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College Admission 101

The College Admission Essay The Short Answer Essay Supplemental Essays

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Types

A time when you overcame adversity Your proudest moment People whom you admire New experiences you would like to have Why you are passionate about certain

subjects and activities What you value

Possible Topics

Topics that have been overused. What I learned in sports. My study abroad experience. The President of the United States. Current, political or religious issues.

Risky Topics!

Redundancy. Cryptic comparisons. Forcing it. Trying to be funny, when you’re not. Quoting overused sources, poets and

authors.

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Avoid!

Start early! Read any and follow all directions carefully. Answer the question. Consider the institution (i.e. liberal, conservative,

religious, etc.?). List several possible topics. Develop outlines for three. Choose one to develop. Prepare a rough draft and then let it sit for a

couple of days.

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First Steps

Write the essay as if you had to read it. Write about something you know and enjoy. Stay positive. Be original. Make sure it flows well. Try to demonstrate at least one personal

characteristic (e.g. determination, intellectual curiosity, warmth, etc.), if possible.

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Remember!

Rewrite your draft, if necessary. Make sure that it doesn't exceed the

recommended size; the average essay is 1 ½ to 2 pages in length or 250-500 words.

Proofread it several times. Have a friend, your English teacher and/or your

college counselor review it. Revise and type your final copy. Make several copies. Put your name and social security number on

each page.

Remember!

Open with a power statement, a sentence that immediately attracts the reader’s attention.

Continuity is important. Avoid being too cryptic. The essay should flow smoothly throughout. If the reader has to stop to question anything, you have lost your opportunity.

Attempt to elicit some type of emotion from the reader.

Close with a power statement, a sentence that reflects personal insight.

Remember!

 Green Eggs, Ham and Social Responsibility.  If I could be any roll in society, I would be a

croissant. The morning is cool and damp, and the

darkness is just lifting with the chill. The teachers at my high school are known for

their eccentricity on the one hand and their long tenure on the other.

"Ball!” shouted the umpire. I love to write.

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Opening Power Statements

Within the past seven years, I have moved 364 times.

5:59 on my bedroom digital. Last April I received the shock of my life. At 4’8” and just under 70 pounds, I am as big as I will

ever be. I remember screaming, "I WON, I WON, I WON!" as I

ran down the street half-naked in my pajamas. "Awe shut up!" I screamed while slamming the car

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Opening Power Statements

Damn, it was cold. Or so I am told.  I would have gotten in anyway--as a

cadaver.  And never shall the demon haunt me.  One black one still believed.  Although left-handed, I must be in my right

mind

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Closing Power Statements

Barry Kaye

Question: What is the best piece of advice you've ever received?

"Move your ass!” yelled a man as a car was bearing down on a five year old boy who was about to cross the street. That boy was me, and needless to say, I took his advice and moved. As far as I am concerned, that was the best piece of advice I've ever been given, for had I not received it, I would not be here to say so.The second best piece of advice I ever received was from my uncle, who said, "Barry, go to Medical School."If I am not accepted to the University of Pennsylvania solely on the basis of this truthful answer, so be it. If I had not taken the man's advice, I would have gotten to Medical School anyway: as a cadaver.

1 Boykin Curry and Brian Kasbar, Essays That Worked (New Haven, Mustang Publishing Co., 1986), p. 88.14

Barry Kaye

Question: What is the best piece of advice you've ever received?

"Move your ass!" (Opening power statement!) yelled a man as a car was bearing down on a five year old boy who was about to cross the street. That boy was me, and needless to say, I took his advice and moved. As far as I am concerned, that was the best piece of advice I've ever been given, for had I not received it, I would not be here to say so.The second best piece of advice I ever received was from my uncle, who said, "Barry, go to Medical School."If I am not accepted to the University of Pennsylvania solely on the basis of this truthful answer, so be it. If I had not taken the man's advice, I would have gotten to Medical School anyway: as a cadaver. (Closing power statement!)1

Outstanding essay, but way to short; the standard college admission essay is 1 & 1/2 to 2 pages or 250-500 words long. Notice the opening and closing power statements. It flows, makes me laugh and reveals the writer’s sense of humor--the perfect essay.

1 Boykin Curry and Brian Kasbar, Essays That Worked (New Haven, Mustang Publishing Co., 1986), p. 88.15

Rusty Haynes

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