author’s main messages of …

Example: Through this relationship Marchetta reinforces her message that self-discovery can only come through the acceptance of oneself and others.

CLINCHER The clincher sums up your paragraph and

refers back to the topic. Sometimes your clincher will be covered with

your MP statements. Example: Josie finally figures out, “It doesn’t

matter whether I’m Josephine Andretti who was never an Alibrandi” (p261) and as a result she has a strong and lasting bond with her father.

T - Josie’s relationship with Michael Andretti develops due to her personal growth, and both his and Christina’s acceptance of his role as a father.

E - The growth in their relationship is exemplified when Michael asks to “adopt” Josie and Josie responds, “I’d be so proud to be an Andretti ... Dad” (p244).

S - This scene demonstrates that Josie now loves Michael and he is eager to fulfill his duty as a father.

H - In this scene, Marchetta uses Josie’s pride in the Andretti name to symbolise her total acceptance of her father.

R - The reader is positioned by Marchetta to feel comfortable with Josie and Michael’s bond, as Michael confirms he is “not going back” (p244) to Adelaide.

I - This scene is pivotal because it represents the culmination of a series of events including Michael defending Josie when she breaks Carly’s nose, offering her a job in his law firm and is further entrenched when Josie travels with Michael to Adelaide to meet his family.

MP - Through this relationship Marchetta reinforces her message that self-discovery can only come through the acceptance of oneself and others.

C - Josie finally figures out, “It doesn’t matter whether I’m Josephine Andretti who was never an Alibrandi” (p261) and as a result she has a strong and lasting bond with her father.