English 105, Meeting 3

English 105, Meeting 3Tosspon of DOOM!

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Game! Pin the ThesisGroups each will get a set of thesis statements. Record the #’s you have!Decide which are “adequate” and which are “inadequate”

• Use tape to put statements onto the corresponding location.

• Be prepared to justify your choice to the class.

On 1 page per group, rewrite the inadequate thesis statements.

Guidelines for a good thesis (pg 33)

States the writer’s clearly defined opinion on some subjectAssert ONE main ideaHave something worthwhile to sayLimit thesis to fit the assignmentState thesis clearly, in specific termsIn first or second paragraph.

Does NOT use “this paper”, “I”, or “you; does NOT ask a question; Does NOT state a fact no one can argue with.

Thesis Statement AnswersIdentify whether each is adequate or not, explain the problem

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COMMAS PG 86 GREEN HANDBOOK

The Dreaded COMMA – handbook pg 86

1.Set off independent clauses

• The comma joins 2 complete sentences. MUST use a comma and a FANBOY

The House approved the bill but the Senate rejected it.

Either the hard drive is full or the modem is too slow.

Set off item in a series

Set off item in a series (will discuss parallel structure later).

You may pay by check, with a credit card, or in cash.

We took my grandparents, aunts, uncles, and cousins.

Commas – Introductory Elementspg 88When your sentence starts with a dependent clause, verbal phrase, or prepositional phrase, use a comma after.

When war came to Baghdad, many victims were children. Many victims were children when the war came to Baghdad. During the depression, movie attendance rose.

Setting off nonessential materialWhen you add info that is not essential, or vital, to the sentence’s meaning, it should go between two commas. If it seems to interrupt, use 2 commas. • He rand for the bus, which was late as usual. • The clerk, with a nod, dismissed me. • The marathoner, running his fastest, beat his previous record.

• Citizen Kane, Orson Welles’s first film, made him famous.

Fast Rule: don’t use a comma in front of that.

Misused commas: Don’t use

To set off a restrictive modifierThe film, Malcom X, was directed by Spike Lee. They planned a picnic, in the park.

Between a subject and its verbA woman with dark red hair, opened the door.

Between a verb and its indirect quote/question

The landlord asked, if we would sign a two year lease.

Before a dependent clause at the end of a sentence.

Jane Addams founded Hull House, because she wanted to help Chicago’s poor

Good rule of thumb:

Read the section aloud. Where do you NEED a pause? That is where a comma belongs. If you do NOT need a pause, the comma does NOT belong.

Comma Worksheet1. “Gas is too expensive” said the experienced

driver.2. I like to run but not when it’s hot.3. My three favorite foods are pasta pizza and ice

cream.4. Paris France is my favorite place to visit.5. Today is Tuesday June 10th 1992.6. Tomorrow Wednesday we will take a trip to the

zoo.7. When I get to the mall I will go to the food court.8. Yes we can find a place for you to stay over the

weekend.9. You will need milk sugar flour and eggs.

The rest of the answers will be available online.

If money wasn’t an object, which of these houses would you buy?

Why?

Beginnings and Endings. Chapter 4, pg 81.

Lead Ins: The “front door” to your paper. 1. paradoxical/

intriguing statement2. Shocking/arresting

statistic3. A question4. Quote5. Joke/story/anecdote6. Description,

emotional7. Factual statement8. Analogy/comparison

9. before-after scenario10. Personal experience11. List of facts (catalog)12. Statement of problem or misconception13. Brief dialogue14. Proverb, maxim, motto15. Insight, revelation16. Appeal to common experience

Avoid Errors in Lead-Ins

Make sure your lead-in introduces your thesisKeep your lead-in briefDon’t begin with an apology or complaintDon’t assume your audience already knows your subject matterStay clear of overused lead-ins (dictionary definitions anyone?!)

Practicing what you’ve learned: pg 85 Describe the lead-ins in the paragraphs.

May be more than one “type” that has been blended!

1. proverb

Concluding paragraphs: pg 86 1. A Summary of the

thesis and the essay’s major points

2. An evaluation of the importance

3. A statement of broader implications

4. A recommendation or call to action

5. A warning based on the essay’s thesis

6. A quotation from an authority

7. An anecdote/brief example that emphasizes/sums up

8. Image or description9. Rhetorical question10. Forecast11. Ironic twist, pun,

witticism, playful use of words

12. Return to the technique you used in the lead-in

Avoid Errors in Conclusions

Don’t introduce new points/irrelevant material

Don’t just tack on a conclusion.

Don’t change your stance.

Avoid trite expressions

Don’t insult or anger your reader.

“What Is Poverty”

Group Assignment (1 pg per group) “What is Poverty” (see handout or website)

1. Identify a quote for each of these 5 areas:

1. Sight2. Sound3. Smell4. Taste5. Touch/Texture

2. Respond to the piece – Did you like it? Dislike it?

3. Is this a “Narrative” essay? Why/why not?

Done? Turn in work.

Peer Revision

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Always remember these lessons:• A good peer editor makes a

better self-editor because you learn by correcting other peoples’ work!

• Treat your peer’s paper like you’ll be graded on his/her errors and weaknesses.

Peer Editing

Do’s-Take this serious, you will be graded on the quality and quantity of your comments.

-Comment in a polite, respectful language/tone-Explain your comments, so if you say “I Liked it,” explain why! If you say “this is bad” explain how to improve it.

Don’ts-Correct every spelling/ grammar mistake (the author should use spell check!)

-Fill the paper with vague comments like “great job” and “interesting”

-Insult the author- Phrases such as “this

sucks”, instead phrase as “This could be better if you added in…”

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Follow the Handout1. Read aloud to paper owner. (allow

markup by paper owner, but editor/reviser don’t do anything but read).

2. Peer Revision: read peer paper to yourself. • Sensory Descriptions• Lead Ins• Conclusion

3. Return to paper’s author to complete then handout.

• Logic/organization•MLA format

Homework

Narrative Essay Final Draftemail to ttosspon@gmail.com by beginning of next class.

• File name: Lastname_Narrative.docx • Please do not type in the .docx – it is the file

extension.

Read: “Salvation” pg 352Vocabulary 2 – Choose 10 vocabulary words from “Salvation” or from the link online.